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Hayaa.m

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Posted: 6 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: .Anya.
OMG this is just beautiful so so beautiful I am actually speechless now.
I want next part with some ludo star.Ek match to banta ha yar☺️😆
Abhi tak kahan chupi bethi thi 5-6 Os aur chahiye😆

I 100% agree with Anya. Where were u before 😡...MashaAllah u write so well. kiyon chupa ker rakha apney ap ko 😭

Anyway Sid we need another part focusing on ludo star match. Please post it as soon as possible😈

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SS88

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Posted: 6 years ago

#12

Oh wow, so beautiful. Please tell me there is more. I want ZUbiya to tell him she loves him.

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fanraya

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Posted: 6 years ago

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Oh, my my, what a beautiful piece of writing,👏 wow, I have no words to describe my feelings, it was breathtaking, so passionate yet romantic . I want to read more, please do continue, let Zubia tell Asfi her feelings.. You are an amazing writer...👍🏼

"The kind of love I have for you...doesn't allow me to over step my boundaries...because I respect you. That's the kind of love I have for you...

"Maine tumse mohabbat ki hai, Zubiya...tumse. Tumhare har wajood se, tumhari har pehchaan se...tumhari himmat se, tumhari har ek baat se. "

He paused and swallowed heavily. "Tumhari aisi koi baat nahi hai jo mujhe tumse door le ja sakti hai..."

Wow👏

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--HiNa--

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Posted: 6 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: .Anya.
OMG this is just beautiful so so beautiful I am actually speechless now.
I want next part with some ludo star.Ek match to banta ha yar☺️😆
Abhi tak kahan chupi bethi thi 5-6 Os aur chahiye😆

okay i loved this sid

i really really really loved it this was so beautifully written,

i didnt know u had that ludostar keera in u?

i was blushing while reading it <3 <3

beautiful loved your words

aise lag raha tha kisi aur hi duniya me agayi ho

now we arent going to leave u

humhre ludogang me hi writer chupa bheta tha

u have to write next part and our ludostar part too pleasee

do not say no🥱🥱

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RaSia

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Posted: 6 years ago

#15

Super duper ultra good. Best os ever. If only they could do half this justice in the real show.

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octaverider

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Posted: 6 years ago

#16

This was so hot! *fans self*

Zubiya's helplessness, Asfi's passion...all coming to the forefront. I really enjoyed and you have me hooked. Write more please!

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Aazeen02

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Posted: 6 years ago

#17

In Love with your writing and the style of your writing dear...
After very long, I found that one writer on India Forums, reading whom, I didn't regret investing my time.
You write so so awesome...
I wouldn't belittle your writing by dissecting your valuable work, coz it is a masterpiece...
All I will say is that it is flawlessly beautiful...
I am in love with this work...

PS: My heart is still fluttering those extra beats that I felt when Asfi had been talking to Zubiya...

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.Anya.

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Posted: 6 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: --HiNa--

okay i loved this sid
i really really really loved it this was so beautifully written,
i didnt know u had that ludostar keera in u?
i was blushing while reading it <3 <3
beautiful loved your words
aise lag raha tha kisi aur hi duniya me agayi ho

now we arent going to leave u
humhre ludogang me hi writer chupa bheta tha
u have to write next part and our ludostar part too pleasee
do not say no🥱🥱

Yes we want ludo star part if you want me & Hina can help you in ludo star part😆

Jiya se mat lena wo direct charpai le jayegi room me😆😉

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Maria

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Posted: 6 years ago

#19

AWWW my seriously the intensity and passion! ☺️

Such an intense OS I've read after ages!!!!!!

UUUFFF I need A/C This was totally blush! ☺️

I love the way you mixed all the feelings together - love - attraction - passion - intensity - ☺️ You have blew me away TOTALLY!

UFFF! Can you plz write a second part, would love to see how Zubia reacts back since she knows that Asfi loves her despite of her past😃

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sidsk

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Posted: 6 years ago

#20

Wow! Guys! I am floored by all your comments...honestly! I never expected to get such an amazing response from you all.. Thank you, thank you so much! All of you made my day.🤗

Actually, I wasnt planning to write anything further...kuch socha hi nahi tha. But when I read your comments and saw so many people asking for it, the next part automatically formed in my head and I had to write it down before I lost all those ideas.😆

So! Please accept my apologies for the delay in replying to all of you immediately ...I will do so in a few hours.

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