ZaYa SS: Busted (Chapter 6, Page 11, Aug 22) [Complete] - Page 16

Hello Pello Anjalii ^^

I'm late. I know. So so late.

Maafi, please? *puppy dog eyes*

It's Ramadan so I don't usually come on IF. But sometimes I peek, you know.

And today I happened to see your story. So yeah, I decided I've not read anything good in a while and I'll start this SS.

Firstly, ain't the title same as that AsYa story of yours where Tanveer was 'Busted'?

Okay, I have just read all the four chapters.

And I'm in love with it.

Of course.

As always.

Okay, so bahot saara comment karna hai.

I'll go chapter by chapter.

If I say "LOOONNNGGG Comment hai", it'll be an understatement.

I hope aap poora padh lo. Beech mein lines skip mat karna, okay? 😛 Mujhe pata chal jayega. And then I'll hunt you down. 😈

And if I'm not mistaken, I guess this is your first where you've written Hindi dialogues?

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Chapter 1:

Suddenly her hand was in his and she was flying over him to land on the bed with a thud as he flipped the lights on.

OMGOMGOMG, now ain't this the first AsYa scene in Khan Mansion, just a tad bit reversed? Aww...so damn cute.

I know I keep finding AsYa scenes in your stories.

Maybe I just can't help it.

Maybe I miss them just too much.

You have to bear with me, sorry. ^^

"Doll, tumhari Aapi kai chehre ko kya hua?"

🤣😆🤣 So Zain-ish.

And our Aaliya is no less.

"Tumhe dekh kar mera chehra aisa hi ho jataa hai, maachis ki teeli."

"Ab tum insaan toh ho nahi toh tumhari ginti samaan mein hi aayegi naa."

Kitna pareshaan karoge us bechari poor si soul ko??? 😆

"Pleaseee." She said making her eyes bigger and sticking her lips out while blinking, it always worked and this time was no exception.

Haha. Beautifully described. I could totally imagine it. 😛

"Toh obviously main bahut hot lagta tha aur Aaliya ko mein bahut zyada hi pasand aagaya." He concluded.

Ek line mein story khatam! OhGodZain, this guy is just SOOO adorable ^^

Shit Aaliya mujhe lagta hai ki mujhe seriously tumse pyaar-vyaar hogaya hai."

"Mujhe bhi."

Totally loved this confession 👏

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Chapter 2:

Loved how Zain was jealous because of that chhipkali Zeeshan 😆

And the 'Glue Commercial' 🤣

Their whispering convo on the swing was just...

Aur phir Shirtless Zain *dies*

*comes back to life*

"Tumhari writing tumhe bhi nahi samajh aati Zain."

Hehe..can totally imagine Zain's handwriting..cockroaches jaisi. Sach me, pretty boys ki handwriting bahut gandi hoti hai. It's a fact. 😉

And then Zainy tricking Aaliya. Lovey-Dovey baate keh kar chocolate lekar bhaag gaya, naughty boy!!

And then BAMM Aaliya fell from the ladder! Thankyou God, Zain ko bhejne ke liye. Varna, in Zain's words, floor ka satyanaash ho jata. 😆

And then his concern, the injection needle! ZainIsJustSoAdorable!

Those weird looks from the family. Ding Dong, Zain Miyaan zara bachke, band bajegi varna 😛

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Chapter 3:

Aaliya looked etheral, the way you described her was as if I was seeing her.

Like I was normally hot, no matter what I wore, but Mamu Ki Bhanji lost her mind when I dressed up nicely, she definitely liked me in shirts and ties, but who can blame her?

Zain Zain Zain. Oh God. So full of himself 😆 Not that he's wrong, but still.

There are some things that even Zain Abdullah can't do, shocking, I know.

Haha..is ladke ke uper toh apna hi bhoot sawaar hai 🤣

The tie thing and wifey waali feeling 😳

I loved your 'With-makeup' 'Without-make up' dialogue. He wants to kiss her no matter what. ☺️

"I am so smooth that even butter would be jealous. I charmed all the nurses in the maternity ward from the first day."

Charmin' all the nurses 🤣

Hehe..Zain is so adorable, that gossip-aunties wala part. I'm with you Zain. I hate them too! 🤢

Actually, my mother just adored Aaliya, period, and I flipping loved it because I am a Momma's boy at heart and I am glad that she likes the woman I love, sue me. But this information must be kept confidential at all times, I have a reputation to protect after all!

You write SO SO SO well. 👍🏼

And Zain's jealousy is back again. Ugh, I never liked Shawn from the beginning. 🤢

Fahad Bhai climbed up a pipe outside her window and into her room with a ring and flowers??!! Zain's bro hai, adorable kaam toh karega hi na. 😛

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Chapter 4:

They're just SO smitten with each other. Fahad Bhai ki shaadi postpone kara doon, Bag mein chup jao, Mumbai shift ho jao and finally kidnap! 🤣

Aur phir, other and other-other side of the house ki guftagoo. So yeah, all the family members know that something is up with ZaYa 😆 That's what it is, I guess. Ya phir kuch aur hai?

And person 4 & person 5 was toh definitely Fahad and Nafeesa 😆

Zain ka kidnapping plan gaya paani mein. 😆

Poor Zainu ko sherwaani pe sherwaani. Bechara mera cutie. 😭

And their dressing room convo...😆 Aaliya screaming all the time.

Zain and Lipgloss 😆😳

Zain ka accident 😕😭 Mere Zain ko kuch mat karna. I won't forgive you.

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Tada! Lamba tha, Pata hai.

Hats off to you if you have read this poora poora and your eyes are still intact.

Thank You for writing such beautiful things. ❤️

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