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His steps slowed
She ran forward
His heart heavy
Her heart was joyous
His eyes red rimmed
Her eyes danced
His fist clenched
Her fingers for the flowers reached
She was with mother nature
She was with her son
With the one she most trusted.
The moment he dreaded was closer
His brother's command had to be done
His dearest mother he had to abandon.
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Opt narration of Lakshman and Sita's feelings.
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Glad to see u back with ur poems. Lovely description.
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@javenk
Lovely writingπŸ‘


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Jaya, Lakshman's feelings were portrayed fantastically. I loved it πŸ‘πŸ‘
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Lakshman's dilemma beautifully expressed Jayashree
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Beautiful poem...soul stirring .
I do not have the heart to watch this track so NOT watching it anymore 😭
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Thank you all for the appreciation.❀️
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I loved itπŸ˜ƒπŸ˜ƒ
write more dear
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This is very beautiful poem on Lakshman's feelings !!! πŸ‘ πŸ‘ ⭐️
Lakshman is in major trouble that how to tell the truth and leave her mother in forest and Sita not aware of the big shock that is going to come from him and Ram 😭 😭
Keep writing dear jayshree !! πŸ˜ƒ 😳 ⭐️
Don't know how will I watch this tomorrow, karan is surely gonna make me cry buckets !! 😭 According to me , this was the most difficult and painful task for him along with Lakshman rekha. 😭
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