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daydreamers

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Posted: 8 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: shruthiravi
It's beautiful. Yes I felt it for Bharat-Mandavi but the lines below made me think of Urmila when Lakshman is hit with Brahmastra
Imtehaan na lo mera yun hi tum

Dil ke diye ko jalne do zara

Zindagi hai saamne

Durr tak jana hai humein

Laut aao bhi tum

Diye ko jalne do anth tak tum...

Thank you shruthi...

You know what you all have posed a big challenge in front of me 😆

Jab sira and lakshmila scenes actual mein ayenge I'll have to think out of the box...

Nonetheless I love challenges.. Hope that I would be able to live up everyone's expectations 😃

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JeeLeZaraa

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Posted: 8 years ago

#52

Great post!
Thanks for the email.
I love reading shayari's and poems.
Just not good at writing them 😆
Looking forward to them

Edited by JeeLeZaraa - 8 years ago

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Posted: 8 years ago

#53

27/02- USI RAAH

Ateet aya hai dwaar par mere

Khushi ko saath liye apne

Mile hai kuch sab aise

Jaanu jaise sadiyon se mein

Chali thi ussi raah par barso pehle

Maqsad tha kuch aur hi par

Aj jab aye phool dar par hai

Yaad kaanton ko dilaye hai

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sugunmanas

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Posted: 8 years ago

#54

Jaan loved it ya😳
yahi hoga pm mein hai na
super short and sweet😳
Is it in Shanta's POV or Mandodari's POV
i will edit it if am wrong😆😆😆

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daydreamers

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Posted: 8 years ago

#55

Haan manas yahi h pm me 😆

Haan Shanta hai Shanta 😉

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sugunmanas

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Posted: 8 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: daydreamers
Haan manas yahi h pm me 😆
Haan Shanta hai Shanta 😉

ya i felt its shanta why not mando 🤣
bichari mando use bhi kuch likna yar woh bura manjayegi🤣
kal itna kuch kiya usnae amrit kalas prapth karli 😆😆

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shruthiravi

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Posted: 8 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: daydreamers
27/02- USI RAAH

Ateet aya hai dwaar par mere

Khushi ko saath liye apne

Mile hai kuch sab aise

Jaanu jaise sadiyon se mein

Chali thi ussi raah par barso pehle

Maqsad tha kuch aur hi par

Aj jab aye phool dar par hai

Yaad kaanton ko dilaye hai

Did you mean Shanta's pain in these lines. Her memory and when she saw the happy brides, the pang of pain she might have felt.

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daydreamers

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: shruthiravi

Did you mean Shanta's pain in these lines. Her memory and when she saw the happy brides, the pang of pain she might have felt.

Yup...

I was pretty much disturbed with the expression she had when sita asked her to accompany them to ayodhya.. Either am thinking too much or cv's are clueless where they are taking Shanta. Coz at this juncture I felt a loop was open..

Plus the way she describes her decision and marriage is smthn amiss...

That's the reason I felt she needs to be healed...

Waiting if Shanta will come up again or not...

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: sugunmanas

ya i felt its shanta why not mando 🤣
bichari mando use bhi kuch likna yar woh bura manjayegi🤣
kal itna kuch kiya usnae amrit kalas prapth karli 😆😆

As of now mandodari lacks depth manas...

I think it will be during sita's abduction her netra will open 😆 that's the pt where we may see some depth to her character.. Again its a wild guess.. Let cv's manage it 😆

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KrishnaSourav

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Posted: 8 years ago

#60

beautiful poem

is it Shanta's point of view

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