Bravery In Loss: A Poem - Page 2

proteeti

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Posted: 6 years ago

#11

That was one amazing poem! BRILLIANT! <3

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MsChanadlerBong

@MsChanadlerBong

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Posted: 6 years ago

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I don like you. I don like your poems. They are too good. What the hell do you do? Your poems are such brilliant pieces. What do you eat before writing them? The emotions portrayal, the words and the flow is beautifully blended in. The title itself gives the chill of a the emotion filled ride ahead. The way you showed Kashi's pain is amazing.

You are a great poet Ramya! You should start publishing them. 😉 Trust me, crore meh bikne hai saree k saree.

Now keep writing such poems, all your amazing attempts to make us cry, which I would have done if the poem was a stanza longer.

Sam

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Anu

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Posted: 6 years ago

#13

This poem is so true and touching to the heart that it hurts to think of KashiBai :) <3

Truly, she does fascinate me more than ever now after this! The comparisons you drew in and each and every emotion that you brought out (specially when she's around her Rau) really, gave a goosebumps-ish feeling!

Thank you so so much for writing this and immortalising her !

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ayushimehra

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Posted: 6 years ago

#14

its Amazing,👏👏

you describe Kashi bai inner feelings, inner pain,

its writer beauty, reading this feel comes, Kashi feeling pain now, clap for you,👏

i recalled this song, which also express Kashi pain,

Neela aasmaan so gaya
Neela aasmaan so gaya ho
Neela aasmaan so gaya

Aansuon mein chaand dooba raat murjhaayi
Zindagi mein door tak phaili hai tanhaayi
Jo guzre ham pe woh kam hai
Tumhaare gham ka mausam hai
Neela aasmaan so gaya -2

Ho, yaad ki waadi mein goonje beete afsaane
Yaad ki waadi mein goonje beete afsaane
Hamsafar jo kal the ab thehre woh begaane
Mohabbat aaj pyaasi hai
Badi gehri udaasi hai
Neela aasmaan so gaya ho
Neela aasmaan so gaya

Neela aasmaan so gaya -3

Edited by ayushimehra - 6 years ago

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Mahi

@Mannmohanaa

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Posted: 6 years ago

#15

Sorry about the late reply, your Highness!😆

But this was awesome once again! Probably a little teeny meeny less brilliant than the previous one but this did have pain, agony and frustration!

My favourite line : the love that empowers does weaken. So true! Really very true and the entire crux of all heartbreaks.

You're a magician who charms with words <33

So sorry again. The loss was all mine, I stayed away from such a beautiful piece 😳

Muahhh. <3

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