MANAN FF- LOVELORN(Chapter 14-Pg no.13)(28-4-2017) - Page 2

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Wowww it's interesting nd amazing story line luvv it plzz continue nd update soon
Thanks 4 the story
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So Mr.Richi rich is missing the "MIDDLE Class" Nandini...god...but aab kyu itna dukhi hai...huh..!!!
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Amazing dear,
and I want more,
please continue it soon.
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Hi guys...

Presenting you with another chapter of this story...

CHAPTER -2

Continuation of Manik's p.o.v:

After bidding bye to my friends, I went to that place where I find solace.

The place where I first saw her.

The place which is a witness to our first everything...

We grew up together...

By together I mean in the same house(It was our old house where I stayed with my family in my childhood)

'What one loves in childhood stays in the heart forever.'

The saying goes apt when it comes to me.

I will never be able to forget the beautiful memories I made with her in my childhood.

When we were kids ( I was around 10 years and she was 8 years I guess), I had seen her few times playing with her dolls all alone...

She didn't have anyone to play with.

She used to watch us( me and my friends) play for long hours hiding behind the compound wall.

As she lived in the servant quarters of our building, she was not allowed to enter the main part of our house.

The first time I tried to talk to her, she was too scared and ran away from there without turning back.

That was one hell of a hilarious moment.

She used to cry for hours as she didn't have anyone to playwith .

I once wanted to pacify her but Mom always said that such people don't deserve our sympathy.

Even then I tried to help her in anyway possible.

Once she was crying for her Doll which got lost somewhere in the garden of our house.

Or should I say someone hid it inorder to trouble her.

That someone was none other than my prankster friend Dhruv.

Dhruv always troubled her by playing several pranks on her.

And when he saw that SHE was searching for her Doll, Dhruv complained it to my Mom.

And Mom as usual scolded her for entering the garden and pushed her away.

She fell down and got bruises on her elbow.

She ran away from there crying and went to the servant quarters and showed her bruises to her mother.

Instead of consoling her, that mean lady slapped her for entering the garden.

I could see all this as I was standing in the balcony.

She leaned to the compound wall and was sobbing.

I couldn't control myself and went to the compound wall and climbed on it.

On seeing me, she was about to run away from there.

But stopped midway on hearing me speak.

'Mujhe friendship karogi???' I said.

She didn't said anything and turned towards me.

I could see the pain in her eyes.

I repeated the question 'Friendship karogi mujhse?'

And forwarded my hand.

She just kept staring at me.

Though she was silent but her eyes were speaking volumes. Those eyes had so much hidden in them. I was not an expert in reading eyes but I felt an connection with her as I looked into her eyes.

She looked at my hand and back at my face.

Maybe she was in dilemma whether to accept me as a friend or not.

After a lot of thinking, she took a few baby steps towards me and was about to take my forwarded hand when her mother shouted from her house.

'Guddi... Kahan margayi... Jaldi aa. Mujhe bazar Jana hai ' Her mother said.

To which she replied - Aayi Amma...

And she turned back to run towards her house.

Arey ruko kahan jarahi ho... Kam se kam apna naam to batati jao...

But she had already vanished from my eyesight.

'She didn't even tell her name, now what will I call her????'

With this thoughts, I went back to my room.

I kept thinking of what her name could be...

Then I remembered that her mother had called her 'Guddi'...

But it sounded too down market .

So the whole night I thought of a new name for my new friend though she still hasn't accepted my friendship But eventually she will. As I am Manik Malhotra, and no one can refuse me .

And finally I got an interesting name for her which matched with the name given by her mother.

And the name was 'Doll'.

Yes I will address her as ' Doll'.

And only I will have the right to call her that and no one else can.

Now coming back to the present, I came out of my thoughts and found myself sitting on the compound wall in the same position as I was seated years back when I had forwarded my hand for her friendship.

I saw a few kids playing hide and seek there.

I decided to watch them for sometime before going inside the house.



Phewww...

Done with another update.

Hope you guys like it.

Ignore the typos if any.

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I want to ask you guys something.

Do you guys want me to continue the story in Manik's p.o.v. or in authors p.o.v???

I think Manik's p.o.v will be interesting.

What say guys????

Awaiting your response...

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Nice update... I think Manik ka POV accha hoga
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Very interesting story line
But plz update sooner
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Nice storyline, u hv written it beautifully.
Cn't wait for the next update n knw hw u r gng to tell MaNan's story.
Eagerly waiting...😊
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And yes I also think story from Manik's POV will be more interesting.
Nice idea 👍🏼
Plz continue the story soon...
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Hello guys...

Here is another chapter of this story.

This will cover the prologue part in Manik's pov.


CHAPTER -3

Continuation of Manik's POV:

As I entered the house, all the bitter memories flashed before my eyes.

Everything was exactly the same as it was that day.

As I sat at the same place where I was that day, I could feel her piercing gaze which had lot of hope or rather trust on me.

I just wanted to ask her-

why???

why she did that???

But I couldn't...

I don't know what was the reason but whatever she did was so wrong.

And she completely deserved what she got from us.

Even she had to feel the same way as she made me feel.

I was so angry on her that day that I didn't want to see her face.

But when she said that I won't be able to see her face ever again, it broke me from inside.

This was the last thing I had expected from her.

If at all she had apologized then and there, maybe I would have forgiven her but no she didn't have a trace of guilt on her face.

How could she do this to me?

I had always supported her but she didn't even think twice before doing that.

That's why even I had to be mean to her by saying all those words though I didn't mean a single word of what I said.

Had my friends not supported me that day , I can't even imagine what I would have done.

I remember each and every thing that happened here that day.

She descended the stairs and walked upto us.

She had an unusual glow over her face which was something new.

She was looking more beautiful than her usual self.

I couldn't stop admiring her beauty but her words brought me out of my thoughts.

"Aap sab yahan??? Aur aap log has kyu rahe ho?" She said this in a soft tone.

"OMG. How can anyone be so stupid? We are laughing on you"- Mukti replied.

"Humpar? But kyu???"- She got too confused.

To which Aliya said -

"Yes tumpar.

Tumhe Laga tha ki tum ek rich ladke ko apne pyar ke jaal me fasalogi aur zindagi bhar Uske paiso Par aish karogi.

Aisa soch bhi kaise sakti ho tum?"

Dhruv added -

"Par tum shayad Janti nahi ki hamare friend ko fasana itna aasaan nahi hai.

Kyunki hum Uske saath hai .

Tumhe kabhi tumhare is khel me successful nahi hone denge."

On hearing this she looked at me and said - "
Aap Kuch bol kyu nahi rahe ho.

Aap to jante hai na ki ye sab khel nahi hai...

Kal raat..."

On her reference to last night, I couldn't control myself anymore.

I just wanted all this to be a nightmare.

I closed my eyes for a second to gather courage and then looked straight into her eyes.

" Oh Comeon Baby kal raat Jo Kuch bhi hua it was all part of our plan to teach you a lesson.

But I really enjoyed it.

I must say you are really good in bed.

And don't worry... Tumhe kal raat ke paise miljayenge"

Saying this I handed her a blank cheque.

I fisted my hands in my pockets and said-

"And if you want we can do it again some other time."

"Enough... You are disgusting. I trusted you and you broke my trust.

Nahi chahiye mujhe tumhare paise.

Aur rahi baat tumhare ghatiya offer ki to ye kabhi nahi hoga Kyunki aaj ke baat tumhe meri shakl tak dikhayi nahi degi.

Mai jarahi hoon... Hamesha hamesha ke liye.

Yahan se bahut dur"

She replied as she tore the cheque into pieces and ran away from here.

I just couldn't believe that she walked out without admitting her mistake.

I looked at the direction in which she went for a long time but she didn't stop neither did she turn back even for a second.

Cabir put his hand on my shoulder and said-

"Kaha khogaya tu Manik???

Let's celebrate now that she is finally out of our lives."

With this we all headed to the swimming pool to start our celebrations.

This day was supposed to be the new beginning of my life with her but it was all ruined because of her.

After celebrating for few hours, everyone left to their respective homes and I went back to my room.

It was the same room in which I had spent some beautiful and precious moments with her.

Now coming back to the present, I reached my room and opened the door.

The room was arranged in order.

But how is it possible???

The Last time I was here , it was all messed up.

All the things were scattered here and there but now it was clean.

It means someone has entered my room without my permission.

It angered me so much and I immediately called the caretaker of the house.

The caretaker was a middle aged woman.

She came running and stood before me with her head lowered.

"Who the hell enter my room without my permission? Kya Tumhe pata nahi ki mere room me Kisi ko aane ki permission nahi hai. "

The lady got scared and said- "Maaf kijiye Sahab. Mujhe kisine bataya nahi. Mai yahan pe nayi hoon. Isiliye mujhe Kuch nahi pata tha. "

Seeing her scared face, I controlled my anger and said- Theek hai. Dobara aisa nahi hona chahiye. Ab jao yahan se.

She literally ran out of the room to save herself from further scoldings.

I walked upto the balcony and stood there for sometime as the room was suffocating me.

My eyes fell on the servant quarters where SHE used to live with her family.

It was in the same condition as it was that night.

That night was like the worst nightmare of my life when HER words actually came true.

Before leaving my house, she had said that she will go far away from me and i won't be able to see her face ever.

Indeed her words came true exactly after a month.

The servant quarters burned infront of my eyes and none of her family survived.

Some say it was a short circuit while others say it was a preplanned murder by their enemy.

As the ambulance was taking the completely burnt bodies, I prayed to God that SHE shouldn't be among those who died but I was wrong.

I could just helplessly see her being taken away.

I didn't have the courage to go near her or any of the dead bodies.

But the other servants confirmed that all the four members of her family had been burnt alive.

This was the end of everything.

End of my love...

End of her betrayal...

End of my reason to smile...

End of joy in my life...

She took away all my happiness along with her.

I was just left with all the good and bad or should I say worst memories of her.

It's been 5 years now since I last saw her.

Though I miss her all the time, yet I won't be able to forget her betrayal how much I try.

In the worst phase of my life, my friends have been so much supportive.

Think of the devil and the devil appears or rather calls.

Yes the devil is none other than Cabir who always makes sure if I am Ok or not.

But today I don't want to talk to anyone so I disconnected the call.

I come here every time, but I am unable to figure out why I was feeling a bit different today than the other times.

Was it an indication of something good????

I don't know and don't even want to think about it.

So I take my mobile and dial Cabir's number.

"Ya Cabir... I will be there in an hour."

With this I leave the house chucking all the thoughts.

Phewww...

Done with another update.

Hope you guys like it.

Ignore the typos if any.

What do you think about this update???

Let me know through your comments.

Awaiting your response...





Edited by Sarahpeyton - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Awesomee prt...manik konse betrayl ki baat kr rha tha...kya sach mein nandu bhi uss fire mein ya fir wo zinda hai...lovd it
Continue soon
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