Sabherwal Series: Shot #5 updated Pg24 (27/10)

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Shagun Kapoor - Below

Bebo & Kitty - Page 6

Kanchan & Yash - Page 13

Gayatri & Alok Sabherwal - Page 22

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#1 Shagun Kapoor aka Shagun "Wannabe-Sabherwal" Kapoor


No amount of workout could dull the pangs of humiliation she felt today.


By the time she had marched out of the conference room, the entire college knew about her conspiracies and was gossiping about her unsuccessful intentions. All her hard work went down the drain.

Now, not only has she lost her scholarship at Cambridge, but also her only job and reputation. Getting fired from SIAC is a big deal, no one would hire her after this dismissal.


Why?


Why did Shaurya have to choose that down-market, classless, Anokhi Bhalla over someone like me?


I could have given you everything, Shaurya! I would have taken care of you, this family, been a dutiful bahu and a pliant patni. But no! You chose someone like Anokhi Bhalla even after I promised to be the life partner you always wanted for yourself!


Beneath the covers of a conniving woman lay an old flame. A woman who had once deeply cared and loved him.

Shagun could not fathom how or why had Shaurya changed so drastically?


How?


How can he change for Anokhi and support her ambitions when he didn’t bat an eye before asking her to choose between career and relationship!


It was so unfair!


How can Anokhi effortlessly have his love, his support and his companionship when she did not get even a fraction of it, even for a moment during their two years of relationship? Shaurya and Anokhi didn’t even date before their marriage!

And if this was love, then what did they share for over two years? Where was this insanity during those years? Where was this adamancy when she needed it?


Love!

He is losing his family. The great Sabherwal family that has always been his sole priority. Yet, he does not think twice before walking out on them for his so-called love.

Shaurya says he loves Anokhi. Well, he has his love today. But at what cost?


“Look, what that girl has reduced you to! Had you chosen me, you would have lived peacefully with your family! All because of you, Anokhi!” She raged and ran faster on the treadmill.


“You really have no shame, do you?” A calm voice broke her sprint.


When Shagun gave her a questioning look, she continued further, “Shaurya has uncovered your ploy, the committee has fired you and by now, the whole city must be aware of your schemes, yet, here you are! Shamelessly loitering in our home…” Devi Sabherwal walked inside gracefully, “Tej and Shaurya will be home soon. I thought you would have left before one of them decides to kick you out.”


“So, are you here to make it easy for them, Badi M-”

“You may call me Mrs. Sabherwal, Shagun.” Devi smiled gently, but Shagun could feel the animosity behind that soft tone.

“You are throwing me to the wolves? After everything we have done!”


“We? There was no ‘we’ here, Shagun. All this mess is our own to clean. You became too hasty to get rid of that girl. It was too cheap for your own standards to manipulate the evidence to frame the daughter-in-law of the Sabherwal family.”

“Oh, now that middle-class, down market girl is your daughter-in-law?” Shagun scoffed.


“She is. I might hate her guts, but she is married to Shaurya. She is a Sabherwal now. And as long as she holds that surname, you must not forget that attacking a Sabherwal won’t end well for you.”

“Unbelievable. Are you the same woman who tried to manipulate me into coming back into Shaurya’s life?”


“Don’t fool yourself, Shagun. There is no love lost between us, I still don't care about Anokhi. This is about a Sabherwal. You tried to slander the daughter-in-law of this family!! And we Sabherwals won’t take it lightly! That girl is gone, good riddance! And now, it is your turn. A fair warning, if you don’t leave on your own accord, Shaurya will gladly ask the security to escort you out the door... ” Devi Sabherwal taunted gleefully.


“What about your promise?” Shagun reminded her hastily.


Devi stopped midway and gave her a mocking smile, “You must be really desperate, if you think that Shaurya would let you anywhere close to himself after knowing the kind of schemes you made against his ‘beloved’ Anokhi...” She slithered her way out of the room.


Shagun angrily tossed the towel and paced the floor.


Her plan had failed. Now, there was no way out of the ditch she had fallen into. And now she had to face the consequences of her failure.


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A/N: Okay, so, this is the first OS of the series. Shagun chapter was incomplete and I kinda didn't wanna spoil it with my own ideas. I was however disappointed with Shagun's lack of jealousy, after all, she did once love Shaurya. Or at least cared.

I really expect you guys to give feed back! It is very encouraging to us writers. Now, even more because the show is not there anymore. Silent reading NOT ALLOWED, okay? Please hit the like button and spare a few seconds to comment for us on our stories...


P.S. The more comments I get, the faster I update.


Coming up next: Bebo-Kitty Sabherwal 😎

Edited by AK_2010 - 3 years ago


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Posted: 3 years ago
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Shagun was one of the most well etched characters initially. Bt later she was reduced to a mere pupet int he hands of Devi. The ph had the option to use her for their story, bt she was just a bystander.


U'r story perfectly etched her turmoil n how she has been actually played by Devi. She actually cared for Shaurya to come back leaving her scholarship, but one wrong move n she lost her career n even the friendship she had with Shaurya.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: AK_2010

A/N: Okay, so, this is the first OS of the series. Shagun chapter was incomplete and I kinda didn't wanna spoil it with my own ideas. I was however disappointed with Shagun's lack of jealousy, after all, she did once love Shaurya. Or at least cared.

I really expect you guys to give feed back! It is very encouraging to us writers. Now, even more because the show is not there anymore. Silent reading NOT ALLOWED, okay? Please hit the like button and spare a few seconds to comment for us on our stories...


P.S. The more comments I get, the faster I update.


Coming up next: Bebo-Kitty Sabherwal 😎

Watching early episodes, I realize how much more Shagun could have been. She had so much potential to create some real rifts instead of the incompetent planning we saw from her.

Beautifully written, as always. Can't wait for the twins chapter!!

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Would love to read more

Thank u

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This is truly a good idea...closing the loops...maybe you can even do another one later by inserting your own ideas...i am game to see what you have imagined for us👍😊🌹

Shagun 1.0 had so much more potential, wish she had been much better utilised...

Would love a tag as well when you update, thnx🌹

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This is absolutely brilliant.Thank you for chosing this topic.The internal conflict of Shagun is so on point.

Considering Alka mam's acting prowess i expected this scene to be a turning point in the show and they make Shagun a positive character.Girls are not another girl's enemy and I always wanted this to be the topic shown on TV.

This is what we all expected in the show.Please continue this os and make it into a four shot.I strongly feel Shagun and Anokhi must have a conversation and Anojhi explains what is love to her.I want Shaurya to hear the convo and confront Badi maa.Shagun in the initial episodes was a strong character and Shaurya needs to address that.

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Love it 💜

This might have happened with Apshagun 😁

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Shagun 1.0 was a very interesting character.

Shagun 2.0 was reduced to a caricature of her. She was more of a comic relief.

Was very interesting to read from her perspective. N How her and Devi’s dynamics changed, now that she had no use to her.

Loving this series already Akshu! ❤️

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Really loved it , gods know why they had bought shagun again in the show , they never explored her character correctly, so looking forward to ur series , amazing update

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Akshu 🤗

This was amazing ❤️

I loved how u showed Shagun inner turmoil, her frustration on seeing Anokhi get what she wanted from Shaurya without much efforts. I really liked how u showed Devi's true colors and her selfishness. Tbh I wanted to see Shagun's jealousy, her desperate attempt to have Shaurya all for herself during ShaKhi Marriage.


I also wanted to know why she came back from Cambridge. Where were her parents? If a daughter comes for holidays from abroad, parents don't just leave them and roam around. If she was so obsessed with Shaurya, she would've left her dreams back then not breaking the engagement. Seeing ShaKhi proximity, she was ready to back off like a sensible lady during Holi. Then what had happened suddenly? Did she even love him? Since she is a Kapoor, she can't be marrying Shaurya for money or status. Then why it was so important for her to become a Sabherwal bahu? She even threatened badima for the fake engagement. She did not look hurt or broken seeing Shaurya's love or support for Anokhi. She was acting as if her ego was bruised, as if one of her possession was snatched from her. Was she thrown out of Cambridge because of her imbalanced, violent behavior due to her depression, her obsession. Why didn’t she use Ahir-Anokhi's photo to tag Anokhi as a characterless girl in front of the college, to create misunderstandings between ShaKhi? She could've threatened Anokhi to frame Shaurya in a harassment case or anything extreme. But she was shown stupidly plotting with Alok...such a waste of her potential. How did she forget about her curse?


If you want to continue on Shagun, I would love to have these answers. If not, pls write the next shot Tej or Devi.


I want to know how Devi was manipulated by Tej in every step of her life...from marrying her out of consent (might threaten to tarnish her image/hamper her father's respect) to changing her original name, how he made her cut ties with her own family, how he despite being an infertile himself made her question herself of being an incomplete woman, how he degraded her initially because of her family and little education and how he started valuing her, giving her power when she completely succumbed to his wishes.



Love,

Pratz

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