Alzia SS - Chapter 8 UPDATED Death is not the end, its a new beginning

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Hey everyone ! Its been almost a month since i joined his lovely forum interacting with u guys about my fav serial RAZIA SULTAN and reading some amazing short stories by some of u brilliant writers here ( Shopau, Shravani, Astoria and Overactor)

I have written a small version of my own. I am not a writer by profession neither by hobby, but these thoughts as to how death must have come to my most favourite couple Alzia is something thats been revolving around my mind for quite sometime. So i decided to jot down my own imagination on it. Now history states 2 versions as to how they must have died. One is at the battlefield fighting Moiz and his army to win back Delhi and one is running away from the battlefield and being killed by robbers. In both the cases, they died together. I have decided to choose on the former one and really do hope that they really did die on the battlefield a hero's death and not by running away.

Its sad i know. Many of u must be shocked as to why I am writing about their deaths instead of their love story. Well in my defense i want to say that, we all know they are eventually gonna die, history is proof of it. Its really hard to accept and it even tears my heart up to even think about that day when their deaths will be shown on TV. But since its a well known fact that they died together makes me feel a lot better about it. So why not embrace it guys and give them a happy and peaceful goodbye instead. They were united in their lifetime and united in death and after death as well.
My story will end with the moral that death, is never the end, its just the next destination. Life is the test, death is the peaceful eternity. ๐Ÿ˜Š

Hope u all will like it. Do give me ur honest comments. Chappals eggs tomatoes etc etc all r welcome



PROLOGUE

It was the afternoon of a typical Delhi summer, heat at its peak. The battlefield looked like an area covered in mild sand storm due to the elephants and horses running about here and there. There was chaos everywhere. So many soldiers from both the sides of the army lay dead upon the ground, some wounded, some still fighting.

He was a little tired, covered in sweat blood and dust. He and his wife, the one and only love of his life, were fighting for hours together like tigers without any respite.

He had lost his armour, helmet and shield whilst fighting. There were several sword cuts around his body, the biggest and most painful one on his chest. His arms and body were swaying to and fro like a professional warrior of the highest order defeating whoever came in front of him. His green eyes were spitting deep anger at his enemies, looking at them into the eye as he slashed them. With one slash he finally cut the throat of a very brave enemy-soldier with whom he had been fighting for a while now.

Altunia looked at the soldier without any pity in his eyes as he fell down dead. He then raised his head back up setting his green eyes forward trying to look out for her. It had been quite sometime before he had seen her now. His gaze became more desperate and worried as he couldn't find her ahead. He looked left and right in anguish. Where was she ? He half wished he had put a bit more efforts in forcing her to stay back in Bhatinda, while he alone marched with the army to Delhi. But she was adamant, she was ziddi, so very much like him. But in front of her, his zidd would bow down humbly. Every wish and every zidd of hers was his command. He had promised her that he would win back Delhi for her or die trying. He wanted to do all that he could to complete her happiness. He knew their army was nothing in size compared to the one of Delhi's. But that did not bother him, he wanted to fight for her even if it meant fighting without an army.

"Ya Maula !" " What have I done ?" "Why didn't I lock her up again instead of allowing her to come here ?" he thought to himself.

He then turned around and narrowed his eyes a bit due to the dust and waves his hands to get rid of it so that he can see more clearly.

And then he saw her, fighting with someone from a little distance ahead from him. Her hair swayed with the wind and her body movements, her sword moved perfectly in sync with the enemy's protecting herself. She too had lost her armour and protective turban. Her face glowed in the blazing hot sunlight, her eyes were full of fire, she did not show a hint of tiredness on her face. She too had lots of cuts on her body and was covered in little sweat and dust. In spite of all this, she looked like an angel, an angel descended from heavens. He breathed a sigh of relief at the sight of her. They had been through several life threatening situations but never before in his life he had been more relieved to see her alive and safe.

He frowned. "This woman will drive me nuts completely one day" he hissed to himself

Then his lips formed into a slow smile from a frown "But then she is the only one who can drive me crazy and that's why I am crazy for her"

He watched her in half-awe and half-adore. Her flexes and reflexes were beautiful. "I have taught her well" he smiled at himself, "But shes getting much better than me"

He noticed the anger in her eyes which was very much evident on her face as well.

Her anger was the thing that drove him crazy the most, made her more desirable and more beautiful to him.

He fought the funny and growing urge inside him to run towards her and take her in his arms and kiss her in front of everyone present there.

"Don't be stupid !" " This is a battlefield and theres a war going on here for crying out loud Mirza !"

"Who cares ?" " Shes my wife" "I can do anything I want to her, do I have to be worried about these douches around me ?"

He was grinning more broadly now with his green eyes completely fixed upon her, lost and mesmerized, watching her move, watch her hair sway, watching her sword in action.

And then suddenly he snapped out of his beautiful thoughts as he saw her fall on the ground with her sword falling a little distance ahead of her and the enemy slowly coming towards her to slash her with his sword with an evil smile. Altunia's eyed widened with horror.

"MOHTARMA !" he screamed running towards her direction watching the soldier ready to strike, her neck being the target.


Note - Please excuse me for any grammatical and spelling errors

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Posted: 9 years ago
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I loved it ๐Ÿ˜Š U r a brilliant writer... An amazing attempt (considering its ur first)๐Ÿ‘

My favourite part - Trust Mirza to think of kissing her in the middle of the battle field...๐Ÿคฃ Just Aww!!!

And thinking of locking her back in Bhatinda

There Story is a classic Lovestory - Jiyenge saathmein Marenge Saathmein ๐Ÿค—

Continue Soon ! And do pm me ... Would love to read further!

And thanks for mentioning Me and my work... U've played an important role in bringing me back to the forum ๐Ÿค—

Lots of luv
would be waiting for the next update
Shopau

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Finally...I was beginning to think no one liked this story considering its not a romantic one. But im glad u liked it. And to spice things up...just for u romance buffs ill be putting a bit of romance in this. ...how...that u all shall see.
Thanks for the lovely comments and the encouragement Shopau. And offcourse I had to bring u back to this forum. I couldnt bear to think that a brilliant writer like u had stopped writing just because she thought people didnt like her story...and u were wrong in thinking that weren't u ? We ALL love ur Nek Dil Zaalim. ...if u wna see quick updates from me then u also better update fast ๐Ÿคฃ
love u... hugsss๐Ÿค—
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Originally posted by: arshia200

Finally...I was beginning to think no one liked this story considering its not a romantic one. But im glad u liked it. And to spice things up...just for u romance buffs ill be putting a bit of romance in this. ...how...that u all shall see.

Thanks for the lovely comments and the encouragement Shopau. And offcourse I had to bring u back to this forum. I couldnt bear to think that a brilliant writer like u had stopped writing just because she thought people didnt like her story...and u were wrong in thinking that weren't u ? We ALL love ur Nek Dil Zaalim. ...if u wna see quick updates from me then u also better update fast ๐Ÿคฃ
love u... hugsss๐Ÿค—


Oh Its really nice ya... Just a little secret... we both really think alike๐Ÿ˜‰ The inspiration for me to write NEk Dil Zaalim also came from the idea of writing about Death ๐Ÿ˜ƒ So we do think quite alike๐Ÿ˜Ž
Also yaa... Do add romance to it as well as that's the main reason why reader's do read FF... to get more of the ROMANCE Doses ๐Ÿ˜‰
I can't wait to read how u'll put romance in... though I am guessing it would be quite passionate considering ur MIRZA wanting to KISS Razia in the battlefield itself. And Considering I KNOW U WELL ENOUGH!!!!๐Ÿ˜†

Haaha!! Will update soon

LOVE U TOO!!! ๐Ÿค—
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dear u r a gr8 writer ๐Ÿ‘ the small prologue was beautiful, waiting for the update but oh the sad ending of alzia is just too painful๐Ÿ˜ญ
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Thank u love...I dont know how to reply directly to a specific persons comment thread so im doing it in my own way
Overactor - thanksss so much for liking it. Ohh yes their ending is sad but I will make sure to put a smile on ur faces as well ... ๐Ÿ˜Š

Shopau... haha then I guess we definitely do think alike. Romance will come im working on that part right now. After all whats an Alzia without Romance ?๐Ÿ˜†
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Thank u Maha :)
Hugsss๐Ÿค—
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First of all dear Arshi,here are a lot of hugs for you
๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—๐Ÿค—

Secondly,this idea is one of its kind.Mirza thinking to kiss Razia on the battlefield itself
As far as romance is concerned,as long as Alzia are together,they can even make a jail romanticโค๏ธ
Thanks a lot dear for mentioning me.๐Ÿ˜ณ
You have encouraged not only me but all the writers of the forum like anything.๐Ÿ˜ƒ

I am looking forward to read more ASAP.You have to update or else...๐Ÿ˜ˆ

And lastly,this SS is AFSAW๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘
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Originally posted by: arshia200

Thank u love...I dont know how to reply directly to a specific persons comment thread so im doing it in my own way

Overactor - thanksss so much for liking it. Ohh yes their ending is sad but I will make sure to put a smile on ur faces as well ... ๐Ÿ˜Š

Shopau... haha then I guess we definitely do think alike. Romance will come im working on that part right now. After all whats an Alzia without Romance ?๐Ÿ˜†


U can click on quote button given next to the comment of the person u want to reply to and the Post reply window will open for u to type ur reply and post ... just what I did now

hope it helps๐Ÿ˜Š

love
Shopau
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Originally posted by: Astoria


First of all dear Arshi,here are a lot of hugs for you

๐Ÿค—

Secondly,this idea is one of its kind.Mirza thinking to kiss Razia on the battlefield itself
As far as romance is concerned,as long as Alzia are together,they can even make a jail romanticโค๏ธ
Thanks a lot dear for mentioning me.๐Ÿ˜ณ
You have encouraged not only me but all the writers of the forum like anything.๐Ÿ˜ƒ

I am looking forward to read more ASAP.You have to update or else...๐Ÿ˜ˆ

And lastly,this SS is AFSAW๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘


Thank u love...
yes I know when alzia are together love blossoms out of anywhere. Considering this is a battle field and well they will be a bit ahem...ashamed and embarrassed to have steamy scenes here...ive worked my way out from that as well...just trying to portray it in a perfect way so that its not disappointing.
hope u guys will like it...
I will always encourage u guys yaar... today I started writing but I alone know how many days of day dreaming I had to do for this to plan my story step by step๐Ÿคฃ so now I know the hard work it takes all the more and from now on my respect for all u writers has become 100000 fold more.
love u...hugsss back๐Ÿค—
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