OS - ADni marriage Series - The Treacherous Heart

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He tossed & turned restlessly. He had initially exulted in his twin triumph. Defeating the wily Indrani by whisking off her daughter right under her nose & then have Chandni under his complete control.

He no longer had to budget for the mandatory distance or society defined boundaries. This was Allahabad not London. Here the husband is purported to have absolute right over his wife. What happened within the confines of the four walls between a husband & wife is rarely questioned. He could do as he please. Chandni had feared the horror of forced intimacy. He would never subject her to that. He may hate her but he was still human. But his thirst for revenge was yet to be quenched. His first goal to antagonize her family & separate her from their protection had been achieved. But his blood lust ran unchecked. He had to draw blood. Hence he had sunk to plain pettiness & abuse.

He knew her legs were already hurt but he chose to ignore her discomfort, her pain. Had she not made him walk on glass shards. She had drawn first blood 16 years back & now it was his turn. Suffer she will & he would rejoice at her pain, watch her slow destruction in his hands.

Then why did he feel restless. She had not spoken a word since he had left her to her misery & commandeered the bed. But sleep remained elusive. Though he pretended to sleep every few minutes he kept stealing glimpses of her. Despite his mind's firm command his eyes seemed to have a mind of its own... Or may be it obeyed the diktats of the heart rather than the mind. He felt himself reluctantly drift off & an uneasy slumber crept over him.

He woke up with a start. His throat was parched & he longed for water. He got down from the bed & his eyes collided with the figure at the center of the room.

Damn he had almost forgotten her presence. Something did not look right. There were still remnants of sleep clinging to him & hence both his vision & thinking were hazy. He suddenly noticed her sway. He almost ran to hold her before she crashed.

She was shivering violently her lehenga poor protection against the bitterly cold night. His foot felt wet. He confusedly looked down to discover dark stains on the light rose petals.

Blood... Hers...

Breath left him in a whoosh. He recollected her leg being injured in that melee at the wedding. His heart raced ahead. Her eyes were closed. He realized she was hovering in between consciousness & unconsciousness.

Not aware but not completely oblivious either.

His eyes yet again were drawn to her legs & his vision was strangely hazy. Must be sleep he concluded till the wetness on his cheeks ruthlessly dispelled that conclusion.

He was crying... For her... At her pain...

He was furious. He wanted to fling her away. Wanted to hurt himself badly. Wanted to strangle her. Wanted to sweep her into his arms. He was no longer making sense even to himself.

Remember Cheeko your fire of revenge will burn not just Chandni but devour you as well...

His nani's words reverberated in his ears.

His eyes were drawn to her face. There was tear tracks on her cheeks. Her kajal was smudged. Her hair slightly unkempy but she still managed to look beautiful. Her beauty hurt him. He wanted to hurt someone. Her. Himself. Anyone.

He took in a ragged breath & before he could change his mind carried her over to the bed & laid her carefully as if she were a fragile doll which would easily break.

I thought you were fragile like glass but turns out you are hard like stone...

Again memories of words spoken in the past.

He stared at her for a long time & let out a sigh.

He stepped into the bathroom to come out with the First Aid kit. He started to work on her wound. He cleaned & bandaged it. Since she was still shivering violently he reduced the temperature of the air conditioner & covered her with a thick blanket.

He almost smiled watching her cuddle & burrow into the warmth of the blanket. Now that she had monopolized his bed he did not feel like sleeping on it. He might be affected by her pain but he had still not thawed enough to be comfortable with her nearness.

He sat down on the chair near the bed & continued to stare at her sleep. Strangely he no longer felt restless. Sleep embraced him.

Thus ended Day 1 of Advay & Chandni as husband & wife. Close yet divided by a gulf of misunderstanding. Apart from each other but strangely entwined together by a twisted fate & shared pain.

Time will tell where their paths will lead but for now they slept peacefully, unconsciously each drawing strength from the other.

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This will be an ongoing series which glimpses into the life of Mrs & Mr Raizada 😆 Can be read as stand alone but would be more effective if the series is read in sequence 😳

Do share ur comments & feedback 😃
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Nice OS - loved reading it.
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Originally posted by: hailly

Amazing os, loved it.



Thanks 😊
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Originally posted by: PSharada

Nice OS - loved reading it.



Thanks 😊
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Wow ...this is perfect... thanks Anu...I am someone who has been looking forward to this husband wife dynamics ...so each day i will get to re-live things twice :D great...


Advay today didnt seem anything remotely human... he was brutal... I dont know how he and makers forgot she was in pain...and the way he forced her to wakeup infront of nani...my heart broke ...not coz i felt bad for chandni ...she is not touching my heart at all with her very un relatable character ... heart broke because I am not falling in love with this Advay...he is not like pratham ...or the one you explained in this OS... noo...he just went and slept off... not peeking like you wrote ...not distraughted like last time :( he doesnt love her ... when you hurt someone who you love and who loves you back, a lot of then are eventually forgivable ... but to hurt someone you hate ... you are just a petty person...

In all this, only hope is that makers keep changing things over night ... so maybe they will soon show some compassion
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Originally posted by: mira

Wow ...this is perfect... thanks Anu...I am someone who has been looking forward to this husband wife dynamics ...so each day i will get to re-live things twice :D great...


Advay today didnt seem anything remotely human... he was brutal... I dont know how he and makers forgot she was in pain...and the way he forced her to wakeup infront of nani...my heart broke ...not coz i felt bad for chandni ...she is not touching my heart at all with her very un relatable character ... heart broke because I am not falling in love with this Advay...he is not like pratham ...or the one you explained in this OS... noo...he just went and slept off... not peeking like you wrote ...not distraughted like last time :( he doesnt love her ... when you hurt someone who you love and who loves you back, a lot of then are eventually forgivable ... but to hurt someone you hate ... you are just a petty person...

In all this, only hope is that makers keep changing things over night ... so maybe they will soon show some compassion



Thanks Mira. Its clear that I am not enjoying the show in its current version. So rather than ranting over it I ve decided to pour all my pent up feelings into writing. So each week I am going to pick up a crucial scene & write my version of how I would ve liked to see it on screen. Today was 1 such scene. After that dragging wedding fiasco (I still dont understand y STAR showed all those promos when v finally got this) i was so so looking fwd to this. The 1st night that Advay & Chandni spend & husband & wife. I wanted the writers to capture their turmoil, their struggle, their tears, their pain.

I am not saying Evil doesnt exist in the world. I am not saying domestic abuse is a myth. Just that considering Dev & Chandni's history I wanted to see Advay struggling with his feelings. 1 moment he hates her & another he feels her pain as his own. I wanted to see his moral dilemma. I wanted to see the struggle between love & hate. But today I got nothing. Its not helping that I am not happy with Barun's acting this week. I felt Rupesh (PP) acted better than him this week
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Wow..beautiful OS
Loved it!
Beautifully u've describe the situation & emotion.👏👏

Chandni leg's were hurt(imp)..this is what CV forgot 2/3 times..I would loved it more..if they would have shown her pain! The way u hve captured it..something like this or more!
Anyway but I loved today's episode! But also there were things missing.

well I had seen one post were conv of Atif sir & Harneet mam on Twitter was posted like they said "Abhi to party shuru hui hai"..
Hope something interesting will come & I also hope they will not miss thing's like this...which hve potential to make dark story more interesting!

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Originally posted by: Fa13

Wow..beautiful OS

Loved it!
Beautifully u've describe the situation & emotion.👏👏

Chandni leg's were hurt(imp)..this is what CV forgot 2/3 times..I would loved it more..if they would have shown her pain! The way u hve captured it..something like this or more!
Anyway but I loved today's episode! But also there were things missing.

well I had seen one post were conv of Atif sir & Harneet mam on Twitter was posted like they said "Abhi to party shuru hui hai"..
Hope something interesting will come & I also hope they will not miss thing's like this...which hve potential to make dark story more interesting!

I was so looking forward to this hate marriage track because I love angst but today the Cvs wasted a wonderful opportunity 😭 glad you liked the os
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Beautifully penned...was hoping something on this lines today but got brutal Advay

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