FF: Broken Hearts[Pt.27 Pg.78, 30th December]

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This is the first time I'm posting an SSactually it's the first time I'm posting any kind of storyI know it's probably really bad, both language vise and story vise, but please bare with me and do read and share your views on itSo here goes nothing

Aapi kya aapko sach mein jaana hoga?

Are Zoya, teen baar ek sawal pochne sehuska jawab change nai hoga, aur do min mein toh bilkul nai. Ek baatbatao, tu itna tension kyoun lerahi hai? Tera aapna sasural mein toh
chorkar jarahi hoon - Aapi said smiling at Zoya

Huh?! Mera sasural? Ha, mera matlab Iknow ki yeh mera honewalasasural hai, but kya Jiju khud nai asakta hai, aapko 5 din ki liyeDelhi kyoun jaana hoga, aur aap kya New York jaa rahi hai ki aap ko 5din ki liye jaana padega - Zoya said looking like a sad, lostpuppy.

For a min Zeenat was worried for Zoya's reaction, but then thought, Zoya is just nervous cause of thewedding closing in, and said - Kyoun, main shopping karna chati hoon
aur woh bhi teri liye, teri shaadi ki liye aur tum hai jo mujheguilty feel karwana chati hai. By the way Zoya, tume pata hai ki terajiju kitna exited hain tere nikaah ki liye, but just as a warning,he's just as peeved at you for not even telling him anything about
you and Asad - Zeenat said with a laugh.

Zoya forced a smile
on her face and thought; itna khush maat ho Jeju, it's all fake, and
the longer you dream about it the more it will hurt later on.

Zeenat looked upfrom her bag just about to tell Zoya about her Jeju's first reactionto all of this when she froze, Zoya lost in her thought, for onceforgot that she wasn't alone and let her eyes speak of all the hurtand pain her heart was going through. The pain Zeenat saw in Zoya'seyes made her gasp and take a step back causing a vase on the
dressing table to fall and get crushed against the floor. Zoya wasjerked back to reality and looked at her Aapi's shocked expression.


Kya hua, kisi nekuch kaha, Asad! Asad ne zoror kuch kaha, I'm sure and that's why you
don't want me to leave is it, are chup kyoun ho batao, what did he doto you - Aapi said, her voice getting louder with every word.


Kuch nai Aapi, yehaap kya keh rahi hai. There's nothing wrong with me and no Mr. Khan
my be Akdu, but he would never hurt me like that. Aap shant hojaye -Zoya said just as Dilshaad came in startled by Zeenat's high tone.

Kya hua Zeenat, sabkhairiyat hai na, Zoya kya hua? - She asked looking at them both.


Meri Zoya ko..

Kuch bhi nai, Aapibas over react karahi hai, she made the plans of leaving for 5 days,and now that I'm trying to guilt her into buying me loads of clothes,inhone yeh reaction di, ab aap hi bataiye unhe ke mujhe kuch nai hogaaur mere liye sanget ke liye kuch acha sa traditional outfit Delhi selana, bolo na Phuphi - Zoya said, praying to God that her Aapi
would let it pass..

What Zoya didn't know was that outside of her room, in the small garden like area between Asad and Zoya's room, stood a man who witnessed it all. The cute bickering between sisters, the slip up by the younger one and her desperate attempt to cover it up. She may fool her sister andher phuphi but this man saw it all, and he understood it all.

Yeah I know it's really not even worth posting and all, but please do leave comments if I should continue or just forget I ever wrote this

P.S. the title, it has nothing to do with the serial Pyaar ka Dard, maine bas aisi naam raka kyoun ki log hamesha kehte hain ki agar pyaar mein chot bhi kaye to pyaar itself can make the pain go away, okay I'm gonna stopjustifyinga bad title, if you have any better ideas please do tell cause my mind is going blank ^^''

INDEX:

Part 1: scroll up

Part 2&3:https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/3607580/ff-broken-hearts-pt-27-pg-78-30th-december?pn=2

Part 4:https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/3607580/ff-broken-hearts-pt-27-pg-78-30th-december?pn=3

Part 5:https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/3607580/ff-broken-hearts-pt-27-pg-78-30th-december?pn=4

Part 6:https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/84513911�








Part 12.1: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/3607580/ff-broken-hearts-pt-27-pg-78-30th-december?pn=22





Part 13:https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/3607580/ff-broken-hearts-pt-27-pg-78-30th-december?pn=26



Part 15:https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/3607580/ff-broken-hearts-pt-27-pg-78-30th-december?pn=34

Part 16: https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3607580&TPN=35

Part 17: pg. 38










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mochhug thumbnail
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Please please please post the next part I BEEEG YOUUU

Loved it yaar! Poor Zoyaaa I hope Asad confesses soon so she knows it's not fake at all 😳 Love how he knows her and could tell what was bothering her
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its real cute and nice
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Originally posted by: mochhug

Please please please post the next part I BEEEG YOUUU


Loved it yaar! Poor Zoyaaa I hope Asad confesses soon so she knows it's not fake at all 😳 Love how he knows her and could tell what was bothering her


Thanks for the sweet comment 😳😳 I'll try to finish the next part before going to work 😃
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Thanks Ankie, Naikravina and Milli 😃😃
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this is just SUPERB!! You have to continue this, like NOW!! Pretty please?? Thanks 4 the pm!
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Firstly thanks to everybody that commented😳😳 a big 🤗to you all, and secondly, I'm not sure how this part turned out since I didn't have time to proof read it, Thanks again and don't forget to comment and like😳😳

Zoya talking

Aapi talking

Asad talking


Teek hai ' Zeenat slowly replied glancing at Zoya and her sweet pout. Maybe she was just overreacting, but the pain in Zoya's eyes, just the thought of her little Zoya going through that kind of pain again, had her shudder. But looking into Zoya's eyes now, there wasn't even a small trace of pain, she only saw the same mischievous glint in her eye's so she decided to let it drop, for now.


Zoya watched her Appi's expression change from worry, then seeing her shudder and finally she seemed to be thinking over something.


Baar Zoya ek baat sach sach bata, yeh "Traditional clothes" kyoun- she said looking at her Zoya, while waiting for her reaction.

This will tell me if there's really something going on or if I'm just overreacting - Zeenat thought, not knowing that Zoya could read her way better then she could read Zoya.


Seeing Aapi's expression change, she knew she was up to something, her teasing though was not expected and the blush that followed when Zoya realized her second slip up, had her running out the door.


Allah Miya what's wrong with me ' she said running before the next round of question began from her Aapi and Phuphi, this time just so they could see her blush more and more and actually witness something very rare, Zoya going into her Mr. Khan's "woh aur actually" mode.


Seeing her run out of the room Mr. Khan went back inside and decided to talk to Zoya, the pain he had seen in her eyes gave him the courage he needed to take it all away the only way he knew, by telling her what she wanted to hear, what he wanted to say. Baar Zoya ki samne mera bolti hamesha band kyoun hojati hai.. - Asad thought scratching his head.


Both lost in their own thoughts, one having a conversation with her Allah Miya, the second one proud to finally have gathered enough courage to confess, didn't notice that they were walking towards each other, until they collided, making Zoya loose balance and fall right into the arms of Asad.


Asad was looking at Zoya shutting her eyes tightly and expecting to hit the ground, that never seemed to come, suddenly she opened her eyes only to get lost in his.

Slowly she forgot all about the pain of knowing she was a misfit, the pain of knowing that not only would her Mr. Khan never love her, he din't even find her worthy of anybody. But at that moment Zoya was on cloud nine far away from her reality, she was in the arms of her Mr. Khan and that was more than enough to make her forget the entire world.


In Asad's case, all of his courage and determination of telling her that he loved her went right out of the window after seeing her. He was back into his "woh aur actually" mode even before Zoya had opened her eyes.


Suddenly something broke behind them jerking both of them back to reality, Asad had been so lost in his thoughts that he forgot that they weren't alone and realizing that they had been caught he dropped Zoya right on to the floor, just to catch her right before she actually hit the ground.


Aap teek hai ms Farooqi ' He formally asked while helping her stand up straight.


Once out of her dream land, reality hit Zoya again, bringing with it more pain then before, if that was even possible. Looking down she mumbled a barely audible Jee before running of again.


Behind them in the kitchen a woman was picking up the broken pieces of a plate smiling to herself,

Are Zoya, tu toh abhi se toothne lagi, once I'm done with you, you'll be in worse condition than this plate, broken, inside out..


I think we all know who that manhoos at the end is, didn't feel the need to write out her name and ruin the end even more 😛 Yeah she's a part of this and before I give away my next part I'm gonna stop writing 😆😆

P.S. For PM's add me 😊

Edited by Illo - 12 years ago
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yaar..its nyc..cntinue and pm me plz
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great story luv it update soon
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awesome part! Loved the way you portrayed their feelings! Update the next part soon!

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