My First Os_On Promo Updated pt9 pg 14

Hi guys !!!!!!!

This is my first Os based on the promo.
Please gimme your honest opinion.

Anita is sitting in her room and plotting how to seperate ahem and gopi.
Anita:Wat shud i do now. All my plottings have yielded no results. That gopi and her "ji maaji" has somehow managed to win every competition. This way i will lose ahem for the second time. I cant lose ahem now. He is my life. Ohh if only i had made that mala myself i wud have gotten the sikka. Stupid budiya cant she say "silver coin". But no she had to say sikka.
and i stupidly thought she means one rupee coin...God wat a mess... How do i separate ahem and gopi. Socho Anita...Gopi ko kaise Ahem ki zindagi se nikalo gi...par jo bhi karna hoga aise karna hoga ke gopi ki parchaai bhi ahem ke zindagi pe na aaye...ek minute agar gopi hi nahi rahegi to gopi ki parchaai kaise rahegi...

Saying this anita goes out of her room...

She meets hetal and sweetly asks her where is gopi..." wo aunty mujhe gopi se kuch kaam tha"


Hetal replies that gopi is in the kitchen preparing breakfast.

Anita"(Ye gawaar to har waqt kitchen me hi rehti hai...mere ahem ko kya khush rakhegi)
Anita goes in the kitchen but no one is there.
Anita: Gopi to breakfast banane k like kitchen me zarur aayegi...ek kaam kartii hu)...she twists the knob on the gas cylinder and quickly hides behind the pillar...(Ab aayega mazaa)

Here gohem has just ceme down from their room.

Ahem: Gopi please naashta jaldi lagado... mujhe office k liye der ho rahi hai.
Gopi: Ji Ahemji...
Kokila sitting near the mandir sees her gopi bahu and asks her to bring the matchbox...
Gopi: Ji maaji. bas ahemji ko naashta dekar aati hu.
Kokila: Saaru
Gopi goes towards the kitchen.
Hiding behind the pillar anita thinks (Ab gopi bahu ka hoga kalyaan mera matlab swaha)
Gopi is just about to enter the kitchen wen kokila call her and tell her
"Gopi vau tum ek kaam karo naashta paros do ahem ko...use der ho rahi hai. Me ye diya kitchen me hi jala dungi aur mandir me rakh dungi
Gopi: Ji maaji!!!!!!
Anita: Ye aunty kitchen me kyu jaa rahi hai... ab me kya karu...
Anita quickly approaches kokila and says "aunty ji aap aaraam kijiye diya me jala dungi!!!!!
Kokila:Nahi anita ye kaam sirf ghar ki bahuye karti hai. Tumhe koi haq nahi hai... tum jaake aaraam karo. kal ki haar k baad to waise hi thak gayi hongi...
Anita: (fuming, ye jal jaaye to hi achcha hai)ji aunty..
Kokila goes inthe kitchen and starts searching for the matchbox... she finds it in one of the drawers and and striking the match...Ahem sitting nearby sees this and goes towards the kitchen.
Ahem(From the doorway): Mom dijiye me jaladu.

Kokila: Nahi ahem me kar doongi
Ahem : Mom
Kokila : Achcha ye lo
She goes towards ahem still striking the matchstick. Wen she is near ahem the matchstick suddenly lights and Booom.
The kitchen explodes
Ahem shouts for kokila"MOM"
Hearing Ahem screaming Anita and gopi comes running. Anita seeing all the mess starts cryin clutching ahem(She is fakin obviously).
Ahem is standing stupified, he is unable to move (Poor dikra)
Gopi in the meantime sees that the her Maaji's saari is on fire. Without thinking of her safety she goes running towards the kitchen sink(beneath her feet, the floor is smoking hot and she can feel her feet burning),which thankfully was not destroyed, and using the pipe starts pouring water on the saari.
Ahem picks up Kokila and with the help of gopi they settle her on the sofa...

So How was it shud i continue!!!!!!!!!!!

Updates on page 2, 5, 7, 8, 10, 12, 13, 14

this is great please continue...

Nice yaar😊...Please continue it 😊

Please continue...Gopi's presence of mind worked when Ahem's had failed...so want to see what he does now 😊 !!

Great start 👍🏼.. If only it was the idiot witch on fire, I've been wanting to sing "Ding dong the witch is dead.." for some time now 😳 😆

Hearing Ahem shout everyone rushed downstairs...They see kokila lying on Sofa and enquired wat happened...Everyone starts asking questions.
Ahem tells jigar to call doctor and while caressing kokila's forehead related to everyone wat happened.
Anita is in a panic thinking that she will be exposed now...
Anita: (Ab me kya karu. Ahem apni mom se bahut pyaar karta hai agar usko pata chal gaya ke ye sab maine gopi ko raaste se hatane k liye kiya to me use hamesha k liye kho dungi...ab me kya karu...hmmm...agar saara blame gopi par daalu to...Ahem fir usse nafrat karne lagega...fir mujhe ahem k kareeb aane se koi rok nahi sakta)
Everyone is busy looking after kokila but rashi, the kalakari queen is staring at anita.
Rashi:(kuch to gadbad zarur hai...jab hum sab neeche aaye to ye chipkali ahem jiju ko chipak kar ro rahi thi. Jaise ye sab isi ki wajah se hua ho...par ab yeh chudail kya soch rahi hai...me kitchen me dekh kar aati hu)
Rashi goes in the kitchen.
The kitchen is all in mess. There are utensils and water everywhere.
Rashi:Ye smell kaisi hai. Kisine knob to nahi khula chodd diya...Kahi gopi ne to nahi...NAHI!!!!! Gopi aisi laparwahi nahi kar sakti)
Kagdi matlab kakiji kohi poochna padega. Par kakiji to abhi behosh hai...mummy ko call karti hu
Rashi starts calling Urmila
In RN Urmila is busy taunting Kinjal wen her phone rings...
Urmila(Picking up the phone): haan Raashi dikra bol Su che!
Raashi:Mummy ...(Narrates everything that happened)
Urmila: Aur gopi theek hai!!!!Ye gawar manhoos k saath lambi umar ki bhi hai😡
Rashi: Mummy
Urmila: Achcha me jo bolti hu wo kar😈
The doctor arrives (the same doctor who was treating gopi after the accident) and is examining kokila who is now resting in her room.
Doctor: Ye sab kaise hua
Ahem: wo Mom kitchen me diya jala rahi thi ki achaanak aag lag gayi
Doctor:In Par paani kisne daala
Anita (ab gopi ki khair nahi): Ji doctor wo gopi ne daala. Main to kehne hi waali thi ke fire extinguisher use karo lekin uske pehle gopi paani daal chuki thi...aunty theek to ho jaayegi na. Infection ka to koi darr nahi haina ..waise isme gopi ki koi galti nahi hai.wo kya hai na ye padi likhi nahi hai isliye ise kaha pata hoga ke paani nahi daalna chahiye tha😈...
Hearing this ahem frowns but keeps quite (Gosh!!! sometimes i feel ahem has taken moun vrat)
Doctor(sarcastically): Madam ye ghar hai koi hotel nahi jo fire extinguisher yaha honga..main to bas ye kehna chahta tha ki jis kisine ye kiya hai bahot achcha kiya ...agar waqt par paani nahi daalta to shayad problem ho sakti thi...par inhe ab koi khatra nahi hai...Minor burns hai jo 1 week me theek ho jaayege aur bolne me problem ho sakti hai smoke k kaaran...inhe ab zyada stress mat dijiye...aur koi kitchen me tha kya inke saath
Ahem: Haan me gopi aur anitha bhi the... magar mujhe kuch nahi hua
Anitha thinking to garner some sympathy starts coughing and says" Jee doctor mere haath me jalan ho rahi hai aur bolne me bhi takleef ho rahi hai...
Doctor: Theek hai me aapko bhi chck kar leta hu
Anita: jee doctor me apne room me hu.
Turning to ahem she says "Ahem plzzz mere saath chalo na... mujhe akele nahi rehna...
Ahem is not listening to her he is busy looking at her mother and thinking wat happened
Anita: Ahem
Ahem: Nahi anita me mom k paas rehna chahta hu...Kaki gopi kaha hai...

So how was it...Guys wud really welcome some suggestions and criticism

haww u left us at cliff hanger!!! plzz update soon!!!

I liked the reply Ahem gave to Anita😆 Really good..Do continue😊

Where is Gopi

Interesting take on the situation.