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Anuradha

@federized2210

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#31

First thing first..

I read the sentence "He felt so helpless, he felt so important"...and I re-read it ...THRICE!

And finally it hit me...it wasn't 'important', it was 'impotent' 🤣🤣

By the way Sups, your PM was more like a threat...

"Watch reporters, and if u don't then remove me from your list.."🤣

Yaar logo ko tang karna aadat hain tera!!!🤣

Anyway, before u throw invisible daggers at me, let me write a genuine review 😆😆

Meko achha lga, which is rare, as u know 😉

Meko zyada fark nhi pada that u killed Ananya, coz Kabir is still alive (The sadist that I am😆)

But really, when u finally get ur lazy ass off ur bed and do something productive, it actually comes out brilliantly (Genuine praise tha👏)

So, meri ex-hubby (mark the 'ex'), please, aap se humble request hain, do write more such KaYa-licious stuff😳

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Priya_KABHI

@PriyaKABHI

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#32

Thanks for PM.😊

It was Amazing OS.😊

The Whole OS was so nicely explained.😊

Please write like this.😊

PriyaCherry.

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Aru

@Aru_A

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#33

This was...beautiful.
Honestly, there is so much I want to say about this, but it really did sway me, so I can't right now.maybe some other time.
This was really beautiful. Don't underestimate this piece of yours.

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Bhavit Kapoor

@bawaswift

Stunner

Posted: 10 years ago

#34

Very beautiful OS,, but with a sad note it ended...

I cud not see Ananya meeting this fate.. But loved how Kabir is torn apart with this one shot.. 😳

KaYa are so Awesome that reading even this sad one made me landing in their land..

Thanks !

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TeekhiMishti

@TeekhiMishti

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 10 years ago

#35

first page pe res kiya tha 🤣 am sorry...was outta home...ab res edit karne ka mood nahi 😛 so here comes 😆

always glad to see co-sadists who are haath dhoke tule hue on killing/hurting the female lead and making the ml suffer🤣 angst is what makes a story 🤣

anyways...tu chahe jitni bhi badi kamini and sadist ho...likh dhang ka leti hai 😆 loved the way you described everything...even without much words the os had lots of emotions running wild and conveyed everything perfectly. Loved the ending the most...him wanting to tell her she was wrong and she was gone. rhyming much? 😆

good that you started writing here...mujhe bhi sadism mei saath mil jayega 🤣

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Crazy! :P

@AdorableTrouble

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#36

Mar ja kutti kameeni daayan.

Likh likh k tragedy hi likh tu

Ekta Kapoor ki judwa behen saali

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supriya.ipkknd

@supriya.ipkknd

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: AdorableTrouble
Mar ja kutti kameeni daayan.
Likh likh k tragedy hi likh tu
Ekta Kapoor ki judwa behen saali

🤣

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farz_parachute

@farz_parachute

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#38

The flashbacks :'(

So beautifully written! The end...I'm glad she at least had a smile in her face. Kabir...poor baby.

Like someone before mentioned...you should definitely write a continuation. Of how Kabir reminisce, or anything!

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Aru

@Aru_A

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: Aru_A
This was...beautiful.
Honestly, there is so much I want to say about this, but it really did sway me, so I can't right now.maybe some other time.
This was really beautiful. Don't underestimate this piece of yours.

I couldn't make out that I was shattered or strong...

it was just a lone tear...

I mean...

the bunch of optimists that this place is full of, I wonder if anybody was as shocked as I was when I saw that evil goon shooting Ananya and restraining Kabir.

I was shaken.

And when I came to the forum, everybody was absolutely normal.

And then, I came across your piece...

One word for the title, and a powerful impact right there-Gone.

I felt a certain pull to read it.

And when I did, I was speechless.

I had never spared even a millisecond to think about someone dying...

and it had to be Ananya, in the middle of the jungle, by a bullet...

And Kabir, I'm at a loss of words...

Something inside me died...

It's like,

you've portrayed each moment so aptly in this short OS/drabble (I like to call such one scene pieces as drabbles...they enhance the beauty of the moment. putting it as an OS makes it more of a tale. It's completely your wish, if you want to change the title to a drabble)

I just sink into helplessness each time I read this, and somehow, I can't stop reading it...

every moment you wrote,,,,,it' so.. *Chokes* beautiful...

The helpless feeling...slowly morphing into worry, anger and then fear...

and a deep fear...repressed under a fickle flame of hope...

The light in the eyes, that last smile...the relief, yet painfully torturing...

Those flashback, those seconds, the realisation...

I can't really decide if I should smile or frown...this was heart wrenching...

And I can't help but listen to Hamari Adhuri Kahani behind this...I wonder if this story can be portrayed in the form of a VM with that precision...I wish it could...one episode would probably suffice (except the flashbacks part)...but honestly, this...

it's too beautiful to say something...something enough...

And...oh gosh...I don't know how should I say it...

Hats off for this...its too beautifully painful...

I loved it :*

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supriya.ipkknd

@supriya.ipkknd

Inactive

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: Aru_A

I couldn't make out that I was shattered or strong...
it was just a lone tear...
I mean...
the bunch of optimists that this place is full of, I wonder if anybody was as shocked as I was when I saw that evil goon shooting Ananya and restraining Kabir.
I was shaken.
And when I came to the forum, everybody was absolutely normal.
And then, I came across your piece...
One word for the title, and a powerful impact right there-Gone.
I felt a certain pull to read it.
And when I did, I was speechless.
I had never spared even a millisecond to think about someone dying...
and it had to be Ananya, in the middle of the jungle, by a bullet...
And Kabir, I'm at a loss of words...
Something inside me died...
It's like,
you've portrayed each moment so aptly in this short OS/drabble (I like to call such one scene pieces as drabbles...they enhance the beauty of the moment. putting it as an OS makes it more of a tale. It's completely your wish, if you want to change the title to a drabble)
I just sink into helplessness each time I read this, and somehow, I can't stop reading it...
every moment you wrote,,,,,it' so.. *Chokes* beautiful...
The helpless feeling...slowly morphing into worry, anger and then fear...
and a deep fear...repressed under a fickle flame of hope...
The light in the eyes, that last smile...the relief, yet painfully torturing...
Those flashback, those seconds, the realisation...
:'
I can't really decide if I should smile or frown...this was heart wrenching...
And I can't help but listen to Hamari Adhuri Kahani behind this...I wonder if this story can be portrayed in the form of a VM with that precision...I wish it could...one episode would probably suffice (except the flashbacks part)...but honestly, this...
it's too beautiful to say something...something enough...
And...oh gosh...I don't know how should I say it...
Hats off for this...its too beautifully painful...
I loved it :*

This is one of the best compliments I ever received. Thank you so much not only for this but for actually coming back to the thread to pen down your thoughts.

This really touched my heart and I can't tell you how glad I am that someone likes this piece so much.

It was titled Drabble initially and thats what I actually wrote but many here don't know what a drabble is .. If you read my intro I mentioned that this is more of a drabble than an OS. I love reading drabbles I am not really good at writing them. This is only my second attempt and I can't tell you what your kind words meant to me.

really. A heartfelt thank you :)

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