*ShaKhi FF * :: Journey towards us # epilogue pg 60 * completed* - Page 14

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Gayatri9

So AAsthaa aa gayi huh.....

Well Idk should i say this or not but while reading when I read'Gayatri' Idk why but for a sec mujhe laga my name is included then yaad aaya

yeh toh shaurya ki chachi hai...

LOL

Khud pe hi hasi aa rahi hai abb toh mujhe............

Are koi nahi di samajh lo aap hi ho.

But I don't think you want to be his chachi , right?

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: somewhereover

Who is the woman she bumped into? His mom or Shagun.

Also loved the addition of the books in the last chapter and this one. Nice to see Anokhi find solace in the library :)

look forward to the next update!

I don't know who is that woman😳

Just wait and watch.

Thank you

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Guneet80

Hey I read the first three chapters and I must say the plotline is very interesting.

Plus Anokhi and Shaurya seem very much in character so kudos for that! Whatever they did didn't feel outlandish for their characters so I'm so happy you could maintain the characters integrity.


One thing I would like to say, that make use of passive voice a bit more or try using the POV format. That makes reading more interesting.

Thank you so much ma'am for your feedback. All this motivates me a lot. I am quite new in writing and this helps a lot. I will try to improvise as much possible.

Stay tuned for more

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: micky11

Nice story coming up

Awesome writing

Continue

Thank you so much. Will do continue soon

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: RaarA

Are koi nahi di samajh lo aap hi ho.

But I don't think you want to be his chachi , right?

No....

Meri age toh Shaurya ki shown age se bhi kam hai.

Uski chachi kyu banu?

And chachi banne ke liye shaadi karni padegi,jiska mera haal filhaal koi plan nahi hai.....

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Gayatri9

No....

Meri age toh Shaurya ki shown age se bhi kam hai.

Uski chachi kyu banu?

And chachi banne ke liye shaadi karni padegi,jiska mera haal filhaal koi plan nahi hai.....

Are Di shaadi ka plan bana do. Maybe apko Shaurya mil jaye jeevansathi. Com pe. 😁😁😁

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: 7APK

Awesome 👏👏👏👏

Thank you so much 😊😊❤️

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Rhea_m

Amazing update 👍

Thank you friend

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: RaarA

Thank you so much ma'am for your feedback. All this motivates me a lot. I am quite new in writing and this helps a lot. I will try to improvise as much possible.

Stay tuned for more


Hey, you can call me Guneet! You are new to writing? Wow I really couldn't guess. You write so well specially it takes so much effort to flesh out a good storyline, you did really well in that respect.


Early waiting for more!

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Guneet80


Hey, you can call me Guneet! You are new to writing? Wow I really couldn't guess. You write so well specially it takes so much effort to flesh out a good storyline, you did really well in that respect.


Early waiting for more!

Yes I am quite new. This is my second story. I am still learning to write. Thank you Guneet for your suggestions.

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