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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: shravsss

@dochdoe..

wow gal...
superb it was...
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">i loved it...</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">You have awesomely written..</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">especially the dream sequence was awesome...</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">Raman's characterization was so perfect...</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">Ishu and Ruhi were so cute, sharing the same unsung bond...</font>
<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">More than a daughter and mother... it was so good to read...</font>
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<font color="#333333" face="Helvetica Neue, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif">LOved this OS dear...</font>
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thanks :)
Im so glad that you liked it :)
maya252 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago

thanks :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
@ -Divyankaran-
First of all i cannot believe raman forgot his first anniversary 😛 sowie 😆

i loved how u incorporated d song in d os! 😊 👏

Lovely first anniversary, atleast dey consummated  😆

Great effort.. looking forward to read more from u!


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Posted: 9 years ago
@ dochdoe it was so beautiful and sweet. I completely loved it. u justified with the each and every line of this os. I wish if u could give us the confession also. I hope u made my wish true
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Posted: 9 years ago
@dochdoe
doc... Loved it
Ishi-Maam - choo chweet
Totally a wonderful job
Aww... That beach thing was just a dream
I loved few lines too much
Hats off for this work.
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: dochdoe


awww... I'm flattered... I was really nervous, I tthought I lost the plot... im so glad you liked it :D
come on don't flatter me so much, I've read your work, and Im more eager to read your os than anything else :D

lol. which of my oses hv u read to say dat? 😆 I dont think any of dem matches some of the brilliantly written stories i hv seen on the forum.😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Hello my lovelies,

This one is a TS and it will have 2-3 parts.( edit: it actually stretches on till 5 parts!)
The TS is gonna be based on two songs- one of which is Judaai (Badlapur) and the other song is Katra Katra (Alone)  (this song was challenged to me by crazy_neha). Videos(or audios) are embedded in btw wherever the songs are used in the TS. English translations of hindi dialogues are added in grey.
Also the TS will have mature content.(I know a lot of u wanted me to write that kind of content 😆😉)
Those of you who are not interested in reading mature content, pls do not venture into this.


Right now I am updating Part 1. There is no mature content in dis part btw. 😊

Hope you enjoy the TS! 😃 


TS: Katra Katra 


Part 1

It was almost 12:00 clock in the night now.

Raman was driving to Rishikesh. (Rishikesh is located in the foothills of the Himalyas, in the state of Uttarakhand. Personally I hvnt been to Rishikesh, so apologies for any errors in the story). 

Their company was planning to set-up a plant in the city, he had to visit there to finalise the land deal.

He had been driving non-stop for almost 5 hrs now. He hadnt even stopped for a single dhaba for food on the way. 
He was tired ofcourse, he had left for Rishikesh directly from work. But he dint want to stop, he did not want to take rest.

Anyway his final destination was less than an hour away.
But that wasnt really a reason for him for not stopping now, the thing was that he cudnt affort to stop, he cudnt afford to feel.

There were too many painful associations with this place..he hadnt dared to visit Rishikesh after wat had happened two yrs back in the city.
He dint want to visit now too, but he had no choice bcos Mihir was keeping ill for sometime, and there was no other senior in the office who could handle this deal. Now he just wanted to wrap up his work there and get back home as quickly as he cud .. without any emotions, memories or feelings coming in..
But cud he avoid dem all?

Ranjhan dhoondhan main chaleya
Ranjhan mileya naa ye...
Jigraan vichon agan laga ke Rabba
Laqeeran vich likh di judaai

[I went out to find my lover,
but couldn't find the lover..
O God, having started a fire in my heart,
why have you written separation in my fate..]


The sign-board on the side told him he was only 5 kms away from the city. 

His heart was beating heavily.  He was unable to resist the influx of memories, no matter how hard he tried. It pained severly inside.

It was foggy outside, the car wipers were on to clear the mist. But how much cud he clear the blurr caused by d non-stop tears falling from his eyes..


[YOUTUBE]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t2VaF0ZX65w[/YOUTUBE]

Kho gaya, gum ho gaya
Waqt se churaaya tha jo
Apna banaaya tha..
wo tera, wo mera
Saath nibhaaya tha jo
Apna banaaya tha..

[it's lost, missed,
what was stolen from time itself,
and was made my own..
that closeness that was there,
between you and me,
that we had embraced..]

2 yrs back..

Raman had gone to the US for sometime. In the meantime Ishita was attending a medical camp in Rishikesh.

And then one shocking news had changed his life forever. 

He still remembered that day..he had been trying to connect to her phone since morning, but all his efforts failed.

Later during the day he got to know that a landslide had occured in Rishikesh , and he had lost his wife in it.
Though they cud never recover her body..but then nobody in the rest of the team of doctors had survived.

--

He had still not recovered from the loss, the memories still seemed to be so fresh..
Infact they were playing right now in his mind non-stop, back to back..especially in this territory, which he had been trying to avoid for the longest time..

Chadariya jheeni re jheeni
Chadariya jheeni re jheeni
Aankhein bheeni ye bheeni ye bheeni
Yaadein jheeni re jheeni re jheeni..

[The sheet is thin, worn..
(the meaning here is that it's a little transparent, as it is wet with tears.)
My eyes are moist,
The memories are delicate...]

He continued driving.

He looked into the rear view mirror of the car.

And then he saw the sight of a very familiar pair of eyes in the mirror..
of Ishita's eyes..

It took some time for him to register wat he saw..
and then he turned around in shock ..
Only to realise she wasnt there, ofcourse.

His mind was playing with him, he thought.

"Kitna bhi bhaag loon main humaari yaadon se Ishita..kabhi bach nahin sakta main inse.." he spoke to himself
[No matter how much I try to run away from our memories.. I can never get way from them]

He finally had to stop the car on the way, he parked on the side. He cudnt take it anymore. 
He opened the door of the car, and turned around on his seat towards the car door to catch some air.

He cried his heart out..he cried loud.

Aisa bhi kya milna, saath ho ke tanha
Aisi kyun sazaa hum ne hai paayi, raanjhaNa ve
Phir se mujhe jeena, tujh pe hai marna
Phir se dil ne di hai ye duhaai, saajana ve
Lakeeron pe likh di kyun judaai..

[What kind of meeting this is, separated even though together..
Why have I received such a punishment, O beloved..
I have to live again, I have to die for you,
This my heart says again, O beloved.
why have you written separation in my fate..]

Ghair sa hua khud se bhi, naa koi mera
Dard se kar le chal yaari, dil ye keh raha
Kholoon jo baahein, bas gham ye simaT rahe hain
Aankhon ke aage, lamhe ye kyun ghaT rahe hain
Jaane kaise koi sehta Judaaiyaan..

[I became separated from myself, no one is mine..
Make friends with pain, my heart says now.
If I open my arms, only sorrows come to me,
I don't know why these moments are taking place in front of my eyes..
I don't know how someone bears with separations..]


"Ishita kahan ho tum yaar..kyun chodke chali gayee tum mujhe aise.."

[Ishita where are you..Y did you leave me like that..]

He took his time to calm. 

He noticed 2 sign boards right in front of where he was sitting, one which read: "Bhulla lake..500 mts ahead" 
and the other one read "Hotel Paramount..10 Kms ahead"

Hotel Paramount..the one he was gonna stay in tonight. 

He finally took a deep breath and got back into the car.

But then again his eyes welled up in tears..he covered his face with his palms. 
His head pained severely..

He felt the touch of a familiar hand on his hair. 
He removed his fingers which were pressing his eyes, and turned to the left.

Ishita was sitting on the seat next to the driver's seat.

She ran her fingers softly over his temple..his cheeks..his stubble..

He sighed and looked at her sight in disbelief..there was a deep sense of happiness and satisfaction he felt on seeing her.

She smiled at him.

"Ishita.."

He raised his hand to touch her..but her figure seemed to evaporate in thin air..

"Raman..u need to take some rest now..d memories are overwhelming.. 
the hotel is just 10 kms from here..u need to reach there and get some sleep" Raman spoke to himself.

His phone rang.

He cut the call on seeing the name that popped on the screen: Shagun

"Bloddy bitch. She wont leave me for a second. I married her again for my kids, and now she wudnt stop following me and filthing my life no matter wherever I go" he spoke.


***

It was 1:00 am in the night.

"Sir here are your room keys" the receptionist handed over the keys to Raman.

It had started raining outside now.

Chadariya jheeni re jheeni
Chadariya jheeni re jheeni
Aankhein bheeni ye bheeni ye bheeni
Yaadein jheeni re jheeni re jheeni 


***

He unlocked his hotel room door. 

The lighting in the room seemed to be dim, only a single light was on.

He tried switching on a few more room lights..but they seemed to trip.

"Ab baarish mein kuch bhi dhang se nahin chalega" he spoke

[Now nothing will work properly in the rain]

He pulled open his sweater and threw it on the side. 

He tried looking out for water, he found a glass and a jug kept on one side.
But there was no water, neither in the jug nor in the glass.

"Paagalon waala hotel hai ye!" se spoke

[This a mad hotel!]

He went to the washroom. 

He spilled some water on his face and washed his hands.

As he wiped his face with the towel..he seemed to notice a red saree hanging on the side.

He pulled the towel away in shock. 
He realised it was only the bathroom curtain which he had misunderstood for the saree.

He pressed his hands over his eyes for sometime..then got out of the washroom.

He noticed the glass was filled with water now.

"Koi aaya kya andar?" [Did anyone come inside]
He looked towards the room entrance door, it seemed to be closed, there dint seem to be any movement.

"Anyway" he spoke, and drank the water in the glass.

He changed his clothes and sat comfortably on the bed. 
He felt like watching some TV..he wanted to divert his mind. Afterall the day had been really exhausting and tough for him so far.

He switched on the TV..Comedy circus was on on Sony.

"Aah! Chalo comedy is therapeutic! Lets watch this stuff.." he spoke.

It was Krishna and Sudesh performing. Raman actually laughed on some of the gags.

And then they invited a lady partner to perform with them on stage.

"Aaa.aaa!.." Raman screamed at the sight of the lady on screen.

He got so scared that he jumped down from the bed and ran to the room door.

"Bhoot! bhoot!" he shouted running down the hotel gallery.
[Ghost! Ghost!]

"Saab saab kya hua!" one of the hotel staff stopped him.
[Sir sir what happened!]

Raman: "Wo wo..bhoot..bhoot..wo Tv mein..wo kamre mein.."

[Ghost..in the TV..in the room]

Hotel Staff: "Saab..yahan koi bhoot woot nahin..aap chaliye..chaliye aap mere saath kamre mein"
[ Sir..there is no ghost..come..come with me to the room]

He took Raman to the room. Raman was still breathing very heavily.

Hotel staff: "Saab batayie..kahan hai bhoot?"
["Sir tell me..where is the ghost?"]

Raman: "Wo..wo tv mein.."

[In the TV..]

Raman pointed towards the TV. Comedy Circus was still on.

Hotel Staff: "Kya saab wo to heroini hai!"

[ Sir..she is the heroine!]

Raman: Haan aur wo meri biwi hai..par meri biwi to marr chuki hai!

[Yes..but she is my wife..who is dead!]

Raman pulled out his wallet and showed Ishita's photo to the hotel staff.

Raman: "Ye dekho Ye dekho meri biwi ki photo..she is my wife Ishita.."
[See..see.. my wife's photo]

Hotel Staff: "Haan saab shakal to bilkul same to same hai! But ye TV wali madam Ishita nahin Divyanka Tripathi hain! Bahut hi famous heroini hain ye! Aur ye apki wife to South Indian lag rahin hain..par Divyankaji to bhopal se hain.."

[Yes sir..she looks the same! but the lady on the TV is not Ishita but the famous TV actress Divyanka Tripathi. And your wife looks South Indian..but Divyankaji is from Bhopal]

Raman: Divyankaa..hmmm

Hotel Staff: Saab aap pls ghabrayiye mat..

[Please dont get scared sir]

Raman: Arey ghabraoon kaise nahin.. j..j.. jab main aaya tha to paani ka glass khaali tha, jab main moo dho ke nikla to bhara hua tha..

[ How shud i not be scared? W..w..when I came the glass of water was empty..when i came out of the washroom it was full]

Hotel Staff: Oho Saab maine hi wo aake bhara tha!

[Oho Sir I only came and filled it!]

Raman: Ok..Theek hai..tum jaao ab yahan se

[Ok..ok..now you go from here]

Hotel Staff: Saab aap aaram se soyie gaa

[Sir..pls sleep comfortably]

He left the room.

Raman locked the room from inside. He switched the TV off..and all the lights except his table lamp.

He sat on his bed and looked at Ishita's photo for a long time...and later pressed her pic close to his heart.

He finally kept his wallet on the side table..switched off the table lamp..and lied down on the bed putting his right arm over his eyes.

Sleep wasnt coming..he had been lying on the bed for almost an hour now.

"Raman" He heard a voice.

"Hmmm" he replied.

He pulled away his arm and looked towards his left.

Ishita was lying next to him on the bed..turned on one side..looking at him lovingly.

He opened his mouth to scream..but she raised her hand and shut his mouth softly with it.

" Raman main hi hoon " she said

[Raman its me only]

" Please dont be scared" she continued

Raman raised his hand to hold her hand. And indeed he could touch her. He pulled her hand away gently.

Raman: "Ish..Ish..Ishita.."

His eyes filled with tears, his lips curved into a smile.

He raised his hands to feel her face.. he ran his hands through her hair.. brushed his knuckles across her cheeks..

Ishita: "Abhi bhi darr lag raha hai kya?"

[Are you still scared?]

He chuckled. 

Raman:" Arey apni biwi se to hamesha darr lagta hai!"

[You are always scared of your wife!]

She laughed with him.
She wiped his tears.

Ishita: "I missed you Raman"

Raman: "Hmmm" he spoke looking into her eyes..

She bent forward and kissed him softly on the lips.

Ishita: "Ab seedha lait jao Raman"

[Lie down straight Raman]

He followed her instructions.

She ran her fingers over his temple..through his hair..

Ishita: "Bahut der se nahin so paa rahe naa tum"

[You havnt been able to sleep for long..right]

Raman: "Haan..aisa lagta hai saalon se nahin soyaa hoon"

[It feels as if I havent slept for yrs..]

Ishita: "Koi baat nahin..ab apni aakhein band karo]

[No problem..now close your eyes]

Raman: "Hmmm"

She continued caressing his forehead.. and within seconds he went into deep slumbler..


                                                *End of part 1*

Link to Part 2 : Part 2


Links to my other stories: Peace..'s Index

Anyone interested in PM notifications for my stories- OSes/TSes/SSes etc. pls buddy the id: peace_PMs linked in this postpeace_PMs

Edited by peace.. - 9 years ago
shravsss thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
dear pallavi... 🤗
waiting for the secnd part...
this part was awesome...

dt raman ki biwi... i was literally shocked...😲.😕
im still in confusion... woh hamshakal hi h naa...😲😕

anyaways waiting for the next part...
its interesting...😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
Pallavi did Vidya.anand will join in thi OS. I would request her to write the story of Sawan Aaya Hai please.This song have lovely meaning I think will suit IshRa and Vidya will be the best to write this Romantic story.   Thank you.   
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: usaonly

Pallavi did Vidya.anand will join in thi OS. I would request her to write the story of Sawan Aaya Hai please.This song have lovely meaning I think will suit IshRa and Vidya will be the best to write this Romantic story.   Thank you.   

Vidya is not sure yet.. she said she will write if she can find time. I will PM her ur song request. Or maybe u cud PM her and insist her to join in! 😊