My Bittersweet Jalebi!!!----A Poem.

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hello all.Its been a long time since Arnav and Kushi excited me to write something about them. Now that they seem to be more aware of each other and see each other in different light, I thought to pen some lines about them. Enjoy and please leave your valuable comments .Thanks.
My Bittersweet Jalebi ! -- A Poem.

Life I lived in my own terms,

Chasing dreams and rainbows never I cared.

Rules were made, codes strictly adhered,

Hardened self withstanding choppy times and tempest.

Stood by beautiful sister through thick and thin,

Others, just members; to be showered with goodies.

Life's sweeter aspects never impressed nor attracted.

Blood thickened by sugar, a malady to endure forever.

Sweeter side slowly decreasing the transients,

Bitter side, always amplifying the permanence.

Like a whiff of fresh air, a silky Duppatta

Caressing & soothing the creases & wrinkles .

A damsel in distress, challenging my essence and core.

Love to hate her but hate to love her.

Delicious and luscious lips beckoning to kiss

Eyes that twinkle and mock at my implacability.

Chamkeli Kushi shaking my beliefs and means.

Firm heart shattered by tender and softness.

My Bitter sweet Jalebi, full of zest

My Bete noire, to be avoided the best.

Colorful as Holi spirits; tasty as fluffy round ringlets,

Threatening my waking and sleepy vigilance.

Reasons and resolves dissolved into sugary nothing,

Regrets and bitterness eased into desire and quest.

Vibrant and spirited full of vitality and verve,

Ambrosia like delicasy, ever so lip smacking.

My Bittersweet Jalebi

A mixture of contrast; harsh and honey

A taste so unique; complex and lasting.

A Woman to avoid; yet, to love forever,

A life that completes and compliments mine.

My Bittersweet JALEBI KUSHI !!!!

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Posted: 14 years ago
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YAY Maris you are back!

Ok, this is my fave of this mixed up man in loved with mixed up bitterness:

Regrets and bitterness eased into desire and quest

A mixture of contrast; harsh and honey

A Woman to avoid yet love forever

As usual, you are awesome!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Maris di!!!!!!🤗
How are you?😊 Long time..
First off, this was just AMAZING!!!! 👏
Every single word explained sooo much!!
I bet we all can tell you put a lot of hard work into this!!!👍🏼
You always do a wonderful job in your poetry!!!

For you!!!!!
Thanks for the pm!!!

Take care


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: shilparoxx

Maris di!!!!!!🤗
How are you?😊 Long time..
First off, this was just AMAZING!!!! 👏
Every single word explained sooo much!!
I bet we all can tell you put a lot of hard work into this!!!👍🏼
You always do a wonderful job in your poetry!!!

For you!!!!!
Thanks for the pm!!!

Take care


Shilpa yes a very long time indeed. How are you? thanz for liking and appreciating my poem. Do visit this forum often or the AB AT.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: momma1128

YAY Maris you are back!


Ok, this is my fave of this mixed up man in loved with mixed up bitterness:

Regrets and bitterness eased into desire and quest

A mixture of contrast; harsh and honey

A Woman to avoid yet love forever

As usual, you are awesome!!!

Thanz Anu. Its just the contrast that was so obvious and all lines came tumbling out. Only regret is there needs to be more poetic syntax and rhyming, which if i start doing so, will affect the meaning i intended to convey.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Maris - superb job. And so happy that you are back with a something as beautifully written as this.

Lines that Anu pointed out above are also my favorite along with this one:

Love to hate her but hate to love her.


Thank you for taking out your time in writing this. It's brilliant!👏
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: maris08

Shilpa yes a very long time indeed. How are you? thanz for liking and appreciating my poem. Do visit this forum often or the AB AT.


I'm great thanks and you😊
Your very welcome di
Yes, I try to come as often as I can :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Maris - a wonderful poem which brings out the shavanistic side of ASR 👍🏼
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Posted: 14 years ago
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faaabulous poem maris 👏
loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! im a big fan of ur poetry...
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Originally posted by: NaDzGirl

faaabulous poem maris 👏

loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! im a big fan of ur poetry...

Thank you Nadz😳😳😳😳😳. I just dabble with some words thats all. Sometimes it comes out well, most other times well...

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