I think the scene is nice but the writing could be better also you have put HD instead of Zain in some place, which I thought was a little off. Please thoda editing ki zaroorat hai spelling mistakes etx. Pls don't be offended but I feel esp with mature OS as a reader I would like to read a well written one. Your idea and the scene is nice but your writing can be better pls write more. Thx
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