SS: Dear Diary... Part 14 Upd 11/30 Pg 66 - Page 51

Thanks to you, I will never be able to look at some things the same way again. The bourbon biscuit being one of them. lol Loved it! I don't have any other words for it! Thank you for this SS!

Originally posted by: -afsha-

Nice ending

Thank you :)

Originally posted by: MSgayatri

agreed that the last bits did make up as an epilogue

its jus that v have a selfish heart which cant have enough of these 2 characters. :)

Ah! I'm sure...and glad its that way. But let me get started on something else, so that you still have something to keep going on.

Originally posted by: Mohi_nisH

subtle, and beautiful ! Clap

Thank you Girl!

Originally posted by: redfox

A beautiful end to a beautiful story..
Loved the Bourbon just as much as I loved hot chocolate..so what's next??

Thank you :) I think it will be Noli Me Tangere...But it's going to take some time.

Originally posted by: shalini01

this was an amazing end. cant wait for your next piece.

Thank you...Sure thing. I will write something uo.

Originally posted by: kavs123

epilogue,,,,,epilogue...epilogue...we want epilogue...

I already responded to this Kavs. Hope you understand. Thanks for reading.

Originally posted by: mishtimia

Awesome update dear...

Thanks Mia.

Originally posted by: spvd

part 14
last part...
so lovely dear...
liked it very much...

Thank you :)...Keep visiting.

Originally posted by: kunataanya

wow! that was truly a beautiful end to an amazing story...

Glad you liked it. Thanks.

Originally posted by: Boogleton.Schiz

Can't believe this has ended, and you did great justice to the story. Each chapter was brilliantly written. I agree, I don't think this story needs and epilogue as the last chapter was closure enough. Do let me know when you start a new story, I accidentally stumbled across this one but it may not happen all the time and I can't miss out on one of yours!

Thank you Boogles. It means a lot you took time to let me know on your thoughts. I will send you a Buddy request, but that doesn't guarantee a PM :) But I do send one, when I start something.

Originally posted by: -nirvana-

First of all, let me start by saying it was a good 'short' story written by you! I like the way you packaged the very simple yet sensual attraction between Maan and Geet which ends with love and confessions. At times I feel it's a sin to be in love! LOL

I can see the difference in your writing style, where you are using present-tense through your sentencing and use of verbs. I like the fact that you make your writing 'invisible' and the reader can concentrate on your on the story rather than writing! Had I not known, I would have never picked up on the difference in style! :)

I am little disappointed in the time gap, especially around 8:09pm and 8:54pm, missing out on the secrets that lay under the sheets! Wink

I quote the Louis de Bernires for Maan and Geet...
~Love is a temporary madness, it erupts like volcanoes and then subsides. And when it subsides, you have to make a decision. You have to work out whether your roots have so entwined together that it is inconceivable that you should ever part. Because this is what love is. Love is not breathlessness, it is not excitement, it is not the promulgation of promises of eternal passion, it is not the desire to mate every second minute of the day, it is not lying awake at night imagining that he is kissing every cranny of your body. No, don't blush, I am telling you some truths. That is just being "in love", which any fool can do. Love itself is what is left over when being in love has burned away, and this is both an art and a fortunate accident.

Thank you :) I'm upset I waited this long to respond to your post, because now I can't hold your ears and twist it the way I like.

Disappointed...Common, I can try all I want at sensual writing, but you and I both know I'm never going to be good at it. Let's just leave the secrets to remain under the coverlet.

Love is what remains after romantic love is burnt away...
I honestly believe in it, but I don't know if living through it is the same as what I imagine. This remind me of something I have posted in an earlier thread of mine.

1. Hub - Attraction
2. Uns - Infatuation
3. Ishq - Love
4. Aqeedat - Reverence
5. Ibaadat - Worship
6. Junoon - Obsession
7. Maut - Death

The author in the blog doubts if anyone gets past 6 and I say, people hardly get past 2.

For all the madness out there...

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jVO80j9hsj8[/YOUTUBE]

Originally posted by: Viji79

I wonder what is it with hot chocolate and bourbon Hasini. I never knew this SS existed until I accidentally found it in FF forum. Awesome as usual is an understatement. I got a mild heartbreak with the last sentence of the penultimate update and recovered and how with the sweet last one.

Ah! Thanks...As I said, its my own way of connecting people. Now you know, that two people who have read NY times and DDiary, will see Hot Chocolate and Milk and cookies mean in near similar ways...

Thanks for reading.

Originally posted by: ucompleteme

I loved it. From the sadness of his walking into an empty(?) home, to the small smile that he hides when he sees her to the "Finally" moment to the suing of the clock company, I loved every moment. Their togetherness was described perfectly and I think this is your forte.
Hasini, see I am being rational now and not asking for an epilogue to this story.
You are a master story teller and somehow your characters end up staying with me for days on end. So off to work with the most foolish smile on my face today! Waiting for more from you. Hope to see you over a plate of bourbon cookies and two glasses of milk soon.

You liked the Finally moment too? I could literally see that in my head. :)

Thank you all your support and I'm quite glad the update put a smile on your face. Plate of cookies and milk sounds like an invitation... I promised Nirvana that I will do the NY time epilogue as the next WEx (Writing Exercise 😆). So yes, I will see you there next.

Originally posted by: indepgal

lovely end!

Thanks :)

Originally posted by: shalini_s

perfect...

Thank you :)

Originally posted by: Shalve

awesome ...superb ending...loved it...

Glad you liked it :)

Originally posted by: bhanu_rekhag

simply superb dear!!!!

Thank you :)

Originally posted by: hamini_yash

nice update.

Thanks :) What happened? You seem to have diappeared :) And you seem to be writing less too...:(

Originally posted by: zaara2212

hey Hasini, nice one

Hey Gurl! Where have you been...I feel most of my readers are disappearing by the day..:(

Thanks for reading.

Originally posted by: richiii

i so loved the update hasini
once again i bow down to your awesomeness...
you made their journey so beautiful, engaging, and enthralling...this is one of the ff which i know i will come back to time and again...
waiting for you to start another ff...

Thanks so much...Hopefully there will be more you can come back to.

Originally posted by: ninand

I have been trying so hard to get some words out from the past 3 updates.. to no avail.

Comment , I will, cause I genuinely wouldn't be able to 'not' comment. But taking in those drunk words so so beautifully strung together like teasing verses, I am unable to formulate my experience into anything intelligible.

have been reading and re-reading to feel their smoothness warm my ears as they glide through them... beautiful language.

Love your work, Hasini.

I was wondering what happened to you for the last three updates. Common...I do need to get drunk on your words too ;)

Thank so much for reading. I'm yet to edit it. So wait for that. I printed the update and found a tonne of mistakes right on the first page. :(

Hasini,

Though I read this update yesterday itself it suddenly felt that my vocabulary was suddenly short of words and no matter how much ever I rummaged through my dictionary, I couldn't get past Beautiful and mesmerizing and that put me off too much!

I never really knew or expected you would be using present tense in the end, though it acted more and gave out what the past wouldn't have but nevertheless left me in a shock! I guess this is the umpteen time I saying this but your writing leaves me wanting for more and the way it flows and evolves with each coming update stupefies me and I really won't be shocked if you ended up writing a slow and sensual novel with things more than plain love involved!

The end or rather the beginning as I always says was vivid and pleasurable...her habit of writing a diary but at times there is more to the writings, I guess people writing diaries would agree with me coz at times this is the pattern that is followed as just the instantaneous emotions are locked in it but rarely the realization but at times after a point of time it does seem to be locked away in it! And somewhere Maan reading her diary din put me off...as usually people say diary is an intimate stuff but then if someone intimate reads it, it just evokes more feelings rather than being damn he read it it could be I don't mind him reading it...its he whose in it :)

But I guess it was bound to happen this way, I dunno why but I saw more of getting to know each other phase in this one more than anything else, maybe since this was a Short Story as you say...I gather you are a very patient person and that somehow reflects in your writings unlike me whose damn impatient and impulsive, completing no rather starting a story that is so like this would be a very tedious job for me...one shots are my cup of tea where I can wind up things super fast...then again you might have noticed they are too short..I don't wish to drift away and be patient with it and wait for the outcome...speed is what I'm a fan off :P

Coming back to you again, this is the fastest piece you've ever written and I'm glad to be a part of it!

And coming to the couple, Truly Home is where the Heart is! No one or no other place can give the comfort that place gives...though your miles apart for certain reasons but if hearts are connected then you know your home ! :)

Cheers,
Fatima

P.S: I'm so wanting to try having cookie with milk...I've never tried it before but now it makes me wanna but for the time being I'm relishing Dark Fantasy Vanilla flavored sensuous biscuits yum...I usually get lost in them and also sinful chocs and cakes :D