||DMG/AR OS|| With Venom In Our Hearts - Page 3

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Posted: 15 years ago
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God....that was some writing! I totally loved the metaphor you used for "Snake" and "Slither"....go for some weird reason...I couldn't see anything wrong or evil in Armaan...it was like...it made me brainstorm to start with but never once feel pity. Must say...the title is a perfect fit!

The concluding lines were phenomenal...Armaan's Cheshire cat smile fading away as the dark of death drops curtains to her life. I really loved the backdrop of this gypsy thing! And the contrast of this gradual killer that Armaan himself handed to her...it takes a brilliant mind to make such subtle difference show clearly!

I believe I need not conclude it with" I loved it or it was awesome"....for a writer like you knows how to read in between lines. Write more...yup...that should be high on your agenda and PM me possibly if you can!

Also the little "soliloquy" as you say lol....on DMG left a reminiscent of the good times...the once upon a time stress buster that concluded into a source of stress! Enough with the blabbering...have a good one!


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Posted: 15 years ago
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@Aruuuuuu – That particular Avi you were talking about is deleted by tinypic :(

@ repercussion – Hey there, thank you for dropping by and leaving your wonderful comment, which left me smiling for a long time! I love the way you said 'I couldn't see anything wrong or evil in Armaan' – makes feel happy in a way because, my intention wasn't to make him look like the devil and Riddhima the pitiful other half (am I making any sense🤔), so thank you! :)

The 'soliloquy' was a nostalgic moment for me lol I kind of had a love hate relationship with DMG, at one point I completely stopped watching and then when the news of AR re-union came around I decided to check out few episode here and there.

As for your request, I'll ponder on it 😆 and if I come up with a plot worthy of the reader's time and appreciation, I'll definitely pen it down.

No worries about blabbering, I love reading them especially the likes of yours ;)

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: khahani

@Aruuuuuu ' That particular Avi you were talking about is deleted by tinypic :(

@ repercussion ' Hey there, thank you for dropping by and leaving your wonderful comment, which left me smiling for a long time! I love the way you said 'I couldn't see anything wrong or evil in Armaan' ' makes feel happy in a way because, my intention wasn't to make him look like the devil and Riddhima the pitiful other half (am I making any sense🤔), so thank you! :)

Hey there! For starters...it was a pleasure to read this piece of your muse...it takes you from activating your dead cells to sighing in wonder if the writer should actually consider publishing her work! Furthermore, Like I said in the last comment...It takes a great writer to make such subtle strokes crystal clear in a story...There was just about nothing in the story that shows a point-of-view or opinion...except for Hate Riddhima Modi lol (which I completely understand and empathize with...months after it's all wrapped up and under the bed) and Armaan being her " Personal Satan" was incredibly satiating!

The 'soliloquy' was a nostalgic moment for me lol I kind of had a love hate relationship with DMG, at one point I completely stopped watching and then when the news of AR re-union came around I decided to check out few episode here and there.

Yup...same story....Nostalgia evokes from the breath of a "cheery, happy-go-lucky" show set in a medical back-drop which was crushed to fine pieces by the end...following suit with Sanjeevani! But then...it's been all packed up and done with...so I guess I would leave the grave-digging for Hamlet!😛

As for your request, I'll ponder on it 😆 and if I come up with a plot worthy of the reader's time and appreciation, I'll definitely pen it down. The plot behind this one-shot is so unusual yet so lost under the wraps to think of it...that I'd bow down in front of Your Majesty for bringing it across the table...and if it takes anything, anything for you to bring back just as ground-breaking a piece next time...I'd wait eagerly!

No worries about blabbering, I love reading them especially the likes of yours ;) Awwww...now that's an honor undeserved...but I'd keep it just in case lol! I hope I'd get to read more from you...hell ya...YOU are a perfectly fine writer in the making..so exercise the tools under ur belt already! Have a great day!

Cheers,

Moi!😊

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