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Posted: 12 years ago
Uff after so many days 🥱
Okk today we got the worst news, and what I thoght about it's ending I totally forgot beacuse of the time gap. And now the EHM shut down news. This is going to be a total crap and faltu. But had to finish this...


so,
The part : 3


"Hmm" he said little embarrassed and went to search for an emergency light. Seriously he should have thought it before. He was just too excited after getting the bucket. May be his dreams are not far now.

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He came back with some candles and put that in a candle stand on a table. The light was creating a dull shine. He again emerged himself in the snake. He with his experienced hands opened its mouth and touched its teeth.

"Why don't you change? You are wet, you can catch cold" He told her, his eyes on the snake.

"I am beyond cold or hot or any natural surrounding" her voice came.

He looked at her, "Why? Are you not human?" he asked.

"I am Bidehi" she answered.

"Humm, good" he placed the opened mouth of the snake in a rod. "But I can't let this happen that any bidehi die dew to cold in my cottage" he pressed the snake's mouth. Enough quantity venom came out and fell on the funnel beneath the rod. He left out a sigh. He kept the snake on a glass bucket and covered the funnel filled with venom.

"Come, I have some Sarees of my wife, you can take one" he escorted her.

He showed her the cupboard and said, "You can take any saree you wish. I am in the laboratory" he hurriedly went again.

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He took the venom and mixed up that with some plant extract. He heated up the small lab-oven and kept a bowl with some chemical in it.

"How long it will take?" she asked.

"Some more hours" he said and turned.

He saw her just a glimpse though.

"Manvi" he whispered.

The rain was continuing its dance and Bahadur was still listening his radio, now little louder.

She sat on a wooden chair on the laboratory. Her face covered with her loose hairs.

"You should be hungry, just a minute" he said to her and shouted, "BAHADUR…"

"I am not hungry, but you should eat something" she said.

"You are speaking English?"

"Angrezi? Shahab ji akele ghar me rehke aap pagal ho rahe hain. Na toh maine angrezi bola aur na hi aapne" she said innocently. Still the light playing hide and seek on her face.

I spoke with her in hindi? He asked himself and answer came, may be

"Shahab ji? Aapne bulaya?" bahadur came.

"Kuch khana laao. Maan…Bidehi aap kya lengi?" he asked.

"I can't eat" she said hurriedly.

"Why? Are you not human" he asked,this time there was sarcasm in his voice.

"I am bidehi." Again her answer was the same.

"Bidehi……. Soul without body, nice name" Virat said. A chill flew from his spine, when he uttered soul without body. Bahadur left with a strange feeling on his heart.

She giggled. Same music, when Manvi used to giggle it would create same music. He looked at him curious yet shocked.

"Erm actually I am on fast, so I can't eat today" she blurted.

"Humm" he replied.

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She was still sitting on the chair. Bahadur shouted, "khana taiyaar(Food is ready)". He was afraid to enter the room again.

"Aap kha lijiye, main yaha rukti hun(you go and eat, I will wait here)" she said.

"Aap kha nahi sakti par mujhe company to de sakti hain(You can't eat but can give company)" he said.

They all went to the dinner room. Bahadur hurriedly served them and left.

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They were waiting for the liquid to heated up; suddenly rain started pouring more violently. Thunders and storms joined their hands to ruin the world. Virat went to the corridor to examine the situation. She followed.

"You can take rest, why are you accompanying me everywhere?" Virat asked little irritated.

"I am afraid of thunders" she said in hurry. He could see that the lady resembles someone close, whom he knew. But he was afraid to accepting this. Suddenly thunder storms and a flash of light strikes and her face became visible clearly.

"Manvi" he said now loudly.

"Bidehi" she retorted.

He ran towards his room and grabbed his cell phone. He dialed the number of the hospital, where Manvi was admitted. No one responded. He ringed again. No one. He took his car's key and ran towards the gate.

"Where are you going?" she asked.

"To see my wife" he answered.

"It's raining outside" she told him softly.

"Who the hell are you to tell me what I should do and what shouldn't?" he shrugged her. But his palms came back grabbing some air.

"Your wife" she said.

"Manvi" tears dropping from his eyes.

"Bidehi,Virat"

"No"

"Yes" she hugged her tight.

"You are Manvi. You hugged me, and I can touch you" Virat protested.

"Virat it's not easy, this is not my flesh and blood. I got my volume from the density of air. Every time human beings can't touch me." She tries to explain.

"Why?" he asked innocently.

"Because I lose my volume after some time" she replied with patience.

"But Manvi, you died. Why? Couldn't you live for me?" his words choked.

"Bidehi, Virat. You are a human being, Maanav, I am not Maanvi for any Maanav. I will be your Maanvi when you will be like me" she said cupping his face.

He moved her hands down and said, "I have to check on the medicine"

He came to the laboratory. She followed. He switched on the lab-oven, and kept the liquid to cooled up.

"You again followed me" Kushal said.

"I am afraid of thunders Virat. I can't stay alone, when it is thundering." She pouted.

"For the first time in my life, I am hearing any ghost fears thunders" he said sarcastically.

"Chep please, stop taunting. I am new ghost. I will learn everything soon" she said with a determined face. "And you too will then be afraid of me" she laughed.

"ha ha joke tha? Hasna tha? Sorry nai aayi. I am making the medicine, let me concentrate in it" he said and turned. But there was no one. He got confused. For a moment he thought may be he was dreaming and his Manvi is fine. He smiled at the thought.

"Huishhh" someone came in a storm speed in front of his face. She, her hairs were blowing with the wind.

"Uff, don't disturb. Let me complete the medicine." He said little irritated.

She started weeping. "Viiraat, after so long we are talking, but look at you, you don't even care"

"Manvi, who said you to die, Huh?" his eyes watery. He came and hugged her tight. This time he was able to hug him. "Come back, please" his voice pleaded.

"Virat can't you come to my world?" she asked with hope.

"But Manvi, I have some responsibilities towards my patients. I can't let anymore child dies, the way our Mirage…" he said. He was quite guilty; again, he was unable to fulfill any wish of his wife.

She went back angrily, sat on the chair and said, "Do it fast. I have to bring back the snake to Aghat"

"You brought it from him? I thought you find it in any forest. After all the new ghost." Virat said.

"Or else what? You thought I find it? A new ghost? How?" she asked angrily.

"Okay, okay. Don't get hyper." He quickly said and took few drop of the liquid in a taste tube. When the liquid reached up to 25ml, He carefully dropped 5 definite drops of venom in it. "I think, it is ready." He said.

"So try it." She asked.

"No, Will try it on him" he took a guinea pig, which was bitten up by a venomous snake one day before. He injected it on its body. "Now after few minutes, our wait will over." He said. She smiled. It was a dream for her too.

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The rain finished long ago. The town again filled with its hassle and bustle. Virat came to the hospital with a victorious smile. He brought a bottle filled with medicine and some papers of the formula.

Now they were standing outside the cabin, where the child was being treated. Virat gave the medicine to some junior Doctor and said him to treat the little girl.

"Your daughter will be fine" he patted the father's shoulder.

The father only joined his palms in reply.

The door opened. The Doctor came towards them and greeted them with a smile.

"She is fine, she recovered. Virat Sir, you made it." The whole teams of the doctor's were happy.

"Now, I have to go" Virat smiled.

"Why? We must celebrate this" they all said, "Moreover the copywriter will be here in no time, wait".

After waiting for few minutes the copywriter came, and the formula was copywriter on only Virat's name. Virat bid them goodbye, he have more important work to do now. He went towards Manvi's cabin and said to the attainders, "She is not alive, put down the life machines" he ordered.

They were shocked to hear this. Virat, who used to love his wife the most saying to put off the life support?

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Two news came up in next day's newspaper.

First news, Virat Vadera, famous Doctor created a record by creating a life-giving medicine for the world.

Second news, Doctor Virat Vadera died Day before yesterday, on his own house. The post mortem report says there was Sulphuric acid and dubbela russeli's venom in the blood.

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"Now, I can call you Manvi, right?" he asked. Behind the clouds, where rainbows meets the moon.

"Ummm, yes" he smiled and kissed his lips lightly.

"But I like Bidehi too" he winked braking the hug.

"Only Manvi" she warned.

"Humm, Virat's Manvi" he again captured his lips.

"But I wanted to enjoy as a ghost for some more days" she pouted, "But we are now angels"

"Uff, Angels are better. Now stop your mouth" he touched her two lips together with his fingers and said, "Keep it shut" and started kissing her, grabbing her in himself forever.

I seriously though of something more intense and reliable and spooky, But I forgot after getting the shut down news, and I very much fears the supernatural things. Though this was a fictional writing that too by me, but I myself am afraid to go to the other room alone. I am really very scared of them.

So, my spooky ending became funny. Though it is funny still I am fearing. Just now a sound came from window and i shivered. OMG help me tonight 😕🤢


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Posted: 12 years ago
preetooo i liked this update 😊
par why did you finish this one ...manvi died 😭
fianlly virat succeded in his mission and he saved that kid😃
very well written preeto par i hope tu isko continue karti ...
and virman playing ghost ghost then angel angel haan 😆
darpok kitna darti hai tu 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
Awesome..~!!! this was spooky at 1 point...likedd it..Finally saved kids life,..and joind his wife...Love the angel roamnce...Lovely Preity..~!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
OMG...just saw this os of ur's...supernatural wow amazing😃...uppar se ur writing ahhh amazing
part1...love the way u explain the condition of a father (bahadur) whose daughter's life is at risk...His whole body was shivering in tension. The order's of the doctor's, the shouts of the nurse's were coming to him but not registering on his mind. His trembling bodyu was stepping back, until he collided with the wall.👏👏
virat, his condition😭...he has no one his 8 yr daughter is no more his wife his life is in coma😔
u know waise he mai sad ho due the newzz that show is ending and uppar se this sad sad virat...literally had tears in my eyez😭
outstanding and beautiful part this is🥺🤗

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Posted: 12 years ago
and in part2...the spooky atmosphere u created was amazing👍🏼
the suspence element was to wooow👏
that bidehi soul without body...interesting is she a ghost🤔
hooohooo😆 his cottage is in a very scary place and uppar se raining, all lights gone thunder and lightening...kia scary scene explain kia hai😉

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Posted: 12 years ago
Finally tujhe yaad aa gaya k isse bhi update karna hai 😆..
So this is the last part of this OS!! 😔 Update was superb ⭐️⭐️.. So Manvi died and became 'Bidehi'😭 .. Glad that Virat finally made that medicine 😃.. Their conversation was nice 😛.. Tu khud hi darr gayi story likhte time 😆😆.. Bidehi ne tujhe hi dara diya 😆.. Ending was really nice.. Virman are angels!! Loved it Preity ❤️❤️❤️.. Beautiful story!! Thank you for the pm in advance.. Take care 🤗

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Posted: 12 years ago
Preity🤗...superb update 👏👏👏...the way u portrayed everything is awesome👍🏼finally virat ne medicine banaa kar bacche ko bacaa liyaa😃..manvi died😭😭...virman are angels...eeks😉😃...par yeh kya last part😭😭...really very well written preity...i loved it rey...❤️❤️...brilliant ending..👏👏...thank u so much for the upcoming pm🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
ooops sorry...some problem came up to me net
and part3...the climax part is tu outstanding and amazing👍🏼
how could you say that its crap and faltu😔...its the best part of this os😃
this part is funny and light hearted yet sad and filled with heavy emitions
sad b/c manvi died and then later virat too 😭funny is b/c our mast and bubbly mannu is back...though in the form of ghost😆...but still mannu is here🤪
ahhh she is the most funny and loving ghost ever...😉"I am afraid of thunders Virat. I can't stay alone, when it is thundering."🤣
"Chep please, stop taunting. I am new ghost. I will learn everything soon"🤣...awww she's the most cutest ghost ever❤️❤️
love virat's reaction and his condition when reality struck in his mind that his manvi might be dead👏
the way he panics...showed his immense love towards his manvi😃
well i think...only thinking of my stupid mind ok...that in first part of this os when virat came to lifeless only breathing manvi and pleaded her to wakeup, to talk to him to help him that he needs her.and that how can he let that girl die as their mirage died...and in this part she (manvi) came to him same to talk to her husband came to help her husband...even though she died..even though she becomes a bidehi...this show's their love to eachother right...am i right is this what u also think😳plzz do tell me am i right or wrong😛
and love the ending...he tooo died only to be with his manvi forever
amazing amazing amzing os...ever⭐️
"Manvi, who said you to die, Huh?" his eyes watery. He came and hugged her tight. This time he was able to hug him. "Come back, please"his voice pleaded.🤗🤗love viart❤️❤️
once again an awesome os...and love this particular part alot alot❤️❤️
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: amgud

ooops sorry...some problem came up to me net

and part3...the climax part is tu outstanding and amazing👍🏼
how could you say that its crap and faltu😔...its the best part of this os😃
this part is funny and light hearted yet sad and filled with heavy emitions
sad b/c manvi died and then later virat too 😭funny is b/c our mast and bubbly mannu is back...though in the form of ghost😆...but still mannu is here🤪
ahhh she is the most funny and loving ghost ever...😉"I am afraid of thunders Virat. I can't stay alone, when it is thundering."🤣
"Chep please, stop taunting. I am new ghost. I will learn everything soon"🤣...awww she's the most cutest ghost ever❤️❤️
love virat's reaction and his condition when reality struck in his mind that his manvi might be dead👏
the way he panics...showed his immense love towards his manvi😃
well i think...only thinking of my stupid mind ok...that in first part of this os when virat came to lifeless only breathing manvi and pleaded her to wakeup, to talk to him to help him that he needs her.and that how can he let that girl die as their mirage died...and in this part she (manvi) came to him same to talk to her husband came to help her husband...even though she died..even though she becomes a bidehi...this show's their love to eachother right...am i right is this what u also think😳plzz do tell me am i right or wrong😛
and love the ending...he tooo died only to be with his manvi forever
amazing amazing amzing os...ever⭐️
"Manvi, who said you to die, Huh?" his eyes watery. He came and hugged her tight. This time he was able to hug him. "Come back, please"his voice pleaded.🤗🤗love viart❤️❤️
once again an awesome os...and love this particular part alot alot❤️❤️

Yeh funny bhootiya os teko accha lagega me toh shocked hun 🤣
Ha, she came to him only because he needed her, maybe she can lie there more years lifeless, but she choose death to be near Virat...
And our virat is not afraid of Ghosts 🤣 yeh part teko kaisa laga?
🤣
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: preity_d

Yeh funny bhootiya os teko accha lagega me toh shocked hun 🤣
Ha, she came to him only because he needed her, maybe she can lie there more years lifeless, but she choose death to be near Virat...
And our virat is not afraid of Ghosts 🤣 yeh part teko kaisa laga?
🤣

bhut bhut lush laga😆...our viru is the fearless😆😆

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