Originally posted by: Lavish_Liz
Hei
can I please req certain points to you?
1. Could you please use a simple english, am not saying for vocabulary or anything just you way of writing takes a second or two's time to register the whole scene in mind, and many readers here are not used to, the can not relate to such momentonous writing easily soit takes time to relate it would be good if you tryn elaborate or may be a flow thing...I did found the flow missing here as 'I' to be precise was not able to get or read this ntire slot in a single flow anywhere in these two parts.
Also
2. Please Please Please a hearty req please see towards the names, they gets Rishab insteed of Maan and Kundra Instead of Singh Khurana and same with Madhu and Geet...Please either write on MB or GeetHSP...but avoid this confussion
all in all the plot in stupendous would love to read if it works out with me
Regards
Liz
about the naming confusion I red through the story and adapt it toGeet but I have missed rishabh at one spot and I acknowledge my error. As far as the writing goes define flow because if I don't understand what is lacking I cant fix it
Often times I shy away fromdetail and repeated emphasis so if you don't read it once u will miss it. I don't know if I interpreted you correctly so feel free to add
Originally posted by: Lavish_Liz
flow as in you would just go with the feel to read it again n again...hmm you can say when you read it you dont feel like stopping or that slight string where you can actually imagine or feel that you living it...hmm rather say drown yourself in reading get atached...sometimes it happens like you reading something you get a bond with it...Gosh I dont know how to explain flow...or what actually I wanna say...m no writer but just that the title is catchy n the story line is superb want to read but...still feel something missing 😔
may be it's just me...but...IDK...
And about the repeation and other thing that's kinda ok...! That isnt a big deal anyways till I get something worth reading to read 😊 and this one is one of those but it's just I am not able to relate much to it...
Originally posted by: -GhostOrchid-
I am pursuing residency currently..have allied posting for 6 months hence you can see me willing away time on IF..come may and I'll most likely be gone..
hematology/oncology was one of the fields I was interested in, hence the two week posting..
but in the end it didnt work out..
your interest in oncology shows..are you thinking of actively persue it?
@pronounciation: its more like ame rather than amy
Originally posted by: RukhluvMaan
loved it...
have no idea..why maan is here and why he is calling geet with abusing words...
so geet is bought by michal... and what other things he do with geet... does he uses ger by calling other man...
poor geet...whats maans profestion...
problem solver ... he said...ehhh ,,,,??????
me confused... wether maan is villian or more bad than that..but i still Love the MSK...
but here things are missing... ??? what...!!!! i think ur way ofwritting is so diffetent that i read it three time to understand and make the clear image here..hehehehe...
in one meeting so much low opinion of maan for geet..hmmm iteresting...
Originally posted by: Audiwalia
Nice part... U know i m the who would ask u question after every for curosity sake i can't able to hold my curosity ... So i m gonna ask one more question... Why maan is interfering so much???? Maan is not her husband ... Michelle is geets husband ryt...so exactally who is Maan in this story?????
Oh... The guns are loaded now and all set to fire... Tat. Was amazing of geet to publicly serve him the divorce... So maan is all grey here... So I hav to remind me not to trust him... I'm getting an idea abt the future plot...
waiting...
lovely update
nice one.
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