Some more readers for chapter updated on previous page
Some more readers for chapter updated on previous page
I read all the parts together. Here are my thoughts -
Prologue and Prompt :
Interesting twist... Arnav is the romantic while Khushi is practical-minded. But to be honest, more than practical she seems a bit cold-hearted... what with throwing away the flowers and card like this .
Arnav seems to be a renowned director as well... if the producers are willing to take his attitude and demands. I'm just a little confused, in the prologue it seems that the producer asked for Khushi to be cast as the main lead but in the first chapter, it's actually Arnav who demands this...? Would be happy to gain more insight on this matter...
Chapter 1 :
Hmm... why does Arnav want Khushi to be the main lead? Usually, I would just think it's because she is experiencing a career high right with back to back hits, so it makes perfect sense to want to cast her. But this being a thriller and the way Arnav was so adamant on casting her makes me suspicious...
About Sambit, I think he meant she was paired with him on screen, and not that they're together in real life... but will wait for some more clarification on this matter .
Chapter 2 :
Oooh! This is getting interesting. Arnav and Khushi seem to have some history... but one that Sam is unaware of. So either it happened more than 7 years ago (i e. before Sam became her makeup artist) or it was kept really under wraps (tough in the showbiz world... but not impossible I suppose).
Why did Khushi defend Sambit? Even if it was only to spite Arnav, she should have waited till Sambit was gone. This way, she will end up giving Sambit the wrong signals... that she is okay with being assaulted... or perhaps wants his attention .
The scene Arnav narrated did sound like a thriller... perhaps even horror... so I wonder how it's going end up as a romantic drama. Waiting for the rest of the script...
You have woven a really wonderful story Aditi and I'm hooked . Since you said you're okay with constructive criticism too, I'll just say that you should try to improve your grammar / sentence formation. Sometimes, it becomes a little hard to understand what is being said...
But other than that, everything else is top-notch . From the plot to the characterizations, it is all masterfully created . There's the right amount of drama, attitude, glamour but also intrigue... and it all fits aptly in the Bollywood scenario .
Waiting for further updates
Love,
Stuti
I wanted to add a little comment about the Banner - it's marvelous .
The little images in the film reel, colors, font style... but most importantly the picture selection is so incredible. It really matches the vibe of the story and gives us the feel of "Lights, Camera, Action!"
Wonderful job Shiri
chapter 1
Arnav wants Khushi for his film and the producers think he will not be able to convince her to do it.
Sambit is a supporting artist and has enough pull to get her the roles? He is taking full advantage of the situation.
Does she hate Arnav for some reason? What was that reference to punishing him? He helped her and she told him off.
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