Arhi FF 'Sandcastle' Th 1. Reposted all the parts

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SANDCASTLE

This fictional work is the result of the books I have read and people I have met, show casting the character's from the serial 'Iss Pyaar Ko Kya Naam Doon?', though many other imaginary characters are included. The story line and the characterization, in a whole, have nothing to do with the serial story line and any resembling's to anyone, living or dead, is purely unintentional.

The name of the story is inspired by the memories I have on making sandcastles when I was a kid. Sandcastle also meant something that lacks significance. The reason as why it the title for this story, only time will tell us

Thank you for following me throughout my journey in this site. I appreciate it. And comments are always welcome and so as constructive criticism. It helped me a lot in improving my skills in writing. Honestly, those kind of encourage me for regular updates.

Regarding PMs, I do send them to the buddy list, but don't send me a request if you aren't keen on commenting, or if you are a silent reader. It had been very hard to send hundreds of PMs and get few back. Now, I really have no time to waste in sending those to people who isn't interested in reading or commenting. If you are really interested, I suggest you bookmark it.

Plagiarism has been common in the site and I have been blessed with almighty's mercy, none of my works are copied or duplicated in other sites till now, noting that came into my notice. I request you all not to do such things for timely pleasure. It is very difficult to write and please do not enjoy other's work.

And last but the common factor in all my fictional works, nothing new to say here as well. This story doesn't revolve just around the lead roles, but also people around them, their family and friends, as how they all affect the lead roles. So, there might be an update focusing only on leads and there might be updates where they aren't even mentioned. Readers who welcome all the characters are the real persons who would actually like this piece, because, no story is complete with just two characters. I suggest you all not to limit your interest/focus on the lead just because you like/love/obsessed with them. That isn't going to work in real writers/readers life.

The story focuses mainly on Arnav and Khushi and their journey together. It is a simple story, without any complications in the way I have in my other stories. Stay tuned to know more.

Thank you all,

Vanhi


INDEX

Prologue Scroll Down

Chapter 1 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/90760694

Chapter 2 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/90985697

Chapter 3 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/91142427

Chapter 4 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/91296755

Chapter 5 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/91463529

Chapter 6 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/91676961

Chapter 7

Chapter 8

Chapter 9

Chapter 10

Chapter 11A

Thread Two


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Prologue

From: Aman Mathur (mailto:Arch.Mathur@aliendesigners.com)

Sent: Sunday, June 16, 2013 at 7:57 PM

To: Arnav S Raizada (mailto:Arch.Raizada@aliendesigners.com)

Cc:

Subject: Report time

Mr. Bose is expecting you at 10 AM. I hope you had a safe journey.

PS: Do not screw this, Raizada. The deal is important.

From: Arnav S Raizada (mailto:Arch.Raizada@aliendesigners.com)

Sent: Sunday, June 16, 2013 at 8:00 PM

To: Aman Mathur (mailto:Arch.Mathur@aliendesigners.com)

Cc:

Subject: Re: Report time

Yes, boss. It was fine, thanks for asking.

PS: I really want to, but left with professional decency.

From: Aman Mathur (mailto:Arch.Mathur@aliendesigners.com)

Sent: Sunday, June 16, 2013 at 8:03 PM

To: Arnav S Raizada (mailto:Arch.Raizada@aliendesigners.com)

Cc:

Subject: Re: Report time

Good.

PS: Professional decency never stopped you from snapping. It is natural for me to be worried about my chief Architect's anger as I am forcing him to stay in the Pearl City for a month. Cannot blame me, can you? ;)

PPS: Enjoy with your Hyderabadi biriyani in the meanwhile.

Flipping his mobile, Arnav stared out of the taxi with a defeated sigh. He had been arguing with Aman that he was not interested in the deal nor was he in staying away from his family and friends for a month. He might not say it loud, but Arnav was a family person. He liked to spend some quality time with his family every weekend. He never missed any of their gatherings. Though he never liked the noise and the interrogation that followed by them, he could not help but stay close to them, just to see them happy. He was not a decent man as many thought he was with the fact he spent time with family. He was just like any other man, who drinks occasionally, have few flings and loads of parties. The only reason people often misjudge him was, he knew how to balance his life and he would make sure to show a part of him. He was a natural charmer.

The city covered with downpour and the traffic as its result. In the past one and a half hour, he had been travelling from airport to the place where he was going to stay this month, he knew he was not going to like the place. The roads were nothing but a mass of punctures in it as soon as he entered the city. There were auto rickshaws everywhere. The downpour and it being a Sunday did not make any of the citizens to rest in peace in their comfortable place their homes provided. He watched a bunch of street kids jumping in muddy puddles and cars zoomed past, without a care about others. He shook his head, his brows narrowed, when he saw an argument be. This was going to be his residence now. And he already missed Mumbai.

There was another angle to the Pearl City, as it is known. It held a great importance in its history. One of the most attractive places is the Hussain Sagar built on Musi River, covering 5.7 square kilometers and the monolithic statue of Gautam Buddha - a peaceful place, and a token of gratification from the ruler of that era to Hussain Shah Wali for his help to recover from an illness. There are statues of 33 famous personalities, showing the history and hereditary of the Telugu region and language of the country.

He watched the city that spread in front of him under the streetlights, as the taxi entered from the heavy traffic roads to one of the peaceful residence areas. True to it, Arnav took in the huge trees that lined on either sides of the road, with individual portions - what seemed like well built cottages over decades. Soon, his mind gathered as much he could in the partly lit area. To his surprise, he felt instant liking for the area. Unlike the metropolitan city in a whole, this particular area is something that captured his interest. He mentally noted to thank Aman for providing his stay in such a peaceful place, rather than in a hotel.

He thanked the cab driver as the man helped him unload his luggage and placed them in the covered foyer. After paying the fair, Arnav ran to the foyer, covering his head with his hand. Shaking his head to let the droplets leave his hair, he pressed the bell button, waiting for it to be attended.After a long minute, he watched a woman standing in front of him. The man in him made a quick calculation and concluded that she might be in her early twenties. She was clad in a blue kurta with her hair left open. "Hi," he greeted her with a smile, "is this Mr. Arvind Yalavarti's residence?"

She smiled with a slight nod. "Yes," she confirmed, "how can I help you?"

"I am Arnav," he introduced himself, extending his hand to her, "Arnav Raizada from Mumbai."

He watched the reorganization in her eyes. "Please come in," she moved aside to let him enter the home, "Papa has been expecting you." She then shook his hand gently, "Bindu."

He followed her, leaving his luggage at the doorsteps. The room was painted in cream, with a tint of brown furniture. His tiredness taking a troll over his sense and he blinked twice, pushing it back. He noticed an elderly woman standing near the couch and a man in his fifties sitting on it. His eyes then fell on a figure, with her back facing him. "This is my final decision," the man spoke seriously, "we are not having this discussion further, Khushi. Do you get it?"

Before the girl could reply, Arnav heard Bindu calling the man in her language. The girl, who had been clearly having a heated discussion with the man, left the place without any delay. He smiled at the man and introduced himself. The man, Arvind Yalavarti, shook hands with him. "I have been waiting for your arrival, Mr. Raizada," he said and turned towards Bindu and asked, "show him the place." He then turned to Arnav and said, "settle down in the room, and then come, join us for dinner."

"No sir," Arnav rejected smoothly, "I had it on my way here. Thank you for asking."

He then followed Bindu out of the house and climbed the stairs. He looked around the terrace area. It had open place, covering the foyer downstairs and a small room behind it. He noticed that the area was filled with such small residence houses. "Wow," he smiled at her, "I loved this place already!"

"I am glad you liked it," Bindu replied with a smile while unlocking the door, "the place is yours Arnav. Feel free to call us if you need anything. Good night."

Arnav watched her walking towards the flight of stairs. "Good night," he called out on her behind and entered the place. Placing his luggage aside, he fell on the bed, too tired to take in the kind of room. Too tired after the long journey to even change into comfortable cloths.

***~***~***~***~***~***

Edited by muddled_mind - 11 years ago
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Unresed! A new story!! Yay! And I have to say I'm excited to read a new genre by you! It's good for you to experiment with different styles here, especially since you want to be a writer! Anderson me just take a minute to freak out cuz I'm first to comment!!! This is huge for me! It's the first time I'm the first to comment on anything!!! Ok... Now let me start dissecting the story!
Well... Since it just started I have to see if I can start setting up a character basis! The prologue of anything is important because it is what introduces the reader to the writer's writing style as well as as lead into the story. Obviously there are no big twists that are here from the beginning, but let me start digging into the characters you have presents here in order or appearance!
First there's Aman Mathur who is Arnav's boss. Already here we have relationship establishes where Aman holds a higher rank of respect t the company Alien Designers. Based on the emails shared back and forth between Arnav and and Aman, they both share an easy acquaintance that is seen as friendship. They are professional and personal. This is shown through the structure of the message. If one just reads the body content without the post script you see a normal conversation between a detached boss and his employee exchanging socially accepted and expected pleasantries. The personal level comments about Arnav's behavior and their friendly nature comes across in the post scripts. This shows that both know the limits of they're relationship and know how not to mix the professional and personal life. Aman also seems to really cater to Arnav by his choice of lodging for Arnav. The fact that Arnav is highly pleased with Aman's choice shows that Aman knows what Arnav likes and utilizes it.
Now lets move on to Arnav S Raizada (I will not assume that his middle name is Singh because it may not be in this story). Arnav mentions that he is a family oriented man who prefers to be with his family. He expresses that his sentiment and love towards them gives people the illusion that he is a "good boy" but in reality he knows how to separate his family life from his social life. This gives us insight into Arnav's character. He knows how to control situations around him and make sure that everything remains in that control. He is a normal person who cannot be stereotyped as a playboy/partyer or as a family man. He is a mix of both, just like how real people are in the world. Upon entering Pearl City, Arnav feels homesick already. The deatchment shown by the isolation on the streets and the presence of the drunkards fighting does not sit well with Arnav's first impression on the city. But instantly it changes when he goes into his area of lodging. By the fact that Arnav prefers the serene environment over the metropolitan one once again shows his like of control. It also shows how particular he is and enjoys the peace over the hustle bustle of life. One big thing that's different about this Arnav from the IPK one, he said thank you to the can driver. This shows that Arnav has manners and respects those around him. This is again seen in his polite rejection of dinner. Arnav is also different because he smiled at Arvind. The other Arnav rarely smiled. It can also be inferred that this Arnav is easier to get along with. Mr. Yalavarti and Bindhu seem nice enough to him and he is nice back. The already budding comfort shows the bond that is slowly starting to grow.
Now to move on to Bindhu. There is not much to say about her. She seems respectful and mature. It seems like she takes care of the house along with Mr. Yalavarti, her father. She respects the man greatly. The fact that she is present at the house goes that she may be unmarried.
Now it is time for Arvind Yalavarti. Arvind is the man in charge of the house. This assumption is based off the fact that Bindhu asks Arnav to refer to him regarding arriving. He also holds respect for others as well as authority. He openly denies Khushi of what she wants and tells Bindhu to show Arnav his room. The man is also polite to Arnav and extends a hand of hospitality.
Next is Khushi. All we know is that she is having an issue with Arvind. He does not agree with her on something and seems obstinate towards his point of view. Khushi is not member of the family maybe hence she was able to leave easily with no delay and does not acknowledge Arnav. This start between the two is interesting because usually within the first meet Arshi hit it off either with a fight of some sort or flirting, but here both barely registered the other's presence.
Overall the prologue was well done! It gives a lot of insight into the story ahead and I see many areas where the plot can be thickened and built up on! Eager to read more!
Edited by vplh79 - 12 years ago
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Sounds intersting...would love to read more 😊

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Aman is boss? ha ha ha may be he will get to command Arnav this time :). sounds different from other stories though I like all your stories. They are simply superb. Thanks for PM and continue.

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wow ... a diff setting and a diff city
I like the place he is going to be staying in already too , I can just imagine it ... A small cottage type room and the open terrace
ummm Arnav an architect ... Sounds interesting ... Looking forward for more
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow anothr story frm u. Gr8 going. Waitng 4 updates
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OMG it look sooo GOOD!!!!😊

Can't wait for next update...😛
Edited by Apeter - 12 years ago
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So Arnav comes across as a good guy, but isn't as good as people think him to be...?

Looking forward to see where you go from here...
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Superb

Waiting for the update

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