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Okay, I wrote a short drabble, warning: it's short 😆
"M..Ma...Mama.. Bolo na, mama!"He heard her voice before he saw her.It had become a habit of theirs, Ayna brought the kids down to the lounge right around the time Mohsin was to come home from work. And so, the first sight he would see as he walked in was her playing with their kids. their kids. their. her.She'd smile at him and lift her eyelashes to peek at him before asking him "Aaj aapka din kaise tha?" And then she'd hand him whomever was in her lap, more often it was Asher than Tabi or Raania, grab his briefcase and walk over to the kitchen to get him a glass of water.When she was finally gone from his view, Mohsin would admit that he loved his kids, they were his kids, of course he loved them with all his heart and soul but what he craved and the only thing that would soothe his heart was her quiet question of "Aaj aapka din kaise tha?".But today was different.Today, he heard her voice say softly " "M...Ma...Mama.. Bolo na, mama!" She was encouraging the twins, who had began to murmur and make weird noises and words that only she was capable of understanding, as a mother would.So he had stopped himself from opening the door entirely and coming in, pausing in the doorway to see for the exchange between probably Ashar and Ayna continued." Anni!" Tabi squealed and just like that the moment broke. He saw as her face fell and was quickly but back in place."Yes Tabi beta...theek hai, abhi aap kay baba will come home, and we'll ask him..."She focused her attention back on the baby boy and encouraged him " A...An...Anni...Bolo Anni."Feeling something inside him drop, Mohsin opened the door fully and walked in." Aaj Aapka din kaise tha?" She moved to pick up Ashar so that she could hand the boy to him when she heard him say," Very bad. I have a headache. I'm going to go take a shower, please make me some chai."With that he dropped his briefcase and walked away.-----Finished 😳How was it, I wrote it fast, so maybe not so good? Also, the ending, I wanted to make it sweet but then i thought about it and seriously, this is mohsin we are talking about so ? 😆😉
That was a cute one Tabs!
I loved your idea on how the kids started calling her Anni instead of mom.
Mohsin standing by the doorway and quietly watching her interaction with Ashar and her attempt in trying to make him call her mom.
Aww he actually felt bad because he wanted the kids to call her mom.
I liked how Mohsin and Ayna were so much in character.
Overall I really enjoyed reading it! Very beautifully written.
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