Originally posted by: nims23
Ayesha 🤗
Nimzzzy!🤗
First of all thank you for giving me a credit which I dont deserve 🤗🤗🤗
You do!! Honestly you do, buddy!❤️
This story is so intense .. I don’t have words to explain how I felt when I read it first time !
The victims of molestation often go through the same feelings...
I can not even imagine how small girls must be feeling after going through this kinda incident in their life? Would they be the same like before ? Or their whole existence get changed? And the most important thing, are they able to share their pain with their loved ones or they endure their pain alone, sobbing in a corner of their bedroom! It’s so emotional yaar . Here Bon went through the same pain and the way you have knitted her emotions is awesome .
Thank you so much buddy ... I am glad I could make the reader connect with the plight of these girls.
I felt like a reel is running in front of my eyes. I mean I could literally imagine Bon and ani. Bon felt like being in a hell because of a creature who himself deserves a place in a hell. I am sure if it was in ani’s hands he would have just given a big punishment to that creep with his own hands but afterall he is a normal man who can’t take a law in his hands.
I just wanted to show him as a very normal young boy too. He cannot do everything and he cannot handle everything peefectly, on his own too.
Oh no.. Bon’s nightmare .. it shows just a glimpse of what this must be feeling.. how her innocent soul is trying fight with the demon which was creating a havoc inside. Ani is horrified to see his Bon in that state. And the scene where the two beautiful pure souls cried. Ani couldn’t take it anymore, couldn’t see his Bon’s pain even though he knows he can’t even imagine how much pain Bon must be feeling from inside and that’s what pained him more. His inability to take away his loved one’s pain! Bon couldn’t stopped caning nightmares and ani couldn’t stop getting heartbroken to see her in that state!
@ bold...How beautifully you have described Ani's feelings!!! ❤️👍🏼 You should try writing, you know?
You have a knack of it.
You pointed out some portions to edit in my OS when I asked you to beta-read it. But you suggested amazing suggestions too...and I added them. I believe you should try your hand at writing. You are an artist too...and you have a kind, gentle, sensitive soul. You are very perceptive also...I think you will make a wonderful writer. ❤️
Finally Bon couldn’t take the feeling of touched by someone inappropriately and tied to do something which she shouldn’t have .. she tried to harm her feet which were touch by that creep,, thank god ani came on time and stopped her doing any further damage! She just wanted to wash away the feeling of being touched. Poor girl.. my heart went out for her..Ani also cried his heart out . He just want to take away all her pain, take her somewhere away from all these terrible thoughts!
Yes...my Ani was also not brave. I mean he was brave of course, but jo ghatna ghati hai, usko nahi tolerate ker paa rha tha woh. As I said in the beginning of the OS, my Bondu also did not fight like a tigress as she did in the show. Unfortunately, most women respond to such calamities like this Bondu.
But finally he found Bon’s voice .. she started responding but that to by asking him not to touch her feet.. ani needed to do something so Bon gets her confidence back. And that’s what he did .. he made her understand who is right and who is wrong .. indirectly that creep who touched her feet was actually gave her respect! Ani was finally able to made her understand how she is not at fault in this so she doesn’t need to feel filthy instead it’s that creep who needs to feel filthy ...
And finally after Ani’s umpteenth efforts she opened up, she understood and made a promise not to do anything silly in the future !! She understood how her existence and well being matters to her loved ones especially her patibabu !
This was a beautifully penned down piece of work Ayesha! My heart goes for those girls who go though this horrible life changing experiences!!
Kudos to you for writing this os.. 🤗🤗🤗
You should try writing, you know? 
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