Be Mine ff P8 on PG25 updated 15th june - Page 23

part 8 - pg 25 

Finale  😒 Sad to hear you're moving on 

😊 Great choice of place for a seduction scene in the garden patch ! 

Props for creativity 👍🏼 . In this scene there's  always scope to make this scene more hotter.

And i want to make a defence for Ra 

Didn't Dri do the exact same thing that Ra did in the swimming pool. 

He only carried it on.  So why does she only have the right to claim being vulnerable.

Can't guys also be vulnerable or get hurt.

Plus she also told him not to touch her then promptly went and kissed him. She did tease him...

No need to comment on my every reply.

I marathoned all the parts in one shot.  Therfore my replies are long. 

Verdict : 

Overall story was very interesting. 👏

My fav scenes were the moonlight one and Dri's fiery retort to Ra when he came back.

I feel that your strength is in writing good romantic scenes for a couple's intimate moments.

If u ever write again do make them more passionate. It doesn't have to be explicit or racy.

They could be touching like today's episode bathtub scene.

But if u make them more passionate we'll enjoy reading it that much more.  And another description besides eye lock. 

 See you around 🤗

Please update soon

It is interesting

Can I post your ff's on wattpad. Readers of wattpad want to read these ff's there also 

Why no more updates?? Its awesome plz plz plz do continue it. Its my fav. Plz plz plz plz plz plz continue.