Memory Chronicles (SwaSan FF) - Page 80

Originally posted by: lucky.m

A quick read ...Will be back for detailed one bangaram

The new character of CM is quite interesting ..Though my sleepy brain is not able to process the links ...But you gave us an insight into what transpired before Swara left.

I might sound stupid asking this but ..Swara left only after dairy sceret is out right! Why Nalini is crying is one more I am bothered about .Has she got to do something with this ?

Next Ritu and Uttara ..So Ritu Raj is with Adarsh now.

..Hmm.

And then I loved Uttara and ragini's understanding of Swaras condition .

Will be back for more ..But good to see FM back 😳

Love

Lucky

Originally posted by: dreamy.tiara

Dear Nyna, 🤗

I read through Part B and Part C of Chapter-1 with lots of leisure, and I found them just fantastic. 👏

Thank you, thank you, thank you 🤗

First of all, I am impressed by your research on the location of the secretariat building. The CM got it 'temporarily' shifted (since 2013) from The Writers' Building, BBD Bag, Kolkata to Nabanna, Shibpur, Howrah, in order to renovate the heritage.

The credit goes to Google, I wanted the exact address of the CM office and it threw up articles, so it was easy to be accurate to the real timelines to the extent possible

The characterization of Niranjana is very interesting, especially since Indian politicians are far from elegant and sophisticated, and negligible of them respect anyone below their office (telling in general, no offence to anyone). I also noted that she is quite shrewd and appears to put herself together emotionally even when she is not. I am excited to know what turn the political angle brings to the story.

She will have a role, shrewd though she is, it is this very shrewdness that I hope to use, to enable the story for closure (tiny spoiler - I have an event, a real life event which I will use in the story, so this character should help - hopefully) And though she will not have a direct role, there would be an indirect influence of her actions.

Regarding politicians not being elegant, true in most of the case - they are dowdy or gaudy - both extremes. But I know of lady politician (Nanapneni Rajkumar) in AP - whom I admire for her sense of dressing, very simple sarees (by her own admission none cost more than Rs. 1000 and it is believable) and artificial jewellery in the form of tiny colour beads with pendant and glass bangles, colour coordinated to her sarees. So I guess, I drew on her and not on the present real life CM of Bengal (as you said, no offence intended)

I loved Ranjit Kaka's piquant advice to Swara - 'Always build a lie on an indisputable truth.' though I don't understand in what context he may have said that. However, I argue that it is a paradox. When something is built on truth it ceases to be a lie; let us assume what we build on truth is a lie, then we cannot build another lie over that lie without making it a truth. I am not sure if it made sense, feel free to blame my inner mathematician. 😆 I think Swara cannot keep her lie for too long without exposing its truth.

I like the paradox you wrote, which is why I sort of used it too, after a point when we reach the core which is the truth, we tend to believe all the layers covering it are true. Swara - as of now, it is imperative that she be whisked off to safety before she exposes herself or does something rash - like actually surrender herself. The six months leave which she asked is exactly for that also because the "other team" has an idea what would happen next and ...more in the next chapter😉

I wonder why Ritu is suddenly trying to appear so nice, pristine and law-abiding to Uttara. Also, what's up with Inspector Bahir? Something is rotten in the state of Denmark.

Confession time - when I wrote the introduction - I had written about seven children, those who inherited the victory and vengeance and how each would loose something.

Uttara would have to lose her innocence - in Ritu's hands. But as I started on the draft for posting, I just could not have her being raped or assaulted - considering the ending of this tale, which I have already completed, it would be meaningless. I also did not want somebody who is basically a sweetheart to suffer through one of the worst things a woman has to live through, not to mention that the story would not be able to focus on what it was intended for (Sudhir would have a little late and would have tried to / succeeded in killing Ritu - too many complications). Which is why chapter 7 took so long and why it had a very mild toned down Ritu.

Even now, I am keeping my options regarding Ritu open,- is he reformed and truly contrite, or would he revert to his desire of obtaining Uttara? Inspector Bahir - no worries, he is a good friend of Sudhir, convinced that Sudhir has a thing for Uttara - so he is all protective.😆

My heart goes out to Sanskar and Swara. On one hand, Swara cannot bear that he holds her responsible for Kavita's death. There may even be some truth in that, given the shuddering flashes of memory on plans to ruin the Maheshwaris. She just wants to leave his world. (But does she want to go away because she cannot face his partially true accusation or she wants to keep him safe in case the blame is true?) On the other hand, all questions and answers in Sanskar's mind begin and end with Swara. I loved how he hung the origami crane with her earrings on his windows. And my God! He spent thousands on origami papers! I thought he was a 'shrewd ' businessman. 😆 I also loved Sanskar's realization on overhearing RagLak. It is interesting how Kavita was the one who first tied SwaSan together in this journey.

Both Swara and Sanskaar are confused here - Swara is actually scared of finding out who she is now that she knows that she is in love with him. She knows that the only way out of this quagmire is to find out who she is but then she needs the courage to face the fact the she was a part of the plan to destroy the Maheshwaris. And even if she wants to talk to him, she cannot.

Sanskaar - will now become proactive - old friendships would be renewed and new alliances forged, once they realise that all want the same thing. And as you observed, he could be shrewd in business but then he also believes in the best of everything. For him saving the office stationary, especially newspapers😉😉was more important and if had to spend a few thousands on 'paper' he might as well do it. Alas, it did not serve any useful purpose.

I was tired of Kavita being the villain - so here she will be all pervasive, but in a nice way- hopefully.

I love how you improved the characterization of Ragini and Laksh in your story, they are a treat to read. I loved how Ragini took charge of the conversation, expressed her love and how she said she wanted Laksh to discover what he wants from his life. Though I still wonder what Laksh would have said had he not been stopped from speaking. Had he simply apologized and confessed his love or had there been something more?

Ragini has always been a pleasure to write for me, and Laksh once I decided not to make him the wishy washy half dimensional character of the serial, became easier to pen. And regarding what he might have said?- Writer's secret 😈 If I am in a good mood, maybe I will have Ragini ask him that question and have him tell her😉

I don't think Sanskar liked that his little sister hid things from him. Of course, she is growing up and has personal space, but hiding serious matters only creates vacuum and takes people away. I hope I get to read them bond well, also Laksh and Sanskar, their scenes are so warm. (Demanding reader is back. 😆)

Sanskaar, like any elder brother is very upset, but here he has a right to be upset. And no communication - most relationship issues arise from that, we talk at people, talk over them or talk about them, never to them.

And I love the demanding reader, you give me ideas or comfort

Amazing chapter. Looking forward for the next part. 👍🏼

Working on it, now that I am inspired by your comment, should work faster🤗

- Tia

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Thank you, thank you, thank you 🤗

My pleasure! 🤗

The credit goes to Google, I wanted the exact address of the CM office and it threw up articles, so it was easy to be accurate to the real timelines to the extent possible.

No, the credit still goes to you for attempting accuracy. But, thumbs up to Google since you insist. 👍🏼

She will have a role, shrewd though she is, it is this very shrewdness that I hope to use, to enable the story for closure (tiny spoiler - I have an event, a real life event which I will use in the story, so this character should help - hopefully) And though she will not have a direct role, there would be an indirect influence of her actions.

Regarding politicians not being elegant, true in most of the case - they are dowdy or gaudy - both extremes. But I know of lady politician (Nanapneni Rajkumar) in AP - whom I admire for her sense of dressing, very simple sarees (by her own admission none cost more than Rs. 1000 and it is believable) and artificial jewellery in the form of tiny colour beads with pendant and glass bangles, colour coordinated to her sarees. So I guess, I drew on her and not on the present real life CM of Bengal (as you said, no offence intended)

I am quite fond of political thrillers. This story is not exactly in that genre, yet I am quite excited by the introduction of Niranjana. Though the spoiler spoils nothing, it has managed to up my excitement a notch higher.

Okay. I have never heard about her, so I Googled this lady. Seems like she also had a career as an actress and wrote several novels. Good choice.

I like the paradox you wrote, which is why I sort of used it too, after a point when we reach the core which is the truth, we tend to believe all the layers covering it are true. Swara - as of now, it is imperative that she be whisked off to safety before she exposes herself or does something rash - like actually surrender herself. The six months leave which she asked is exactly for that also because the "other team" has an idea what would happen next and ...more in the next chapter😉

Thank you! Glad that we agreed on it, I almost thought it made no sense after posting it. Stop tantalizing with "more in the next chapter" and post the next part soon. I don't think I can contain so much suspense. 😆

Confession time - when I wrote the introduction - I had written about seven children, those who inherited the victory and vengeance and how each would loose something.

Uttara would have to lose her innocence - in Ritu's hands. But as I started on the draft for posting, I just could not have her being raped or assaulted - considering the ending of this tale, which I have already completed, it would be meaningless. I also did not want somebody who is basically a sweetheart to suffer through one of the worst things a woman has to live through, not to mention that the story would not be able to focus on what it was intended for (Sudhir would have a little late and would have tried to / succeeded in killing Ritu - too many complications). Which is why chapter 7 took so long and why it had a very mild toned down Ritu.

Even now, I am keeping my options regarding Ritu open,- is he reformed and truly contrite, or would he revert to his desire of obtaining Uttara? Inspector Bahir - no worries, he is a good friend of Sudhir, convinced that Sudhir has a thing for Uttara - so he is all protective.😆

That's so sweet of you Nyna. Unfortunately, reality is quite unforgiving. As a reader, I don't mind Uttara going through some hardship, because I feel she would grow into a stronger and evolved woman in the story. Outside stories, I want no woman to ever go through any of it.

Okay, so Inspector Bahir is Sudhir's wingman. Way to go Inspector Bahir. 😆

Both Swara and Sanskaar are confused here - Swara is actually scared of finding out who she is now that she knows that she is in love with him. She knows that the only way out of this quagmire is to find out who she is but then she needs the courage to face the fact the she was a part of the plan to destroy the Maheshwaris. And even if she wants to talk to him, she cannot.

I hope she doesn't end up doing wrong things in her confusion and fear.

Sanskaar - will now become proactive - old friendships would be renewed and new alliances forged, once they realise that all want the same thing. And as you observed, he could be shrewd in business but then he also believes in the best of everything. For him saving the office stationary, especially newspapers😉😉was more important and if had to spend a few thousands on 'paper' he might as well do it. Alas, it did not serve any useful purpose.

I was tired of Kavita being the villain - so here she will be all pervasive, but in a nice way- hopefully.

One more spoiler, I think I will burst with suspense on what happens next. 😭

Jesus! this guy spent thousands on papers to save newspapers. Certainly makes sense. 😆.. Just kidding, I get your point.

Ragini has always been a pleasure to write for me, and Laksh once I decided not to make him the wishy washy half dimensional character of the serial, became easier to pen.

Good decision. Love reading their scenes apart from SwaSan scenes. 😊

And regarding what he might have said?- Writer's secret 😈 If I am in a good mood, maybe I will have Ragini ask him that question and have him tell her😉

May good mood never leave your side. 😆😆

Sanskaar, like any elder brother is very upset, but here he has a right to be upset. And no communication - most relationship issues arise from that, we talk at people, talk over them or talk about them, never to them.

True. So much has happened in Sanskar's own life, Uttara faced Ritu all by herself and Laksh is on the verge of taking an important decision of his life. I am not sure how he is going to handle all these together, especially when he needs some emotional support as well, but I trust your writing enough that I look forward when he talks it out with his sibling and cousin.

And I love the demanding reader, you give me ideas or comfort

Working on it, now that I am inspired by your comment, should work faster🤗

Thank you Nyna, it means a lot. 🤗

Update soon.

- Tia.