Impressions and Feedbacks-BY a PROUD HCian ❤️ - Page 7

Originally posted by: lakshmi_3004

@sneha di's

**The RaSiKri Poems Wishing Well**

Wish Penny put in by Divs : Siya-Krish relationship

1] will start with couple/twin words as is usual😆😳

a) goal-console goal is what sia lacked in her life..she was so wounded that she had no strength left to set any goal let alone achieve it...and as we all know life was specifically harsh to her...as she couldn't trust anyone and had no hopes on the existence of humanity..she was always offered sympathy but never anyone really consoled her and saying that "all is well"...and hence she was unaware of the positive force she had in herself..which would make her think to console some other person..even when she was battered inside..

b)soul-cajole talking of soul...sia's soul was so battered ...the wounds she got from life...was not jismani...but ruhaani...no body could gauge the extend of pain she endured as it was all on her soul which is not exactly seen...

as i said above no-one was close enough to her to drag her out of the pain hardship and heal her wounds hence she was on the threshold of losing herself..her very essence..her soul and emotions..but life is always unpredictable in its ways...for who could even take a guess that a small kid not more than 8 years can work wonders in her matter...

here comes the cajoling part...with his innocent ways , silence and expressive eyes...wise reaction beyond his age...and the silent support from Krish became the strongest pillar of strength to lean on for sia..putting even the grownups to shame..

krish could sense..see...guage sia's silence...her fears...her misplaced doubts and misgivings on self ,,,Krish not only cajoled her but filled her with the enthusiasm to live again..which she had lost long ago...and this is what makes there relationship pure and great

c)lost-bound here i would like to see lost in two ways...

i)in literal sense she did lose her unborn child (reason we all know)

ii) she had lost TRUST on her LIFE and hence she lost her LIFE itself in the onslaught of pain and wounds she had to face...

bound can also be viewed in two ways..

i) in that sia had wrongly assumed..that whatever she underwent as J it was her fate and she was destined to suffer..

ii) she felt an instant bond to the kid...it might be her motherly instinct or a connection based on pain and sufferings..as even Krish had lost his father and voice...

d)own-unknown here it clearly demonstrates sia's motherly yearnings...she craved to be a mother...which was cruelly denied by circumstances...but in krish she could relive all her motherly wishes!!

unknown can be looked in two ways..

i)practically she dint knew much about krish but still she felt connected with him...

ii) the bond is unknown in the sense it can't be categorised exactly under any type...as its a mileu of various relations...and the bond is more on psychological level...

e)keep-deep here i feel the promise sia makes is more to herself than the kid...she is promising herself that "no matter what ,will face life with determination as should be the case...and will never let down oneself...in the first place.."

and in a way this promise creates a foundation for sia to build her life anew...

deep for me is a symbolic word for the abyss people face life as...sometimes..with respect to krish..he is staring at a bottomless tunnel in the hoplessness and despair situation of never getting his voice back...or be happy with a full family

f)stay-way its remarkable in the transfiguration sia undergoes in life,the kid...being the catalyst...so to say...i mean not many muster courage to fine the lost hope back in life based on ..leaning on..deriving inspiration from a kid much younger than oneself..so the journey from thinking that one is the cause of harm to being a shield to others and staying in harm's way protecting others is spectacular in itself..and serves the very purpose of making people live.,.in that way sia has won half of her battle by doing so...

way is the path now..which sia was able to choose thanks to krish's presence in her life...

g)years-fears years denote time spent which is always subjective,,,,for instance... as J he one year she spent with her abusive husband was hell and felt as if it was 10 years cos she felt difficulty in breathing-in-the-relation...so to say... and that her life meant a burden to herself..where as when she will see the years passing by while taking care of krish it would seem that clock has stopped ticking...cos she will relive her childhood ..her lost happiness..her reason to live in krish's upbringing...

and once again from being the one who needs a support she is ready to be a support to someone..and that change is a success story in itself!!

h] way-away way in here is life itself..not just the path...as life is created or destroyed by the choices made..so whenever the kid will stumble due to faulty decision...the way or life would get complicated and confusing...and at that time if he has someone to fall back on then life will become easier..and am happy to see a positive sia donning that role of somebody

away here shows the amount of confidence sia derives from life now..that she has krish with her...which allows to be with him..and yet leave

i)unfold-told there is an air of contradiction in these two words in the sense..unfold relates to unexpected ways..in a way fulfills the definition of life being surprising...so for good or for worse she has got a reason to face life boldly...and in the way she also becomes a reason for krish facing his life boldly...its mutual...some things are not in need to be spoken out...or uttered..or told...it is understood...and the beautiful unnamed (as yet) relation need not say out aloud its sanctity needs not be proven...such is the purity of this pure relation

2] sia-krish relation was beyond words...as sia drew a lot of support and courage from the little one...and krish got a support before life could have a upper-hand...so this poem is so apt!!

3]liked the way sia spoke with Krish here in a motherly way in a protector way...and its amazing the love she has for the little one has changed her so much...in a positive way!!

4]as for my reaction? second and third line of 4rth stanza di 😳

thanks @sidra for the cute avi🤗...i am gonna steal it 😆

thanks @div for your request 🤗

thanks a lot sneha di for letting me review and keep my take on the poem in front of you🤗

Originally posted by: lakshmi_3004

@Kiran's

FF-Pyar Ka Asar Chapter-24

1]heer winking😉?? prem tho jal jal ke butta hogaya hoga bechara🤣 ya ryt jal bhunke poora bharta ban gaya mere Prem ka 😳 😆

2]"Prem se teekha khana nahi khaya aja na." aww this is called "touch of reality "...loved the way you added a bit of reality👏...great thinking dear👍🏼 and "honey chilly potato" is an intelligent improvisation😆...keep it up⭐️ actually honey chilli potatoes are my fav so mae ne Prem ka bhi bana diya 😉

3]"Prem (angrily thinking): Yeh Manmeet apnea p ko samjhta kya hai. Chilli potatoes khilane tak to thik tha. Lekin ab to kuch zyada hi ho raha hai. Agar ab isne Heer ke kareeb jane ki koshish kin a I swear mae bhool jaounga ki yeh mera dost hai." aww Angry HC ...i mean Prem😳...i just can imagine his hands balling up ...shivering in pure anger...grinding teeth...thanks for including Jealous angry HC...i mean Prem.🤗...love you for this❤️ Arre yehi to hamare Prem babu ki khasiyat hai 😆

4]i almost forgot that Ash and Mish are also there in this FF...hehehe but now i m glad dat remebr dem 😆

5]"Bharat milaap" seriously kunal never fails to crack me up🤣...you have a nice sense of humor😆...nice comic touch👍🏼...adds that extra zing to the ff😳 thank u thank u...its one of my best quality 😳

6]"Prem (thinks): Atleast waha to muje Heer ke sath akele time milega.Heer (thinks): Kash waha muje Prem ke sath thorda time akele spend karne ko mile." bechara prem aur heer😔 Taras gayein hein APNI heer/prem ke saat kuch waqt akele bitaaneko😒...thoda tho rehem karo apne heer/prem deewaane/deewaani pe😡...kaleja hey kya pathar 😡😆* does nautanki and keeps left hand on forehead* arre dont wry do dil zaror milenge...i'll make sure dat 😉

7]i had no idea KDMHMD forum band hogayi 😲...sorry to hear that well nice move that you shifted it to fanfiction section😳...thanks for doing so🤗 Kdmhmd forum band hone wala tha but not now humari (deshians) ki meherbani se 😆

8]awesome write up dear👏...magar it was short hence i was not able to analyse the continuity ...the technicality...and the quality conformation of the FF...😳

9]magar i liked this chapter a lot😃!! short but sweet😳 thank u so much 🤗

10] thank you for giving me a chance to review the FF dear and keep my views in front of you🤗 well its was my pleasure 😳

Originally posted by: lakshmi_3004

@kiran's

FF-Pyar ka Asar Chapter-25-In Ward Lake

1]The pic is so cute😊!! nice place dear😳 thank u 😳 this place in Shillong and i have already went there😃 ....i remember 26th/29th march 2009 episode jab prem was crying sitting on a small brifge like this thinking heer loved only his face not him...😔

2]"There are many couples sitting on benches, under the tree or near the lake" nice touch of detailing dear👏 maintains the believable aspect of the FF⭐️...gives a solid scenario...nice thinking👏 actually in reality ward lake is one of the lover's Point in shillong 😆

3]"Heer is busy in chatting with Ash and Misha. And our Prem is continuously trying to get Heer's attention. But Heer is not looking at him even for one second." i can imagine prem trying to catch Heer's attention😆!! remember his and heer's mehendi?? the broken mirror ...and i like the way you said "our" prem....makes this FF a tad more personal😃.. brings the reader the narrator and the characters of teh story much more close..thanks for thinking in that way🤗 well its my point of view 😳

4]"Prem (frustratedly thinking):- Yeh Heer bhi na, Ash or Misha se to aese baat karne mae lagi hui hai jaise unse sadiyo baad mil rahi ho. Meri taraf to dekh bhi nahi rahi huh!!!" Adorable angry young man....i just can't stop going.🤣🤣...thinking about prem's failed attempts🤣 and heer's chatting🤣 hahaha han is one of the main reason i love Prem 😆 😉

5]"Heer (thinks):- Oh God yeh manmeet to mere piche hi pard gaya hai. Muje to Prem ke sath baithna hai. Ab kya karun" Classic Heer.🤣... Damsel in Distress🤔...hamesha kahina kahi phasjaati hey😡...cute heer😆... Heer ka doosra naam musibato ki rani jo hai 🤣

6]i can imagine heer nervously smiling and hesitating a lot to accept the invitation and pinning all her hope on prem to SAVE her😆...and did prem looked like this? ya ryt 😳

7]"Heer slowly stretch her hand to keep her palm on Manmeet's palm but before she could put her palm on Manmeet's she was stopped by Prem's scream" very very DRAMATIC!!!🤣

i could imagine..heer's hand slowwwly inching towards manmeet's outstretched hands😆...then the video panning and focussing on manmeet's hand ...heer's hand...heer's face..prem's face...then heer's hand...prem's face...then heer's face...she swallowing down..in hesitaion...then again prem's face..heer's hand...then a fast play of all the three subjects "with zuzuk zuzuk BG sound😆* then suddenly Prem bucling up ...bending forward screaming!! then heer's shocked face manmeet's face now turns towards prem...and a still on every one's shocked face one by one as they watch prem screaming in pain... hmm i know it was bit dramatic na...kuch zyada hi hogaya tha 😆

8]"Prem (screamed):- aaahhhahahaaa!!!!" but seriously i was so immersed in FF that i was shocked a bit😲...how dare you keep prem in pain even though jhoot moot ka...😡 opps sry but kya karen kuch pane k liye kuch khona bhi to pardta hai na 😉

but nice thinking😆...although age old idea🤔 to draw attention of his sajni and escaping from the annoying people😡 and kabaab emin haddi manmeet😡

9]i was expecting manmeet will be sucpicious cos of the TIMING of his pain...can't prem build up his drama😡?? sort of leading to pain🤔...so that no one could be suspicious😆?? anaari hey bilkul anaari 😡ab kya karein iss jhalle ka??🤔

10]i can see where prem is coming from😊...from his pOV he is in danger of losing heer anytime...cos of not saying truth out...and personally i dint like the behaviour of chipku-manmeet😡...arey kunal, thick friend of P and H din't take any liason with heer till now😳...but here manmeet is going on like a breakless gaadi😡🤣 hahahaha 🤣

11] waiting for your "Big Dhamaaka"...😃 hmm just wait and watch 😉

12]awesome write up👏!! nice hold on story even though you had discontinued for some time..in between...nice continuity is maintained through out👍🏼...nice scene build up👏...location was used wisely😆!! the reactions of various characters where well drawn out⭐️...specially the car mein ice cream wala scene ,prem's nautanki etc!!😳 thank u so much 😃

13] thanks for giving me a chance to review your work dear🤗