Read till part 62
Shagun-Subbu respective endings were fabulous.
Even in the show, it always suggested that Shagun's end was going to be disastrous for her because Ashok only used her to torture Raman, once Raman is over her, he would ditch her anyway. What always bothered me was Subbu's, there was a scene where Subbu and his pregnant wife come across Ishita, and Ishita leaves in tears.
When Ishita says in the show that 'Subbu is out of my system' , he is out of my system as well. I didn't bother about him much. But suddenly makers brought him back, and that sudden revelation, that his beloved wife and his beloved son are dead, left me shivering. How unpredictable life is!! All his perfect future plans, for which he ditched Ishita, had no meaning when his wife and child died. He must have felt like a stupid. Ur version of Subbu's end is interesting as well. I hated it when Subbu was feeling sorry for Ishita that she had to marry a divorcee, Ishita gave it back, but still he thinks having own child is the biggest achievement of all. Even if he had to divorce his wife, his own blood standing in front of him is what all matters to him maybe. Ur version is still pending, or like u asked in ur note for us to decide, for me, Subbu's wife and son's death which happened in the show left me numb, that's more than karma. I don't think anything else could humble Subbu.
Shagun's was not at all karma, someone from above didn't punish her for her deeds, she just reached the consequences of her choices, what we all viewers could see, but she failed to see. Shagun ended for good, but I really wanna see her realise what gem of a person she lost to Ishita. Also let Shgaun realise that Ishita being second wife of Raman, step mom to her kids, never being able to conceive, earned more love from Raman than she could ever had. Maybe u can add one last scene with Shagun before her leaving to Australia, and then pack her off😈
And ur scene where Ishita gives it back to Shagun at Bhalla house, I don't remember Ishita giving it back to Shagun in the show, but U wrote one, thank you👏
Still I cannot see Ishita as someone who would literally say such words to Shagun, the message is enough conveyed to her through Raman and children, both in the show and in ur story well.
The honeymoon phase is really I am just waiting for pregnancy but honeymoon phase is even more wonderful🤩.In the show Ishita conceived in a week I guess🤭 that's really....... I don't even have a word. Since u confirmed pregnancy pls take ur time and write ur take, what all I request is just let every tiny thing, regarding pregnancy happen between them. Let Ishita take a test, let the test fail, let them cry, let them console each other, let them talk about having a baby, let them talk about going through a treatment, let them get scared what if treatment fails, let them have various doubts, I wanna read everything regarding pregnancy 😭
Thank you for the conversation I asked for which happened between Raman and bartender😆. Really loved it. He realised that Ishita must have gone through same emotions regarding him and Shagun, he was just melting and again the sight of Subbu makes him jealous😆. Very realistic.
Looking forward to read the remaining 2 parts😍
Edited by --QUEEN-- - 2 years ago
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