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Posted: 13 years ago
amazing partt lizzy
luv it
asha auntyy in comaa sad...nupura making sumthnnng for onu lolzz
aww mrinal nd gigi r goin soo sad :(:(
i wud miss gigi's funny thingss lol
lovely chapter...fab amzing :):)
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Posted: 13 years ago
first of all would like to apologize for I am replying too late.
The chapter was marvellous. Really loving it.
And thanx a lot for the PM.
Update the next ch. soon waiting eagerly..
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Posted: 13 years ago
Such an emotional update, but as always, so realistically written.

Poor Asha Aunty, it does sound bad but I'm sure everyone would have rather she died as quickly as possible rather than prolonging the pain. It all seems so familiar to me since my mum and my sister saw my nan pass on in Pakistan only a few months ago... I can only imagine how they felt as she had been slipping away day by day that everyone kept saying it was as if she had been in a coma, she didn't eat properly, didn't speak at all, she just lay there, lifeless..

Anyway, back to the OS! I'm glad that Mrinal had Onu with her, although he didn't really know what to do either.

Hmm, that's an interesting concept that Asha Aunty died a suhagan, seeing as she was more of a widow. It reminded me of the whole Ritesh-Ananya thing. In her last moments Ananya didn't want to be Ritesh's wife but ironically, she was buried that way.

Awww, Onu with his hand gesture, brushing it against his shoulder, his sense of personal security. I suppose it's the little things that we don't notice that we're doing, that console us.

And the song you chose suited it perfectly. A thoroughly emotional update. Loved it.

Update soon! 🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
FYI: I didn't think I'd written much because I had only caught up on this update... How wrong was I! 😆
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Lubz.TaAnu

FYI: I didn't think I'd written much because I had only caught up on this update... How wrong was I! 😆


Omg lol really? You haven't read the previous ones then? 😆 Looking forward to you reading backwards in that case 🤣
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Posted: 13 years ago
Yeah...I do understand how you're able to relate Asha Aunty's death to your nan's...this was actually inspired by a relative of ours who was suffering from ovarian cancer herself. My dad, who was close to her, was shocked at seeing her because he was so close to her, but for her own immediate family members it was more of a 'sigh-it-had-to-happen-sometime' fatality that they had already made their peace with long ago...it comes at a terrible price I guess, being close to a loved one when they're slowly but surely dying.

And yeah, I never got the entire 'a-woman-is-lucky-if-she-dies-before-her-husband' thing, so this was my way of looking at it...I mean in this case Asha dies a suhagan to a man who wasn't really worth being a husband, and so did Ananya!
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Posted: 13 years ago
I am on Aunt letty one liz, its fabulous, like actually the emotions you have portrayed here through your words is something very difficult for any writer to do with such fiance, you know I am little out of practice atm in commenting on Fics, don't really recall when it was last I made comment anywhere, so spare me for inconsistency or any stupidity 🤣.
Ab main kya likhun😕 I am not getting anything to right, but obvious OS is wonderful and I loved reading it but I am really not getting what to add😳😭.

Will try anyways coz anyhow I cannot leave the chance to comment on such masterpiece 😛.

And smell of food, the only thing he remember is Laboni ma in kitchen cooking for him and calling him to have a bite or two

The thing you showed between Aunt letty and Onu was so very cute, both were lonely in world of unknown peoples though Aunt Letty had been there from past 30 years but still so lonely with having lost his one son, and this common loneliness brought them bit close, I mean to such an extent that they can offer their company to each other though barely conversing but still knowing that someone is there with them atleast for that particular moment.

And then Aunt Letty being a dream, so very convincing, in the world where he was from past 3 months yet looks as if just came yesterday, with nobody whom he can call as his own, nobody to care about him and one night suddenly, in midst of dark he found someone who not only shielded him from that killing snow but also offered him some cookies to bite.

And towards last part it was so touching, Onu understanding Bimal kaka died coz he was supposed to and Subodh coz it was an accident a unfortunate but an incident which was out of his own actions but Death of Aunt Letty's son was coz for others, neither he was supposed to and nor it was out of his actions, he died to save many other peoples from dying.

And smell of food means Laboni ma in kitchen making something for him and calling him to have a bite or two, it was not that he was missing her cooked food buts he was missing her small fluffy hands who would feed him affectionately and tenderly wiping off his face with her saree pallu, same love and care had been missing from his life from past many months.

He miss her so much that all he want to run away from here and go there. He has spent many sleepless nights without she being around him or excitement to meet and eat yummy food from her hands on the next day. But he doesn't wanted to show that to anyone that how weak he has become and how he could not identify himself with anything around coz anyways no one would care.


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Seriously liz the way you have highlighted Aunt letty's pain and loneliness through Onu is like focal point for me in the OS, not really knowing her much still he could relate himself to her out of all the people and through what she would have gone through or goes through daily, Onu's pain was nothing in front of her coz he knows that back in India he has his best friend, a loving mom, a cute bro and another mom who loves him alot just bit less from Taani.

And Onu fiddled with his words what I feel, it was not that he did not knew he was Jewish or not but he never paid attention being around Taani coz nothing else existed for him back then and even now but just the relishing the taste of those snacks at Christmas time with Taani, Hope am right ? and made sense😛🤣.

And nupur really surprised me coz she never appeared to me someone who would bother herself for other person, never in show and not in what tit bits you added here and here she is doing what little thing she could do to cheer her up atleast for the while when they were there.

And letter awww my poor Onu, he want to write but he cannot, he know it would break him completely and he would never be able to collect bits of himself and for staying here he need to be strong, he need to kill everyday so that that one day would come soon when he would go back to India where he would be in world of his own people.

I am done😎, felt nice in commenting after so long, will get into practice soon😛🤣.
It was truly gorgeous liz and certainly a treat to read.

Keep them coming no matter when I read them 😛🤣

Lots of love

Aashi


Edited by SunShine_A - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
And I thought of giving you next review as soon as I logged in here and on one server OS was opened but you kept distracting me😛 so don't think this is because you told me, consider my surprise for you 😛🤣

SO moving to OS
Found it pretty much cool this time, last time where it was all about emotions and pain, this is all about the growing age😆.
What a start, Orindam😳 but well loved it, chalo somewhere Nupur doesn't trouble him much 🤣, and atleast Nupur has someone who like her and why not, both belongs to same brred😳, and no one could be a better company than they themselves for each other. And aww my poor Onu, only boy with two girls and such girls through what my Onu has to goes through and will go on as long as he is there😭. But well he found some of his own reasons of pleasures, my cute little onu was growing 🤣 with desires which I think almost every teen holds during his growing years.

You know liz what I love most about your OS is touch of reality, I so loved what that guy said, no matter what people here would imagine people in foreign countries only as spoilt brat with no culture but little they forgot they have their own culture and own customs and rituals for it, few follow that and few mold them in their own way. And same for them, though they see India as developing nation yet their thoughts have never gone beyond Cow dungs in India.

People tends to forget good thing but always keep bad things intact in their mind and heart.
Human tendency🤣.

And wow apart from his agony, he had this sheer determination of doing something good for himself which his baba wanted though it was not for his baba but for the only hope to return back his home.

One of the most beautiful view was in front of him yet it did not appealed to him, coz he was alone, he wanted to go to towers and see the most beautiful but with his mishti, so touching that was.

Aww how cute, girl was surely cute and I am sure not on any other day as well, he would had been rude to her😆.

Who Rags?😕
And OMG, the mere view of Statue of Liberty brought so many thoughts of freedom in mind of them 🤣 but well it was not freedom to live but freedom to choose their own lives and live it accordingly.

And Gargi was that kid who troubled Onu in plane 🤣
I forgot almost half of the shots I read bfrw hich was like 1-2 months bfr, thanks fr mentioning it again 🤣, I was confused throughout where they met and why she taled about him to her sis 🤣

And barf se bhara Gangulya or barefeel Ganguly 🤣 and I am sure rains there would kill him if he ever tries to become Geela Ganguly 🤣

And yet again this OS was not left without the pain which lessen over months or Onu learning to cope up with them as it was something about which he could not do anything not until he becomes able of doing something.
And this time he didn't envied them, he didn't liked bt atleast was relieved that not all are sufferers like him and have a better life and live in places to which they actually belong

Wonderful one Liz😛




Edited by SunShine_A - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Read new OS, thought of giving a long review again since I am at my mausi's place and practically have nothing to do but then decided other wise😛, will give review only then when I will have new OS of NYC and mine OS😛
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Posted: 13 years ago
I am reading baby sitting😛 and I want to give one review but will act stubborn like you have been acting🥱.
But anyways
I am loving the flow of the shots and one correction
It was Lakshman who chopped off Supranakha's(Ravana's sis) nose

OS is woww
Have to be my fav Os
I guess
Edited by SunShine_A - 13 years ago
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