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Moving on to the Microtales round ...


Thank you, Saumya2102, for voting for my entry, Microtale #5. Please tell me what you liked about it.


Microtale #5.

Dhānyamālinī: "Let's play!"


Rāvaṇa: "Fine, Mandodarī!"


Hanumat noticed who distracted Rāvaṇa from Sītā; Rāvaṇa didn't.


Canon for Microtale #5:

Sundarakāṇḍa 20.37-40

उपगम्य ततः क्षिप्रं राक्षसी धान्यमालिनी ।

परिष्वज्य दशग्रीवम् इदं वचनम् अब्रवीत् ।।

upagamya tataḥ kṣipraṃ Rākṣasī Dhānyamālinī

pariṣvajya Daśagrīvam idaṃ vacanam abravīt

मया क्रीड महाराज सीतया किं तवानया ।

अकामां कामयानस्य शरीरम् उपतप्यते ।

इच्छन्तीं कामयानस्य प्रीतिर् भवति शोभना ।।

mayā krīḍa mahārāja Sītayā kiṃ tav’ānayā

akāmāṃ kāmayānasya śarīram upatapyate

icchantīṃ kāmayānasya prītir bhavati śobhanā

एवम् उक्तस् तु राक्षस्या समुत्क्षिप्तस् ततो बली ।

ज्वलद्भास्करवर्णाभं प्रविवेश निवेशनम् ।।

evam uktas tu Rākṣasyā samutkṣiptas tato balī

jvalad-bhāskara-varṇ’ābhaṃ praviveśa niveśanam

देवगन्धर्वकन्याश् च नागकन्याश् च तास् ततः ।

परिवार्य दशग्रीवं विविशुस् तद् गृहोत्तमम् ।।

Deva-Gandharva-kanyāś ca Nāga-kanyāś ca tās tataḥ

parivārya Daśagrīvaṃ viviśus tad gṛh’ottamam


Sundarakāṇḍa 56.66-69

स्त्रीणां मध्यात् समुत्पत्य तस्य भार्या दुरात्मनः ।

वरा मन्दोदरी नाम तया स प्रतिषेधितः ।।

strīṇāṃ madhyāt samutpatya tasya bhāryā durātmanaḥ

varā Mandodarī nāma tayā sa pratiṣedhitaḥ

उक्तश् च मधुरां वाणीं तया स मदनार्दितः ।

सीतया तव किं कार्यं महेन्द्रसमविक्रम ।

मया सह रमस्वाद्य मद्विशिष्टा न जानकी ।।

uktaś ca madhurāṃ vāṇīṃ tayā sa madan’ārditaḥ

Sītayā tava kiṃ kāryaṃ mahE’ndra-sama-vikrama

mayā saha ramasv’ādya mad-viśiṣṭā na Jānakī

देवगन्धर्वकन्याभिर् यक्षकन्याभिर् एव च ।

सार्धं प्रभो रमस्वेह सीतया किं करिष्यसि ।।

Deva-Gandharva-kanyābhir Yakṣa-kanyābhir eva ca

s’ārdhaṃ prabho ramasv’eha Sītayā kiṃ kariṣyasi

ततस् ताभिः समेताभिर् नारीभिः स महाबलः ।

उत्थाप्य सहसा नीतो भवनं स्वं निशाचरः ।।

tatas tābhiḥ sametābhir nārībhiḥ sa mahā-balaḥ

utthāpya sahasā nīto bhavanaṃ svaṃ niśā-caraḥ


Thank you, SilverBell, Moonks, asmitamohanty, WildestDreams, firewings_diya, and Saumya2102, for voting for my entry, Microtale #8. I am curious: why would anyone consider this a good story? It reads like a shopping list, without much plot. Svayaṃprabhā in the canon has nothing to say about Rāma, but for the sake of symmetry of the five senses, I shoehorned her into the company of characters who were awaiting mokṣa.


Microtale #8.

Ahalyā contemplated ... Svayaṃprabhā listened ... Kabandha grasped ... Saṃpāti watched ... Śabarī tasted ... Kausalyā smelled, awaiting their mokṣa.


Canon for Microtale #8:

Bālakāṇḍa 47.30

यदा चैतद् वनं घोरं रामो दशरथात्मजः ।

आगमिष्यति दुर्धर्षस् तदा पूता भविष्यसि ।।

yadā c'aitad vanaṃ ghoraṃ Rāmo Daśarath'ātmajaḥ

āgamiṣyati durdharṣas tadā pūtā bhaviṣyasi


Kiṣikindhākāṇḍa 51.2

वानरा यदि वः खेदः प्रनष्टः फलभक्षणात् ।

यदि चैतन् मया श्राव्यं श्रोतुम् इच्छामि कथ्यताम् ।।

vānarā yadi vaḥ khedaḥ pranaṣṭaḥ phala-bhakṣaṇāt

yadi c'aitan mayā śrāvyaṃ śrotum icchāmi kathyatām


Araṇyakāṇḍa 65.22

स महाबाहुर् अत्यर्थं प्रसार्य विपुलौ भुजौ ।

जग्राह सहिताव् एव राघवौ पीडयन् बलात् ।।

sa mahā-bāhur atyarthaṃ prasārya vipulau bhujau

jagrāha sahitāv eva Rāghavau pīḍayan balāt


Kiṣkindhākāṇḍa 57.28-30

गर्हितं तु कृतं कर्म येन स्म पिशिताशनाः ।

इहस्थोऽहं प्रपश्यामि रावणं जानकीं तथा ।।

garhitaṃ tu kṛtaṃ karma yena sma piśit'āśanāḥ

iha-stho'haṃ prapaśyāmi Rāvaṇaṃ Jānakīṃ tathā

अस्माकम् अपि सौवर्णं दिव्यं चक्षुर्बलं तथा ।

तस्माद् आहारवीर्येण निसर्गेण च वानराः ।

आयोजनशतात् साग्राद् वयं पश्याम नित्यशः ।।

asmākam api sauvarṇaṃ divyaṃ cakṣur-balaṃ tathā

tasmād āhāra-vīryeṇa nisargeṇa ca vānarāḥ

ā-yojana-śatāt s'āgrād vayaṃ paśyāma nityaśaḥ

अस्माकं विहिता वृत्तिर् निसर्गेण च दूरतः ।

विहिता पादमूले तु वृत्तिश् चरणयोधिनाम् ।।

asmākaṃ vihitā vṛttir nisargeṇa ca dūrataḥ

vihitā pāda-mūle tu vṛttiś caraṇa-yodhinām


Araṇyakāṇḍa 70.13

मया तु विविधं वन्यं संचितं पुरुषर्षभ ।

तवार्थे पुरुषव्याघ्र पम्पायास् तीरसंभवम् ।।

mayā tu vividhaṃ vanyaṃ saṃcitaṃ puruṣa-rṣabha

tav'ārthe puruṣa-vyāghra Pampāyās tīra-saṃbhavam


Ayodhyākāṇḍa 34.19

तां भुजाभ्यां परिष्वज्य श्वश्रूर् वचनम् अब्रवीत् ।

अनाचरन्तीं कृपणं मूर्ध्न्य् उपाघ्राय मैथिलीम् ।।

tāṃ bhujābhyāṃ pariṣvajya śvaśrūr vacanam abravīt

anācarantīṃ kṛpaṇaṃ mūrdhny upāghrāya Maithilīm


I am the author of these entries as well.


Microtale #14.

Rāvaṇa: "Summon Mahodara, Mahāpārśva!"


Rākṣasas (terrified): "They're slain! Who'll remind Rāvaṇa?"


Virūpākṣa: "Sons sustain fathers!"


Canon for Microtale #14:

Yuddhakāṇḍa 58.27-28

ततस् तु नीलः प्रतिलभ्य संज्ञां शैलं समुत्पाट्य सवृक्षषण्डम् ।

ततः समुत्पत्य भृशोग्रवेगो महोदरं तेन जघान मूर्ध्नि ।।

tatas tu Nīlaḥ pratilabhya saṃjñāṃ śailaṃ samutpāṭya sa-vṛkṣa-ṣaṇḍam

tataḥ samutpatya bhṛś’ogra-vego Mahodaraṃ tena jaghāna mūrdhni

ततः स शैलाभिनिपातभग्नो महोदरस् तेन सह द्विपेन ।

विपोथितो भूमितले गतासुः पपात वज्राभिहतो यथाद्रिः ।।

tataḥ sa śail’ābhinipāta-bhagno Mahodaras tena saha dvipena

vipothito bhūmi-tale gat’āsuḥ papāta vajr’ābhihato yathā’driḥ


Yuddhakāṇḍa 58.51-53

स संप्राप्य चिरात् संज्ञाम् ऋषभो वानरर्षभः ।

क्रुद्धो विस्फुरमाणौष्ठो महापार्श्वम् उदैक्षत ।।

sa saṃprāpya cirāt saṃjñām Ṛṣabho vānara-rṣabhaḥ

kruddho visphuramāṇ’auṣṭho Mahāpārśvam udaikṣata

तां गृहीत्वा गदां भीमाम् आविध्य च पुनः पुनः ।

मत्तानीकं महापार्श्वं जघान रणमूर्धनि ।।

tāṃ gṛhītvā gadāṃ bhīmām āvidhya ca punaḥ punaḥ

matt’ānīkaṃ Mahāpārśvaṃ jaghāna raṇa-mūrdhani

स स्वया गदया भिन्नो विकीर्णदशनेक्षणः ।

निपपात महापार्श्वो वज्राहत इवाचलः ।।

sa svayā gadayā bhinno vikīrṇa-daśan’ekṣaṇaḥ

nipapāta Mahāpārśvo vajr’āhata iv’ācalaḥ


Yuddhakāṇḍa 83.4-5

उवाच च समीपस्थान् राक्षसान् राक्षसेश्वरः ।

भयाव्यक्तकथांस् तत्र निर्दहन्न् इव चक्षुषा ।।

uvāca ca samīpa-sthān Rākṣasān Rākṣas’eśvaraḥ

bhay’āvyakta-kathāṃs tatra nirdahann iva cakṣuṣā

महोदरं महापार्श्वं विरूपाक्षं च राक्षसम् ।

शीघ्रं वदत सैन्यानि निर्यातेति ममाज्ञया ।।

Mahodaraṃ Mahāpārśvaṃ Virūpākṣaṃ ca Rākṣasam

śīghraṃ vadata sainyāni niryāt’eti mam’ājñayā


Yuddhakāṇḍa 83.28-29

रावणेनाभ्यनुज्ञातौ महापार्श्वमहोदरौ ।

विरूपाक्षश् च दुर्धर्षो रथान् आरुरुहुस् तदा ।।

Rāvaṇen’ābhyanujñātau Mahāpārśva-Mahodarau

Virūpākṣaś ca durdharṣo rathān āruruhus tadā

ते तु हृष्टा विनर्दन्तो भिन्दन्त इव मेदिनीम् ।

नादं घोरं विमुञ्चन्तो निर्ययुर् जयकाङ्क्षिणः ।।

te tu hṛṣṭā vinardanto bhindanta iva medinīm

nādaṃ ghoraṃ vimuñcanto niryayur jaya-kāṅkṣiṇaḥ


Microtale #16.

"Kaṛṇaveṣṭas ... śvadaṃṣṭras ... ruby-coral aṅgulitras, mudrikās ... antarīya, missing uttarīya ... keyūras ... kuṇḍalas ... hāra ... raśanā ... one nūpura ... Sītā!"


Canon for Microtale #16:

Araṇyakāṇḍa 50.27

चरणान् नूपुरं भ्रष्टं वैदेह्या रत्नभूषितम् ।

विद्युन्मण्डलसंकाशं पपात मधुरस्वनम् ।।

caraṇān nūpuraṃ bhraṣṭaṃ Vaidehyā ratna-bhūṣitam

vidyun-maṇḍala-saṃkāśaṃ papāta madhura-svanam


Araṇyakāṇḍa 50.30-31

तस्यास् तान्य् अग्निवर्णानि भूषणानि महीतले ।

सघोषाण्य् अवकीर्यन्त क्षीणास् तारा इवाम्बरात् ।।

tasyās tāny agni-varṇāni bhūṣaṇāni mahī-tale

saghoṣāṇy avakīryanta kṣīṇās tārā iv'āmbarāt

तस्याः स्तनान्तराद् भ्रष्टो हारस् ताराधिपद्युतिः ।

वैदेह्या निपतन् भाति गङ्गेव गगनाच् च्युता ।।

tasyāḥ stan'āntarād bhraṣṭo hāras tārā'dhipa-dyutiḥ

Vaidehyā nipatan bhāti Gaṅge'va gaganāc cyutā


Araṇyakāṇḍa 52.1-3

ह्रियमाणा तु वैदेही कं चिन् नाथम् अपश्यती ।

ददर्श गिरिशृङ्गस्थान् पञ्च वानरपुंगवान् ।।

hriyamāṇā tu Vaidehī kaṃ cin nātham apaśyatī

dadarśa giri-śṛṅga-sthān pañca vānara-puṃ-gavān

तेषां मध्ये विशालाक्षी कौशेयं कनकप्रभम् ।

उत्तरीयं वरारोहा शुभान्य् आभरणानि च ।

मुमोच यदि रामाय शंसेयुर् इति मैथिली ।।

teṣāṃ madhye viśāl'ākṣī kauśeyaṃ kanaka-prabham

uttarīyaṃ var'ārohā śubhāny ābharaṇāni ca

mumoca yadi Rāmāya śaṃseyur iti Maithilī

वस्त्रम् उत्सृज्य तन्मध्ये विनिक्षिप्तं सभूषणम् ।

संभ्रमात् तु दशग्रीवस् तत् कर्म न च बुद्धवान् ।।

vastram utsṛjya tan-madhye vinikṣiptaṃ sa-bhūṣaṇam

saṃbhramāt tu Daśagrīvas tat karma na ca buddhavān


Kiṣkindhākāṇḍa 6.9

आत्मना पञ्चमं मां हि दृष्ट्वा शैलतटे स्थितम् ।

उत्तरीयं तया त्यक्तं शुभान्य् आभरणानि च ।।

ātmanā pañcamaṃ māṃ hi dṛṣṭvā śaila-taṭe sthitam

uttarīyaṃ tayā tyaktaṃ śubhāny ābharaṇāni ca


Kiṣkindhākāṇḍa 6.13-14

उत्तरीयं गृहीत्वा तु शुभान्य् आभरणानि च ।

इदं पश्येति रामाय दर्शयाम् आस वानरः ।।

uttarīyaṃ gṛhītvā tu śubhāny ābharaṇāni ca

idaṃ paśy'eti Rāmāya darśayām āsa vānaraḥ

ततो गृहीत्वा तद् वासः शुभान्य् आभरणानि च ।

अभवद् बाष्पसंरुद्धो नीहारेणेव चन्द्रमाः ।।

tato gṛhītvā tad vāsaḥ śubhāny ābharaṇāni ca

abhavad bāṣpa-saṃruddho nīhāreṇ'eva candramāḥ


Kiṣkindhākāṇḍa 6.18-19

पश्य लक्ष्मण वैदेह्या संत्यक्तं ह्रियमाणया ।

उत्तरीयम् इदं भूमौ शरीराद् भूषणानि च ।।

paśya Lakṣmaṇa Vaidehyā saṃtyaktaṃ hriyamāṇayā

uttarīyam idaṃ bhūmau śarīrād bhūṣaṇāni ca

शाद्वलिन्यां ध्रुवं भूम्यां सीतया ह्रियमाणया ।

उत्सृष्टं भूषणम् इदं तथारूपं हि दृश्यते ।।

śādvalinyāṃ dhruvaṃ bhūmyāṃ Sītayā hriyamāṇayā

utsṛṣṭaṃ bhūṣaṇam idaṃ tathā-rūpaṃ hi dṛśyate


Sundarakāṇḍa 13.39-44

वैदेह्या यानि चाङ्गेषु तदा रामोऽन्वकीर्तयत् ।

तान्य् आभरणजालानि गात्रशोभीन्य् अलक्षयत् ।।

Vaidehyā yāni c’āṅgeṣu tadā Rāmo’nvakīrtayat

tāny ābharaṇa-jālāni gātra-śobhīny alakṣayat

सुकृतौ कर्णवेष्टौ च श्वदंष्ट्रौ च सुसंस्थितौ ।

मणिविद्रुमचित्राणि हस्तेष्व् आभरणानि च ।।

sukṛtau karṇa-veṣṭau ca śva-daṃṣṭrau ca susaṃsthitau

maṇi-vidruma-citrāṇi hasteṣv ābharaṇāni ca

श्यामानि चिरयुक्तत्वात् तथा संस्थानवन्ति च ।

तान्य् एवैतानि मन्येऽहं यानि रामोऽन्वकीर्तयत् ।।

śyāmāni cira-yuktatvāt tathā saṃsthānavanti ca

tāny ev’aitāni manye’haṃ yāni Rāmo’nvakīrtayat

तत्र यान्य् अवहीनानि तान्य् अहं नोपलक्षये ।

यान्य् अस्या नावहीनानि तानीमानि न संशयः ।।

tatra yāny avahīnāni tāny ahaṃ n’opalakṣaye

yāny asyā n’āvahīnāni tān’īmāni na saṃśayaḥ

पीतं कनकपट्टाभं स्रस्तं तद् वसनं शुभम् ।

उत्तरीयं नगासक्तं तदा दृष्टं प्लवंगमैः ।।

pītaṃ kanaka-paṭṭ’ābhaṃ srastaṃ tad vasanaṃ śubham

uttarīyaṃ nag’āsaktaṃ tadā dṛṣṭaṃ plavaṃgamaiḥ

भूषणानि च मुख्यानि दृष्टानि धरणीतले ।

अनयैवापविद्धानि स्वनवन्ति महान्ति च ।।

bhūṣaṇāni ca mukhyāni dṛṣṭāni dharaṇī-tale

anay’aiv’āpaviddhāni svanavanti mahānti ca


Microtale #18.

"Saṃpāti's wings burned, protecting me," Jaṭāyu thought. "My turn, protecting Sītā."


Rāvaṇa's sword dazzled, sunlike.


Canon for Microtale #18:

Araṇyakāṇḍa 49.36-38

तस्य व्यायच्छमानस्य रामस्यार्थेऽथ रावणः ।

पक्षौ पादौ च पार्श्वौ च खड्गम् उद्धृत्य सोऽच्छिनत् ।।

tasya vyāyacchamānasya Rāmasy'ārthe'tha Rāvaṇaḥ

pakṣau pādau ca pārśvau ca khaḍgam uddhṛtya so'cchinat

स छिन्नपक्षः सहसा रक्षसा रौद्रकर्मणा ।

निपपात हतो गृध्रो धरण्याम् अल्पजीवितः ।।

sa chinna-pakṣaḥ sahasā rakṣasā raudra-karmaṇā

nipapāta hato gṛdhro dharaṇyām alpa-jīvitaḥ

तं दृष्ट्वा पतितं भूमौ क्षतजार्द्रं जटायुषम् ।

अभ्यधावत वैदेही स्वबन्धुम् इव दुःखिता ।।

taṃ dṛṣṭvā patitaṃ bhūmau kṣataj'ārdraṃ Jaṭāyuṣam

abhyadhāvata Vaidehī sva-bandhum iva duḥkhitā


Kiṣkindhākāṇḍa 60.13-15

जटायुर् माम् अनापृच्छ्य निपपात महीं ततः ।

तं दृष्ट्वा तूर्णम् आकाशाद् आत्मानं मुक्तवान् अहम् ।।

Jaṭāyur mām anāpṛcchya nipapāta mahīṃ tataḥ

taṃ dṛṣṭvā tūrṇam ākāśād ātmānaṃ muktavān aham

पक्षाभ्यां च मया गुप्तो जटायुर् न प्रदह्यत ।

प्रमादात् तत्र निर्दग्धः पतन् वायुपथाद् अहम् ।।

pakṣābhyāṃ ca mayā gupto Jaṭāyur na pradahyata

pramādāt tatra nirdagdhaḥ patan vāyu-pathād aham

आशङ्के तं निपतितं जनस्थाने जटायुषम् ।

अहं तु पतितो विन्ध्ये दग्धपक्षो जडीकृतः ।।

āśaṅke taṃ nipatitaṃ Janasthāne Jaṭāyuṣam

ahaṃ tu patito Vindhye dagdha-pakṣo jaḍī-kṛtaḥ


Microtale #20.

Sītā: "Look! Your wide-eyed women, sky-facing, awaiting Puṣpaka!"


Rāma: "You recognize them after fourteen years?"


Canon for Microtale #20:

Sundarakāṇḍa 26.12-15

अनन्यदेवत्वम् इयं क्षमा च भूमौ च शय्या नियमश् च धर्मे ।

पतिव्रतात्वं विफलं ममेदं कृतं कृतघ्नेष्व् इव मानुषाणाम् ।

ananya-devatvam iyaṃ kṣamā ca bhūmau ca śayyā niyamaś ca dharme

pati-vratātvaṃ viphalaṃ mam’edaṃ kṛtaṃ kṛta-ghneṣv iva mānuṣāṇām

मोघो हि धर्मश् चरितो ममायं तथैकपत्नीत्वम् इदं निरर्थम् ।

या त्वां न पश्यामि कृशा विवर्णा हीना त्वया संगमने निराशा ।।

mogho hi dharmaś carito mam’āyaṃ tath’aika-patnītvam idaṃ nirartham

yā tvāṃ na paśyāmi kṛśā vivarṇā hīnā tvayā saṃgamane nirāśā

पितुर् निदेशं नियमेन कृत्वा वनान् निवृत्तश् चरितव्रतश् च ।

स्त्रीभिस् तु मन्ये विपुलेक्षणाभिः संरंस्यसे वीतभयः कृतार्थः ।।

pitur nideśaṃ niyamena kṛtvā vanān nivṛttaś carita-vrataś ca

strībhis tu manye vipul’ekṣaṇābhiḥ saṃraṃsyase vīta-bhayaḥ kṛt’ārthaḥ

अहं तु राम त्वयि जातकामा चिरं विनाशाय निबद्धभावा ।

मोघं चरित्वाथ तपो व्रतं च त्यक्ष्यामि धिग् जीवितम् अल्पभाग्या ।।

ahaṃ tu Rāma tvayi jāta-kāmā ciraṃ vināśāya nibaddha-bhāvā

moghaṃ caritvā’tha tapo vrataṃ ca tyakṣyāmi dhig jīvitam alpa-bhāgyā


Ayodhyākāṇḍa 8.3-5

सुभगा खलु कौसल्या यस्याः पुत्रोऽभिषेक्ष्यते ।

यौवराज्येन महता श्वः पुष्येण द्विजोत्तमैः ।।

subhagā khalu Kausalyā yasyāḥ putro’bhiṣekṣyate

yauvarājyena mahatā śvaḥ Puṣyeṇa dvij’ottamaiḥ

प्राप्तां सुमहतीं प्रीतिं प्रतीतां तां हतद्विषम् ।

उपस्थास्यसि कौसल्यां दासीव त्वं कृताञ्जलिः ।।

prāptāṃ sumahatīṃ prītiṃ pratītāṃ tāṃ hata-dviṣam

upasthāsyasi Kausalyāṃ dāsī’va tvaṃ kṛt’āñjaliḥ

हृष्टाः खलु भविष्यन्ति रामस्य परमाः स्त्रियः ।

अप्रहृष्टा भविष्यन्ति स्नुषास् ते भरतक्षये ।।

hṛṣṭāḥ khalu bhaviṣyanti Rāmasya paramāḥ striyaḥ

aprahṛṣṭā bhaviṣyanti snuṣās te Bharata-kṣaye


Yuddhakāṇḍa 116.16-18)

प्रतिकर्म च रामस्य कारयाम् आस वीर्यवान् ।

लक्ष्मणस्य च लक्ष्मीवान् इक्ष्वाकुकुलवर्धनः ।।

pratikarma ca Rāmasya kārayām āsa vīryavān

Lakṣmaṇasya ca lakṣmīvān Ikṣvāku-kula-vardhanaḥ

प्रतिकर्म च सीतायाः सर्वा दशरथस्त्रियः ।

आत्मनैव तदा चक्रुर् मनस्विन्यो मनोहरम् ।।

pratikarma ca Sītāyāḥ sarvā Daśaratha-striyaḥ

ātman’aiva tadā cakrur manasvinyo mano-haram

ततो राघवपत्नीनां सर्वासाम् एव शोभनम् ।

चकार यत्नात् कौसल्या प्रहृष्टा पुत्रवत्सला ।।

tato Rāghava-patnīnāṃ sarvāsām eva śobhanam

cakāra yatnāt Kausalyā prahṛṣṭā putra-vatsalā


Microtale #21.

Rāma: "Four barbers? I've one beard!"


Śatrughna: "Flowing? Smooth upper lip? Moustache? Cleanshaven?"


Rāma: "Braided!"


Canon for Microtale #21:

Yuddhakāṇḍa 116.12-13

भरतस्य वचः श्रुत्वा रामः परपुरंजयः ।

तथेति प्रतिजग्राह निषसादासने शुभे ।।

Bharatasya vacaḥ śrutvā Rāmaḥ para-puraṃ-jayaḥ

tathe'ti pratijagrāha niṣasād'āsane śubhe

ततः शत्रुघ्नवचनान् निपुणाः श्मश्रुवर्धकाः ।

सुखहस्ताः सुशीघ्राश् च राघवं पर्युपासत ।।

tataḥ Śatrughna-vacanān nipuṇāḥ śmaśru-vardhakāḥ

sukha-hastāḥ suśīghrāś ca Rāghavaṃ paryupāsata


Thank you, Saumya2102, for voting for my entry, Microtale #23.


Microtale #23.

Rāvaṇa ordered eight Rākṣasas: "Rāma slew Khara's fourteen thousand; kill him!"


Facing Janasthāna, they vanished.


Canon for Microtale #23:

Araṇyakāṇḍa 52.24-28

तं त्व् इदानीम् अहं हत्वा खरदूषणघातिनम् ।

रामं शर्मोपलप्स्यामि धनं लब्ध्वेव निर्धनः ।।

taṃ tv idānīm ahaṃ hatvā Khara-Dūṣaṇa-ghātinam

Rāmaṃ śarm'opalapsyāmi dhanaṃ labdhve'va nirdhanaḥ

जनस्थाने वसद्भिस् तु भवद्भी रामम् आश्रिता ।

प्रवृत्तिर् उपनेतव्या किं करोतीति तत्त्वतः ।।

Janasthāne vasadbhis tu bhavadbhī Rāmam āśritā

pravṛttir upanetavyā kiṃ karot'īti tattvataḥ

अप्रमादाच् च गन्तव्यं सर्वैर् एव निशाचरैः ।

कर्तव्यश् च सदा यत्नो राघवस्य वधं प्रति ।।

apramādāc ca gantavyaṃ sarvair eva niśā-caraiḥ

kartavyaś ca sadā yatno Rāghavasya vadhaṃ prati

युष्माकं हि बलज्ञोऽहं बहुशो रणमूर्धनि ।

अतश् चास्मिञ् जनस्थाने मया यूयं नियोजिताः ।।

yuṣmākaṃ hi bala-jño'haṃ bahuśo raṇa-mūrdhani

ataś c'āsmiñ Janasthāne mayā yūyaṃ niyojitāḥ

ततः प्रियं वाक्यम् उपेत्य राक्षसा महार्थम् अष्टाव् अभिवाद्य रावणम् ।

विहाय लङ्कां सहिताः प्रतस्थिरे यतो जनस्थानम् अलक्ष्यदर्शनाः ।।

tataḥ priyaṃ vākyam upetya Rākṣasā mahā'rtham aṣṭāv abhivādya Rāvaṇam

vihāya Laṅkāṃ sahitāḥ pratasthire yato Janasthānam alakṣya-darśanāḥ



I voted for Microtale #24 due to its thoughtful juxtaposition.


Microtale #24

Seeta wondered Rama who had freed Ahilya gave her exile knowing the truth of Agnipariksha.


Microtale #33 got my vote for its exciting, vivid progression.


Microtale #33

Jambavanta's words lift Hanuma high,

Mount Mahendra shakes, skyward fly.

In airgod-speed, Lanka draw nigh...


Likewise, So-So's Microtale #34's suspenseful, vivid progression got my vote.


Microtale #34

Lanka's nightfall, Hanuma's tread,

Left foot forward, desiring destruction spread.

Music whispers, to gynaeceum led.


I voted for the nicely presented setting, characters, and progression in Microtale #39, although the "heavy thread" metaphor didn't make sense to me.


Microtale #39

Vindhya’s wilds, Hanuma leads.

Angada strikes, demon bleeds.

Futile search, hearts dread,

a heavy thread.


The vivid scene and succinct narration of So-So's Microtale #41 got my vote.


Microtale #41

Matali's counsel, Rama's arrow flies,

Brahma's force, Ravana's demise.

From chariot to ground, tyrant lies.


Congratulations to all the winners!

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Congratulations to all the winners and runners smiley40

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Originally posted by: Quantum-Dot



Hello everyone!


With extreme pleasure and excitement, we are announcing the results of the Srimad Ramayan : Capture the Canon Writing Contest. 


We are thrilled by the response we received, with a total of 91 entries submitted for both the rounds, which includes 48 drabbles and 43 microtales, respectively. 


Our heartfelt gratitude to our three judges:  mnx12Viswasruti and devashree_h, who had dedicated their valuable time in reading and evaluating the entries for both the rounds with great care and attention. Without their strong support and commitment to this contest, we won't be able to dare hosting this contest in the very first place. 


Thanks so much Mina, Madhuri & Devi for your invaluable contributions in this contest. Here's a small token of thanks for our three lovely judges.

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Contest Idea : LizzieBennet & Quantum-Dot 

Contest Organisers : LizzieBennet I Pete15rogmourey I devashree_h I Quantum-Dot 




A million thanks to Mina MNX12 , Madhuri Viswasruti and Devashree  devashree_h. All the entries are so very wonderful making your task all the more complex. So genuine thanks for your time, effort and judgement! smiley31smiley27


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Everybody in the Development Team! DevashreeH, LizzieBennet, QuantumDot, Pete15 rogmourey  ......... Hearty Congratulations and a zillion Thanks! Conceptualizing the contest, coordinating with everybody, administering the entire show wonderfully! Your task was far more difficult than us participants. So

Hip Hip Hurray! Three Cheers to all of you! Now, Have a party! smiley40



 To all participants, we are all winners equally! Hearty Congratulations to all! In that one single moment of creation when we immerse completely in SiyaRam, that's our life's best moment.... it's pure happiness of a true heart.... Satchittanand!smiley41


So for everybody listed below smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32


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And for all fellow winners, A special pat on your back and hearty congratulationssmiley39smiley40smiley41


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Originally posted by: Loving2Missing2


A million thanks to Mrina MNX12 , Madhuri Viswasruti and Devashree  devashree_h. All the entries are so very wonderful making your task all the more complex. So genuine thanks for your time, effort and judgement! smiley31smiley27


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Everybody in the Development Team! DevashreeH, LizzieBennet, QuantumDot, Pete15 rogmourey  ......... Hearty Congratulations and a zillion Thanks! Conceptualizing the contest, coordinating with everybody, administering the entire show wonderfully! Your task was far more difficult than us participants. So

Hip Hip Hurray! Three Cheers to all of you! Now, Have a party! smiley40



 To all participants, we are all winners equally! Hearty Congratulations to all! In that one single moment of creation when we immerse completely in SiyaRam, that's our life's best moment.... it's pure happiness of a true heart.... Satchittanand!smiley41


So for everybody listed below smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32smiley32


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Congratulations that you won a position in the contest.


But that doesn't mean that you can criticise other people's works. If you couldn't connect to a story, then it is fine. Keep it to yourself. No one has asked for your comments here, so if you want to appreciate others, do so. But kindly donot comment on those who have made efforts in writing the drabbles.

Every writer is creative in their own way. No one is asking for explanation on why didn't you vote for them. So you don't need to pin point your opinions.

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BM for canon texts, insightful analysis smiley20

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Congratulations to the winners and runner upssmiley40

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Writers often move and inspire us, but when it comes time to compliment their work, it can be a struggle to find the words. Creative talent is immense in our IF, it was showcased through this contest. 

Organizing a high-quality contest can be a daunting task, but the wonderful entries made this contest even more special! I would like to extend a huge round of applause to Devi, Lizzie Pete15, and Simi for their outstanding efforts in developing the concept, idea, and organizational skills that produced such a great result. Thanks to their hard work, readers were given a fantastic opportunity to enjoy wonderful dabbles and microtales.

As I read the entries, I was in awe of the talented writers who defined the spiritual aspects of Ramayan so beautifully.

To all the winners, congratulations! And to all the participants, best wishes! 

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Posted: 1 months ago
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Writers often move and inspire us, but when it comes time to compliment their work, it can be a struggle to find the words. Creative talent is immense in our IF, it was showcased through this contest. 

Organizing a high-quality contest can be a daunting task, but the wonderful entries made this contest even more special! I would like to extend a huge round of applause to Devi, Lizzie Pete15, and Simi for their outstanding efforts in developing the concept, idea, and organizational skills that produced such a great result. Thanks to their hard work, readers were given a fantastic opportunity to enjoy wonderful drabbles  and micro tales.

As I read the entries, I was in awe of the talented writers who defined the spiritual aspects of Ramayan so beautifully.

To all the winners, congratulations! And to all the participants, best wishes! 

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