Loved the updates. Glad to get a two part one. Loving the story. Waiting to read where you take it next. Thanx for the PM.
Originally posted by: Sparkler8
Here I un-res all my previous posts.
Hi Nyna,Finally I caught up with all the updates (except the footnotes in detail)I feel like I am reading a thriller novel with all the plotting happening in between the lines.Not sure of how much a thriller is will end up to be, but yes there is a lot happening in between the lines (my attempt at leaving clues😆😆)I find Sanskaar very heroic here. Not that I didn't find find him heroic in the serial or the other fan Fictions, it's just something very extraordinary of a person he has become for me in this story. A prudent businessman mourning the loss of his lover while trying to logically solve the puzzle of her death coming across a stranger who lost her memories. That's a lot for someone to handle. I think if I had to go through that, I am sure to have a headache from the skull splitting into pieces.Sanskaar - he is always heroic (for us, which is why some of us were, at times, labelled as solo fans😆), but I do get what you mean. It is very tough to try to be kind and helpful to a person who could be a suspect in the murder of the woman he loved (irrespective of the depth of the emotion, he did love Kavita). It is indeed a lot to deal with, and one day he would reach the "tipping" point.I don't know what to feel for Swara. When I read about her losing memory and depending on these strangers to keep her alive, I felt pity for her. But when I read about her ever alert manner, her scrambled memories, I am scared of her. I never imagined I would be scared of this character called Swara Bose. Yes she was a fighter in different way. May be she is misled in this quest for revenge, it doesn't lessen the fact of this dangerous weapon Swaha is. She might have forgotten her memories but Swaha resides in her.Swara does arouse conflicting emotions, though she was exactly misled in her quest for revenge. But then the conflict here would also be between her demons, what she now feels, what she vaguely remembers and what she wants to be. And though as you said, Swaha resides in Swara, a bit of Swara was always in Swaha too.The nurse thinks if Swara has a threat from Maheshwaris. I do see a plot over there where the elder Maheshwaris might be involved and the history repeating itself. I am starting to think the minute Swara realises Swaha's purpose in life, she might become a threat to Sanskaar.Kumudini is startled by the connection that Swara has with the Maheshwaris but then, Swara is a very different person. Swara will remember is bits and pieces, but then threat to Sanskaar...- different times, different situations would lead to different threats.I don't understand, or lost between the lines, how Jahnavi and Harsha are related. They are in construction industry. So does she have a different story for revenge on Maheshwaris?I already answered this, so not repeating here.At this point, I just don't trust Amar and Sudhir. Sanskaar was right. There's a sure conspiracy happening between them and each has their own conspiracy unknown to the other.Amar - no worries there- he is basically willing to help out people for he remembers how he was helped, but he cannot confide in Sanskaar. Sudhir is partly same reason as Amar and partly because he needs some answers on his own - he is a man willing to bend the law to get justice and the fact that Kavita's case is not getting the attention it deserves is not going down well with him.Why do I feel Ragini is not just mourning the loss of her friend? I find her on the sidelines and Ragini is not a character you would put on sidelines. Same goes with Lakshya but given our "bias", I can live with that. But Ragini, no way!Ragini - as of now - genuinely mourning the loss of her friend, but her journey is just beginning - she has to grow up to the role she is destined. But then spoiler alert - she will not become the villain she was in the show (I hated that inane characterisation). She will come into the highlight. Same with Laksh, but differently.There's a lot happening that's not stated here despite the 10k word length updates. A complex yarn to be unwound carefully. A war spanning generations and multiple families brewing on the backdrop and feelings changing with every revelation.20 chapters, and a time period of five years - we are still in 2012 (will finish off that year in the next chapter, hopefully😆😆) And yes, multiple families - I think I was a little too ambitious - I have some more new characters in Chapter 6If this was truly a thriller novel, it would be on the best sellers' shelf!And this makes my day (for a lot of days😳) never thought and never will go for publishing, so your words mean a lot.CheersSharon
Dear Nyaneve,
Dont know where to start and appreciate your writing .You have blessed with becoming one of best author. I wish u write more stories and keep updating. How do get these ideas and the hard work u have put to explain all the things which are new to some who haven't heard about it n the word of description about each and everything its beautiful. In each every story ure way of description is extraordinary.
Thank you so much - for reading and taking out the time to write these lines for me. Each time I felt the going was tough, I would take heart reading theses lines.
About the "Forgotten memory " The first chapter was full of curiosity who are the characters. The next chapters slowly explaining the characters and revealing the characters was superb. Now you have the story in cliffhanger. Waiting for next update n "curiosity Kills the cat" Am curious n ure waiting update is killing the suspense and the story line. Please update the next chapter soon please.I did explain why I take time,but I did try to get the next one out soon. I said tried because I have not been able to do so on account of some personal commitments. I will try to be regular with the subsequent updates, because I understand the "curiosity killing" factor.
With love,
Divya
Originally posted by: krishuuu
Nyna darling...
Brilliant chapter 5...becoz it has mostly swasan scenes...makes it even more special..Do not worry, all the next chapters will also have SwaSan scenes from now on.i enjoyed this update loads...Sanky has done soo much to make swara comfortable at new place...being close to her...giving security to her by hiring ranjit...food supply to her n him by chotu...initially both were little distant...awkward with each other..ready to fight too...but as time flies,both become quite comfortable with each other...i liked that slow transition of changing dynamics of their relationship..from strangers to acquaintance n then friends...somewhat...Sanskaar as of now, is helping Swara only because he does not have much of a choice which is why they are awkward around each other - but yes slowly will transition into friends - quite some time for that, though.Swara also started her own mission.. finding swara...finding out what she likes...dislikes..knows n loves...felt happy that she found out onething she loves doing...kalaripayattu...her n sanky kitchen part was sweetest...Swara finding out about herself-will not be nice always - but that is for the later chapters. And am glad you liked the kitchen scene, I enjoyed writing it out.Others scenes were equally touching...swara brief stay at amars house..harsha slow recovery...uttu n sujata scene...enjoyed all...Sudhir is turning mysterious...what hidden agenda he got??? Even kumudini knows something from maheswari past..n is worried for swara now...she surely matched some similarity in swara's situation...you know sometimes i feel.. reason which lead to kavi abduction..iss that shekhar loves ragini but not shows ..he seriously wanted her to get married to sanky..but kavita n sanky relation happened...n his plan fails...so many things cooking in my mind...Even sujju knows something??but is quite...due to childrens.i think... gosh im thinking soo much now...I will not specifically comment on any of the above - will give a general hint - everybody has a hidden agenda, all have secrets to hide and plans to execute. Who wins and who loses - time will tell. (psst... Shekar really does not love Ragini)Waiting patiently for more...curiousWill update soon.Love uTalia
Originally posted by: iamreader
Nynu dearest,
For the first time in my non-silent IF life, I got so late to unres a chapter, even after reading it! It was a crazy week from all aspects. Had a huge workload : in both workplace and home ; not to mention the update.
And I am even late, in replying. It happens, so no worries (I still have to unres for your ZvT)
Coming to the update, some may complain that SwaSan's relationship is proceeding at a snail's pace. But to me it's completely normal, given the circumstances they're in. Sanskar still immersed in deep grief of losing Kavita. And Swara's mind is a blank slate. Loved their initial fiery interaction. Swara's adventure in the kitchen was hilarious! It's like her expertise in Kalaripyattu ( I hope I wrote the spelling correctly) accompanied her inside the kitchen too!Thank you for finding SwaSan interaction natural, apart from the fact that both have baggage to carry, they have to find out a little bit more about each other (it is 2012, I have to write till 2017). And glad that you liked their fiery interaction - sparks flying. And her kitchen adventure, I enjoyed writing it.
I'm really scared what was Swara's intention before losing memory and what will Sanskar discover about her. I hope their past wouldn't affect their future to that extent that it gets out of the hand.
Well, their relation would reach rock bottom, but once there the only way is up. So do not worry too much.
Love,
Dyuti
Dear All,
And I am finally back with Chapter 6, after an unforgivable delay. I had a few personal commitments for my mother was hospitalised (nothing serious,but I had to stay with her) which delayed this chapter. I hope my readers forgive me.
Chapter 6 is set out in posts 2 and 3 of page 3.
I will send the pms a little late, there are also a few typos which I shall get around to, in a little while. As well as updating the FnRs.😆
love,
Nyna
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