||Aaye Ho Meri Zindagi Mein|| Premeer One Shot

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Yes this is another one shot. Purely fluff based, there's a little emotion in it, but it's not all that great!😆 So in this one shot, we're going to say that Gaurav's mom didn't grow a conscience so she didn't tell Prem that he wasn't going to die, so keep in mind that he still thinks he has a hole in the heart! 😔 I think it'll work better! 😊


I've dedicated it to Shifali and Ravjot, because those two are always encouraging me, despite me thinking my work is total crap, that doesn't mean any of my other friends are any less, and so this one is also dedicated to, Maddy, Avi, Shabo, Kimz, Radz, Bhav, and Rinkz (I miss you!😃)


Enjoy:

Heer couldn't believe her eyes when she saw Prem walk in through the front door. She just assumed that like all her prior dreams this too was just a figment of her imagination. She closed her eyes desperate to get his face out of her head.


"Heer," Her eyes opened wide when he called out to her. "Main wapas aagaya," She stood slowly not breaking eye contact from his tear stained eyes.


Aaye ho meri zindagi mein tum bahar banke

Mere dil mein yoon hi rehna tum pyar pyar banke

He dropped his bag and walked straight towards her. He stood before her, unable to believe that he had taken this step, but his heart stopped him he couldn't stand to leave her alone again for anything in the world, but he knew ultimately it would be inevitable.


Ankhon mein tum baase ho sapne hazar banke
Mere dil mein yoon hi rehna tum pyar pyar banke

Without uttering a single word he took her hand and led her to the guest room, where they both sat on the balcony. His arm wrapped around her shoulder sheltering her from everything.


"Mujhe pata tha," Heer whispers, her head on his shoulder.


"Kya?" Prem whispers back.


"I knew you'd come back," Heer sighs and he could hear the smile in her voice. "My love wouldn't let you go,"


"I couldn't leave you," Prem smiles as he takes her hand and leads her back to their bed, sitting against the headboard. "But it doesn't matter, kabhi na kabhi to main tumhe chor ke hi jaonga,"


Heer turns and puts her hand over his mouth. "Don't say that anymore. Mujhe woh nahin suna,"


"You'll have to hear it Heer," Prem sighs. "I'm not going to be here with you forever,"


"You're here now!" Heer argues. "Mujhe aur kuch nahin chaiye," She puts her arms around his waist and hugs him. "Aaj ke baad aisi baat nahin karna,"


The night fades out with them content with being in each other's arms.


~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~


The light rays hit Heer's eyes and she lets her lids flutter open, before she turns, she can feel a heartbeat other than her own. Cursiously she turns and sees her right hand on Prem's chest, right over his heart. She smiles as she realizes he's back where he belongs. With HER. She slowly gets out of bed without him waking up and gets ready for the day. When she comes out, she is dressed in a light pink saree with white embroidery on the borders. She thought this was the first moment where she had HER Prem with her. It called for something special. Heer quickly put on her matching chandelier earrings and adorned her hands with choori's but then as she was about to pinch her sindoor. A hand came out from behind her and she looked up to see Prem in his white kurta smiling at her through the mirror. She shut her eyes as she felt his hand put the sindoor in her maang.


Meri maang yoon hi bharna taare hazar banke
Aaye ho meri zindagi mein tum bahar banke
Mere dil mein yoon hi rehna tum pyar pyar banke

"Prem. You're awake?" Heer smiles at his reflection.


"Your choori woke me," He puts his hand on her bangles and smiles back at her.


"Sorry," Heer smile sheepishly. "Waise, ab tum jao and get ready."


Prem shakes his head.


"Kya?" Heer asks.


"Heer, I think I made the wrong decision yesterday," Prem sighs as he turns around.


Heer gets up and makes him face her. "You know what? If you were going to be having second thoughts about this, maybe you shouldn't have come back." Heer walks out of their room.


Prem sighs. "Why do I always say the wrong thing at the wrong time?"


~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~


Heer starts fuming in the kitchen. "Agar usse rehna nahin tha, to wapas kyun aaya? Nahin nahin Heer, I shouldn't think like that." She covers the halwa on the stove. "I'm just glad he's back."


Slyly Prem comes in behind her and hugs her from behind. "I know you're glad."


Heer makes a face and pushes him away.


Agar mein jo rooth jao to tum mujhe manana
Thama hai haath mera phir umar bhar nibhana
"Heer," Prem sighs and tries to hug her.

"Prem, no." Heer turns and frowns. "Don't be all romantic with me. Aisi baatein karto ho, jo main suna nahin chahti!"

"Chup," Prem takes his left hand and covers her mouth. "Tum bahot bolti hoon."

"Hmphgfg" She mumbles.

He takes his hand away. "What?"

"Pata hain." Heer says with attitude.

"I've got some good news," Prem smiles.

"Nothing is good news, unless you tell me that you're staying with me forever," Heer shakes her head.

Prem slowly comes to her ear and whispers, "That's what I want to tell you,"

"Kya?"

Prem nods. "Do you remember when we went to the hospital that one day after you felt sick?" Heer nods. "And I wanted to donate my blood but phir last minute par mujhe yaad aaya tha woh dil mein ched honewali baat, so I told the doctor but he took my blood anyways to test it,"

"AND?" Heer demands.

Prem shakes his head. "I don't have any ailment,"

Heer's face breaks out in a smile and the tears start rimming at her eyes. "I—I can't—"

Prem takes her in his arms again. "I know—it's unbelievable, but he called my cell just after you left,"

Heer nods in his chest and lets her tears over pour.

Mujhe chod ke na jana waade hazar karke
Aaye ho meri zindagi mein tum bahar banke
Mere dil mein yoon hi rehna tum pyar pyar banke


Prem lets go of Heer and takes her hands in his. "I love you,"

Heer shies away and blushes. "I love you too,"

Prem puts his hands around her again and sighed. This was it. They were together, just like they were always meant to be. Nothing would tear him away. Their love would always hold them together. Their LOVE was Prem and Heer.

Ankhon mein tum baase ho sapne hazar banke
Mere dil mein yoon hi rehna tum pyar pyar banke


What did you guys think? *bites lip* I know you all think I'm trying to be humble or trying to fish for compliments, but this time I've told Ravs before I even wrote it, that it wouldn't be good, so she better vouch for me! I just wish it was better since I dedicated it to all my friends! 😳


Love you all loads,


Meera😳

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Posted: 16 years ago
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yay!! finally!! my spot!
unreserved**
srry it took so long..had to go catch my dog..again..
anyways...

*jaw dropped open...ouch starting to hurt* closes it slowly...Dedicated to moi??? Shockers???😳 yay!! I made it in the friends list..i thought i had scared u away there for a second lol.

Uff...i waited so much for this one-shot lol...and no its not pointless. I am actually in shock that u think that way😲...told u to NOT be humble *grumble...and we're back to the issue of no-one listening to me..fine be that way lmao! Anyways, getting back to the shot...what can i say i'm speechless! This had so much emotion in it..sad and a funny one hehe 😆*sniff..still recovering.

And the song..i hadn't heard it for such a LONG time now! Erhm..the first heartbreak moment: "But it doesn't matter, kabhi na kabhi to main tumhe chor ke hi jaonga," 2nd when he says he has to leave someday..NOOOOO!!!!!!! stupid prem, he never realisez what is good for him...glad he did here later on though. *cough* better late then never! *cough*

The laughing moment: "Chup," Prem takes his left hand and covers her mouth. "Tum bahot bolti hoon." And heer's classic response: "Hmphgfg" haha...i dunno why that was so funny..

But coming back from insanity...are u kidding me? this was awesome!! I so wish the prem in the serial had brains like this one! So logical..*hmp why can't the serial people EVER use logic to solve their problems..oh I know, everytime there is a problem... u should write a one-shot like this one and send it to the creatives (erhm if u can call them that lol)

Very well written!!! made my day!! *hugs! thanks Meera! wuv u!!!!!! -blahblah🤗
Edited by urworstnitemare - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanks Avi, hope you like it! 😃😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Awww!! Meeru!! It was not bad AT ALL!!!

I loved, loved, loved it!!!!! Just like all ur one-shots and song fics and FFs, this one was awesome!!!

I liked how u first used the "hole-in-the-heart" track, and eventually led it to a positive note!! It was really sweet!! and I loved the dialogues!!

So never say that ur work is crap cuz its really not!!! ok? lolz......*hugs*

Luv,
Gari <33333333
Posted: 16 years ago
#5
THAT WAS NOT CRAP! Do you want me to get out the cheese grater again? *threatening muh*

Such a sweet shot, I really liked it, the best part was Heer waking up in Prem's arms. *hides face, blushing* I really wanted to see that in the show, like really so thanks a TON for writing it! And you wrote it better then I bet what the show could have churned out!

I have to tell you though, at the part "he led her into the guest room" I was like PHILONGI but then they sat at the balcony. Oh well, maybe another time! *wink*

*waves cheese grater threatingly*

--shabz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Meera...erm...it is okay...this personally isn't one of your best writing peices...*hides face*
When I first saw the starting, I thought it would have been better, and more...'wind and PH' dialouges...which you did.👏👏 I loved that!
And then, the morning and everything...I kinda felt...it lost the Meera touch afterwards, and everything started to fade away😭 Those moments...and everything!😭
The ending was...kinda...not justified...
This one-shot is good...but it could have been better😳
And secondly, thanks for dedicating it to US...😳🤗
Oye, this reminded me, remember the time I told you that I needed a sequel to the Tujhe Yaad...one-shot? I think this is it!😉
Nice Meer👏😳
~Shifs
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Posted: 16 years ago
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=)
You're work is not crap. So shh!! And thanks for dedicating it. You didn't have to =) Of course I'll encourage you! You're a very talented little child =)
I thought it was sweet =) Ooh and I love the song too! After you told me about it, I couldn't stop thinking about it and got it stuck in my head😆 *runs to watch Raja Hindustani*
-Agent Ravs
Edited by -Ravjot- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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i think dis would be more logical and something like dis shuld hv happened very gud try
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ah I'll comment back later, but I've got to say...Thanks a TON Shifu!!!🤗 for being soooo honest!!!!
Posted: 16 years ago
#10
^^ Thanks Shifali. Now she's going to be after my skin to find something wrong in every stinking thing she writes.

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