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Originally posted by: kojagorimalik
Awesome loved it beautifully written
Moumita - so glad you liked it. And thanks a ton for being a sweetheart and making that thread for Dyuti.
Originally posted by: kojagorimalik
Awesome loved it beautifully written
When I read your story, then only I come to know how much hard work it need to be done to become a good story teller. You have researched so much in this story that leave me astonished. Feeling bad for Sanskar and Swara I guess this chapter is the start of the misunderstanding between the two. Good to see that Lakshya and Ragini finally give in to the passion. I am also worried about this Ritu guy I just hope Uttara don't get hurt. She is a sweetheart. One question rahte still plunges me is who was those 3 girls. I know Ragini and Swara were two and Who was the third one Uttara or Kavita. You also mentioned one of them will die, who will he/she be if it's Kavita or someone else?
Nynu🤗🤗UnRes for Chapter 8 Part 2I feel so much happened in this part .. so many eventsChapter 8, on the whole had covered almost one year, the events slowly signifying the house of cards.So Sudhir had Uttara followed but nothing materialized and he couldn't move forward in the case , though he have his doubts on Swara stillSpoiler alert - he will not give up on Swara - one way or the other.It was warming to see the bond between Swara and Ragini , the slow transition but the highlight was Swara 's dhulayi ..👏 I absolutely loved it . I was like Go Swara Go and then we have Adarsh breaking news of accepting offer from MSS .. It definitely shook DP but I know he felt heat of it in Part 3 ( I already read it so 😉).Ram though mostly was in BG ..I see him emerging to be one of key characters in past 2 updates( Esp Part 2 & Part 3). i wonder waht else you have in store for him.I loved Swara's dhulayi too😆 I mulled over only as to how many thugs she beats up, one is too few and three or four, possible but then if it were more that two, one of them could use Ragini as a shield, that scene did not pen itself😕 But two of them, perfect. Ram will be in the background, but will have an active role to pay.😉The Pari and Adarsh equation .. too good to read .We usually don't get to read about them and you are making them so lovable here .😳 and Uttara and Laksh supporting Adarsh ..lovely sibling bond over there .👏👏. Sujata 😆 The Entertainer remains intact😆Well, I have already made the previous generation into some villains, so spared them. Adarsh and Pari, I actually felt sorry for the way the serial treated them, hardly any dialogues and ridiculous villainy, so they are good here. Sujata is the drama queen, she will continue to entertain. (I loved visualising her worried about the puris getting cold and not giving two hoots about Adarsh and the rest)Swara,Orchids and the entire scene of Sanskaar watching her .. I loved that bit .I can titally visualise that scene before my eyes .. and I never knew there are so many colors of Orchids😆. Swara torn between her hope of love and fear..it had been strikingly stand out from few updates ..and Sanskaar as I see has moved on from Kavita clearly (From an emotional and that connection point of view,though she will always be an integral part I wouldn't mind for once) 😉Honest with you, that was a little of a filler with a teeny weeny clue in them - though it was basically to show Swara afraid of hoping a life with Sanskaar, and Sanskaar refusing to think about what his feelings for her could mean. And I am glad you would not mind Kavita being an integral part of their lives, she was a good soul and deserves to be remembered with affection.Mowgli and Baloo .. Nalini is fiance of Baloo .😆 Good touch there ..and this Ritu raj .. He doesnt give good vibes at all .. and Glad uttara shared her concerns with Swara and Ragini and is putting their advice in practiceI love office humour, my best memories of work are about that, and it is typical for nicknames. Plus office romance is also common - just mixed the two, though poor Swara had to bear the brunt. Now she is Mowgli for life😊and now comes best part .. Triple chocolate torte...hayee .. that whole scene .. so subtle yet currents all over ..bang on 😳😳❤️ bangaram ..***Sigh***😳 - the feels of a kiss that is not a kiss, the possibility is so very tantalising or as Sanskaar felt, quite threatening to his senses😉Over all ..It kept me engaged and hooked as always ⭐️👏Lucky❤️🤗LoveLucky
Hi Nyna,
So much happened in this last part. I still couldn't understand what Kasturi and Shobha's story is. Both the ladies left their daughter almost around the same time. From this part, it's clear that Kasturi has done something henious.Now Maheshwaris are aware of the danger they are surrounded. Would love to see what would be their defence mechanism.ThanksRia
Originally posted by: kojagorimalik
Woah dii...amazing this is rely wonderful ...but I m so sorry di the part where business discussions took place I did not understand a single word but got this much that Adarsh laptop had been tampered and information was secretly getting leaked...
Swara bday part and sanky hug was too soul searing...loved it loadzzz
Okay, so finally caught up with the story. Didn't know it was being updated. Read up from chapter 5 onwards. I love the pace of your story. Small significant details, business and past the build up between Swara and Sanskaar. Thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Hope to read it till the end.
Dear Nyna,
Oh, please do PM me when you update next. I do love this story...would love to read it as you update it. Don't worry about not having sent the PMs earlier, I only visit to read your story as of now. Just happened to visit to check if you'd updated and trust me when I say, I enjoyed reading the multiple chapters 😊Thank you again. Happy writing.
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