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Posted: 1 years ago
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Comments like these make my day! Thank you!


The way in the show also Rathore put Arjun through a lot for them to reconcile in a minute in the end was devastating. So much left unsaid , unexplained. I have lots to say about the way Rathore's character arc was written. But that only means Behzaad did a phenomenal job with it. And I haven't seen him being portrayed a grey or a villainous character in any other stories except yours.

Also Riya in the show was a confusing person. The way she switched from being a sweet docile girl to being a firecracker all of a sudden was weird. If we did have any bg story things would have made sense I guess. And in my stories I want her to be a healthy mix of both. But humans can't be that all the time. So yes there's gonna be a little of both, I think the nervous side just shows a bit more around Arjun, all things considered


Originally posted by: bloomie

WOWWWWWW

I love... love... love.... LOVE... LOOVVEEEE THIISSSSS!!!!!!!!

This is such an awesome update

I love it so muchhh

The way Riya scolded Sameer was absolutely phenomenal!

It panned out so beautifully

The dynamic with Riya at the head and the resentment and Ayesha's defence for Sameer and Riya's loathe.

Especially the part where she drops the truth about Sameer making everyone hate Arjun to the extent of dehumanising him

I dont even know what to say about Ayesha

Gajab hai ye banda, he has the guts to say ki he is happy about Riya being with him? Nobody wants your opinion dude! And you have no rights to give it either!

Bahot maza aa gaya

Update soon whenever you can, I will be waiting

Apart from how much in love I am with this update, I am also wondering the conversation between Arjun and Riya after Arjun come to know about his (potential) lady love going ballistic. Would Riya be as callous as she was right now or will she be a nervous wreck or both?

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Posted: 1 years ago
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I know that Arjun was a very cold person but I think Riya was the only person who understood him, emotions and all. When you get that level of understanding from someone a bond automatically forges itself

Originally posted by: AnjuRish

I like how u have shown the layers of emo btw ri and Arjun ..the bond despite the turmoil

Waiting to see if they are able to handle the storm

Rathore does not deserve forgiveness at the moment

Waiting to see how the rest of the team is feeling at the moment

Thanks for the PM .. please do send me one when u update 💐

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Posted: 1 years ago
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I have resumed writing after quite some time and when you say things like these it makes me so happy! So thank you! Been having a couple bad days but such comments make my day ! ❤️


Originally posted by: naaheean

Wow.... I'm quiet smitten by the subtlety of your imagination in writing. Arjun's lost state & his constant trial of not thinking anything for the time being, Riya's wish for him to let everything out infront of her, to let her help him, Rathore's dilemma on to whether meet Arjun and other colleagues or not, because of not being able to meet their eyes for his own shameful deed....just simply excellent.

Ariya's slowly & steadily growing mutual bond of affection & fondness getting stronger & I'm loving it the way you're shaping it gradually and subtly. Will be waiting to read more soon.

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Posted: 1 years ago
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Originally posted by: ariya_ash

Comments like these make my day! Thank you!


The way in the show also Rathore put Arjun through a lot for them to reconcile in a minute in the end was devastating. So much left unsaid , unexplained. I have lots to say about the way Rathore's character arc was written. But that only means Behzaad did a phenomenal job with it. And I haven't seen him being portrayed a grey or a villainous character in any other stories except yours.

Also Riya in the show was a confusing person. The way she switched from being a sweet docile girl to being a firecracker all of a sudden was weird. If we did have any bg story things would have made sense I guess. And in my stories I want her to be a healthy mix of both. But humans can't be that all the time. So yes there's gonna be a little of both, I think the nervous side just shows a bit more around Arjun, all things considered


True Them just forgetting anything ever happened was weird. Then again, a lot of things took a weird turn. All the deaths etc. Personally I hated the track where Arjun leaves the force. Just another weird thing that was completely out of the blue and a question mark.


Well, Rathore is someone who has power enough to create conflict and he already had that with Arjun so it makes him an easy target.


Yes Riya could switch like an on-off switch. And it just makes it so much better. Don't how exactly she ended up that way but the combo makes up a good character.

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Posted: 1 years ago
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Originally posted by: bloomie

WOWWWWWW

I love... love... love.... LOVE... LOOVVEEEE THIISSSSS!!!!!!!!

This is such an awesome update

I love it so muchhh

The way Riya scolded Sameer was absolutely phenomenal!

It panned out so beautifully

The dynamic with Riya at the head and the resentment and Ayesha's defence for Sameer and Riya's loathe.

Especially the part where she drops the truth about Sameer making everyone hate Arjun to the extent of dehumanising him

I dont even know what to say about Ayesha

Gajab hai ye banda, he has the guts to say ki he is happy about Riya being with him? Nobody wants your opinion dude! And you have no rights to give it either!

Bahot maza aa gaya

Update soon whenever you can, I will be waiting

Apart from how much in love I am with this update, I am also wondering the conversation between Arjun and Riya after Arjun come to know about his (potential) lady love going ballistic. Would Riya be as callous as she was right now or will she be a nervous wreck or both?

I completely agree with Sharvi regarding this chapter. Ek ek baat jo Sharvi ne yaha likhi, sabhi meri apni dil ki baat hai iss chapter ko lekar. Issiliye mai ussi ki comment ko requote kar rahi hoon, kyunki mujhe nahi lagta ki isse behtaar tarike mein main apni opinion bayan kar paungi.


All the best for your exam dear. I'll be happily waiting till your exams finish, thinking that, "It takes time to make good things. And, providing that, after waiting for a good time, we'll be going to have such excellent chapters, then all the next chapters would be worth waiting for."

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CHAPTER 4


Sakshi sat by the window,her mind replaying all the proceedings of the day. She knew that everyone knew and understood that Rathore was at fault and every single accusation that came from Riya was a hundred percent true. For long she also bore witness to Rathore's incriminating comments about Arjun. She saw how he would find the tiniest of Arjun's faults and brand it as the gravest sin ever committed.


But what was beyond her comprehension was how the meek and timid research specialist stood up to the Chief of the ETF. Well ex Chief but that didn't matter, he was still a force to reckon with. She wondered what had made her care so much for the ACP that currently lay in hospital. She wondered how close they were for Riya to warrant such a reaction, what was the nature of the relationship and what did Arjun think of Riya?


For whatever reason the very thought of them together hurt her and Sakshi couldn't help but wonder if she was wrong in her endeavours to pursue Arjun. But her heart won over, and she strengthen her will. Arjun was hers and she knew it. He needed a happy soul to save him from the darkness and Sakshi knew she would happily be it.


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Riya was at her desk, still in her designated cubicle after refusing either of the ACP's cabins, typing away. She felt multiple eyes on her but didn't look up to give any of the people around her the satisfaction. She continued to work silently, until she felt a presence nearby. She closed the tab on her computer and looked up to find Shree standing a couple feet away. She swiveled her chair and stood up.


"What's up ?" She asked.


Shree stared at her for a full minute before speaking up,"Seriously Riya? What's up with you? "

Riya raised her eyebrow in question.


"Mein maanta hoon Rathore sir ne galat kiya Arjun Sir ke saath but that doesn't give you the right to treat him like crap."


Riya turned, took a deep breath and put her hands on top of her chair. "Maine aisa kya kardiya Shree? He got what he bloody deserved! And you and I know that was the respectful me talking. Karna hota toh bohat kuch kar chuki hoti."


"Oh that's rich" Said shree. "He was your mentor and that's how you treat him. You are here because of him damnit!! And besides who did you do all of this for ? The man who treated you like crap, never acknowledging your existence and downplaying you every time? That guy seriously??? Honge bhale ek world class officer but lemme tell you he is a shitty human. " Shree spat. "But nahi tumhe us insaan ke liye tere saare dost galat lag rahe hai!"


And that was the last straw. Riya had been holding her composure for over a month ever since she returned. But this , this was the limit. So she did what she had to do.


"Konse dost Shree?"


Shree froze ," Ab hum dos---"


"Tumlog dost ho mere ? Really that's news to me. Dost ho na mere? Where were you when I was lying half dead in the hospital in Delhi for years? WHERE WERE YOU WHEN I NEEDED SOMEONE? WHERE WERE YOU WHEN THE DEPARTNMENT HANDED ME OVER TO MY FAMILY? JAB KYU DOSTI NAHI DIKAHYI WHEN YOU KNOW OF THE SUFFERING AND ABUSE I HAD SUFFERED AT THEIR HANDS? WHERE WERE YOU WHEN I REGAINED CONSCIOUSNESS AND CALLED YOU FIRST BECAUSE I NEEDED SOMEONE WHO CARED? Lekin tum , tum ne toh call hi kaat diya mere mooh par!!!" Riya cried. "Kahan the tab jab mujhe kisi ki zaroorat thi? Kitne calls kiye the maine tumhe aur chotu ku ? Kabhi aaye mere liye??"


Shree froze. He didn't expect her to bring that up. When she came back and didn't say anything he thought their actions didn't really affect her as much and all was good between the trio.


He tried to reason," Hum busy the Riya"


"Kab tak?Kab tak busy the Shree? Jo kabhi aaye hi nahi? Chalo leave nahi mili aane ek call toh kar hi sakte the tum dono .lekin woh bhi nai aaye Dosti kehto tum isse? Jo hamare beech tha na woh kabhi dosti thi hi nai Shree. You two were bloody using me for covering your mistakes and I being the fool I am did exactly that. That was no friendship.Lekin kaafi late realise hua hai mujhe."


Shree turned his head away. Riya stepped forward and stared at him dead in his eyes," When you lot forgot me, he didn't. He was there, everytime I needed somebody. Roz 10 calls aur 100 messages kuch chahiye Riya? Theek ho? Dawai li ya nahi ? Jab bhi hota Delhi aajate the doctor se baat karne aur mujhse milne. Bas 4 baar hi aa paaye lekin Mumbai se hi mera dhyaan rakha unhone ne. Mein toh lagti bhi kya thi unki? I was a damn junior, his subordinate. He could have very well moved past my carelessness. But nope. Despite his daily battles with his life and the hell your dear Rathore Sir was inflicting upon him he made time to make sure I was okay all those miles away."


Shree flinched not able to bear the truth bombs coming his way. And they hurt only because he knew she was right. He didn't think twice about her suffering at the hands of her abusive family once more and moved on. But what surprised him was how the tough ACP was concerned and caring towards his subordinate. True he had seen him go soft on her once or twice in the little time they all worked together, but this was new, on a whole another level.


He then looked at her and was about to say something when the door opened and in walked Chotu.

"Oye Kya khusur pusur chal rahi hai idhar?" Turning to Riya," aur tu kyu ye angry young woman ka character bani phir rahi hai. Bilkul suit nahi karta. Apne doston ke saath toh bilkul nahi."


Riya's eyes darted between the commando's and the techies, she might need anger management classes soon." Report's due in 4 hours. This is not an order of a so called friend. I am pulling rank here. So you and your friends better have it ready on time." Saying so she stormed off.


Chotu stared at her back as she walked and turned to Shree," ab isse kya hua?"


"Ehsaas"


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Arjun was in his hospital bed carelessly flicking between the channels on the TV in his room. It was a slow weekday evening and there was nothing on the idiot box that caught his eye. He had found himself thinking of the affair of his beloved wife and soon his heart monitor beeped like crazy, causing the nurse to rush in and take control. She advised him to divert his attention.


Frustrated ed with the lack of attention seeking distractions on the Television, Arjun switched it off and lazily threw the remote on the stand beside his bed. He threw his head against the pillow. He could feel a headache creep up and massaged his temple. He had just closed his eyes and sunk in the pillow when he heard the door creak open. Not wanting to deal with anyone, he shut his eyes tightly.


On the other end of the room stood Rathore. He watched as his former friend sleep. Tears broke in his eyes when he saw the pain on his face. Arjun looked badly beaten up, not by any physical assault. Rathore knew his wounds ran deep, deep into his soul and they were manifesting in the form of forlorn pain on his face.


Tears turned into sobs and Rathore couldn't control himself.


The cries of his former partner forced Arjun to open his eyes. He was surprised to see Rathore standing at the end of his bed, crying. He cried, like a bawling baby who couldn't make sense of the world.


It made Arjun uncomfortable the way Rathore was crying. His chest tightened and hurt. He grabbed the shirt above the chest and massaged it

He felt it all coming back, the blithering pain, the unshed tears, the rage trickling in his vains and the thirst for revenge that made his throat run dry.


"Arjun"


Arjun visibly flinched and recoiled in his bed. The very voice kept bringing pain inducing memories. He shut his eyes.


"Arjun" came the voice again. "Please"


Arjun sunk further into the bed. His mind refused to corporate and all he could see were the images of his best friend and his wife.

"No" he said to himself.

"No."

Arjun could feel it. A door threatening to open, a monster taking shape in his being, it started with a lull, then it morphed into a sharp breeze, then a strong wind and finally into a disaster waiting to happen.

But he held on. No he told himself

Not now he kept telling himself


Rathore watched as Arjun's hands went in his hair and clutch them tightly. He saw him struggle.

"Arjun. Arjun I'm sorry. I'm really very sorry."


The doors flung open and the monster screamed.

Edited by ariya_ash - 1 years ago
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Posted: 1 years ago
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Wow...Wow...Wow...another masterpiece of your creation. Loved it totally...👏👏👏👌👌👌👌👌

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Toh aaj Shree ki bari thi Riya ke zariye sachchai ke Aaina dekhneki. Bohot hi achchhi tarah se Riya ne Shree ko dosti ki basic maine sikha diye - ek dusre ki care karna aur jaatana, jo ki hum kitne bhi dur kyun na ho ek dusre se phir bhi kar sakte hai, zaroorat hai toh bas sirf apni apni life battles, problems, pain se thoda sa time nikal kar dosto ko yeh ehsaas dilakar, ki chahe koi bhi situation ho accha ya bura, I'm there for you, to heal you, to console you, to boost up your confidence to fight back once again. Mujhe toh lag raha hai ke, shayed Chotu ko bhi apne tarike se Riya se fatkar milne wala hai.

Sakshi filhaal mere liye invisible hai, jaise ki woh khud ko sabkuch achchhe se dekhkar aur samajhkar bhi andhey baney rehne ki and apni imaginary duniya mein ghum rehne ki decision liya ussi tarah se.

But, mere liye high point rahi - Arjun ka khud ko divert karne ki koshish karna taki woh revenge and intense pain n agony of betrayal se monster me transform na ho jaye aur Rathore ke usske samne aane se yeh koshish karte karte haar jana and finally nakaam ho kar uss monster ka bahar aa jana. That scene just took my heart away...so much that I could picturized that in my imagination. Uffff!!! Kya likha tumne...maza hi aa gaya...MARVELLOUS...👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Now, I'll be eagerly waiting to read the ultimate outburst of Arjun, jo ki hona hi tha kabhi na kabhi, because pain n agony ko hum jitni zyada der tak hamare andar daba kar rakhenge utna hi zyada woh badhta hi jayega aur hamare liye nasoor baan jayega.

Tnx for pming me & plz continue soon. I hope tumhari exams achhe se complete ho gayi ho.

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Posted: 1 years ago
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Sakshi sab samjhte hue bhi samjhana nahi chahti ab riya ne shree ke jawab ka bhi muh band kar diya dosti ke mayne samajhakar rathore arjun se sorry maang raha eagerly waiting for arjun outburst fab update dear and thanks for pm

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Posted: 1 years ago
#39

Awesome update

This was sooooo good

Of course, as always

I loved the conversation between Shree and Riya

The way she showed him the mirror, log apni galtiyan kitni aasani se bhool jaate hai aur dusro ko advice Dene pahunch jaate hai

Aur fir jab Chotu aaya

I was laughinggggg!!!

I was like ye toh gaya maar Daalegi Kaali ma ise

And then the one word for the perfect closure "ehsaas" uff!

Hmm, so Rathore shows up at the hospital. Kis muh se sorry bolne aaya hai? Will they have a conversation or Riya will show up taking the liberty of going ballistic for the third time?

This is going to be an impatient wait

Cont soooon

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Posted: 1 years ago
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Wah wah I hope Jun trash rathore in next chapter man he needs the release.



Why the heck chotu shree never contacted Riya? Didn't expect that from the two. And she's pulling a tank oho interesting

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