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Posted: 10 years ago
     

                     

            I am Babbie. This is my first attempt on Maaneet. So plzz 
  give ur support. As a starter there may be some mistakes,plz
  avoid them and give me ur sugestions.I got the main idea from 
  an incident which i witnessed and try to rope a new story. Hope
  for a good response. 
                                   Thankyou
                                   Babbie

                                The Punishment

   Gurmeet Choudhary as Maan Singh Khurana

- Meredith Sapp

  Prologue...

  She was there to make her identity , and to fulfil her Mom's dream .

 He was there to enjoy his dreams. His identity is his father.     

 They have attitude bigger than them .

 They collide , they shattered.

 She gathered herself and come again with an aim .                                           He gathered himself .. but lost and  restless ..

 She is eager to punish . He is eager to get himself punished..

 They are poll apart ...

 But  there is One thing which is binding them together...

                   The Punishment

 What will happen if they'll collide again...?       


  Hope u all like it. plzz do hit like button and leave ur comments.

 

     

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                                      Character Sketch


      Geet

      

      

A   23yrs old beautiful girl . Very simple and intelligent  .  Full of   attitude  and high  in morels . .. Completed her grds with maths hon.  She is joining her dream college for MBA.




   Maan

   

   

A  25yrs old  Handsome, arrogent and full of attitude boy.A brat  and  the  eldest son of  Mr. Ranjeet Singh  Khurana  ,  a well known name in  business  world. MD of  Khurana Construction  .  He  joined MBA college  after completing his Grds in Archi . Engg.  he is 2nd yr student.

    

Mr. Ranjeet Singh Khurana  ... Maan's Father

Rano ...Maan's Mom

Dev Singh Khurana...Maan's younger brother

Smt. Savitri Devi...Maan's Daadima

Col.  Mohinder  Singh Handa...Geet's Father

Late cap. Garima Singh ...Geet's Mom

Parminder Kaur...Geet's step mother

Brijveer singh ...Parminder's son

Meera Shergil... classmate of Dev ,  Geet's friend

Aditya Shergil...  Maan's friend and Meera's elder brother

 

Yesh Singh Rathod ...Geet's classmate and friend

Pari...  Geet's classmate and friend

Sameera Setty... Maan's classmate and GF.

Nayantara ... Dev's classmate and GF.

Rahul and Samar... Maan and Dev's classmates and friends.

 

There may be some more ..according to the flow of story...

 

 

Note... This is my 1st attempt . If someone feel that it reflect any other writer's work , then plzz pm me . I'll try my best  to keep it un affected ... This is a fiction not reality  so enjoy it .  Plz avoid if u find any mistake.  Edited by singh24 - 10 years ago
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                             Index

   Part-1-A  ( Scroll Down )
  Part-1-B ( Scroll Down )
 Part- 1-C .. page --8

  Part- 2 ... page ..17

  Part- 3 ... page .. 23

  Part- 4 ... page .. 42

   Part- 5 ... page .. 45

   Part- 6 ... Page .. 48

    Part- 7 ... Page .. 52 

   Part-8 ... page ..57 

  
   Part- 9 ... Page ... 65

   Part- 10 ... Page ... 81

   Part-11 ... Page ... 96

   Part- 12 ... Page ...100

   Part- 13 ... Page ... 109

    Part-  14 ...  Page ...  112

   Part- 15 ...Page ...117

    Part- 16 ... Page ... 128

     Part- 17 ... Page ...133

 
 Part- 18 ... Page ...138


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                                    Part ~ 1-A


  

  

Midnight at 1:40 am. ....

The wireless set  of a PCR Van    start beeping...A constable

 received the call ..and become alert after listening the voice from other side...   


 P.C...Namasty Ma'am. ( this is one sided convo. )

P.C...Yes Ma'am, hum toll road cut per hi hai... ji abhi

 dhekhte hai...nahi jaane denge Ma'am...ji Ma'am...

P.C... Arey Sukhdev  ACP ka phone hai... jaldi Nakabani

 ker...ek black Audi No. XYZ iss tarf aa rahi hai ... usse  rok

 ker side lagawa le...Gadi me jo  bhi ho sabka  alcohol test

 karna hai... ACP khud aa rahe hai...jaldi ker koi gadbad nahi

 honi chahiye...bahut  kadak Officer hai...

After checking for  few mnts.. they saw  the car... A policeman

 stopped them and said...

P.C ... Chalo  gadi side lagao... ..sabka alcohol check karna

 hai...itni raat ko kahan se aa rahe ho...??( Sukhdev

 machine la zara...He check  them all... smiled  ...and said...)


P.C ... Full tight ho charo...bahar aa jao...

All four  now come in sense ...

1st ...Sir jaane do na...friend ki party se aa rahe hai...to todi drink le li...

P.C ...Todi le li...ye thodi hai to jyada kitni leta bhai...?

 charo tunn ho...ye kaun hai tere sath...?

1st... sir mera bhai aur dost hai...(embarrassed)

P.C ...dost hai...2-2 choriyon ko aadhi raat le ke ghoom raha hai...wo bhi nashe mei ...ye kaisi dost hai...?     ... kya naam hai tera...

1st... ji.. Maan Singh Khurana...

P.C ...jaa kahan raha hai...?

Maan... Sir.. XYZ...sec. ** Gurgaon... sir jaane do...jo bhi ho

 yahin pe settle ker lo...plz  sir.

(P.C smiled and  said .)

P.C ... Tera case mai settle  nahi kar sakta...ACP karenge...

 kuch gadbad kerke aaya hai kya peeche...?

( Now he felt  that  they are in trouble... rest of 3 were watching

 and listening all this...all r panic )

Meanwhile a Safari with red light on top stopped there ...A  figure

 in Khaki came out ...All the 3 policemen salute smartly . 



      Part 1-B .. in half an hour...

 

  

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                                Part--1-B   

 ACP... haan ...ye log hai wo...( looking towards Audi and then Maan)

P.C ... Ji ... (showing the  reading of alcohol test)

ACP ...hmmm.. kahan se aa rahe hai ...?

P.C ...Ji party se (with a  smile)

ACP ...hmmm... Ab manegi asli party...(looking at Maan and said)  gadi kaun chala raha tha ...?

Maan ... Ji mai...(with hanging head)

ACP...Speed kya  thi  gadi ki...??? ( calmly )

Maan... Ji  ..dhyan nahi diya...

ACP... Very Good... gadi tum chalao aur speed ka dhayan koi aur rakhega...?? peeche kise thok ker aaya hai...?( in a sarcastic tone )

(All are shocked...white faced ...confused)

ACP... Asse kya dekh rahe ho...?? ek bikewala hardly bacha hai ... yaad yaaya...wrong side over take...hmmm...he is injured...

( Now Maan remembered that he overtook  a truck from wrong side with a high speed...damn...Maan ..u r in big trouble ...think something ... But what...? ye ACP hai ...

God!!! Help me...( but tonight God was not with him...The almighty has its own plan...)

ACP ...  chalo apne-apne phone idher lao ...aur  Police Van mei baitho jaker...tumhari gadi pahuch jayegi  Police Station...

All went towards the Safari...ACP indicate something to driver and he noded yes...

ACP... Come on ...sit ... and  ignite the engine  with a smirk ...

The drive was quite ...Maan was in deep thinking...and all 3 were looking at him with drowsy eyes...

 

Police Station...2:20 am.


They  were sitting with hanging heads , hard drink and sleep now showing the effects ...

The Officer came inside and poked Maan's shoulder with the stick...Maan raised his head ,

Looked at the officer in front of him...then looked down...

Officer pulled a chair to sit.  Keenly observed them all from head to toe and smirked.

ACP: Paisa jitna jyada , kapde utne hi kam , ku..?   Hot Babes ...huhh pahale aadhe-adhure kapdon mei raaton ko ghoomengi... baad mei kahengi  ki humara R*** ho gaya. Padhai ke naam per aiyaashiyan ho rahi hai...

Kahan se aa rahe thy itni raat mei..??

Maan: Party se.

ACP: party kahan thi?

Maan: wo ******* Farm house, D*** M****. Delhi.

ACP: hmmm.. 

ACP... Naam kya hai tumhara...???

Maan...Ji Maan Singh Khurana .

ACP...Father's name..?

Maan... Mr. Ranjeet Singh Khurana .

ACP... Kya karte hai...?

Maan... Khurana Const.  Ke MD hai...He owns that.

ACP... Hmm... Tum kya kerte ho..?? age kya hai tumhari...?

Maan... I  am working with my father in KC . umm i m 25yrs old.

ACP... hmm...  Ghar mei kaun-kaun hai...??

Maan... Ji  Mom , Dad, Daadima and a younger bro. Pointing at Dev with his index finger .

ACP... hmm.. very good... Maa-Baap  ne tumhe  bigada... .aur tumne chote bhai ko...kise bade bhai ho..??

Maan didn't say anything

Ye 2 sath mei kaun hai...?  GF..?  hmmm..

Maan just nodded his head in yes

Ye dono kahan rahati hai...?  tumhare sath...? 

Maan... no  .. both r in a rented home .

ACP...itna late allow karte hai inke owners...?

He didn't reply

Tumhare aur inke parents ko pata hai ki  tum kahan ho..??  kya ker rahe ho..??

No reply

Hmmm... Good... chalo apne Ghar phone karo...  and girls u too..kaun hai tumhara local guardian ?   

Jiii  ... all reacted instantly.

Girls : hum kisliye ?    humne kuch nahi kiya ?     

ACP : achcha!! Hmm. Kya naam hai tum dono ke ?

Girl -1: Sam i mean Sameera Kapoor .

Girl-2: Nayantara Seth.

ACP: Gharwalon ne khula choda hua hai sab kuch karne ko , aur kahati ho kuch nahi kiya.

 Saying this went out to attend a call and came back after 10mins .

Dekho Mr.   jurmana bharna padega... ek nahi kai charges  lagenge...jaldi karo...

Maan ... mai penalty pay ker deta hoon...plz

ACP...Achchaa...wo to karni hi padegi ... chal phone laga...

Maan ... Ma'am plz ghar per phone nahi...Dad naraz honge...

ACP... Tumhe apne dad ki narazgi ki fiker hai... aur jo raste mei martey-martey bacha uska kya...? haan .. usse palatker dekha tha...?? wo theek hai ya nahi...?? Bulao apne Baap ko unhe bhi to pata chale  tumhari asliyat, Jinhone khula chod rakha hai tumhe logon ki jindgi se khelne ko .

Saying this pressed the calling bell angrily and called the constable...

ACP... Pandey ji..

Pandey ji came running and stand straight ...waiting for an order...

Pandey ji .. zara en Teen Murteeyon  ko paani dalker jagao...ye police Station hai inka bedroom nahi... and  you ... Mr. Khurana...phone karo ...hume aur bhi kaam hai...

Maan with great difficulty informed his father and requested him to come at the Police Station . His father said nothing ...only a hmmm...asked the address and cut the phone.

Pandey ji was trying to wake up the 3 sleeping logs...Maan was thinking about the sit. He was fearing to face his parents  . He put them in  a shameful sit. What will he say to his Dad , Mom and Dadima. Dev is also with him in this disgusting condition. Not only about Dev , what will he say about the girls. Damn me.. i m again in a mess . God!! Plzz save me . Dad will never see my face. He barely talked to me from last 2yrs and now this ...Death is easier than this. Every passing secs. his heartbeats were raising .  He just wanted to run away from there. He was feeling very low and ashamed. Once again his family honour is on stake because of him. He was cursing himself again and again.

Dev woke up and put his hand on his shoulder to console him. He didn't  react.

Dev:  Bro sab theek ho jayega...Dad is coming   ... don't worry.                    

Sam : Yes Maan  uncle sab theek ker denge... chill..

NT said nothing she just wanted to go home ASAP.

Maan threw an angry glair to them. He didn't say anything. He was just waiting for the storm which is ready to destroy him. 


     Next-- 1-C...

     https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/3685802?pn=8

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Posted: 10 years ago
Wow...!! Congrats dear for your first work 😳

Lovey prologue😛
Waiting for part 1 , update sn .!
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Posted: 10 years ago
congo on the first ss
loved the prologue
waiting for its start
continue soon!!!!!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
nice  prologue  
update  soon
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          All of you Sweeties...🤗

                
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Posted: 10 years ago
loving the concept

plzz continue

and congrats