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Raj is standing outside of Suryavanshi House, waiting for Sarita. She's slowly walking out with nothing in her hand.
Raj: Saritaji jaldi ki jiye. Humari flight miss ho jaye gee. Please.
Sarita walks out of the gate. Raj grabs her hand and starts walking towards the car.
Sarita: Raj ji. Mujhe aapse kuch baat karni hai.
Raj: abhi nahi. Sarita ji, Humari flight miss ho jayegi. Chaliye.
Sarita: nahi raj ji! Hume abhi aapse baat karni hai. (Raj turns around, and sees a teary eyed sarita) Hume aapke saath nahi Jaa sakte.
Raj is shocked. "Lekin kyun?"
Sarita: Raj ji yeh Saab bhagne wagna. Yeh ek dikhawa hai. Drama hai yeh Saab. Aapko sahi rahe par lekar aane ke liye, lekin aap toh kuch samajh hee nahi rahe hai. Kyun kar rahe aise. Apne parivaar ke saath apne maa baap ke saath. Aapki behenein ap pe apni jaan chidak thi hai, aur aap unke shadi ke paison ke saath bhag rahe hai. Aur... Aur Divya. Uss bechari ki kya galati hai. SIRF yahi ki woh AAP ke liye apne saara career piche chod aiye. Koi baath nahi. Haina? (Now in an angry tone) Aap apne parivaar ko dhoka de sakte hai lekin mein apne pati aur bache ko nahi chod sakti. Woh dono meri JAAN hai. Aur agar mujhe aap mein aur apne parivaar mein se kise ko chuna hoga toh woh har din har pal mere parivaar hoga!
Raj was devastated. Not because he had finally figured out how much he had done just to get Sarita. But devastated because she had the audacity to say all that to his face. Sarita turned to go back inside, and she saw Vikrant standing their with tears, which made her cry even more. She was about to go to him, when raj grabs sarita from the back and slides a knife next to her neck.
Raj: aare! Vikrant! Aa Gaye tum? Dekho na, Sarita ji kya bole jaa rahi hai? Kuch samjhao na unhe, ke agar nahi aai toh aap dono ka hee nuxaan hoga. Ab dekho na, aap dono toh yahi hai, lekin aapka ladla beta, woh pata nahi kaha hai.
Sarita is shocked. She looks at Vikrant.
Sarita: Vikrant ji! Abhi kaha hai? Woh apke saath hi hai na? (It was silent) boliya na, kaha hai mere beta? Batiye!! Boliye!!!!
Vikrant tries to come closer to sarita to console her, but raj slits her arm lightly.
Sarita shrieks in pain, while Vikrant is shocked. "Sarita!"
Raj; agar ek aur kadam aur aai toh tumhara ek kadam, Saritaji ke liye maut ki Taraf ek kadam ho ga. Piche hato!!!!!
Sarita: Vikrant ji, aap please bathiye. Abhi ghar par hee hai na?
Vikrant; nahi sarita, pata nahi iss Raj usse kaha lekar Gaya hai. Bas mujhe agar ek bar abhi mil jaye toh iske aise halat karoon gai.
Raj: bas bas bas! Bohat bate ho Gaya aap ke bich, Ab Hume aagaya dee jiye. Yaha hum flight par bethe aur udhar aapka beta aapke paas.
He starts moving backwards towards the car, but sarita turns around causing her to get a light cut on her neck. She pushes him back and he falls onto the front part of the car. She turns and looks at Vikrant. And is about to run to Vikrant, when they hear a gunshot.
Who got shot? Where's abhi? And will raj be able to take Sarita with him once and for all?
Hey guys, thanks for giving my last os sooo much love. Looking at the lack of ff, os, ss. I decided to start one of my own. Like if you liked it and if you want me to continue just write a small comment down below. Please any a corrections will be taken any new ideas, if you guys have any new ideas you want me to write, just PM me aur comment down below once again. PThanks for reading and comment lots so I get the encouragement to continue!!!!!! Love you all!!
Jassi

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ARS24 thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome dear ! But pls write in english . I am bad at hindi, only translation helps
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Posted: 11 years ago
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are raaj ko aur villain mat banaao yar! lolz nice one update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Superb start...continue soon buddy.
I like your portrayal of Raj...he can't be back to reality with a bit of brain washing from his present psychic state...he will act violently, the way you have written.

Please Update ASAP
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Interesting start...wish to read more. Keep writing.
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