Ek Towel ki Aatmakatha....Priya's shot(RN)

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   Hi freinds....I'm here with another wonderful, amazing, HILARIOUS and Superrrrbbb creation by a verrryyyyy talented writer (First !!!  πŸ˜‰ ) and one of my sweetest friend Priya. πŸ˜ƒ
 
Few things happened that had hurt her a lot...I dont want to go into that again and repeat them, but knowing her, though she  is back with BANG, I know somewhere, these things can't be forgotten that easily....
 
 And so I hope this small gesture of mine will further help to wipe away that portion of her memory πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
And You my friends, by commenting and pressing " Like" button,will aid me in my efforts!Ab akeli doctor kya karsakti hai yaar !
 
Aur yeh kahaani ko yeh NAAM  maine diya hai....so iska CREDIT sirf mujhe jaata hai, Priya ko nahi!
 
 
 

 

 

INTRODUCTION:-

Rajveer n Naina:- in ka character bhi bilkul vaisa hi hai, jaisa LRL me tha. Fraq bass itna hi hai ki yeh dono hi jante hain ki dono ek dushre se pyar karte hain, par kabhi kah nahin paye.wajah koi jaruri bhi nahin hai. πŸ˜†

 

Huda,Alekh,Yudi,Ali,Pooja:- Naina k best frenz. aur yeh sabhi jante hain ki RN dono ek dushre se pyar karte hain. par kabhi bhi apne feelings ko ek dushre k samne zahir nahin kiya hai.

 

sare cadets ka KMA me akhir saal hai yeh. kuch hi dino me sabhi apne final xams de kar officer ban kar chale jayenge, rah jayegi toh bas kuch yadain.

 

Deewali ka tym hai. cadets ko kuch dino ki chuttyan mil gayi hai, aur lagbhag sabhi cadets aur teachers apne apne ghar chale gaye hain. aaj subah Pooja, Ali, Yudi, Alekh aur Huda bhi chale gaye hain. HUda ne apni responsibility se Alekh ko apne sath apne ghar le gaya hai, suri ji k permission se. Naina nahin gayi thi, kyoun ki us k bus raat 8:30 baje thi.KMA me kuch log aur bhi the, aur capt. Rajveer bhi the.

 

ohkkk ab point par aate hain......

 

              TU MUJHSE PYAR NA KAR!!!!!!

 

RAJ!!! Mujhe tum se yeh umeed nahin thi...kabhi nahin thi. Bhul gaye tum voh pal jab tum ne mujhe pahli baar apne zindagi me le kar aaye the. kareeb 3 saal pahle. Ek khushi thi tumhare ankhon me, ek sharam thi mere chehre par.

 

Voh pal!!! Jab pahli baar tum ne mujhe apne sarir(body) se lagaya tha... voh ehsaas mujhe aaj bhi yaad hai, main toh sharam se pani pani ho gayi thi.

 

Tumhe yaad hai na voh pal Raj!!! Main wash room me hi thi, tum ne shower li...phir dhire dhire mere kareeb aaye!!! Mujhe dekh kar mushkuraye, phir mujhe apne sarir se laga liya. Jab main tumhare bheege badan se lipti toh ...toh...toh...main kah hi nahin sakti ki us waqt mujhe kya feel hua tha. aur main usi pal tumhari dewani ho gayi thi.

 

Lekin aaj tum ne jo kiya, us k liye main tumhe kabhi bhi maaf nahin kar sakti hun. Kyoun ki tum ne mera dil baht dukhya hai Raj, aur aaj toh tum ne hadh hi kar di, tum ne BILLU ka......!!! nahin....main aage nahin kah sakti......

 

FLASHBACK......

 

Rajveer kahin bahar gaya tha. Kareeb 8 baje voh KMA lauta.Apne quater me aane k baad voh bas wash room me ja hi raha tha ki, achanak us ka cell ring hua. Us ne phone toh utha liya , lekin jo dushri side pat us ne suna, us par yakeen nahin kar paya voh. kyoun ki......

 

1st man:- Abhi vahan par baht kam log hain.

 

2nd man:- Toh kya bolta hai, aaj hi kaam khatam kar de???

 

1st man:-Haan!!! Pata nahin phir mauka mile na mile. Aur vaise bhi voh aaj apne ghar Nainital ja rahi hai 8:30 baje ki bus se.

 

2nd ma:- Thik hai use aaj raat ko hi rashte me hi khatam kar denge. phir cadet NAINA SINGH AHLUWALIA ka naam ek ITIHAS ban kar reh jayega.

 

Phone cut gaya. Capt Rajveer bhage ladies hostel ki taraf. Lights out ho gaye the. Isiliye main gate band ho chuka tha. Rajveer ne gaurd se poocha toh us ne kaha ki Naina abhi abhi 5 min pahle hi nikli hai.

 

Rajveer ne socha ki Naina jyada dur nahin gayi hogi, yeh soch kar bhage. toh Naina unhe thodi hi dur par mil gayi.

 

Rajveer:- Naina!!! Mere sath chalo.

 

Naina ne hairani se poocha:- Lekin sir!!! Kahan???

 

Rajveer:- Voh sab tum baad me sun lena. Phil haal yahan se jana jyada jaruri hai.

 

Rajveer lagbhag khinch kar Naina ko apne sath apne quater me le gaya. Vahan us ne sara mazra bataya.

 

Naina:- Lekin sir, mujhe koun marna chata hai aur kyoun?

 

Rajveer:- Sorry!!! Main us se poochna bhul gaya. Jab voh next tym phone karega toh mujhe yaad dila dena, main us se pooch lunga.

 

Naina ne muh banate hue kaha:- Ab maine aisa kya pooch liya hai,jo aap mujh par gussa ho rahe ho. Ab main toh hostel me bhi nahin ja sakti hun. kyoun ki lolita mam ander ghushne nahin dengi, kyoun ki lights out hio chuke hain.

 

Rajveer :- Koi baat nahi hai. Tum yahi baitho. Dr Shalini thodi der k liye bahar gayi hain. Un k aate hi main un se baat karunga. Voh agar kahengi toh lolita mam tumhe jarur hostel me le jayengi.

 

Naina chup chap baithi vahan par. Aur fresh up hone Rajveer wash room me chala gaya. Achanak light chali gayi. Tab Rajveer ADAM ka beta bana hua tha. Matlab sirf towel me hi tha, andhere me use kuch dikhai nahin de raha tha.

 

Us ne himmat ki aur wash room k darwaza thoda sa kholte hue, apna sar bahar kiya aur kaha:- Naina!!! Zara candel laga kar dogi, vahan drwer me rakha hua hai....

 

Par is se aage voh aur kuch bol nahin paya. Kyoun ki us k samne ek lamba chauda aadmi ek gun ko Rajveer k kanpatti par laga kar khada tha. Aur bhi ek aadmi tha, Jis k gun point par Naina khadi thi. Dono ne hi apne muh par kaala kapda bandh rakha tha, sirf un dono ki ankhen dikharahi thi, par andhra itna tha ki Rajveer kuch kar nahin pa raha tha.

 

Un dono ne Naina aur Rajveer ki dhakka de kar wash room me le gaye aur shower k niche khada kar diya. Phir dono ne ek dushre ko kuch ishara kiya. Aur vahan se kuch le kar chale gaye, aur jate waqt kambakhton  ne bahar se wash room ka darwaza bhi lock kar diya.

 

5 min me lite aa gayi. Toh Rajveer aur Naina dono ne ek dushre se nazarain churana suru kar diya. Kyoun ki shower k niche khade hone se Naina bilkul bheeg gayi thi, aur us ki dress bhi us k body se ek dam paste ho gayi thi, aur Rajveer toh tha hi towel me, toh us ki halat Naina se bhi battar thi.

 

Rajveer hairan hua ki voh suspicious aadmiyon ne kuch aur nahin balki wash room se Rajveer k kapde le kar chale gaye the. Bichre Rajveer sir jung k maidan me bhi un ki kabhi yeh halat nahin hui thi, jo un ki aaj hui thi. Phir bhi voh toh fauji the, isiliye apni ulti khopdi ghumayi aur idhar udhar dekha toh unhe nazar aaya ki wash room k door k upar ek choti si khidki type ka kuch bana hua hai. Jis se ek insaan asani se bahar nikal sakta hai. Lekin us ka bhi ek door hai jo lock toh hua hai, par us ka lock wash room k ander se khulta hai. Rajveer ne socha ki agar voh use khol dega toh in dono me se koi na koi asani se bahar ja sakta hai.

 

Rajveer ne idhar udhar apni nazar ghumayi toh use ek chota sa table nazar aaya, jo aaj subah plumber ne shower thik karne k baad yahin par chod kar chala gaya tha. Rajveer sir ne apni sari sharm haya ko gatar me dala aur voh table le kar aa gaye. Use niche rakhne k baad voh khade hue us table k upar, aur hath badhaya us khidki k lock ko kholne ki. Par voh kamiyab nahin ho pa rahe the.

 

Wajah hai thi ki, jab bhi Rajveer apne hath upar uthata tha lock kholne k liye, toh us ki tummy flat ho jati thi, aur towel nikal kar zameen me girne ki kagar par hiota tha. Ab voh towel sabhale ya door khole. Bichara buri tarafh se fasa tha. Akela hota toh towel khishk ne ki koi tention nahin hoti, par ander Naina bhi thi.

 

Phir hamare Rajveer sir k dimag me ek dhasoo idea aaya. Unhone Naina se kaha ki voh us table par chadhe aur voh door khole. Naina ne apni mentor ki baat mante hue maidan me kud gayi, aur chadh gayi table par. Par us ki height baht kam thi. Us ne baht baar try kiya phir bhi nahin ho raha tha.

 

Rajveer ne gusse se kaha:- Kya kar rahi ho naina??? Zara thik se khole ki koshish karo, koi mushkil nahin hai, kholne me. chalo kholo...!!!

 

Us ne order dioya, par Naina kar nahin pa rahi thi. Table chota sa tha, bich bich me Rajveer ka chillana, Naina chaunki aur us ka pair fishla us chote se table k upar, aur voh sidha giri apne ADAM... i mean apne Rajveer sir k upar.

 

Rajveer sir niche the, aur Naina un k upar.

 

Rajveer ne phir se gusse se kaha:- Koi bhi kaam tum se thik se nahin hota. Door bhi thik se nahin khol pa rahi ho. Fauji kya khaak banogi. Kis ne kaha tha fauji ban ne ko???

 

Naina rone lagi' aannn...aannn...aannnn'

 

Naina:- Aap hamesha mujh par chillate ho? Kya maine kaha tha un dono ko ki mujhe aap k sath wash rrom me band karne ko? Kya maine kaha tha light ko chale jane ko??? Aap hamesha mujh se gussa hote ho. main aap se ab kabhi bhi baat nahin karungi. Vaise bhi sirf kuch hi mahino ki baat hai, main KMA se graduate ho kar baht jald chali jayungi, toh aap ko phir koi pareshani nahin hogi. Aap kabhi bhi nahin samajh sakte ho ki main aap se kitna pyar karti hun. Aur aap ho ki hamesha mujh se ya toh naraz rahte ho ya phir gussa hote ho. Aur agar koi aur kaam nahin raha toh mujh par chillate rahte ho, jaise main koi SUPARNREKHA (Ravaan ki pyari behn) hun!!!

 

Naina ne itna kah kar Rajveer k upar se uth ne ki koshish ki toh voh utha nahin payi, kyoun ki Rajveer ne use kafi tightly pakad rakha tha. Use aaj pahli baar ehsaas ho raha tha ki kuch hi dino baad Naina use hamesha k liye chod kar chali jayegi.

 

Naina:- Chodiye mujhe!!! Jane dijiye!!!

 

Naina ne apne aap ko chudane ki koshish karte hue kaha. Par Rajveer ne use aur jyada zor se pakdte hue kaha:- "Kya kaha tum ne Naina??? Tum mujhse pyar karti ho???

 

Naina:- Haan karti hun!!! Aur yeh meri zindagi ki sab se badi galati ki hai k ek aise insaan se pyar kiya, jis k paas na toh dil hai aur na hi dimag. Dimag k naam par sirf ek khali maidan hai jis par roz subah sham 50-60 fauji bass left right karte rahte hain.aannn...aannn...!!! Naina phir se rone lagi. 

 

Rajveer mushkuraya use pata tha ki agar us ne aaj apne pyar ka izhaar nahin kar paya toh phir kabhi nahin kar payega.

 

Rajveer ne ek halki si kiss ki Naina k hontho par. Naina ka rona band ho gay, us ne hairani se Rajveer ki taraf dekha...!!!

 

Rajveer ne mushkurate hue kaha:- Jab ek ladka ek ladki k honton par kiss karta hai toh batao is ka kya matlab hota hai???

 

Naina:- Dekha!!! Aap ne yahan par bhi apna class suru kar diya, mere itni sari baton k baad bhi aap mujh se sirf sawal hi pooch rahe hain. Saaf saaf nahin kah sakte hain ki aap bhi mujh se pyar karte hain!!!

 

Rajveer hassa zor se. Naina hugged him n he held her tight. Aur phir Rajveer ne Naina ki kanon me dhire se kaha:- I LOVE YOU

 

Naina:- ME TOO

 

PRESENT

 

Us raat tum dono k alawa main bhi toh thi na vahan wash room . Aur tum dono k bich me. tum ne tab bhi meri parwah nahin ki Raj.

 

Kash...kash main tumhe bata pati ki us raat ko jo kuch bhi hua tha. Voh ek sochi samjhi plan thi.

 

Us din jab Maj Nair ne YUDI,HUDA,ALI, POOJA,aur ALEKH ko punish kiya tha ki sare faculty k kapde dhone k liye. In sab ne vahin par yeh plan banaya tha ki tum dono ko wash room me band kar denge. Main bhi vahin thi Pooja mujhe TIDE se dho rahi thi. Maine sab kuch suna tha. Par main bata nahin payi. Voh jo phone aaya tha, voh Yudi k satir dimag ki wajah se aaya tha. Aur jo do log tumhare room me aaye the voh koi aur nahin balki ALEKH aur HUDA the. Sab kuch plan tha Raj tumhe phasane ka aur tum phas bhi gaye.

 

Aur aaj do saal baad.

 

Naina:- RAJ...RAJ...

 

Raj:- Kya hua jaan???

 

Naina:- Kya nahin hua hai voh bolo!!! Jaldi se BILLU ko le kar Dr Shalini k paas jayo, nahin toh baadh aa jayegi.

 

Raj:- Kyoun???

 

Naina:- Dekh lo apne ladle bete ko, kitni shardi ho gayi hai use!!! Naak se pani toh aise bah raha hai jaise NAIGRA waterfall ko bhi maat de dega.

 

Raj:- Pahle kisi chiz se is ka naak toh saaf karo phir le kar jata hun Dr Shalini k paas!!!

 

Tumhe aur kuch bhi nahin mila Raj, tum ne mujh se apni bete ki naak saaf ki. Cheeeee!!! Ab toh tum apne bete k 1 no aur 2 no k baad bhi use mijhi se poocha karte ho. Kahan main hamesha tumhare sarir se jud kar tumhare DEO ki smell kiya karti thi aur kaha yeh bachha jis ki wajah se aaj mujh se DABUR LAAL TEL smell aati hai. Yeh bachha bhi bilkul apne maa k gunde dost par gaya hai...jab dekho mujh par apne gande pairon se dance karta rahta hai.

 

Aaj toh dil se bas yahi dua nikalti hai ki......

 

"MAIN TOH EK TOWEL HUN

 TU MUJHSE PYAR NA KAR

 AGAR PYAR HO JAYE TOH

 IS PYAR KA IZHAAR NA KAR"

 

 
 
 
 

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi Priya !πŸ˜• 
 
Yeh consused sa expression issliye...bcoz I just HOPE I've not spoilt your plans of posting this OS yourself...
 
Aur agar kar bhi diya toh kya !!!πŸ˜›  Mujhe haqq hai !! πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
Ab batati hoon mujhe teri ONESHOT kaise lagi????
 
 
You know something, i read it almost 6th time today...
  Aur aaj bhi main utna hi hass rahi thi....🀣
 
It was Aweeeeeeeeeeeeesoooooooooooooooooomeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee !!!! πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜ƒ
 
 
 
 
             " EK TOWEL KI AATMAKATHA "  πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
I just hope yeh title dekhkar tum mere naam ki supari na dedo !! But I guess...I'd already told you ! Same B'day waalo mein Gr8  telepathy connection hota hai πŸ˜‰ Toh main usse madad keliye bulaungi...πŸ˜› aur phir I'm damn sure...tum mujhe maarna chodkar kisi aur cheez mein busy hojaogi ! πŸ˜› I mean...usse dekhne mein! πŸ˜›
 
 
 
It was Signature priya style !! completely !!! 
 
Ohkies....toh mere hasne ki shuruvaat intro se hi hui... because of the line...
 
par kabhi kah nahin paye.wajah koi jaruri bhi nahin hai..
 
 
Aur phir shuru hui REAL Nautanki...!!
 
mujhe toh laga, Pri ne comedy chodke tragedy kyun likha???  😲 
 
Parr...as you know, main tujhe bahot achchese jaanti hoon...toh main samajh gayi, ki yeh iceberg ka tip hai...asli cheez to andar chupi hui hogi ! πŸ˜†
 
 
Jab poori story padhne ke baad phirse story ka woh first para padha na...believe me, woh aur bhi hilarious lag raha tha !! πŸ˜†
 
 
Aur BILLU padhke toh main sure thi, kuch toh kya , bahot badiiii gadbad hai! πŸ˜†
 
haan....par maine uss phone call se guess kar liya tha ki Naina ke frenz ka hi koi plan hoga...aur dekha??? main sahi thi! πŸ˜ƒ 
** patting my back with pride **
 
 
Phir wahi hua jo hona chahiye....mera matlab Captain saab daude apne Naina Ah' Singh ko bachane aur kheench ke le aaye apne room mein...
 
 
Yeh Naina bhi na, sawaal pooch pooch ke bande ko irritate kar deti hai!
 
 
Par yeh kya? Raj NAina ko company dene ke bajaye nahane chala gaya??? 😲 Yeh kya baat hui yaar??
 
 
Khair...par jaise ki santh mahatma keh gaye, jo hota hai achche keliye hota hai!! πŸ˜›
 
 
Ab do pyaar karne waale ek kamre mein ho, toh bijli ka kya kaam?? πŸ˜›
 
Issliye God( ??? πŸ˜‰ ) ne bhi sahi time par batti gul kardi !
 
 
Waah Waah !! Aise kidnappers aur goons par toh logon ki dua ki barsat hogi !!
 
Kitna punya ka kaam kar gaye !! RN ko bandh kardiya bathroom mein ek saath !! πŸ˜› Aur chori kiya bhi toh kya? πŸ˜›
 
 
Dekh tu yeh mat soch ki mera dimaag ganda hai...maine usse punya ka kaam issliye kaha , kyunki main jaanti hoon, RN koi 'PAAP' nahi karenge ! πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†  πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
 
Bechaare Rajveer Sir, bheegi NAina ko dekhne ka chance toh mila, par kismat ne unse uspar 'Flat' hone ka sukh cheen liya ! πŸ˜†
 
 Kyunki khud bhi toh Towel mein the....Aur agar kuch gadbad hojati toh....NAina toh chakkar aakar 'Flat' honi hi thi...
Issliye.....
 
Then, bhale hi unke 'Strategic' dimaag nein solution dhoondh nikala, par uspar amal karna namumkin ho raha tha!
 
 
 Phir, as usual rescue karne aayi unki apni Protege...Cadet NAina Ah' Singh !
 
 
Par Rajveer Sir ko uski kadr ho toh na?
 
Bechari itni koshish kar rahi hai kholne ki aur yaha Wash room ke damp aur cool atmosphere mein, Rajveer Sir ka temperature high ho raha hai...!!
 
 
Phir hona kya tha??? MADAM phisli aur apne ADAM par giri! πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
 
Her confession was cute !!
 
Aur Captain saab ko bhi ehsaas h gaya ki agar unhone kuch nahi kaha , toh woh apne pyaar ko kho denge...
 
 
PAr you know, Raj kitni bhi badi 'TUBE LIGHT ' kyun na ho, par he is th BEShT!!!πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜ƒ πŸ˜ƒ
 
Kya tareeka tha confess karne ka! Naina madam bhi chaunk gayi !!
 
 
I loved this part...
 
 
 
Rajveer ne mushkurate hue kaha:- Jab ek ladka ek ladki k honton par kiss karta hai toh batao is ka kya matlab hota hai???
 
 
Naina:- Dekha!!! Aap ne yahan par bhi apna class suru kar diya, mere itni sari baton k baad bhi aap mujh se sirf sawal hi pooch rahe hain. Saaf saaf nahin kah sakte hain ki aap bhi mujh se pyar karte hain!!!
 
 
 
Ab ek teacher se dil lagane ki sazaa toh usse zindagi bhar bhugatni hogi naa? πŸ˜‰
 
 
Aur PRi, iske baad mujhse mat pooch...aur expect mat kar ki main kuch likh paungi....
 
Jab bhi likhna start karti hoon toh hassi rukne ka naam nahi leti...πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
 
I mean...it was just...just FAB !!! Awesome !! tooooo toooo goood !!
 
Aur bhi kuch kehne ki zaroorat hai kya??
 
Ek baat bata, tu khati kya hai? KAise aise ideas aate hai tumhare dimaag mein?? πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
 
Par yeh kya?? Tujhe koi aur naam nahi mila??
RN ke bete ka naam BILLUUUUUU !!!
 
Nahiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
Naam kuch...kuch nahi bahooooot atapata hai yaar..
 
 
Wah bhaai wah....RN toh bade hi soch samajh kar ghar chalate hai! tabhi 3 saal woh ek hi towel sambhaal kar rakha hai! πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
The lines in the end were ....funny! πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†
 
 
Toh yeh tha ' Towel ki (dukhbhari) aatmakatha ' par meri khilkhilaati analysis...
 
 
Hope aap bore nahi huye ho, aur agar hobhi gayi, toh you DESERVE that...samjhi?
 
mere aankho se aansu ( haasi ke kyun ho na) nikaalne ki sazaa toh tujhe milegi hi!! hee haa haa hawww 😈
 
 
 
Loads of laughter and luv,
Your very own friend πŸ˜‰ ,
mana πŸ˜ƒ
 
 
 
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Posted: 14 years ago
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dear mainne rn ka contest main toh part to nahin lia aur na he is ff ko read kiya
 
this is an awesum ff i really loved thorugh urs at leasr r n se confess toh kiya warna serial main hum sab taraste he rahe gaye the ke kab karega humare raj aapne n se aapne pyaar ka confession
 
bt its so sweet  aur haan yudi huda sab ka plan was also awesum khas aasa kuch woh loh serial main bhi karte taki serial aase dukhi end toh na hota
 
anyways thanks for commenting on my ff
 
love u
 
rani
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Okay....firstly thnx Mana for posting it here....warna main aalsi phir se jaake Priya ka shot dhundne me barso laga deti....hehe.

Now cuming to the shot.....mujhe samajhna chahiye tha.....ye nautanki wali mast shot apni Priya ji ki hi ho sakti hai....πŸ˜†πŸ˜†....even I agree with Mana .....Billu for RN's kid's name....is very very unique....πŸ˜†πŸ˜†....and present me Raj-Naina ki jo convo thi.....specially Naina ki baatein....it was soooooooo funny!!!🀣

And flashbak me.....hehe....I loved the line when she said...."Phirse class shuru kar di"....πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

Lekin iss baar show stealer kaun tha batau?? The show stealer of the fic award goes to...."Apne Adam ka TOWEL"....πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

Uski dukh bhari atmakatha sun kar bahut touchy feel hua....πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

Gr8 work Priya!!! Just like our LIONESS!!!πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰
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Posted: 14 years ago
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First of all..a hugeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee thanks to Mana for posting it here.

Mai kuch samajh nahi paa rahi hun ki mai kya likhun. Isko padhte padhte meri hasi rukne ka naam nahi le rahi thi.πŸ˜†

Aur upar se "Towel ki (dukhbhari) atmakatha par Mana ki khikhilati hui analysis".πŸ˜†

Aur to aur RN ke bete ka naam "BILLU"πŸ˜†

Aur Naina ke dost... kya dhansu idea tha yaar. Aur Rajveer sir bhi dimag lagane ke bajaye Naina ko khinchkar le aaye aur fir khud nahane chale gaye. Aur jab kidnappers aur kuch nahi sirf unke kapde lekar chale gaye toh bhi unke dimag ki batti nahi jali.πŸ˜†

Yaar... Mana ka analysis itna mast tha ki meri samajh me nahi aa raha ki mai kya likhun. Ufff...pet dard ho gaya hai haste haste.πŸ˜†

Priya... meri hasi rukne de. Agar mai tere iss fic ko padhkar apni hasi control kar paayi toh hi aage aur kuch comment karungi... warna tujhe isi se kaam chalana padega.πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
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Posted: 14 years ago
#6
" EK TOWEL KI AATMAKATHA " 
Title se hi ye Priya ka ficton lagta hai..πŸ˜†
Mana u have done a brilliant job..Title bhi tumne kaafi funny rakha hai.πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
I think Priya tumhari supari nahin degi coz usse bhi yeh accha laga hoga..
Fiction was really too funny..I just cudn't stop laughing after reading dis..🀣
Raj ke towel ke dard ko Priya hi samajh sakti hai..πŸ˜†πŸ˜†
Raj Naina ko apne room mein le to aaya but usko nahane ki kya sujhi??
Kidnappers mast aadmi the churaya bhi to Raj ke kapde..πŸ˜‰πŸ˜†πŸ˜†  n usko aur Naina ko shower ke niche khada karke bhaag gaye..
Yeh plan definetely Naina ke friends ka hai.
Proposing scene mast tha..RN ke bacche ka naam kaafi hatke hai yaar..Hamesha unke bacche ka naam Naveen hi hota hai but Billu πŸ‘ aisa naam tum hi soch sakti ho..
This part was too funny
 
"Tumhe aur kuch bhi nahin mila Raj, tum ne mujh se apni bete ki naak saaf ki. Cheeeee!!! Ab toh tum apne bete k 1 no aur 2 no k baad bhi use mijhi se poocha karte ho. Kahan main hamesha tumhare sarir se jud kar tumhare DEO ki smell kiya karti thi aur kaha yeh bachha jis ki wajah se aaj mujh se DABUR LAAL TEL smell aati hai. Yeh bachha bhi bilkul apne maa k gunde dost par gaya hai...jab dekho mujh par apne gande pairon se dance karta rahta hai.

 

Aaj toh dil se bas yahi dua nikalti hai ki......

 

"MAIN TOH EK TOWEL HUN

 TU MUJHSE PYAR NA KAR

 AGAR PYAR HO JAYE TOH

 IS PYAR KA IZHAAR NA KAR"

Priya u have done a brilliant jobπŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘..U made me laugh so muchπŸ˜›
 
Congratulations for winningπŸ‘πŸ‘
Bye
Edited by suhana_dixit - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#7
Thanks a lot Mana for posting this over here...!!!! Aur kya chunkar title rakha hai...!!! πŸ‘πŸ‘

Priya sweety....congrats for the well deserved award.....!!!! πŸ‘πŸΌ

First time padhte hi mujhe pata chal jaana chahiye tha ke itni hilarious story sirf aur sirf teri ho sakti hai...!!!!

You started it so well ke main actually me samajh baithi ke yeh sab naina Raj se keh rahi hai....Yeh toh strike hi nahi hua ke yeh Naina ki nahi, Raj ke towel ki feelings hai...!!!! Hum ladkiyan kya kum thi ke ab towels bhi Raj ke deewane banne lage...????πŸ˜†

Raj telling Naina to remind him to ask the guys why they wanted to kill Naina was tooo funny...!!!!πŸ˜†

The use of the phrase ' Adam ka beta '....aisa kuch tu hi likh sakti hai...!!! πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‰

Woh ladke kya le gaye...Raj ke kapde...!!!!πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

Tum ne kitna logical reason diya hai Raj se woh choti window ka lock na khulne ka....!!!!😳😳

Naina ka lamba chauda dialouge mast tha...aur Surpanakha...!!!πŸ˜†πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

Dimag k naam par sirf ek khali maidan hai jis par roz subah sham 50-60 fauji bass left right karte rahte hain

Aise aise dialouges kahan se aate hai tere dimag me....???? πŸ˜†πŸ˜†

End me Towel ji ka dialouge bahot hi funny tha...!!!!

I had a blast reading it again....!!!! Superb, Priya...!!!!

Tu aise hi funny si stories likhti reh...!!!!
Edited by Dhara_s - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#8
Hi Priya 😊

First of all thanks to mana..usne yeh post kiya varn tum to pata nahi kitni der laga deti..and then a big thanks to u for writing it, It was.......let me think for a proper word.............awesome πŸ‘  ⭐️
I just loved it, bechare towel ki aatam katha par yar, yeh towel to bahut lucky hai na, usne RN ka confession jo dekha πŸ˜‰   πŸ˜‰   πŸ˜†

par bechare towel par itne zulm kyun kiye tumne.......bahut taras aata hai us par. Naina ki jaan ko kahtre ki baat sun kafi teezi se bhage....vese kaise na bhagte agar na bhagte to tum unke piche doggies na chood deti, are OS jo kharab ho jata

wah yaar.kya scene tha, pehle raj ka naina ko gussa hona phir kamre me logon ka aana aur unhe washroom me band karna aur wo bhi shower ke niche and then washroom bahar se lock kar dena.......aise idea na sirf tumhe hi aa sakte hain....really u r too good

raj aur naina ka confession sabse hatke tha, naina rote rote confess akrti hai aur raj kiss kar ke.....siddhe siddhe I LOVE U nahin bol hua unse........but the scene was fabulous and vese bhi agar wo siddhe confess kar dete to raj-naina kaise hote...thanks tot heir friends, agar wo yeh plan na banate to aaj yeh confession dekhne ko na milta

Par priya, billu naam na ali aur pooja ke bete ka to mein soch sakti hun par raj-naina ke bete ka koi aur naam hi soch leti hai...

On the whole, it was an mindblowing story, totally loved it.
Now, write more OS, kyunki UD to tum bahut der se karti ho, OS se humhe itni wait to nahin akrni padegi na...
take care
Luv Preet πŸ€—  
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Posted: 14 years ago
#9
totally mindblowing.....πŸ‘

luved d innovativeness here.....πŸ˜ŠπŸ‘πŸ‘

never imagined dat dis scene can be even portrayed like dis...amazingπŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

luved it totally and njoyed it as well.....
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Posted: 14 years ago
#10

πŸ˜›wow yaar i really like it main to fida ho gayi πŸ˜ƒits too gud yaar n you are the best kahan se lati ho itne lash topics yaar???????πŸ‘ πŸ‘