Fiction - 'Saudagar!' Chapter - 5, Page - 21 - Page 16

B-onesie

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Posted: 6 years ago

#151

i will have to start from scratch with this one and then comment. I'm so out of touch😳

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Sharlene1410

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Posted: 6 years ago

#152

Thanks for the beautiful update and the promo ⭐️ ⭐️

I am loving this story very much it is a nice change having Maya in the spotlight as Yash's life

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cuteariya

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Posted: 6 years ago

#153

finally we got update🤗

yash was really happy seeing his mom happy for the first time😃

it was really painful & hard their life was💔

everything was going so well in their life😊

after long yrs maya met raman but she avoid him as couldn't face him

raman also tried but finally outburst on maya

all his hurt pain humiliation & frustration took out on maya💔

for the first time maya also said her disappointment

somewhere i felt maya was right in her place

when she told her families abt her feeling they should have talk rather them force her to marry raman🤔

maya's families felt guilty for not understanding her feeling😭

raman & suraj got really angry hearing that bloody prakash name they just wanted to that asshole😡

but maya stooped them as she didn't want them to land to jail

seriously that asshole monster prakash he is devil😡

he just destroyed everyone's life for his selfish motive disgusting😡

he should be punish for his all crime very painfully😡

raman bond with yash aaman vidhi & aakash very well & he was father for them🤗

with passing time raman & janki came closer so maya talked with her families abt their wedding

it was really shocking news for raman & janki & after that convo raman stop coming their😔

but maya tricked raman & after that raman had convo with suraj & agree for marriage😃

it was really hard time for maya to convince to janki for marriage but at last she also agreed🤗

poor yash wanted raman as his father that's why he was so sad & alof🥺

maya once again felt guilty as she couldn't give father to yash😭

raman made yash understand that he is his father even they doesn't share blood or he is marrying janki❤️

nothing gonna changed between them which made yash so happy😃

wow raman love janki & maya suggest him to confess his love to janki which he did😃

janki really respect raman & also vow to respect their marriage🤗

i was really amazing when raman sold this old apartment & came to stay with maya's families🤗

the place was small but they were really happy to be together😃

oh god precap is really devastated maya have cancer🥺

another blow for yash as he is going to lose his mom🥺

plz continue soon

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ksen

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Posted: 6 years ago

#154

amazing part

beautifully written

everyone 's feeling and emotions are penned down beautifully

especially raman ,yash

looking forward for the next part

thanks for the pm

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Liasu Fatimah Adebola

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Posted: 6 years ago

#155

Thanks for the wonderful update and also the promo, im loving the story more and more.
Every word was beautifully written, can't wait for the next chapter.
Thanks for the pm.
Teemah.

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Fandu

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Posted: 6 years ago

#156

Nikki a great update. You are a very good writer, and you have executed everyone's feelings and emotions superbly. The suffering and the heartaches of everyone is captured beautifully. I can now understand why Yash is the way he is. He had endured so much in his young life and now faced with Maya's failing health. How will he deal with this. I am happy to see that Maya's family and Raman are with him and with their support he will be able to go through this. Looking forward to the next chapter. Take care and thank you.

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saf24

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Posted: 6 years ago

#157

Beautiful update. I liked how the past was tied in to the update. Fab job as always and looking forward to what is in store next.

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sass8

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Posted: 6 years ago

#158

Ah such sad or bad karma all around.

Poor Raman , he was in so much pain and to learn that the man who stole his idea also stole the woman he loved, cruel. I was pleasantly surprise that he embraced Yash as if he was his son, then again its not the boy fault that Maya rejected him. On the other what anger against Maya, justifiably so. Its interesting because I didn't think that Maya could justify her action , but her explaination made sense, in the end she was so young but most of all naive😕 .

Ho one decision can have so many ripple effect and impact everyone, Raman half life and descent into hell, Suraj fears, Gayatri not allow to bore more children and so on. Anyway at least the family managed to found some measure of contentement , not sure how I feel about Raman and Janaki but both deserve hapiness so why not.

And of course you had to leave at a sad cliffhanger. you are incorrigible Alien-ji 😵

more soon , nice chapter

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VICKY126

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Posted: 6 years ago

#159

Thanks for the pm.update soon dear

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Taahir

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Posted: 6 years ago

#160

That was just an Excellent Chapter

Raman entering into the lives of Maya , Janki and the kids was just fabulous

indeed he is a man of stature when it concerns principals , love and care

Raman instantly created a beautiful bond with Yash , he loved him as if he was his own son

well on seeing him for the first time Raman was saddened that Yash belonged to Maya and Prakash instead of him and Maya but he never not once avoided Yash instead he tutored him , guided him cared and loved him

Maya knew Raman is a kind man and she also knew he living single needs a companion in his life so she decided to talk to the family about Raman and Janaki's remarriage

though Raman was scared to marry as Maya did hurt him deeply and he suffered for years

but I'm glad that all is forgiven but most importantly Raman assures Yash that he will always be his son just like Aman and Vidhi will be his children too

finally the broken and sad Yash accepts as I think he truly believed on Raman and he loved Raman

Yash from a young age was deprived of a father's love and that Raman is there he got that love but when he heard that Raman was getting married to Janki he was sad and aloof thinking he has lost Raman

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