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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: ksen

amazing part

loved it
felt bad for maya
looking forward to know how she raises yash
and what happens to her
will be waiting for the next part
thanks for the pm


Thanks Ksen for always showing interest in my stories and commenting. It means a lot to me.

I'll try to post the next chapter soon but before that I'll try to post the next chapter of Phechaan as it's long time overdue.


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Posted: 6 years ago
tnanks for the pm amazing one super
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: alekhika20

Superb update,cont soon


Thanks for reading and commenting 😳
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Divya333

Nice update...Poor Maya, got cheated in the name of love...looking forward for the story... Waiting for next update


Thanks Divya.

Yes Maya got cheated in the name of love. That man ruined her and her life completely

Will try to update when it is possible for me. 😳
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: taahir004

Excellent Chapter

Man like Prakash truly gives a bad name to all men , Maya though an innocent and naive shy girl followed the rules and regulations of her parents got engaged to Raman and like any girl she perhaps thought after marriage she'll fall in love with her husband but she was introduced to Prakash on their first meeting already Maya felt goosebumps she felt this strange feeling that she never experienced with Raman there was already attraction between Maya and Prakash
though she knew she is engaged tried to fight off Prakash but its also difficult when a charming man follows and insist makes an innocent girl like Maya believe he truly loves her only its obvious she too would believe and fall deep in love , her love was pure and innocent and her reactions towards his letter made her leave her family because of her innocence she didn't think about her family image all she thought about was the man she loves I'm sure she thought later her parents would understand and accept both and Prakash but that didn't happen
while Prakas already been married played her got married to her and he knew the marriage was null and void but I somehow think and believe that Maya marrying him its her first marriage so from her side she believed its a legal marriage she kept on sacrificing because wanted her husband to become successful and his family to accept her to accept their marriage but instead Prakash was just using her playing her because he felt she is beautiful he wanted her to always stay in the dark his every move was well planned his lies his motives everything was well planned and Maya fell for everything well there was no reason for her to doubt her husband until she learned the bitter truth he was already married and even had a son his wife was pregnant too
Prakash had no remorse for whatever he did to both Maya and Yash yet he expected Maya to still stay on as his mistress yes from here on she will struggle without his money and apartment but at least she took that stand to walk away with dignity
I certainly don't blame Maya for her choices neither do I feel she was wrong anywhere now I'm looking forward to see how she struggled to grow Yash



Thanks so much Taahir for such an detailed feedback. It's always a pleasure to read your comments. I feel as if you know my characters so well.

Prakash had planned everything and succeeded in emotionally manipulating her and taking advantage of her navet and love for him.
It's good that Maya left him though it was too late for her.

I also want to thank you for not judging and blaming Maya.






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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Mbakwe

Wow.I am hooked. Pla update soon. Thanks for keeping the forum alive.


Thanks for appreciating my work and taking interest in my stories. It means a lot to me.

I'll try to update when it will be possible for me as I'm dealing with some personal stuff 😳
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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Fandu

Hi Nikki: First if all sorry to hear that you are not your usual self because you are dealing with some personal issues. Much blessings and my prayers and thoughts are with you and wish the best for you.

Secondly awesome update. I feel for Maya. I can understand how she would become entangled in Prakash's web of lies. She who had lead a very sheltered life and was very naive and innocent would not be able to see Prakash's cunningness. He is a bas***d who will do anything and stoop very low to get what he wants. I question Radha's character who knowingly allows her husband's affairs. Although after listening to Prakash's dad I am not surprised of Prakash's behaviour. I am happy that after learning about Prakash's true colours she walked out on him. Will wait to see how she deals with the challenges she will face as a single mother who has no family or any other support. However I am very confident that as always you will do great justice to the story. I am happy that Yash is opening up and confiding in Arti. Impatiently waiting for the next update. Hats off to you.

Above all please take care of yourself.


Hey Mandy thanks so much for your concern and well wishes 🤗

Yes, personal life and certain things are keeping me busy, emotionally as well as physically. Sometimes it becomes too much but then I try my best to not let them affect me. But they are certainly affecting my stories.
I'll still try my best to give you all the best updates. You all deserve it as you still wait so patiently for them. I feel lucky that after all these years and despite such delays, I still have few readers like you who still like to read my stories. Bless you sweetie ❤️

And thanks for not judging Maya. She was a victim and Prakash played all his cards in a well planned calculative moves.
Radha won't have much of a role to play. But whatever part she will have, will be somewhat important. You'll see about it much later as right now the story will revolve around Maya and her life after leaving Prakash.

Only after that you'll get AarYa scenes also. Till then I'll give you small scenes like the one I gave you in the above chapter 😳


I'll try my best to update when it will be possible for me. I know you will wait till then. For that once again I want to Thank You 🤗




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Posted: 6 years ago

Originally posted by: Folla

tnanks for the pm amazing one super


You are welcome Folla

And thanks for reading and commenting 😳
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Posted: 6 years ago
after reading this chapter my heart broke for yash 🥺
he had worst childhood 💔
sorry to say but I didn't feel sorry for yash mom
how stupid she can be? just met stranger & fall in love more over she just runaway with him without know anything abt him
she was blind deaf in love with that ass hole she didn't even think for her families 😡
maya destroyed her life killed her families reputation & most important she destroyed yash life 😡
I don't say fall in love is crime but she should have think before runaway with that ass hole
seriously that prakash sinha & his families r really ass hole how could they just ignore all those crime that prakash did? 😡
I wish yash will get his revenge from that ass hole prakash sinha for destroyed his childhood
continue plz
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Posted: 6 years ago
Nicky nice update I enjoyed reading about Yash's history his mother suffered a lot at the hands of a creep.
When one is so young and innocent one becomes a prey to sick creeps who calls themselves a play a macho playboy Maya poor girl feel victim to her innocence and hormones.
Continue soon want to read more 😆
By the way I unreserved page 13 😆
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