Rantara Dark SS Yeh Kyun Kiya .......Sathiya .(updated Part 16 pg 57) - Page 35

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Posted: 9 years ago
Nice update
What raghu told Stanley
Raghu will do what he wants to
Antara was so scared
Thanks for the pm dear
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Posted: 9 years ago
seems raghu is gearing up for something big
loved the authoritative way he gave orders on the call
good i also wish raghu to put the people off his trail
err is stanley the young boy ?
seems people take drugs at this beach
so stanley sells drugs to foreigners ?
what is it ? heroine ? cocaine ? marijuana ?
so he makes some quick money in this way ?
wait wait wait stanlet did not give the drug to the red headed man at a low price
but the girl had no money he agreed to give her
but he would have some fun with her for that
well was the girl ready to do so ? i dont think so
seems she was scared that she was about to be raped ?
haha so raghu knows stanley and his dhanda quite well
from their conversation i feel they share a friendly rapport
i am assuming that raghu instructed stanley to take care of those followers with some of his men..am i right ?
aww antara sleep talking and raghu listening
hahahaha he told her that she was snoring hahahaha
now i want to give a kick to ratan in his proper place
why does he have to interfere and give orders ?
wow guru ji is right about raghu nature wow i like it
is antara really mad or fool that she will walk all the way ?
why does she not listen to raghu for once in her life ?
does she not care for chillys safety too ?
what the hell is she thinking to go like this ?
haha i loved when veeral scolded his men
haha musthande men giving only commentary doing nothing
so now veeral taking direct panga with raghu
telling his men to kidnap antara and beat raghu if required
good now antara will get a good taste of danger now
she was thinking all this is just a game
and raghu was just teasing her when telling her to go in
but as usual she is her head strong self
she she continues to ignore his warnings
why is she hugging and going to raghu now
she is brave na let her fight the men
she does not need raghus protection na
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Posted: 9 years ago
mind blowing terrific smashing update
sorry got a bit late again
actually i prefer reading this story on sunday
i have a lot of time to read and give a long review
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Posted: 9 years ago
@Riu comment likha hain ya mini UPDATE... Hahaha
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Originally posted by: pampz

Kya yaar bohot buri chapter hai kya ?????😲

sab RES marke bhag gayee...!!!!πŸ˜†

Pampz tera update ekdum dhasu.dhinchak hain...sabke paas words hi nahi kya kya likhe...words mil gayee toh sabne unrsd kar diyaπŸ˜‰
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Posted: 8 years ago


Thanx to everybody who ever has given their review on my update. without ur support i wd have not be able to write the next part ...thanx a tonn again to all those who are my silent reader and hiking the number of views every minute 😳...it wd have been more wonderful and great if u all have shared ur views on my story. Luv u all . Keep reading. and dear am sorry i couldnt answer all of urs comments. next time i surely will do.πŸ˜ƒ

Now enjoy this part which is full of action and a lil bit of romance too ...LOLZZZ


PART 14

Antara whimpered hearing the man and looked up at Raghu : "Ra...Raghu ..hhh...mujhe inke sath nai jana ...hhh...please ...!!!"
"Janta hun" ...Raghu looked down at Antara's petrified eyes and squeezed her palm in his hand lightly. Antara became a bit relaxed and inhaled looking at his fearless assuring deep magnetic eyes.
"Toh bhaga du inhe ???" ...Raghu bent a bit on Antara and asked her in a husky low voice penetrating his deep eyes in hers. The rage was gone. His eyes loaded with mischief scanned her scared form minutely : ... "NAAAI tereko toh apun se allergy hai !!! mere sath tereko nai jana ...akeli jarahi thi Chilly ko sath leke haighway par !... tu na ek kam kar!!! ...in taklo ke sath hi Tu chali ja ..aur yehh Takle bhi tereme kuch zyadahi interested hain.."
Antara was sure Raghu would handover her to those deadly men and before that he was just teasing her and hurting her in his typical weird manner. God knows why on earth she is facing so many weird and dangerous staffs from the day she has met Raghu ...otherwise her life was serene, safe and worryless so far...Antara thought with moist eyes.
Antara sobbed staring at him ...her lips quivered in deep anguish and fear. She moved her eyes here and there on the lonely highway for an escape and soon realised the impossibility. She was dangerously trapped between this Raghu and those baldheaded monsters. Her limbs started to shake badly.
Raghu squeezed her shaking cold palm in his grip and again whispered in her ear, this time in a serious tone...: " aage se apun ki baat kabhi unsuna nahi karegi...samjhi ??? Main jo kahunga tu wohi karegi !!! WARNA !!!! bhej dunga tujhe in taklo ke pas !!! "
Antara gasped and sobbed poorly custing her eyes down from his dangerously dominating eyes. Raghu shook her lightly " Abh BOL ...jana hai inke sath YA phir sidhi tarah meri baat maan jaya karegi aajse ??? "
In a choked voice Antara surrendered : " Ra..Raghu ...please ...hhh...muj..mujhe ...hh nai jana inke sath...main ...hhh ...manungi tumhari baat !!!" she couldn't even stare at those monsterous deadly baldheaded men who were gawking at them then.
"Hmm..." a satisfied impish smirk appeared on Raghu's face.
Holding her hand in his, he shifted her behind him and stood in front of her like an iron shield and threw his words to the men in a deadly calm fatal voice: " Ladki tumlogoke sath nahi jaigi ..!!!...Ladki ne NAA' kaha hai !!!. Abh Agar iske sath zabardasti ki YA karneki koushish ki toh Raghunath ek ek ki ret ki haddi tod ke ghar bhejega !!!! Abh Sochle aage kya karna hai !!! "
The men halted for few seconds hearing his deadly calm threatening tone. Raghu was alone in front of them but still his ferociously confident but strangely calm and cold eyes and voice gave a chill through their spine. They looked at each other and then started to laugh at Raghu mockingly, reviving back themsleves from the sudden unexpected shock.
Raghu's whole feature started to change ...few seconds back he was a young boy in a playful mood teasing a young girl hell angry with him, but now he transformed into something else. Raghu turned to Antara and Antara trembled seeing his fatal transformation. Antara had seen his deep eyes become ruthless, impassive, dark ...darker and even darkest and totally unreadable at times but never ever seen his eyes flickering such lethal brutality. Her voice dried and limbs became numb. She couldn't move her eyes from this beyond dangerous Raghu ...she kept on staring at him with her widened dazed eyes and parted her lips with a terrified gasp. Raghu left her palm and placed his both hands on the sides of her waist, and lifted her up effortlessly and made her sit on the bonnet of his duster within a fraction of a second. The next moment he placed his hand beneath her knees and swiftly put her legs completely up on the bonnet.
His eyes emanated a chink of softness for a second as he patted her cheek softly ...Antara's soft cheek felt the toughness of his touch but strangely felt the warmth too. Raghu looked at her widened petrified eyes and assured her :" dar mat ...!!! kuch nahi hoga ...main akela kafi hun inn saat takle ke liye !!!...bas tu yehanse hilegi nahi ...samjhi ???? " Antara noded her head like a doll which cannot blink her widened eyes and shut her mouth. Raghu slid her body near the windscreen in a safer position hiding his smirk and turned to those deadly men keeping Antara behind.
The head of the baldheaded gang rested his back on their car leasurely and ordered one of his guy : "Lucky !!! tu ladki ko utha aur gadi mein dalde. " Then he looked at his other men and ordered : " Aur iss ladke ka aaj hum sab milke kima banayenge...Hahhahahhaaa...iss kaam mein zyada maza ayega ...kyun ??? " the head laughed out loud breaking the silence of the eerie dim lonely highway like a perfect monster. YESS Myke !!! ...Lucky snarled and joined his head Myke laughing scandalously and stepped towards trembling Antara violently ignoring Raghu completely who was standing as an unalterable rock shield in front of her.
Lucky's laugh didn't end when Raghu suddenly ran to him and swirled his body in a moment and ferociously threw high his tough robust leg and gave a vigorous kick just on Lucky's jaw. Lucky felt all his teeth at once got displaced from his gums and with a severe pain inside his mouth, he felt a salty warm liquid coming out with his saliva and flowing down his jaw. He raised his hand and touched his mouth and jaw shockingly and his hand became red with his own blood. His face distorted more in rage than his pain and he growled dangerously looking towards Raghu. Raghu flexed his jaws, drew his arms from his jacket calmly, and went back to Antara again shielding her. He threw his jacket to Antara and winked at her ...: " Pakad isse". Antara took the jacket in her trembling hand and hugged her knees with her life.
Myke whacked at Lucky ...: " Hey Man !!!... bachche( he guestured at Raghu) se mar khake ruk gaya KYA ????? " The man Lucky shook his head violently, growling like an animal, he wiped his blood from his jaw. He again started approaching towards Antara dangerously and the rest started to circle Raghu. Raghu jumped up in the air and resting his one boot on his car bonnet for a second, he flung his other leg straight to the neck of Lucky dangerously. Lucky made an odd puking sound this time and fell on the ground in a slow motion making a huge thud sound, unable to give any further expression.
The head looked at fallen Lucky disgustedly and shouted to the other men ..." ...Ladka bohot uchal raha hai !!! iski dono hath pair pakdo ...fir main iska bhurta banata hun...kya hai iss ladke ko jaan se marneka order nahi mila !!!" Five men circled Raghu with chains, rods and dreadful knives and made the circle smaller with their approaching cautious steps each second. One of them was swinging the chain above his head in such a fierce speed that Antara thought if it came towards her, she will die with just a single thrust of it. Raghu wiped his mouth once with his hanky that was wraped in his right wrist and then took a dangerous poise of Karate this time to face them. His perfect body, clad in a white shirt and denim jeans, looked like made of steel and eyes horrifyingly brutal yet weirdly calm cold and concentrated. His sparkling sword locket dangling on his flawless well-built chest matched with his each perfect move evoking his wild ferocity and brutal violent form, confirming his undoubted skill in martial arts, extraordinary vigor, determined focus and deliberation within him. He looked fatal yet dangerously handsome in his deadly mode with his gun tugged in his jeans most casually. His fingers slightly bent with his hands raised in front of his face looked like a pair of steel snakes ready to give the violent death byte to his contenders.
The approaching men gulped air in nervousness and before the they could guess what he was upto, his ruffled hair flew once again as he whirled his body suddenly, and gave a Taek-wondo kick gravely into a man's belly to his right and thrusted his steel snake hand just beneath the ear of another man beside him. The man left the rod that he was holding and pressed his tummy with both hands widening his eyes unbelievingly and the man who got an unexpected violent thrust beneath his ear felt dizzy and his steps became tipsy as blood oozed out of his ear hole and flooded his jaw, neck and soaked his t-shirt on his shoulder.
The head of the gang who was relaxingly resting his back on his jumbo monstrous car, in a mood to enjoy Raghu's dreadful end, rubbed his baldhead in confusion and stood straight seeing his other two men of his deadly gang totally disrupted. His devil smile that was hanging on his face even after Lucky fell on ground so pathetically, now disappeared completely.
Raghu maintained his violent form fixing his tough stout legs strongly rooted on the ground and shouted at the head in an impish arrogant tone...: " Abey oye ...Takle !!! Sar khujana bandh kar!!! ...aur abhi bhi apna salamati chahta hai to sidhi tarah katley yehanse ...nahito !!!! he chuckled naughtily and further added ..: " Apun sirf Black belt holder nahi hai ...jitne bhi martial Arts aur fighting ke guru hai akhha Mumbaike underworld mein...sab ko harake apun Champion banta aya hai pichle panch salo se ...Samjha ????? ...Yeh Raghunath bachha nahi BAP hai tum sabka ...!!!" Saying this he knocked down another man on ground most ruthlessly taking just few seconds. The rest of two took their steps backward seeing this dangerous death in front of them.
Myke growled violently and ran like a mad bull towards Raghu raising his fist armed with dangerously sharp tiger nails. Antara shrieked in acute horror and hid her face in Raghu's jacket.
@ Singhania Palace :
"Wahan kya horaha hai ...ekbar phone karke puch lete toh achha hota ...yehan mera dil baitha jaraha hai sochte sochte..." Girija blurted out suddenly breaking the highly tensed pindrop silence of the living room.
Manthan too was eager to know what was happening on the highway. He looked at Veeral and Maha pandit ji for their approval. Both eyed at each other once then Mr. Veeral gestured Manthan to call their appointed gang of bouncers and know the situation.
Manthan called up Myke the head of the bouncer Gang, putting the phone on loudspeaker.
On the highway :
Raghu, who was until then just stopping the men, now increased the pace of his fatal moves of fighting techniques. Raghu was thrashing one of the men violently when the other took a favourable position and hit Raghu on his back with his chain badly. The violent thrust of the heavy iron chain made Raghu fall badly on the ground on his stomach. He was about to stand up when Myke reached him and thrusted his boot on his back again brutally and the other two joined him too. The nails on their boot sole injured Raghu's back and his white shirt showed the patches of blood instantly.
Antara couldn't watch Raghu being beated so cruelly, an invisible unknown unbearable pain squeezed her heart hard leaving her breathless. Was she scared more of the baldheaded gang than Raghu???...and wanted him to be sound and safe so that he can save her from those deadly men !!!... she couldn't think clearly at that moment.
For a second she thought whatever happening with Raghu, he actually deserved it ...he had hurt her in so many weird ways and he should be punished...but soon the thought disappeared and she madly wanted to come down from the bonnet and reach Raghu. She wanted to shield him from those ugly bad men, but she felt her bottom from her waist had litteraly no sense. She couldn't move herself an inch. She cried taking Raghu's name helplessly and cried to Myke ...: " Mujhe le ja na chate ho na ...hhh...le chalo mujhe ...hhh...Raghu ko mat maro...hhh ...!!!! please !!!"
Raghu's body on the road throbbed a bit and the head Myke twitched his neck towards Antara...: " le to tujhe jaunga hi Ladki !!!...pahle tera Ashiq ka akad nikal dun !!! ..."
Myke picked up a rod next and started to beat Raghu ruthlessly. Antara was sure Raghu would not be able to stand up ever. She noticed with severe horror and pain that Raghu's body had become still...he was lying on his stomach with his face buried on the ground and he was moving not a single bit !!!! Antara became speechless completely. She too became still upon the car bonnet. She couldn't move away her eyes from the horrific scene in front of her. With petrified widened eyes and a severe painful feeling in her heart, she kept on witnessing Raghu's pathetic end.
Right then the phone rang and Myke got diverted and stopped beating Raghu. He placed his boot on Raghu's back like a victor and a predator who had finished his prey most ruthlessly, and picked up his phone from his jeans. He received the call proudly ...: " Sir ji ...Myke apna kaam pura karke hi ladki leke ayega ...ladke ko maar ke behosh kar diya hai ...bas abhi iska bhurta banaraha hun ...fir Ladki ko... ...AAAGH ...OOOWWAAAGHHH"
Mr. Veeral on the other end shouted ... "Kya hua Myke ...tum aise aawaz kyun nikal rahe ho ???? HUA KYAA???? "
The listeners in Singhania Palace couldn't make out what actually was happening on the highway. They heard only violent painful screams and howls over the phone. They never expected in their worst dream that Myke and any of the other man of the gang was not in a shape anymore to answer them further.
When Myke was talking on phone placing his boot on Raghu's back in a most degrading manner. Raghu suddenly shoved off his boot from his back, jumped up with a deadly looking dangling knife in his hand, and stretched himself like a long suppressed spring suddenly freed. He looked like a ferocious panther ready to finish his prey within seconds. Myke and the other two men couldn't believe their eyes and couldn't come out from their shock as Raghu jumped up on his legs like nothing had happened to him ever.
Raghu started his ultra violent techniques of fighting with his dangling knife. He swirled twisted bent and threw his body with a super fast speed and expertise. It was hard to observe minutely how he was slashing terribly the three men in front of him with his each violent unstoppable move and force. Soon the men were not able to make any noise anymore, only the sound of the fast moving dangling knife ripped the silence of the dark highway.
Myke tried to flee away but Raghu ran after him, caught his neck in his iron grip, and thrashed him hard on the window of his car. Antara with severe horror watched Myke's gigantic bloody torso entered his monster car breaking its window glass into thousand pieces. Myke quivered his legs helplessly that was hanging outside but Raghu surrounded his legs with a chain and twisted his body hard then pulled it from the car and threw away far as if his body was a waste ragged bird watcher to him. Myke's lifeless body warped on Lucky's still body with a huge thrashing sound. The other two men started to move away from Raghu. Raghu threw his body in a lightening speed to one of them and lethally flogged his hand in a typical karate technique just on the top of a man's head. The man stood bluntly for few seconds...his deadly sword fell loose from his hand and then he fell down on the ground like a huge tree cut from its trunk. The only left man tried to flee but stumbled on one of his gangman's body lying on the highway and fell down poorly. Raghu pressed his boot on his chest brutally and picked up his gun from his jeans. He raised his gun straight pointing to the man and asked him in a fatal dangerous voice ..: " BATA ...hhh ...KIske liye KAAM KARTA HAI ??? KISNE BHEJA TUMLOGOKO ...BATA SAALE...hh...NAHINTO ABHI THOK DUNGA "
The man stammered in fear seeing horryfing death in front of him : " MAAN GAYA BHAI ...AAP mere MAIBAAP HO !!! Mereko KUCH nahi PATA ...woh toh Myke hamare gang leader hai ...usiko kuch nahi pata TOH hume kya pata hoga BhAI???? HAme maaf kardo RAGHU BHAI... agar zinda Raha toh AAPKI gulami karunga zindegi Bhar !!!! HUMKO JAAN se mat MARO Bhai !!!"
Raghu pulled him up from the ground clutching his coller and then gave a grave punch on his jaw. The man again fell down on ground completely losing his sense.
Raghu twirled his gun once and looked at the monster car dangerously. He looked back once to frozen Antara and pointed straight his gun to the dripping petrol tank of the car and took his steps backward towards Antara not moving his eyes from her for a single second. He stopped for a moment looked back at the car and shot his silenced gun right on the dripping petrol tank and then turned back to Antara. The car exploded with rising fire creating an odd terrible ear smashing blunt cracking sound.
Holding the gun in his hand, Raghu limped a bit bypassing the lying still bodies on the highway and walked calmly towards his duster ...towards completely frozen Antara. Reaching Antara, he tugged his gun in his jeans coolly and sighed. Resting his both palms on the bonnet, he gestured her to come near him.
Antara sat still, hugging her knees with his jacket on her lap. Her petrified widened eyes blinked not once. Her parted lips looked truely bloodless. She didn't seem to breathe either.
Staring at her devastated form Raghu wiped his mouth with his wrist once and then forwarded his one hand towards her and caught her ankle. Gripping her ankle lightly he gave a slight pull and Antara's stiffened cold body slipped on the bonnet and reached within his arms.
To revive her back, Raghu jerked her lightly but she remained traumatized staring at Raghu endlessly. On the lonely deadly dim highway, Raghu didn't know how to revive her back. Raising his hand he touched her cheeks lightly and patted her but Antara didn't respond. Raghu stared down at her knees and freed her knees from her cold hands slowly and rubbed her palms. Staring at her shaken form Raghu lifted her saree a bit from her ankles and rubbed her cold feet for a while. Still she did not reciprocate to Raghu.
Raghu frowned, pulled her nearer to him and made her sit on the bonnet hanging her legs from her knees. He gently rested her stiffened petrified body on his chest and started rubbing her back and head quietly. His rough stubles pricked her cheek and his hot breath brushed her bare neck and shoulder but Antara remained still. Raghu was feeling good taking her within his arms after a long tough fight. Having her within his arms truely gives him solace...Raghu thought. However, he was not getting the hundred percent satisfaction with stiffened silent dumb petrified Antara. He became a bit restless and sad. He didn't like her this way at all. She was even better when she cried and blamed him, hating him with her full might...he thought. Suddenly he remembered how Antara cried madly and asked Myke to take her and leave him when Myke was beating him with the rod black and blue. She was ready to go with that monster but she wanted Raghu to be free. She said she hated Raghu after what he had done to get her consent for their marriage. Then why she wanted him to be free putting herself in danger ??? Raghu asked himself but couldn't get the answer.
To make her respond this time, Raghu desperately squeezed her for few seconds within his iron arms feeling her minutely. Antara coughed a little due to the solid pressure and breathed unevenly once. Raghu again squeezed and pressed her hard frantically on his iron chest and then whispered in her ear burying his face between her neck and soft earlobe ...: "Antara ...thoda saans le !!!...kuch toh bol !!!...dekh apun aagaya ...kuch nahi hua mereko ...sab thik hai !!!"
Antara gasped and started inhaling unevenly. The sudden hard squeeze must have worked for her ...Raghu thought with a relief. He now embraced her a bit softly and rubbed her back. He felt her limp hands that were hanging within his embrace till then, stirred a bit and crawled up his shoulder. She clutched his shirt shakily on his back and mumbled in a dry broken shattered voice..:
"tt..tumhe chot lagi !!!...khun !!!...
hhh...itnaa ..hhh...khun ...!!!
gadi jal gayee...hhh !!!...
gg ...gunde sab...hhh..mar gaye ...hhh ...!!!
"
Raghu sighed heavily hearing her. Antara roamed her eyes on the destructive scene in front of her and the smell of blood along with the smoke of burning car entered her system at once. Suddenly she felt it. She pushed Raghu from her and covered her mouth panting hard. Her body shivered and tiny drops of sweat appeared on her forehead.
Raghu knew the whole incident was too much for her to bear and digest. The burning car , the lying bloody bodies on the highway , the stress and tension of the attack and the severe fight afterwards were stuffs which she had never undergone in her life ever before. Raghu held her back and placed his hand on her neval firmly and pressed a little, Antara threw almost everything, which she ate in the afternoon. She was panting and moaning still feeling uncomfortable when Raghu unlocked his car coolly and took out a water bottle and thoroughly washed her face and even a portion of her saree, which became dirty a bit. He tugged her ruffled hair behind her ear cleanly and asked in a concerned voice : " Araam mila ???"
Antara raised her eyes at him and noded silently. Raghu took out an another bottle and drank water. He made her drink some water too and looked at her shaken eyes intently...: " Yehan hum aur nahi rukenge ...chal ".
He scooped her up softly from the bonnet and sat on the driver's seat taking her on his lap. He looked back on the back seat once...little Chilly was sleeping deep there peacefully. He started his car, gave an uturn, and drove his car opposite Nibholi orphanage leaving the burning car, and injured men behind. He took a different path leaving the highway behind and his car started to climb a hilly road effortlessly. Antara layed her head with her eyes closed on his shoulder... fully exhausted in every manner. She was not in a condition to notice that Raghu was not taking her back to her Mother ...to her orphanage at all. She remained on his lap in a semiconscious state.
After an hour, Raghu reached a serene spot covered with deep jungle and stopped his car and opened the window beside him. Through the jungle a beautiful blue lake was visible from the height they reached. Fresh cold breeze along with a sound of sweet ringing bells reached them and announced that there was a temple hidden in the jungle not far from that place.
Raghu slanted his seat and stretched his body on it along with Antara. Unaware of the new place they had reached, Antara layed on him in the same condition. Raghu closed his eyes and snuggled her on his chest cosily.
To be cont ...

Edited by pampz - 8 years ago
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OMG!!! DHAMAKA!!!!!!

that was my exact reaction after reading the update..πŸ˜†... though i already predicted that something big is coming on the way...πŸ˜‰... Papu my vampu...mela hot fav action queen is back on

starting from the chapter... i loved how raghu consoled a shocked antara...πŸ˜›... bandey nee totally
chance peee dance maar diya..... bulwa liya antara see ki sjewill always listen to him no matter what... great going raghu mia... lagey raho... aap kee larki patane kaa tarika bhoi bilkul hatke hain..πŸ˜†.. pahele larki koo darao dhamkao, adhi raat ko kidnap kar kee le jao, metron se bachao phir ussey date pe leke jao aur phir se darao.. phir ussey gundo se bachao... aur larki pat gayi.....mission acomplished... aap ke issi ada pe too yedis are latto... πŸ˜†

aur action scene ke bareibn mein too main kuch kahe bhi nahin sakti...... pampu my jaan.. maine yun hi aap ko action queen kaa khitab nahin diya... u are a true action queen... aap raghu kee fight scenes ko oaisey define karte hoo ki pucho mat... aisa lagta hain ki main khud sab kuch apne akhon ke samne dekh rahio thi...apna deadly ferocious raghunath naik..... how much i miss his actions... bechara lucky bara hi unlucky nikla...... ussey kya pata tha ki kiss sey pala para hain... aur myke kaa too myke humesha kee liye defect hoo gaya...bara ayya humare raghu ko marne......

in between the mid of fight the way antara felt for raghu... just awsome... despite of haating him like hell.. she is worried of him... unknowingly getting attracted to raghu... afterall humans nature is always to fall for the most odd thing, aur raghu ke charm koo kaun underestimate kar sakta hain!!...πŸ˜†... i loved how she was ready to go with them for raghu's shake...

The most fav scene of mine in the update the way raghu blow the car... brilliant!!πŸ‘πŸ‘... i can't praise you more for that scene... how he was looking towards antara while doing the deadly things.,.. like telling her through his gesture that he will make everyone burn into ashes who would try to harm her...

the way he consoled a numb shocked antara... truly a heartwarming scene
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abhi raghu antu koo le kee paucha mandir... abb agey kya hoga yee too pampu mata hi jane..
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sorry yaar agar mera review thora pagal types lagey too.. galti teri hain haan... tere update ne mujhe bara hi excited kar diya..


PS: now some serious topics... pampu i want to req u something.. hope u don't mind for that... it was ignoble actually... but as it was so repetitive... it catches eyes everytime... sorry in advance agar maine dil dukhaya too...
I just want to say something on abtara's dialogues... u put in ,most of the time...

"Ra...Raghu ..hhh...mujhe inke sath nai jana ...hhh...please ...!!!"

" Ra..Raghu ...please ...hhh...muj..mujhe ...hh nai jana inke sath...main ...hhh ...manungi tumhari baat !!!"

" Mujhe le ja na chate ho na ...hhh...le chalo mujhe ...hhh...Raghu ko mat maro...hhh ...!!!! please !!!"

"tt..tumhe chot lagi !!!...khun !!!...hhh...itnaa ..hhh...khun ...!!! gadi jal gayee...hhh !!!...gg ...gunde sab...hhh..mar gaye ...hhh ...!!!"

Pampu can u reduce the use of this 'hhh' phrase in antara's dialogue. I mean its okk as it was negligable but sometime it really catch my eyes... its okk.. i understand that u may trying to show the fear and gasp in antara and it might be her natural reaction. but in most of the time if she talks like that it feels like she has a breathing problem or hysteric like thing...I mean its totally okk to me if u use this phrase in her fearful state... but even in some normal dialogues the use of this phrase sometimes distracts me...yup.. she is a naive fearful girl who cry a kot of bins hereπŸ˜†... but still i think it would be good if u reduce the phrase a bit...
abb agey teri marzi madam..πŸ˜†... don't have to take my rants seriously.. LOLZ... teri story hain and final decision is urs... sorry yaar agar maine tujhe hurt kiya too... kaan pakar kee sorry..

Edited by BabyHimavari - 8 years ago
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wow u updated πŸ˜ƒ
will read after some time
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Posted: 8 years ago
Superb dr..
I loved it. .
I must say you are an awesome writer. .
All rounder. .whether it is an action, or romance your way of writing is different. .I love it. .would love to read more. .
Waiting for your next update..
Thanks for the pm..
Loves n hugs
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Posted: 8 years ago
Di aapkey updates padhney k baad I am always speechless yaar...

It was a SUPERB, MIND BLOWING, AWESOME, BLOCKBUSTER, DHINCHAK, GREAT, FANTABULOUS...

Aur saarey achey achey boley to bestum best words for this update...

πŸ‘ ⭐️

Mera to dil khush Ho gya isey padh k...
One of my friend also love your this story. Everyday she ask me UPDATE AAYA KYA?? πŸ˜†
coz I tell her the story... πŸ˜‰

Di mera sawaal hai bohot boley to IMPORTANT wala...

AAP KYA KHATEY HO???
ITNAA DIMAAG KAISEY LAGAYEY HO YAAR...
πŸ‘

Last update ka res pada tha mera...
Sowiee I was busy di aur aapki taareef k liye mujhey words Ni mil rahey they actually...

Last update k baarey Mein I must say it was totally FABULOUS UPDATE...
I was thinking that aapko ye ideas kaisey aatey hain???

HOW?? HOW??? HOW???

Hum to Fan Ho Gaye aapkey... Baddey waley πŸ˜ƒ

Now come to this update...

Raghu kitta tease kiya Antu ko... πŸ˜‰
TAKLON ke saath... Hehe πŸ˜†

Kya dhulaai kiya kya dhoya mere Raghu ne sabko...
Mwwaaahhh!!!!! Haaye aisey hi pitayi krtey raho in Fattuon Ki...

JIYO MERE RAGHU JAANI πŸ˜‰

Bechari Antu to Dar hi gayi..
And saath Mein she was also tired .. Itna Ki ye bhi Ni pta usey Ki...Ye kahaaa...nnn aa Gaye hum,

Di I must say one thing that You are a QUEEN OF WRITING ACTION SCENES πŸ‘πŸΌ

Once again for you di πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Waiting for next update...
Continue asap...

LOVE YOU DEAR SISSY... 😳
Mwwwaaahhh!!!!! 😳 😳 πŸ˜ƒ
Edited by shivi808 - 8 years ago
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