Ashlok Dark FF - My Ransacked Heart/UPDATED/Chapter 13/ (Pg-133)

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Hi, dear Aslokians that's my first ff. 😊 I have written in my school magazines and writing competitions but that is the end of my creativity.

But now I am trying my hand in writing in the forum too. I It looks like I have a lot of burden on my shoulders and I fear maybe I will not live up to the expectations as this is my first creation. 😕And I don't know much about the rules and regulations. But from the meager knowledge that I have I have started writing this ff. 😊

It is a dark ff. 😉 So I am warning you the content maybe too dark for you people. But I'll try to tone it down a bit as I'll go forward. 😉

I have written a prologue for my Ashlok ff. 😉

P.S: Buddy me for the PM's.😊 If you like it do hit the like button on every post and give your comments. I need all your encouragements Ashlokians! 😊

Ashlok Dark FF

My Ransacked Heart

Index

Prologue: Scroll Down

Chapter 1: An Idea Formed

Chapter 2: The Spoiled Lamb

Chapter 3: The Cold Hunter

Chapter 4: The Rising Of Red Flag

Chapter 5: The War Begins

Chapter 6: The Haunting

Chapter 7: The First Lesson

Chapter 8: Awaiting The Devil

Chapter 9: Teaser

Chapter 9: The Abduction

Chapter 10: Waking Up To Horror

Chapter 11: Teaser

Chapter 11: Confronting The Devil

Chapter 12: Crack In The Iceberg

Chapter 13: An Eye For An Eye

Second Thread

Third Thread

Fourth Thread



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Ashlok FF
My Ransacked Heart

Watching , Waiting, Stalking
Searching, Skulking, Smiling
Love is not all romance
Love is mystery, love is misery
Love is a big piece of dark chocolate
Bittersweet and Forbidden
...Prologue...


The room dank of putrid smell and oppressive darkness. No light save a tiny sliver entered from beneath the old metal door. There was no opening in the room merely a tiny rectangular hole above the metal door.

The room was completely empty from any furniture or living thing save for a sort of a big bundle that was placed in a corner. The whole surrounding reflected the inside of some beastly dungeon.

Another moment and the door opened, creaking on its rusty hinges to reveal half of the face of some man. Light poured in the room from behind that man and revealed the bundle in the corner which started squirming, and squeaking showing the sign of life. It was like it's activity was constricted due to some restriction.

The man stepped slowly in the room opening the door wider and the light now wholly revealed the bundle's eyes and long spiky lashes covered with tears. Hazel pupils widened with fright and something more... an awareness...awareness for the man.

That living creature moved then struggling and trying to roll on the floor away from the man. The position revealed the face of that creature. Rounded, cherubic with tear streaks making a dirty track on the cheeks. The lips were cracked, bloodied and swelled around the piece of cloth stuffed in the mouth.

The man moved like a stalking beast in the room. The creature could only see the shadowed face. As the man moved nearer it could also see the eyes and a shiver crawled across that creature's spine.

They were so dark that where the pupil began and ended wasn't easy to be distinguished and they were lit with an unholy glint. The man moved without making any noise. The creature cowered in the corner, squeezing it's eyes shut. It could feel the warm breath of that man and then the piece of cloth was removed brutally from it's mouth.

A cold draught moved in the room banging the metal door and it clanged shut on a woman's bloodcurdling scream!...



Edited by mahirmukhtar - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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First of all, Congrats on your first work dear 🤗
And its very much promising, innovative attempt and amazingly written 👍🏼
Teaser is just Teasing me 😆
Do update fast and I'm eagerly waiting for the story to unfold!!
Btw writing style n d banner is too dark 😎 😆
Great!
Edited by ..AngelicAnu.. - 10 years ago
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Mahi.. Mahi.. Mahi..
Iam crazy of ur posts.. u know..
the posts being sadistic poems and VMS and other general discussion ones ..
This FF is very dark as the pictures and as well as the teaser.. Very aggressive , passionate , Develish and the black diaries from the Dungeon..
Im feeling that the hero has two faces.. one in the day and the other in the night.. where he is passionate and wanting for love.. but his darker animalistic side will not make him fall for her , or may make fall for her and in the due process the darker may become brighter and softer or she may fall for him and accept as for how and who he is..
She in mid struggling of her love and loss and lust..
manythings.. lots of things popping in my mind..i would like to stop here only ..
congo baby..very nice..
Edited by deepavasudev - 10 years ago
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hey Mahi...really a dark teaser..
waiting for the story to start😃
pm me plz...😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Woah that's quite a teaser! Amazing writing. . Looking forward to the next chapters. . All the best n thanks :)
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Dear Mahi..congrats for brilliant start. .its a interesting teaser. .waiting for more
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mahi so interesting...can't wait...your writing skill like professional... 👍🏼
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Originally posted by: vj3072

mahi so interesting...can't wait...your writing skill like professional... 👍🏼


Thanks dear! 😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wowww Mahi..!! This is just awesome..I love your writing style..😃😃😃

This update was dark and dangerous..

Congratulations on your first FF dear..I really look forward to reading your updates..🤗

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