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Veera could never accept Baldev as she always felt that he was irresponsible and useless.Baldev was angry with Veera as she pretended to be in love with him to make him get fed up of her and decide not to marry her.Veera was angry with Baldev was he cheated on her brother Ranvi to become Sarpanch.But he lost  the election.But inorder to prove that he is not a loser he started a small restaurant on his own and became a successful hotel owner in Pritamputra.He started avoiding Veera.Thus Veera started missing his presence and became restless.At the same time her anger for Baldev melted because of the mature changes in him.Though Baldev still had feelings forVeera he hid it well and never smiled at her.

Rashi was a girl who got attracted towards Baldev in the mean time.Baldev was aware of it and he always tried to get away from her whenever she tried to get closer to him.

Rashi wore a glittering salwar kameez,long jumkhas and came to Baldev.
She called him in a seductive way:Ballooo
Veera who passed by got irritated hearing her tone.
Baldev who noticed Veera's irritation decided to add fuel to the fire.
He smiled at Rashi:Yes Rashuuu...
Rashi was very happy with the way Baldev called her for the first time.
R:Ballu...howdo I look now?
B:You look so pretty Rashuuu
Rashi became shy:Really?
B:Yes.I have not seen a pretty girl like you.
Veera got irritated.
V:How dare Baldev admire her beauty?
Baldev secretly enjoyed Veera's jealousy.
Baldev stared at Veera and talked to Rashi:You look very beautiful in this traditional Indian attire.Some girls think that they are very beautiful.But actually they can look good only in jeans and top.They can't carry off an Indian attire.
Veera lost her control:Baldev...you are talking about me.Right?Stop taunting me Baldev.
B:Stay in your limit Veera.When did I say that I was talking about you?Did I mention your name?

V:I know you meant me.But wait and watch me tomorrow at the Diwali celebration.I will prove that I can look good in Indian attire too.
Baldev smirked:Then prove it.
Veera walked away angrily.Baldev smiled.

The next day...
All were celebrating Diwali in full swing with fire crackers and oil lamps with music and dane on background.

Hey ji re,

Ude ude mann ude,
par lage tere sang jude,
mann ude,
pag badhe, teri ore badhe
jag chhod badhe..


Suddenly Baldev noticed a girl in a traditional Indian attire...he saw only her back.Her dangling earrings...her long plat.

B:Is that Veera?I need to find out.

He followed her.Knowing that Baldev was following her she tried to walk around the wall without giving him a chance to show her face to him.But while playing hide and seek they bumped into each other.
Baldev couldn't believe his eyes.It was Veera.She looked gorgeous.

Lahu munh lag gayaa
Lahu munh lag gayaa

She smiled victoriously.


soya tha nas nas mein ab ye jag gaya

Veera pulled his chin cutely.

V:What happened Baldev?

labon ke chhoone se

Baldev felt that he was lost in a dream land when she touched him.

khwabon ke kone se

Then she pushed him laughing.

bach ke sab se lab se lab ye kab se lag gaya

He smiled.Veera put her hair plat backward with full force gazing at him.Then she turned and walked away.
Then she looked back.He was staring at her.She blinked her eyes.With a naughty smile he winked his eye at her.She smiled sweetly and walked off.

Lahu munh lag gayaa
Lahu munh lag gayaa

Veera started dancing with other girls.Baldev walked by her side without taking his eyes off her.Seeing him she stopped dancing and kept looking at him.A sweet eye lock.

Baldev broke the eye lock and held her hand dancing with her.She was stunned.


bhatak rahi hai aaj ye malang ang ang ang ang
atak gayi hai saans uske sang sang sang sang


Her heart beat fast and ran away.He ran after her and held her hand.

kal kal behta tha chhal chhal rehta tha
Her hand shivered feeling his hold on her.

She looked at him slowly.He was looking at her passionately.
kal kal behta tha chhal chhal rehta tha
Suddenly he pulled her towards him.She was stunned.

jaan le ke jaane kab gaya

Veera's lips shivered:Baldev...

Baldev looked at her eyes passionately:You are right Veera.You look gorgeous in Traditional Indian attire also.
 

She blushed.
B:To be frank I knew that you could carry of Indian clothes also.
V:What?Then why did you say so?
B:Because I was fed up of seeing you in western clothes.I longed to see you in Indian attire.If I tell you to wear Indian attire you won't listen to me as you are angry with me.So I challenged you indirectly.
V:Baldev...
She punched his shoulders softly with a giggle.He was also giggling.


Suddenly he held her hand passionately.She became shy.

lab se lab ye lab se lab lahu lag gaya...


He caressed her hand romantically.She closed her eyes drowning in his romantic gestures.
He smiled seeing passion in her face.

Slowly she opened her eyes.
V:Baldev...now onwards you don't need to challenge me indirectly to make me fulfill your wish.Tell anything.I will do anything for you.
Baldev was surprised:Veera!
She smiled.

Slowly she brushed his cheek with her's.He was lost in her.

Lahu munh lag gayaa
Lahu munh lag gayaa
When she tried to walk away he held her hand.

soya tha nas nas mein ab ye jag gaya

He stood close to her blowing air in her ear.She closed her eyes.

labon ke chhoone se

khwabon ke kone se

She opened her eyes and looked at his eyes.His eyes had to speak out the words messaged by his heart.

B:Veera...the truth is that I never hated you even when I was angry with you.I was just trying to cover up my love with my anger.But I can't do that anymore.I love you Veera.
Veera became emotional.She was guilty for playing with his feelings.
V:I am sorry Baldev.I never wanted to hurt your heart.It just happened.Please forgive me.

Suddenly he kept his finger on her lips.They stared at each other's eyes.

Lab se lab ye lab lab se
Lahu munh lag gaya


 He slowly removed his finger from her lips.

He leaned towards her cheek.She became nervous and closed her eyes.

Aye.. Lahu munh lag gaya

He kept his hand on the wall and stared at her smiling.Slowly she opened her eyes.She became shy seeing him smile rolling his eyes on her.

B:What were you expecting me to do Veera?
She blushed:I...nothing Baldev.
B:Though you won't tell me openly I know what you expected Veera.I will fulfill your wish.
He held her hand.She became more nervous and pleaded.
V:Baldev...please leave my hand.Let me go.

He had a naughty smile on her face.
B:How can I leave you without fulfilling your wish Veera?
 

Again he leaned towards her cheek.She became nervous
and held her kameez tightly.

He brushed her cheek with his.She was relieved.
Aye.. Lahu munh lag gaya

She blushed.Baldev smiled seeing her blush.

Aye.. Lahu munh lag gaya

 She ran away blushing.

They walked on opposite sides smiling at each other.
Aye.. Lahu munh lag gaya

The End
Edited by jasminerahul - 9 years ago

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow its fantastic dear.the best thing is u hv added pics nd that sensious song too...just love it...i can imagine the story wid these pics...amazing job ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hawwt & Intresting OS & song selection Dear!Thanks fr pm!Pls do write more on Veeba & pm Me
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Posted: 9 years ago
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this is so sweet,balloo huh??,well if i was in veera's place i would have smashed her face,loved it
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was fantastic๐Ÿ‘...I simply loved it...
Keep it up...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow!!! Amazing OS!!
Luvd it!!
Lovely pics
Thnx 4 d pm
Would luv 2 read more of ur work...pm me 4 ur nxt peice of writing!!!
Edited by Krazzy4u786 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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luved it dear its romantic the way baldev came close to veera and that song uff luved it hot OS from in which our pataka veera blushed hai mein marjawaan!!!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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ooo this was super romantic!!fantastic yaar๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Res: out of town dear, will write big comments when m settle at home. these days only Veeba's FFs r my source of entertainment cause the story is๐Ÿคข๐Ÿคข๐Ÿคข

well done๐Ÿ‘

I really like the choice of song & picture selection. it gave life to the story ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ Also I remember my Veeba once again with such awesome pics ๐Ÿ˜ณ

keep it up๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ

Loveโค๏ธ

Sharmi
Edited by shadowstreet - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This was superb yaar๐Ÿ‘ I really liked the way you described it, infact I could literally visualize the scene and was imagining Vishal in it I so want when they fall in love, the CV should include such a scene. On the whole your description along with the pics have created an amazing effect.๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ Keep it up and do write more.๐Ÿ˜Š