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Anjani Patel

@Titaliya_AP

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#91

One request... Please go bat shit crazy more often! ;)

I've read this OS twice. I just adore it, it's simply perfect <3

His confession and her teasing ^_^

Just brilliant! Oh and Shyam wasn't in it making all the more better :D

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preethi28

@preethi28

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#92

i think it is a writers complex.

when i see a note that this is messed up/shitty/one of my worst/sidn't turn out good.

i am sure that it is going to be fabulous :p

turns out i'm right this time too.😊

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CrazyDee

@CrazyDee

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#93

This was absolutely phenomenal. So utterly beautifuL! ❤️

And the vm in the end is the perfect end to it, it seems to me.😊

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sochanatha

@sochanatha

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#94

that was b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l..
aahhh always wondered what if!! the man named shyam manoher jha was not there in that eventful day n also imagined it in my head..
so this story was really a treat to read and you penned it down just amazingly..
loved the part where khushi laughed out loud upon hearing those words..that was so khushi!
thank you for choosing the concept give it a shape to cherish in my IPK deprived world..

P.S. loved the banner.. that was simple yet so exquisite!!

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Curiousmind

@Curiousmind

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#95

Very nicely written and it made me remember all their moments which I loved.

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reallyhappy

@reallyhappy

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#96

dt was tooo cute n lovely..:)i bet most of us thought n imagined sumthin lyk dis in Payash's weddin part..whr he said..baat krni h tmse..
aisa xpct kia tha maine..bt Shyam ruined..:/

lol
wow..:)lovely.

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Jammy-

@Jammy-

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#97

If only... Thats all I can say.

Beautifully written.

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lazyleaves

@lazyleaves

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#98

Sona Sona Sona. Itna achcha kyun likhti ho? Kaise likhti ho?

When he kissed Khushi again on the terrace, I felt as if he was kissing me and I could actually feel it (I am turning in to a besharam :-P )

His realization coupled with not shying away from it is what I think he felt even when he walked up the stairs to the terrace to meet her, the smile on his face intact.

Only FFs could give our hearts what it yearns for. *sigh*

P.S. Yes I am answering PMs now :-P

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1chilly

@1chilly

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#99

How I loved reading this OS. Don't know how I missed reading it.

I just loved the banner. It goes so well with the story.

Loved the song too. Beautiful.

Wish there had been no terrace scene with Shyam and this scene had been part of the story line.

It was so well written. Loved how just holding hands means so much.

They don't need grand gestures to show that they belong to each other.

There were no scenes of grand passion but that kiss on the cheek told its own story.

Needless to say I loved it.

Could you please PM me when you write something next.

I don't want to miss out on reading something you write.

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segad

@segad

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#100

the crazy ones are the idiots who messed up one of the best serials ever by introducing the forced marriage, non-existent pregnancy and kidnapping and worse, the mrs india garbage

you and your ilk are the sane ones and the ones keeping us sane

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