Originally posted by: Sujz
Heya!
Finally I am here. I don't know to make poetic comments, I am very bland with my views so here you go!.
- Your reviews are always the best. Always. ❤️
The opening of the story was just magnificent, I loved it. So different and intriguing and I guess that play part is a Pakistani Drama mention?
- Hello Yakeen Ka Safar reference. Yes you guessed it right. 😆
The first encounter of Aniruddh and Bondita (not really one) was written really nicely I loved it!
- Thank you I enjoyed writing it too. 🤗
I like the additions to the Roy Chowdhary family which are pleasantly positive and heart warming, a female figure which was always missing in the family very well incorporated, Kudos. Bondita's concern and Chayanika's affection was very well put.
- She's an OC who's close to my heart. Thank you for loving her. ❤️
That Rolls Royce mention really took me back to time when it was a thing😆
Bondita an orphan, is really interesting considering Aniruddh who is from a well packed family and I guess her and Chayanika's bonding will kick off the increased interactions of Rudhita.
- Dekhte hai. 😛
Chandra Mahal sounds so fascinating, I am imagining a huge ass mansion with so many mirrors, glassworks, just so luscious, rich and magnificent🤪I am a sucker for such ancient palaces and places and always wish to be there once and feel like I am a princess there, thus such names and palaces/mansions gives me another kind of feel and vibes.
- That's how I imagined Chandra Mahal too, with Stained Glass Windows, Jalsaghar, Luscious Rich Garden, etc.
So Chayanika is Aniruddh's Kakiya I guess!? Is Kakiya something like a Kaki? I have never heard that word before. Som the addabaaz😆 nice one there. I can never imagine an addabaaz Som in the show though, he is very bitter about every damn thing.
- Kakiya is a fancy Bengali word for Kaki only. In my story Som is an addabaaz, also please imagine old Som only not the new one.
The narrated story highly reminded me of the OG Aniruddh and Bondita on the night of there wedding, but the way you put it, was much ahead of where Bondita was and it sent spine down my chills as we speak. Like, the thought of where she would have been terrifies me and the fact that Bondita herself is telling it here is just....wonderful Brit.👏
- The Dassyu Raja story was inspired by Barrister Babu only. I thought it would be nice to incorporate bits of the original story with my own twist here. 😆
"In the half light and half shadow on his visage, with his stubble well in place due to long travel and mussed up hair.... Aniruddh looked nothing less than the protagonist of her story."
-We have witnessed such an Aniruddh Roy Chowdhary already, if you know you know.
- I know what you mean. 😉
Aniruddh-Chayanika bond is just adorable.
Well the description over Aniruddh's gaze on Bondita, manages to take my breath away almost every time. ☺️Gosh.
- Hello intense gaze. 😎
The whole vibe of Bondita's character in itself is so powerful yet graceful. I like it.
- Awww thank you. I thought I've subdued her character too much. 🤔
Accha bacchu, pehle din se tu ghoorta jaa raha hai, ab bhootni huh? Typical ARC, in the show zimmedari, in the story bhootni. Yeh nahi sudhrega!😈
- That's ARC for you. Ladka kabhi nahi sudhrega. 😆
Oh yeahhh Trilu Kaka is there!!He is the damn king of Rudhita's story.
- Kaka have to be present in my story too. He's my favourite. ❤️
This is such a good story Brit. It has got a vibe on its own and just transfers me into another world altogether. The limited but intense interactions (not really interactions) between Aniruddh and Bondita has got a certain charm. However, I would like to suggest some things even though at the end of the day its all on you as creativity got no rules, you can craft your art in any way you like. These are just some things I would prefer as a reader.
- Sure go ahead.
Firstly, I would like if the updates get a little bit longer. Not certainly because I am greedy of reading more (I am but that's not the main reason). Most of the times the endings look a little bit abrupt. And one thing is, the flow from a chapter to another chapter, I would prefer a bit more smooth flow of chapters, or maybe it feels a bit rough because of the shortness of the chapters. and one thing, which is completely your decision but as a reader-writer I feel increases the flow of the story is;
Yeah sure I understand what you mean, but it's my first multichaptered fic ever and I'm confused as how to get the story rolling so they are abrupt. I'm an One Shot writer you know? 😵
Okay for example;
Chayanika laughed, "Achha... Fikar ho rahi hai apni budhi maa ki? Toh chalo chhodke aao mujhe...", she added good naturedly.
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In the car...
Instead of adding the star sign and directly saying in the car, you could have just went on with Bondita being star struck about being in a rolls royce which would feel much smoother and let it go to the audience to get the fact that they're in a car and Kakiya let Bondu drop her.
- Haan sure, I got your point. I'll keep them in mind. Thank you.
Well, these are just my opinion as a reader. For sure its subjective and changes according to person and I just listed it out as you wanted to know my views.
- And I'm so glad that you did. Thank you so much Sujz. ❤️🤗
But Broooo, you're just such a magnificent and beautiful writer, this is something I have never read on Rudhita, so unique, so profound and the factor of aestheticism in your writing, the fancy words you use make your art just out of the world!
- Says the Queen of writing fanfics. Coming from you this is huge for me Sujz. Thank you.
I am waiting for the next update, and sweetheart, I am so sorry for making you wait to give this review you've been asking since ever! So So Sorry.🥺
- Arey it's okay. I know that you have a life outside India Forums too and I know that you had your own solid reason for making me wait. But girl you did make it worth the wait with the best review that I've received. EVER.
Loads of Hugs and Kisses,
-Sujz!🤗
- Teddy bear hugs and kisses back and the GIF is sooooooooooooo adorable. Thank you for the comment❤️🤗
Anupamaa
