TS THE FOUR PART 6A : BEHIND ENEMY LINES BEGINNING PG 35 22/05 - Page 10

Shivam...

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Posted: 8 years ago

#91

Originally posted by: Rex_Ryan
shivam...read all the four parts in one go...
loved them to the core and still laughing ...especially liked the characterization of lakshman and shatrughan as prankster, fun loving yet overprotective for their elder brothers and also urmila being chirpy ...but little disappointed with characterization of shuthkirti as a cry baby all the time...
thanks for pm ...and pls do write more in future

Thank You Ryan for your feedback and liking the updates

I will try to read more about shrutkirti's character from books , so maybe in next update i can show her more qualities .😃

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Rex_Ryan

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Posted: 8 years ago

#92

Originally posted by: shivam030291

Thank You Ryanfor your feedback and liking the updates

I will try to read more about shrutkirti's character from books , so maybe in next update i can show her more qualities .😃

thanks for considering my opinion as far as I know about shrutkirti's character she was an intelligent and kind hearted women also a very good listener and an advisor

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chandanagimsy

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Posted: 8 years ago

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This is amazing... The way you described the bond between the brothers...naughty shatrugun innocent bharat.. And love between lakshmila wow...the most amazing is realisations by the people...do continue soon..

This is hilarious which we can never deny.. Light hearted collection of moments between all the pairs.. Wow... Keep continuing

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Maverick_me

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Posted: 8 years ago

#94

Lovely conversation between the couples and I almost read a novel 😉

Lakshmila are awesome

Thanks for the pm

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Fouzia

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Posted: 8 years ago

#95

WOW Shivam Awesome is small word for you work

Eagerly waiting for more.

And special mention for the size of your mini novel loved to the core pls do all storie this long or more.

Absolutely loving it.

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Jannat

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Posted: 8 years ago

#96

🤣 poor Mandevi 🤣
its mix of All -Family time,Sibling's Bond,love, Separation, mischievous work & As usual Lakshmila 👏 Wonderful ..continue writing..

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Shivam...

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Posted: 8 years ago

#97

Originally posted by: DilMereSuntaNhi
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Baapre Baap ! This looks like a Mini Novel 😆
And Valimiki Role , You fit in to it vry much 😆😉

Thanks You SRu

Expect some more from this new Valmiki

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Ankita.11

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Posted: 8 years ago

#98

Aawww!!😃

Considering the melancholic tone of the episodes nowadays,these cute moments of our beloved lakshmila,sira,bharvi and shatshru is what brings contentment.Liked the different shades you brought into the characters.Loved your story overall.👏and thanks for the pm.😊

P.S:How much time did it take you to complete this??😕

it took me an hour to complete reading!!!

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Shivam...

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: Ankita.11

Aawww!!😃
Considering the melancholic tone of the episodes nowadays,these cute moments of our beloved lakshmila,sira,bharvi and shatshru is what brings contentment.Liked the different shades you brought into the characters.Loved your story overall.👏and thanks for the pm.😊

P.S:How much time did it take you to complete this??😕
it took me an hour to complete reading!!!

Hi Ankita , Thanks a lot for liking the Post.

I had some scenes in mind , just needed to combine them in a meaningful plot .

Took me about 5 days to do writing and editing . Ya it was very long , 11000 words approx.

My Lakshmila group memebers were after my life for the post to be posted yesterday only , so I had to miss a couple of scenes in this story😆

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