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Posted: 8 years ago
Awsmmm


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Aww sad part


Hope nandu will change her decision


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Read both your updates now...
Part 9 ...
Its was cute...and amazing too..
I really liked their convo's on phone...

Part 10...
Its was nice.and little bit emotional...
Both are equally hurt..
Now let see manik kya krega...

Very nicely penned ...
Good job..
Continue soon..
Keep smiling..
Take care..
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Posted: 8 years ago

Part-11

In Manik's room

Whenever Manik is frustrated,he used to play his guitar and his refreshment is music..developing his own music.

He started singing

Yeh Dooriyan
Yeh Dooriyan
Yeh Dooriyan

In Raahon Ki Dooriyan
Nigahon Ki Dooriyan
Hum Rahon Ki Dooriyan
Fanah Ho Sabhi Dooriyan

The images of Nandini leaving him came in front of him and uninvited tears rolled down his cheeks.

Kyun Koi Paas Hai
Door Hai Kyun Koi
Jaane Na Koi Yahan Pe

Aa Raha Paas Ya Door Mein Ja Raha
Janu Na Mein Hoon Kahan Pe

Yeh Dooriyan

He stopped when Cabir entered his room without a knock.He immediately wiped his tears.Cabir sat beside him and asked "Manik...kya hua..??Is everything fine..??"

He nodded slowly.

C-Manik...Nandini ne kuch kaha kya...??

Ma-kuch kya...bahut kuch kaha usne...

He said with a lump in his throat.

C-what...??Manik...saaf saaf bolo...

Ma-She left me...she thinks that we being together is impossible...

And he continued whatever Nandini has said to him with a pool of tears in his eyes while Cabir carefully listened to him.

C-Manik...calm down...

He rubbed his back and hugged him for a moment.

C-Manik...don't u think someone is influencing her..??

Ma-What do u mean..??

Manik wiped his tears and asked with a confused expression.

C-I mean...ab we are friends..and u'll take my suggestion right..??theek waise hi Nandini ke wo theen monkeys hai na...un mein se koi Nandini ke mind mein yeh sab batein inject kar rahe hai...I think...thujhe nahi lagtha...??

Manik started thinking.

C-I'm saying this because,Nandini zyada waqt friends ke saath hi hoti hai...aur she will share everything with them...

Ma-Navya...

He said interrupting Cabir.

C-Navya..??koun Navya...??

Ma-Arey unn 3 monkeys mein ek hai...yeh usi ka kaam hoga...

C-How can u be so sure..??

Ma-Arey of course I'm sure yaar...because jaha tak mein jaantha hu,Mukthi aur wo Aliya have some what positive impression on me...But this Navya..always brain washes her...

C-So...are u sure...??

Ma-Yes Cabir...I'm damn sure...Cabir...kuch karo uss Navya ko...tum na ek badaaa wala patthar le kar usske sar pe daalo..mar jayegi..(He said with twinkling eyes) ya phir leave her in the middle of the road...no...she will cross the road easily..Nandini ki tarah dar thodi na hai usko...ya phir Cabir..usko jungle mein chod ke aao...koi bechara animal kha jayegi...ya phir...

Manik started thinking.

C-Manik...Manik...relax...u r in love dude..and yeh murder plans kaha se beech mein aa gaya..??u think about ur lady love bro...

Manik ruffled his hair and said "Nandini...uff...she's driving me crazy bro...u know what..today she asked me to stay away..."

C-Manik...listen...yeh girls kabhi kisi baath directly nahi bolthe...they just prefer indirect way..just to torture us...

Ma-Isme indirect kya hai..??

C-She asked u to stay away..right..??

He nodded.

C-That means...she is asking u to find a new way to reach her...the way should neither hurt her family nor her...Do u get my point...??

Manik is back with his smirk and nodded.They both signaled each other and Cabir said "kuch bhi karne se pehle soch liya karo..ok...??"

He nodded like a child.

C-Acha Manik..Aunty aur uncle worried hai tere liye..go n talk to them..

Ma-Ok..

Cabir was about to leave but turned back and said "And uss Navya ko mujh pe chod dho..Don't worry...I'll handle her my way..."

Manik smiled at him and Cabir left.

...

"It's been a week...I haven't seen him since a week...I just hope he is fine...kuch ulta seedha toh nahi kiya hoga na...no...Nandu..think positive..."Nandini thought to herself.

Manik hasn't shown his face to her since that day but he used to see her hiding himself.A little hope filled his heart seeing Nandini like that,that too for him.

One fine day...

As usual,Nandini was thinking about Manik and walking with her friends.

Muk-Nandu...where r u lost...??

Nan-Nahi kuch nahi...

A-agar itna miss kar rahi hai toh...baath karna usse...

Nan-nahi aisi baath nahi hai...

Muk-But..

Nav-Mukthi...if she is telling that she is fine,then don't force her...leave it na..

Muk-Acha ok fine...Nandu...chalo let's have an icecream...

Nandini nodded in a no saying that she was not in a mood but they dragged her to icecream vendor on the road side.

Nan-Strawberry

Vendor-Sorry Mam...nahi hai...

Muk-koi baath nahi..kuch aur le lo..

Nan-Nahi Mukthi..rehne dho...mann nahi hai...

Remaining three took their flavors and insisted Nandini too to take something,but she refused.

She turned to other side when some random boy of 10-11 years old,called her "Dii"

"Yes.."Nandini asked him.

He handed over the icecream cone to her.

"Yeh kisne diya..??"She asked him while her friends looked at him.

"Jiju ne..."He answered.

Muk-Jiju...???

Nan-Koun jiju...??

Boy-wo lamba wala jiju...He said pointing his finger towards someone.

Everyone looked at the direction he was showing and a slight smile escaped from her lips seeing him,and she immediately suppressed it.Mukthi and Aliya giggled while exchanging looks.

Nan-Nahi chahiye...wapas kar dho...

She was about to return it but he refused.

Boy-Nahi dii...unhone manaa kiya hai wapas lene se...

Nan-Acha...toh yeh paise dhe dho...

She handed money in his hands and took the icecream while he ran towards Manik taking them.

Nandini gave a deadly glare at him and started walking with her friends.

Boy-Jiju...yeh lo...

Manik was shocked seeing money.He gritted his teeth and said "Rakh lo.." and went forcefully towards Nandini.

He pulled her towards him holding her hand.

"Do u guys mind leaving us alone...??"He asked looking at her friends while Nandini looked at him being shocked.

Mukthi and Aliya were ready to leave but Navya was about to utter something.Manik gave stern look at her which made her shiver seeing the blood shot eyes.So,she too followed Mukthi and Aliya.

Nandini was trying to free her hand.

Ma-Kya mein tumhe ice cream wala dhikhtha hu...??

Nan-I never said that..

Ma-toh phir why did u give him money...??

He asked firmly for which silence is her answer.He wiped ice cream traces at the corner of lips and licked his tip of fingers.

"Yummy" He said and winked.

"Chodiye mujhe...kya kar rahe ho aap..??"She said and freed herself.

Ma-Mein...mein toh bas apne girl friend se milne aaya tha...

Nan-Listen..I'm not ur girl friend..

Ma-I'm not talking about u...I'm talking about her...

He said pointing to a girl who was walking towards him and waving her hand to him.He too waved back and signaled her to come.Nandini just looked at her and at Manik with an expressionless face.


Done...

Thank u all the supporters and commenters...

Keep supporting...

Edited by keerthupranu - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Jealous is the best policy to get things out from the heart manik is doing the same with nandini so now how will nandini manages to hid her growing feeling for manik n what will cabir to stop navya make her fall in love with himself so that she stops brain washing nandini
Continue soon
Edited by devilkhushi - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
hehehehe
New entry I guess
Hope Manik and Cabir make Nandu agree
Nice story
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Posted: 8 years ago
Awesome.
Manik vl try to make nandani jealous
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Awsmmm


Awsmmm

Awsmmm

Superr manik with new girl ah

Nice idea

Super manbir

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Posted: 8 years ago
awesome update..
I guess manik will make nandu jealous... hehehehe!!
I'm so excited..
loved the update..
waiting for the next..
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Posted: 8 years ago

Part-12

The girl came running towards Manik and hugged him tightly.Much to Nandini's disappointment,Manik too encircled his hands around her waist and gave a look at Nandini.Nandini,who was gritting her teeth seeing them,immediately lowered her gaze to avoid eye contact.

Girl-Baby...I missed u so much...

She said like a child after breaking the hug.

Ma-Oh Babe...I too missed u...

He said with fake cuteness.

Girl-Baby...who is she...??

She asked pointing Nandini.Manik looked at her and said "Yeh...iska naam Nandini hai...aur iss ke aage mujhe kuch nahi patha..."

Nandini made an O face listening this and gave a deadly glare at Manik.

Ma-Nandini...This is Soha...My girlfriend...

He said stressing the word girlfriend and making his grip tighter on her.Tears welled up in her eyes and Manik observed this.

S-Hey Nandini...

Nan-Hi..

She said slowly.

Ma-Babe...it's too hot here...U go and wait in the car..I'll come in a while...

He said to Soha.

S-Oh...So sweet of u Baby...Acha Come soon huh..

Ma-Ok..

Soha left to his car leaving them alone.

Ma-Kya hua Nandu..??Is everything fine...??

She lifted her head up to see him but didn't answer.

Ma-Arey..yeh tears...??kya hua...?? Kuch chala gaya kya...aankhon mein...?? He asked sarcastically.

Ma-Bolo...dard ho raha hai...?? Ya phir...bura laga...??Soha ko dhekh ke...??

She saw him while widening her eyes.

Ma-U only told na..that I deserve a better girl...so...

Nan-Seriously Manik jii...mein yaha one week se aap ke baare mein soch soch ke pagal ho rahi thi..aur aap dhoosri girlfriend bana liya...??

She asked him while those tears fallen from her eyes.

Ma-Dhoosri...??? Mathlab...pehli koun thi...??

He asked with a slight smile and Nandini has nothing to say.She turned to leave to avoid further embarrassment.But Manik held her hand to stop and pulled her towards him.

Ma-Kya hua...?? Mujhe kisi aur ke saath dhekh ke khush nahi ho...???

Nan-Manik jii...Chodiye mujhe...aap ka girlfriend wait kar rahi hogi...jayiye...

She said firmly while trying to free her hand.

Ma-Wo...meri girlfriend nahi hai...wo meri best friend hai...kal hi US se aayi thi..bas milne aaya tha..

A mini-diwali was celebrated in her heart but she suppressed it and said "Whatever...chodiye mujhe..."

Ma-Ek baath ache se yaad rakho Nandu...u r the one and only girl in my life...

She freed herself and said "Manik ji...Itne samjhaane ke baadh bhi aap mere peecha kar rahe ho...This is not expected from u..."

Ma-Haa wo kya hai na...Manik Malhotra unexpected hi hothe hai...aadath daal lo...

Nandini gave an angry look and turned to leave.

Ma-Yaad rakna Nandu...I won't let u go...

She walked towards her friends without giving him any response.

"Yaar yeh ladki gussa kitni karthi hai..."He thought and smiled.

He went to his car and immediately Soha wrapped her arms around his neck.

S-Baby..Kitni dher kar dhiya tumne...??

Manik removed her hands and said "Acting karne bola tha...over acting nahi..."

S-Acha...I thought it is true...

She chuckled.

Ma-Listen Soha...I'm hers...totally hers..only hers...samjhi tum..??

He said firmly.

S-Manik...relax...I was just joking...

Ma-Mein serious hu...

S-Acha ok baba...chale...??

He smiled a little and drove.

...

"Samjhthe kya hai apne aapko...aur wo chipkali...kaise chipak gayi hai unn pe...chi...be-sharmi.."She was giving all the scoldings she knew to Manik and Soha while reaching her friends,who were waiting for her.

Muk-Kya hua Nandu...?? Ab khush hai na...?? usko dhekh liya...

A-haa...one week se kya haal banaa ke rakha hai isne...

Nan-Will u guys please shut up...??

Muk-Oaahh...itnaaa gussaa...?? Manik pe ya uss ladki pe...??

Nan-Mukthi...this isn't a joke ha...Inspite of asking him to stay away,wo phir se mera peeche aa gaye...

Muk-Yaar...why don't let him do what he wants to do..??

Nan-Because wo end mein hurt ho jayenge...

Muk-Aur why don't u want him to get hurt...??

Nan-Because mein...

She stopped in middle and saw Mukthi who was giggling.

Muk-Haa tum...??

Nandini looked down here and there searching for an answer.

Muk-Koi baath nahi Nandu...U don't need to answer us..just answer urself...just wait...I'll get the bike...

Aliya too bid bye and left while Mukthi went to bring her bike.Nandini looked at Navya who was lost somewhere.

Nan-Navya...kya hua...??tum kuch bol kyun nahi rahi ho...??

She tapped her shoulder.

"Baap re baap...wo aankhein...agar mein kuch ulta seedha bola toh wo mujhe maar dalenge...look toh aisa hi diya tha...nahi Navya..."She thought to herself.

Nan-Navyaaa...

She screamed.

Nav-Haa...ha Nandu...

Nan-Say something...

Nav-why r u asking me...??Listen to ur heart Nandu...wo kabhi galath nahi hothi...acha mein chalthi hu..

She said and left immediately.

...

In the evening,

Manik rewinded the incident and smiled sheepishly.Just then Cabir entered.

C-Manik...thu theek hai na..??why are u smiling..??

Ma-Arey Cabir...

He stood and hugged him.

C-Arey waah...kya hua...?? Aaj kya kaand kiya tumne...??

Manik smiled and explained everything.

C-What...??u introduced Soha as ur girlfriend...??

Manik nodded with the same foolish smile.

C-kuch positive result hai..??

Ma-Haa...bura toh laga usko...

Just then,Manik's phone started ringing,flashing the name Nandu.

C-Bahut jhor se jhatka laga hoga...??

Manik smiled and winked at him and Cabir understood what he has to do.As soon as he answered the call,all Nandini could listen was...

"Ah...Soha...wait na...lag jayegi tumhe...aaram se..."Manik giggled while saying them and imagining Nandini's expression.Cabir pressed his mouth to stop himself from bursting out.

Nandini's eyes popped out listening that hell and she just fisted her hands,not knowing what to do.

Just then Manik signaled Cabir and Cabir said in a girl tone "Baby...chalo na...Show me ur bedroom.."

Nandini just wanted to throw the phone away while Manik was enjoying that silence too.

"Acha ok babe...let me attend this call.."He said and acted as if he doesn't know anything.

Ma-Hello...Nandu...Are u there...??

She came out from her dreamland after killing Soha in it and said "Sorry...wrong dial..." and immediately cut the call.

Manik smiled again imagining her situation.

C-Kya hua...??

Ma-kuch nahi..asli jhatka toh ab laga...Cabir...seriously...bedroom...??

He said and they both rolled on bed laughing.

C-Manik...but zyada hurt hua toh..??

Ma-Nahi Cabir...I have already cleared that Soha is just my friend...

C-Acha...phir bhi itna gussaa...

Ma-Haa..wo toh hai...u r right Cabir...yeh girls na bahut ajeeb hai...mathlab...chahey wo pyaar ho,gussa ho,nafrath ho,jalan ho sab kuch..why they have to show them in the form of tears...??

C-Because they are girls...and tears are their biggest weapon...

Ma-hmm...

Saying this,he tried to call Nandini.But she cut the call.

C-kya hua..??

Ma-kaat diya...

...

"patha nahi kya kar rahe hai yeh dhonon...God I just wanna kill him...But Nandini...Are u jealous...??par kyun...??tumhe toh khush honi chahiye na...no...God..yeh kya ho raha hai mujhe...why can't I be happy for him...?" Nandini thought after cutting the call.

Manik immediately pulled Cabir and took a selfie in his room and sent to Nandini with a message

AB TOH PICK THE CALL NANDU

She saw the pic and answered the call when he called the next time.But she hasn't spoken any word.

Ma-Nandu...gussa ho..??

Silence

Ma-Sorry yaar...mein mazak kar raha tha...

Silence

Ma-Bola na Sorry...wo..he is my friend Cabir...aur wo Soha ko imitate kar raha tha..bas...

Nan-Do whatever u wanna do..

She said angrily and cut the call.

"Yaar..yeh ladki kitna gussa karthi hai..."He said while staring at the screen.

"Tujhse bhi zyada...??"Cabir asked in surprise.

"Hah...mera gussa..wo toh abhi tak dhekha nahi na.."Manik said.

"Agar dhekhegi toh kab ka bhaag chuki hothi..."Cabir said and grinned.

"Hmm...bahut gusse mein hai yaar...manaana toh padega..."Manik said.

C-toh aage kya plan hai..??

Ma-I have to make her confess...confess her feelings...

C-agar nahi kiya toh..??

Ma-Karegi...jaroor karegi...

He said while looking at her picture.

Done...

First longest update I guess...

Want lamba lamba comments...Response bahut kam hai...😭

So next update ke liye thoda wait karna padega...

Thank u all the supporters and commenters...

Keep supporting...

Edited by keerthupranu - 8 years ago
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Hey there!
Concept is amaZing! Good going dear!
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PS : I am seeing you are not commenting on my story. :( Didnt you liked them?
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