I want to comment on one of your songfics but the thread is closed for comments :(
So I am sharing it here. Hope you wouldn't mind.
The One
I know this is too soon to comment on a fic that is more than 2 years old. But I found it just recently, so here I begin!
Over the next week their random hit and misses continue, and you have to wonder how in a city as big as Mumbai, two such different people keep meeting by chance.
Bhagya 😆
Abhi can't stop thinking about her and it's really bizarre, why is he so curious about this random girl?
I like that you didn't stop with this sentence but actually gave an explanation for him being attracted to her. He doesn't feel like a Rockstar but Abhishek when he is with her. But I didn't understand why Pragya finds him as a ridiculous rockstar. As far as I read, he didn't do anything ridiculous yet.
Because professor girl's appeal doesn't come across in bare details on a page, you need to have her in front of you and hear her sarcastic voice mocking your weaknesses in a helpful way and you need to see her sweet innocent surprise about silly things and the way her smile lights up her face and just to feel how warm and genuine her presence is...
I was like this 😃 when I was reading these lines. I love this so much.
So Tanu breaks up with him via Skype
You disappointed me by showing that he didn't break up with Tanu but Tanu broke up with him. The 'via skype' phrase made me 🤣
Because fate is smiling on him that day, the business suit guy goes in the opposite direction and Pragya starts to walk past him. He reaches out to gently catch her arm and greets her with a grin and a loud, "Eeey, chashmish."
He found out the result without even asking her and is openly showing his happiness over the failed meeting. I like your Abhi who doesn't live in denial - he gets confused initially, but then he thinks more about it and finds a solution. He also doesn't need anyone to help him realize his feelings. I like this.
They go to the movies a few times, but often they can't agree on what to see and it's hard to block out that much time between their commitments to their families and their jobs. Abhi eventually learns not to care what movie they see because in the dark of the theatre, Pragya is comfortable snuggling up to him, and he can have his arm around her shoulders, and it's one of the only ways that she's ok with him pushing the boundaries on touch.
And he wants to kiss away her doubts but if there's one thing he has learned about his professor girl, it's that her mind has to be at peace before the walls around her heart come down even a little bit, and kissing her too early would not help his cause.
The above two are my absolute favourites (though I can tell that the whole fic took a top place among my favourite fics)
P.S. I quoted many more lines initially but then it felt like I am quoting the entire post. 😆 I feel that your song fics are a little different from your other fics. May be just my imagination. But I would love to see more songfics from you! 😳
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