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karisma

@karisma

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#81

i bet more will be warming up to the story now, just because arnav n khushi r married to each other!

anyway..loved it! i luv it as much as i luv the lines "i tried my best to feed her appetite , keep her coming every night.."

yep that's how much i luv it..good job Raisa!

Edited by karisma - 12 years ago

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redwine1

@redwine1

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#82

Brilliant Brilliant Brilliant ...

Thats all i say when i read ur posts ... what an idea .. what fab build up in the first chapter... & what an amazing unveiling in the second chapter .. Keep it up ...

Cant wait to read how u develop this story ..

Thnx for the PM

r

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Prakrithy

@Arya1991

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Posted: 12 years ago

#83

WOW.

I just read chapter 1 and 2 together.

And that's all that comes to my head right now!

You've blown my mind away.

With.

Khushi's affair with SHYAM.

Arnav and Khushi PLOTTING said affair.

AND.

I Love the dialogues in Arnav's flashbacks. Especially the bits with Aman and Arnav discussing polls. A cocky Arnav is a HAWT Arnav. (Oh wait. I think...that should be... Any Arnav is a hot Arnav... But...Semantics!)

The point is...

The story is WAY different from any other ArHi FF/SS/OS I've read.

~Arya~

P.S. If ASR were actually a politician? He'd get my vote, definitely! (He'd get all the votes from the females, and interested males, who've seen that handsome face, and beautiful physique!)

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peppygeek

@peppygeek

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#84

They are with someone else yet they are together?!

That's definitely dark!

Btw,it was completely hot!

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Radhika

@TheInkMistress

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Posted: 12 years ago

#85

OMFG you just killed my brain so practically speaking 'm dead already!
For one thing I'm still sane for I can form coherent words and secondly the vows you used in the first chapter couldn't have been placed better.
I mean how on earth did you imagine it? Naah boring question for obviously you have brains don't you?!?
I'd be honest when I started reading it I knew he was Shyam and not Arnav *don't ask me how* but where I got stumped was the twist you created in the second chapter.
You just know your leads and you build your own path thats what I loved about you, now and in the past.
Politics and filth goes hand in hand and you surely portrayed that umm well smokin' hot 'n beautifully. I'm loving how things are moving and yes its a big question where's the LOVE between Arnav and Khushi? Awesome story it is, yes I know thats putting it mildly but 'm short of words.
Keep Posted
Love you
xoxo

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