ZaYa OS| I Give Up

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Posted: 10 years ago
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He came out the washroom, pulling on his tee shirt.
His eyes fell on her huddled figure, curled upon the massive bed, the spread over her head.
He sighed as he sat beside her and slowly pulled back the blanket.
His throat, for some reason constricted with an emotion he couldn't name.
Who pulled down her blanket for the past three months? He thought, tears threatening to spill any moment.
He looked at her face. It refelected what his face showed.
Exhaustion.
He personally felt drained of emotions and energy. Something he was stripped of the moment she walked of his life.
He had no idea how many times he wished the things weren't the way they were and only if the staff was competent enough to check the damn elevator.
He sighed again, his breath blowing tendrils of her from her face.
He did not know what to believe anymore.
He did not want to ponder on who filed that complaint.
The past three months felt like a dream. A really bad dream.
He hoped with all his might that he would wake up and she would be beside him in his arms.
He yearned for her.
He hoped it all will go away. He had lost so much.
His superhero, his idol.
His humanity, his smile, his happiness.
Her. The reason for his bleak existence.
He noticed her stirring and he removed his hand from her arms.
He noticed the finger marks on the wrists.
Rage coursed through him as he remembered that bas***d touching her.
The sight was enough to make him sober.
"Zain." He heard her whisper.
And that was his undoing.
For the past three months, all the bottled up emotions and pent up exhaustion came crashing upon him, in wave after wave.
He slid down the bed and hugged his knees.and cried his heart out.
This time, she was there to console him. Unlike all the times he sat alone in a corner.
He never had felt so alone.
Her arms wrapped around his shoulders.
He turned back and hugged her waist, sobbing into it.
Why did the hand that carresed his head felt so much more soothing.
Why did the silence that hung in the air with so many unsaid emotions felt more comforting to him than his brothers words or mothers touch?
He knew.
He had known all along.
"I give up Aliya." He said, his voice muffled.
He could feel her tears falling in his cheek.
He knew she was crying because he was.
He wondered how he had doubted her in the first place.
"Shh Zain. Sab thik ho jayega."
He scrambled up and took her in a bone crushing embrace.
"I can't. I dont have the strength to pretend anymore. I dont have the strength to convince myself that I hate you." He said against her hair.
Her arms had automatically wrapped themselves around him.
"I give up Aliya." He sobbed.
"I just love you too much."
*****
Missed my one shots? I knw you didn't.
Likes and comments people. You all know the drill, but rarely perform them.
I swear I'll stop writing.
Constructive critisism is wholeheartedly welcome.
Typed it up in my cell phone so if you come across any typos, don't forget to ignore them.
And please dont leave a bunch of adjectives. I would like to know why you found the os 'superb' or 'awesome.'
Thank you.
I'll send out pms later.
-Sanika :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow beautiful os
Loved it
Very beautifully written
The feelings and emotions were portrayed so fabulously
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You are an amazing writer! :D
I loved this one-shot and they way you penned down Zain's inner battle.
Gosh, I so want that last part to happen in the show now.


Needless to say, I've bookmarked this one too. πŸ˜†
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Posted: 10 years ago
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girl i'm completely smitten by the writer in you!
i just love you yaar lollipop!
his feeling, his thoughts, his action..all of them were sheer brilliance
especially the end.ah! it made me go back to the day maamu came back home n he slept on her lap
i just looovvveeedd! it!
so much that next part of the drabble u just commented on will be dedicated to you n you will get it tomorrow evening itself
love u lollipop
keep giving me ur daily dose of updates..
Edited by vinu127 - 10 years ago
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It was indeed a beautiful os...
Loved it sanika
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It was really touchy yaar...well doneπŸ‘
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Wah perfect one shot sanika
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So beautiful and emotional update sanika! Very well written. I had tears in my eyes while reading. You are an amazing writer. Fabulous! Loved it.
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Originally posted by: vinu127

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girl i'm completely smitten by the writer in you!
i just love you yaar lollipop!

😎 ove you to cutie pie
his feeling, his thoughts, his action..all of them were sheer brilliance
especially the end.ah! it made me go back to the day maamu came back home n he slept on her lap
i just looovvveeedd! it!

And I lovee your reviewww
so much that next part of the drabble u just commented on will be dedicated to you n you will get it tomorrow evening itself
love u lollipop
keep giving me ur daily dose of updates..

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First of all, people, this is what a proper review is.. πŸ˜›
Second.. I am going to expect such a comment everytime from you.
Thirdly.. thank you sooo much! :D
Lastly.. awww, mera dil khush kar dita. I love it when people dedicate their works to me :D πŸ€—
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awesome work.. But since you have asked to refrain from just citing adjectives and give proper reasons, here I go:
1) Everytime I listen to "Tum hi Ho", it touches something deep inside me. Especially these lines give me goosebumps -- " Chain bhi mera dard bhi meri aashiqui ab tun hi ho"... This OS is a perfect virtual depiction of that song.. Zain poor guy... Aaliya is the one who has given him all the pains or so he thinks. But then it is in her very arms he found all the solace, it is her home, she is her home-- the only place his angst, his restlessness and all the negative emotions come to rest... Something his mother or brother's presence could not bring to him..That is because she is his aashiqui.. That song is an audio treat, this os is a feast to imagination...

2) Love and hate are two sides of a same coin. If one side is blurred, the coin is useless - khota as they call it. Similarly, true love comes to its entirety when conflicting, extreme emotions are felt.. Zain's love has found its completeness cause he has felt the extremities of two conflicting emotions... But then love is a paradox.. I feel love stories are incomplete until intensities come to forefront.. I love the intensity you have poured in this OS..

3) Isn't it said that one can overcome one's worst fear not by avoiding but by confronting it?? Zain's demons came to rest when he confronted them.. It requires strength... It is this very humsn Zain that had me attracted to BI at the first place and thanks for retaining that essence here too..

Apologies for long tirade.. Guess got carried away in my ramblings.. Please forgive typos, writing from my phone..

P.S : I am comparatively new to BI, hence new to Forum too.. Just begun to read works on Zaya including yours and I must say you are a seasoned writer and have an uncanny prowess to bring out the best of every emotion.. Take a bow..
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