Creative Writeup_Arohi Lakshya OS _ | KISMAT | Chapter 2 added Rajput

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This I have been writing since two weeks n I have divided it into Chapters ...My first n Final write up on this IMMJ Forum ... Hope you all like it. 😊


Arya OS _ | KISMAT |


A little on story so far based on IMMJ plot. Arohi an innocent girl who has gone through alot in life at such young age.She lost her parents never got justice for their miserable death. She comes into new town to stay with her brother.She gets married to a rich business tycoon.but After mariage she starts experiencing problems that she cant understand.She encounters with a cop lakshya with whom she doesnt shares a good equation.Little she knows it she gets trapped into crimes that she hasnt done it and it was none other than her own husband Deep who used her to for his own intentions.His family was fake everything she trust upon was all a lie. Deep was only saving his beloved psychopath wife Tara who is arohi look alike.Arohi is proven mentally ill n gets arrested for Tara's crimes.

Now the story goes further :

Chapter 1
Ek Shuruaat

Arohi is in Jail, in the morning she will be shifted to Mental Asyleum.Deep Tara n Prithvi are happy they finally succeeded in their plan. Arohi crying in lockup she doesnt stops crying bcz she is shattered. lakshya comes he is looking at arohi in lockup, πŸ˜”

Lakshya Assistant: Sir kitne time se rorahi hai... sir itne mujrim aaj tak dekhe isse dekh ke nahi lagta ke yeh khooni hai aur pagal bhi 😭 isne subah se kuch nahi khaya hai

Lakshya takes Food n tissue Box n goes to Arohi. He sits in front of her. he takes out a tissue n gives it to her but Arohi throws it away ...he gives her again ...she keeps on throwing tissues away n lakshya keeps on giving untill she takes it n wipes her tears ... 😭

lakshya : Agar Rone se inssan ki problems khatam hosakti to har insan ek kone mein beth ke roraha hota Arohi ji πŸ˜”
yeh waqt rone ka nahi himmat aur taqat jutane ka hai taake khud ke lar sake jo hua woh kyun hua kis liye

Arohi keeps crying yet listening to his words.

Lakshya: Waise pata nahi yeh jaan kar aap ko khushi hogi ya nahi par mein jaanta hoon ke aap bekasoor hain ... Arohi looks at lakshya shocked ... when the whole world didnt believed her n here is the guy to whom she never talked nicely shows trust n support 😭

"Mein ne zindagi mein ek baat seekhi hai insan ko jab tak koi nahi hara sakta jab tak woh khud haar maan na le "

Lakshya gives her food... she eats it. he looks upon. She goes to sleep he puts blanket upon her.

Whole night Lakshya in dilema looking at Arohi. πŸ€”

"Unki Ankhein Sapnon se milne chali gayin
Humari Ankhein palkon ko thaame reh gayin"

Next day People come to take arohi to mental asyleum, Arohi says she wont go but lakshya says u have to go. On the way Van falls off the cliff by accident.

Prithvi comes to Deep Tara n shows them News being played on TV.Arohi Raichand declared Dead in an accident while going to mental asyleum.Deep gets shocked.

Prithvi: Yeh bahut acha hua sab khatam hogaya arohi ke saath akhri jo kari thi khatam hogayi.
Deep : Ab humein yahan se chalna chahiye.

prithvi Deep tara leaves the city. 😑

Scene shifts to lakshya wearing a hood going to a hidden place in the jungle. His Asistant is there They go inside there Arohi is shown alive.
flashback shows how lakshya saves arohi n he burns her files too. πŸ˜ƒ

Assistant: Sir kia tarkeeb lagayi aap ne ...pehli baar police wala hoke choron wala kaam kia hai πŸ˜†
lakshya: Gives him serious look ⭐️


Arohi: Itna risk aap ne mere liye lia 😳
lakshya: Aap ke liye nahi Arohi ji ... Sach ke liye asli mujrim ko pakarne ke liye ...mere hathon koi begunaah ko saza ho mein dekh nahi sakta ⭐️

Arohi looks onto him 😊

Assistant: sir ab hum karenge kia ..? .. Dee raichand to raton raat shehar se ghayab hi hogaya hai kisi ko nahi pata kahan chala gaya πŸ˜•

Arohi ko aise chupa ke nahi rakh sakte aur rakhenge kahan ??

lakshya replies:

iss duniya sabse safe jaga wahi hai . jahan koi police andar kadam nahi rakh sakti ... jahan mein jata nahi ... arohi n assistant looks on..kaunsi ? πŸ˜•

Lakshya smiles πŸ˜‰

Assistant mar gaye 🀒 Sir yeh achi baat ke aap wahan jarahe hain ...

mein akele nahi hum sab jarahe hain ...tum bhi saath chal rahe ho ... πŸ˜†

Assistant: Sir wahan nahi kyunke agar unko pata chala ke arohi kaun hai ek mujrim aur pagal khane se bhaag kar aayi hai to woh aap ko to kuch nahi karenge par mujh bechare ki gardan kaat ke haveli ke gate par tanga denge 🀒 πŸ€” ...

Jaane ke liye zaroor parhiye ...Next chapter. title Rajpoot Haveli .. Plz scroll little bit down to read it in next colum on this page ...πŸ˜‰

watch how I write the lovestory in my style πŸ˜‰
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Chapter 2
Rajpoot Haveli πŸ˜‰

Lakshya has put his Assistant officers in searching for deep n Gang. Lakshya Arohi n assistant lambu leaves town.

Arohi: Kahan lejarahe hain aap mujhe
lakshya: Jald jaan jaogi wahan tum safe rahogi.
lambu: Haan yeh safe rahengi par mein nahi 🀒


They reaches new town Rajkot. Arohi looks curiously.
people who sees lakshya gives him respect.

Arohi: Aap ko yahan sab jaante hain bahut maan dete hain.
Lakshya: haan yeh mera shehar hai isliye. he doesnt tells anything yet to arohi.

They reach a big Haveli.The Gate opens ... They get shocked seeing many people gathered wellcoming them with flowers n greeting.Lakshya is welcomed like a prince has returned home. Arohi looks on n walks beside lakshya.

lakshya father makes entry. lambu tells Arohi that lakshya father is very respectable man he owns this entire town. He is not just royal man but also he is the minister as well. lakshya mother is called Rani saa.

Lakshya bua asks Rani saa : Yeh larki kon hai lakshya ke saath ?
Rani saa: Jo bhi hai damini lekin hai bahut pyaari ( she smiles 😳)

Rani saa: Aakhir aap ko maa ki yaad aahi gayi 😳
Lakshya : Yaad unki aati hai jinhein bhulaya gaya ho ... aur aap to humesha hi meri soch mein rehti hain maa
Rani saa : Gets happy n asks yeh pyari si larki kon hai ? humein nahi milayenge πŸ˜‰
Lakshya calls arohi with expressions ... arohi comes close ...she touches Rani saa feet ...
Rani saa: aap sirf khoobsorat hi nahi sanskari bhi hai .
lakshya says she is my friend she has come to visit town. she will stay here for a while.
lakshya father says inke rehne ka khaas intizam kar yahan aap ko koi takleef nahi hogi ...yahan mehmaan bhagwan samaan hota hai.

lakshya sister Janvi takes arohi to a room n says this is your room Arohi. humari khoob jamegi 😊 she befriends with arohi well.

Arohi looks into the room. she likes it.

Next Morning ...

Arohi sleeping ...
maid comes n removes curtains little bit to wake up arohi ...

Arohi wakes up n says yahan ki subah bahut achi hai ... kitna sukoon hai ...😊

maid replies: Hoga hi chote shehar ki subah aisi hi khoobsurat hoti hai ...😊

Arohi hears some voice outside she goes out to window ...
She sees people prepairing for something ...

she asks aaj kuch hai kia ? yeh kia horaha hai ?

Janvi comes n says :
aaj lakshya bhai saa ki aane ki khushi mein jashan rakha hai ...bahut maza ayega ... saara shehar hoga yahan

Arohi gets worried as lakshya asked her to keep herself out of sight of many people so that she doesnt gets into problem.

Arohi sees lakshya jogging ... she goes to tell him

on the way she encounters family members ...but she manages to reach lakshya ...

Arohi : Inspector
lakshya doesnt listens ... he walks on

Arohi gets curious... she gets angry n blocks his way...

mein kabse aap ko bularahi hoon aur aap meri baat sun hi nahi rahe πŸ˜’

Lakshya smiles n says :
Arohi ji aap mujhe inspector kehna band kariye ... mera naam itna bhi bura nahi ke aap bol na sake ...

Arohi tries to speak lakshya

lakshya says ...better ...ab batayiye kia hua ? kyun pareshan hain

she tries to say but lakshya gets called urgently he leaves ... ..

Arohi going inside .. hear noices of people crying ... they go to see ...

she sees people r complaining for something to lakshya father who is sitting in his chair like a king... People have come with a problem ...
A man says ... Mere bete ki shadi iski beti se tai hui thi ... lekin ab yeh apni beti dene se mana karaha hai ...

lakshya father says :

kyun prakash tum apni hi zubaan se kaise phir sakte ho
prakasha girls father replies: Raja saa mein apni zuban se phirna nahi chahta tha par mein kia karoon meri beti kisi aur ko pasand karti hai mein kia karsakta hoon.

The other man says: Meri izzat ka sawaal hai meri baradari mein kia izzat reh jayegi

lakshya father makes final decision:

Zubaan ki keemat sabse upar hai ...maan samaan sabse upar ... tumhe zubaan dene se pehle apni beti se poochna chahiye tha .. tumhare paas ab do raste hain .. pehla ..jo rishta tai hua wahi hoga ... yeh shadi hogi ...doosra tumhari doosri beti ka haath iske mein dena hoga ... warna iska sakht parinaam hosakta hai ...yahi mera aakhri faisla hai .

Arohi gets shocked at this decision ...janvi says yahan zuban , Maan, izzat aur usolon ke liye log jaan bhi desakte hain ... !
acha hua lakshya bhai saan nahi hain warna aaj to baba saa aur bhai saan ke beech behas ho hi jaati
Evening...

Arohi in her room thinking I better not go out ... Rani saa comes in her room ...

Rani saa: Arohi
Arohi : Ji
Rani saa : Yeh lo ...
Arohi : Yeh sab kia hai ?
she has brought her a beautiful lehenga to wear n jewelry
Rani Saa: Yeh aaj ke tehwar ke liye tumhe yahi pehna hai ... humare ghar ki auratein yahi pehnti hai ...
theek hai...
Arohi nods ...theek hai

People r gathered for the occasion ...Rajisthani music is being played...

Lakshya is dressed like a prince. Janvi brings Arohi down ...lakshya looks at her ...

Janvi: Dekhiye na Arohi to bilkul rakumari jaisi lag rahi hai .
lakshya nods yes ...his eyes is only on Arohi ...
Janvi friends calls her ... she asks arohi to come with her but Arohi says tum jao mein aati hoon ... she leaves ok ...

Lakshya: aap bahut achi lag rahi hain
Arohi : Yahan mein pareshan hoon aur aap aise behave karahe hain jaise kuch hua nahi ...
lakshya: mujhe pata hai kia problem hai
Arohi : Looks at lakshya aap ko pata hai .
lakshya: Haan aur uska hal bhi hai mere paas ...
Arohi : Kia?
Lakshya comes closer he takes her chunri n puts on her head halfly covered ... yeh ghooghat is tara se rakhna taake koi tumhara chehra theek se na dekh sake ..aur mere saath rehna ya phir jaanvi ke saath ...
Arohi says theek hai ... she walks behind him looking down ...lakshya stops n says

Arohi 😳
Arohi : Haan
mere peeche nahi mere saath saath chalo aur dekh ke aise to tum sabse takrati hi rahogi πŸ˜†
Arohi: she wispers slowly to herself ...Adha ghooghat daalke bol rahe hain theek se chalo ...πŸ€”
lakshya: kuch kaha ?
Arohi: Nahi to πŸ˜ƒ
chaliye ...

Janvi comes n takes Arohi ...lakshya gets worried he asks lambu to keep eye on Arohi for her safety. he Also keeps eye on her ... 😳

Arohi tries to keep herself out of people sight . she runs into Lakshya cousin abhay ... who starts teasing her flirting ... she tries to avoid him ... but he follows her n in between lakshya comes ...

lakshya: Kahan ?
Abhay : Woh mein inse inke shehar ke baare mein pooch raha tha
Lakshya: Dubara agar tu arohi ke aas paas bhi ghuma to mein yahan ki saari larkiyon se tujhe raakhi bandhwaonga πŸ˜†
Abhay 😲πŸ₯Ί nahi bhai saan maafi ... plz aisa zulm mat kariyega ... ... mein marjaonga ... mein samajh gaya ... samajh gaya πŸ˜ƒ
he runs away ...🀣

Lakshya Turns Arohi smiling... he says to her ... aise hi haste raha kijiye haste hue achi lagti hain aap... they both smile ..😳

Bua n other women sees this ...women asks yeh lakshya to aaj tak kisi larki se baat bhi nahi karta tha ...yeh kaun hai jiske saath itna ache se muskura raha hai ...😑...Bua says dost hai ... πŸ˜†... Na divyani woh salma ki picture nahi dekhi tumne ... ek larka aur larki kabhi dost nahi bansakte πŸ˜‰... kuch to jhol hai ... pata lagana parega 😈 ...aur waise lakshya ka rishta sirf meri beti se hi hoga ...iss larki ko to mein yaha se nikal wa ke hi rahoongi ... 😈

keep reading ...wat will evil aunties gonna do with arohi ? will lakshya n Arohi gonna come closer ? ..πŸ˜‰... Next Chapter 3 ...Title Mangetar ...will add soon



Edited by saaniakh - 6 years ago
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According to this plot serial ki story yahi honi chahiye Thi.Ab tak iss plot ke hisab se aarohi ko jail mein hona chahiye tha. Lekin aisa kuch bhi nahi ho raha hai. In fact Tara's mental illness & aarohi's over innocent behaviour is a big drawback of this serial
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going to update the next chapter late night !!
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This is so beautifully written yaar. I really wish something like this happen in the show. Even if that don't happen, I will have this to quench my ArYa love. Do update the next part fast.
One more thing, please do write more stories on ArYa. Even if we don't get ArYa in the show, we will at least have these beautiful write ups on them.
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Thanks Jane😊 ...I will update next chapter by today πŸ˜‰

future write ups not sure as how would I move on n forget if I stick around n keep writing I will get attached to Arya than. Life of a writer πŸ˜†

besides write ups r for suggestions show love for a show so that if cvs likes it they can use it.⭐️

Show already facing struggle with trps now current developments looks as show reaching to climax point.This is going to happen Deep will fall for arohi 🀒 but arohi will go to jail n laksh will help arohi n both Arya will get deep jailed as he has been playing with all murders proofs trying to trap arohi. Seeing this Tara wont come out to save deep (wat like u expect a mental ill patient to behave normal πŸ˜†) if she could think properly she wouldnt have been chopping people than 🀣n deep will regret ...Rest it will be deep trying to get arohi forgiveness ...lol πŸ˜†
next dragging the track to hell ...
good luck with that πŸ‘πŸΌ

Originally posted by: janecastle

This is so beautifully written yaar. I really wish something like this happen in the show. Even if that don't happen, I will have this to quench my ArYa love. Do update the next part fast.

One more thing, please do write more stories on ArYa. Even if we don't get ArYa in the show, we will at least have these beautiful write ups on them.

Edited by saaniakh - 6 years ago
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guys Updated Chapter 2... see below on 1st page
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This is amazing work Sania I have been reading your write ups on Dev forum your Dev meera write up was amazing πŸ‘ Keep writing pls continue
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true ...πŸ€” they should take our views n opinions into count as it will help improve entertainment value.

Originally posted by: vaishu.6

According to this plot serial ki story yahi honi chahiye Thi.Ab tak iss plot ke hisab se aarohi ko jail mein hona chahiye tha. Lekin aisa kuch bhi nahi ho raha hai. In fact Tara's mental illness & aarohi's over innocent behaviour is a big drawback of this serial

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Thanks for liking it all !!
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